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Zhang 1
Yishan Zhang
Emre Koyuncu
English 106
29 April 2012
Portfolio
There will always be more room to improve a piece of writing. Even though this last
assignment is aimed to revise two of the previous assignments in the semester, these assignments
can never be perfect. But for the sake of improving these assignments based on the previous
feedbacks and grades, I have made quite a few changes in both assignments.
I find the photo essay to be one of the most interesting assignments in this class, but I
have lost fifteen points in this assignment. Ten points were lost on the missing rough draft, and
five points were lost for the lack of a conclusion. I cannot make up for the ten missing points, but
I have added a conclusion to the end of my photo essay. The introduction and the body of the
essay received a perfect score so I did not bother to make any changes. Since the photo essay
itself was modified, the rationale paper that explains and justifies the photo essay was
subsequently changed. An explanation for the conclusion topic was added onto the conclusion of
the rationale paper, seeking to echo the topics covered in the photo essay.
I struggled with the movie review assignment because I could not organize the numerous
opinions concerning this movie into a smoothly flown essay, and I also struggled with supporting
my claims sufficiently. But mostly throughout the whole assignment I lost points due to small
mistakes such as not formatting the assignment in the MLA format. To fix that I added the tag in
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the beginning of the essay and the “work cited page” header the work cited page. Also there were
many small grammatical errors and bumpy sentences, which I edited those to make the tenses of
all the verbs align and the sentences flow more smoothly. The point which I lost the most points
to were citations; I excessively and incorrectly cited the movie “Grizzly Man” in the paper, and I
cited Ellen Brinks’ article at one point of time in the essay without utilizing her original ideas.
After reevaluating the citations in the assignment, I took out all the end-of-text “Grizzly Man”
citations and edited the place where I incorrect employed Brinks’ article.
The last thing I revised in this portfolio assignment was the work cited page for the fourth
assignment concerning the topic on capital punishment. I repeated forgot t italicize the title “The
New York Times” in the sources, and also I forgot to format the work cited page into Times New
Roman 12 point text with double space. Therefore I fixed those mistakes in the revised version
of the work cited page.
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