room 7's puppy stories!

What I most like about my story is my dog is cool. If I had to write this story again I would add that he is my closest pal and that he growls and barks.Logan

Logan, I am so happy that you have thought about what else you could’ve written – and picked up on the wow words you liked from our My Puppy poem. Mrs McFadzean

Connor, you drew a fantastic picture of your dream puppy and then made your story match! I especially love how curly your puppy’s tail is. You are doing a great job at sounding out unknown words and using your dictionary. Keep it up Mr Connor!

Mrs McFadzean

Charlie,I was very proud of your writing today. You used your dictionary for words you didn’t know and put in full-stops and capital letters. Great work Charlie! Mrs McFadzean

I did a great job when I imagined my red and blue and purple dog and drew it.Scarlett

Scarlett you are starting to make some really good attempts at sounding out unknown words – especially purple in this story! Your dog is extremely colourful and I love how you thought of giving him long ears and a long tail. Well done! Mrs McFadzean

I like my good spelling and I did some good sounding out of words.JoJo

JoJo, You are making good sentences and I like how you made your puppy multi-coloured!Mrs McFadzean

Brea, you did a great job at telling me about your puppy. I especially like how you decided that your puppy can do forwards flips! That is one clever dog!Mrs McFadzean

I like best how I wrote that my puppy has golden curly hair. I think that I did a great job at spelling eyes right. I like the way I drew my puppy.Molly

My favourite part of the story is that my dog only fights the baddies. I like the picture which I did really neatly and it’s kind of good writing.Carter

My favourite part of my story is how I described my puppy. The best part was when I wrote she has straight fur with long ears. I love the butterfly I drew.Leila

Things I did well were I gave him a name and put his brownie golden colours in my picture. I love my picture and I put blue berries in my story and then put them in my picture.Marisa

I like puppies because they are cute and cuddly. You get to feed them and play with them. If I wrote the story again I would put in less ‘and’ words in and more full-stops. -Ella

I like best that I did a pretty puppy. I remembered my full-stops and I did capital letters. If I could add to my story I would put in more describing words like golden.Jessica