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Archetype Research Essay Self-ReviewFormattingTimes New Roman12 point fontLeft alignment (NOT centered)1 inch marginsSpacing double-spaced throughout

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Clark SampleMs. IngrahamEnglish 12, Period 310 February 2014Page numberingUpper right corner of EVERY pageName #Ingraham 1LabelingMake a key at the top of your paper using your highlightersSample:Blue=Statement is it one??? Or is it just a vague topic sentencePink=Proof - examplesYellow=Commentary- explaining why your examples fit the archetypeGreen= Green Words in the thesisLabel the topic sentences at the beginning of each sectionLabel the transitions at the end of each sectionHighlight the body paragraphs for statement, proof, and commentary using your key

Eyeballing PercentagesLook at what you highlighted. Is more than 15-20% of what you wrote pink?You need to shorten quotes, develop commentary, or both.Write which one(s) you think you need to doIf quotes are too long, cross out the part(s) of the quotes you think you dont needThesis StatementHighlight green words in greenCheck that they are green and NOUNSMake sure it isnt three-prongShouldnt just list green wordsDoes your thesis mention your archetype by name?Proof formatChoose quotes or summarize sections of plot as examples of what you are talking about.

Integrate quotes within your OWN sentences; dont leave them sitting alone with no introductory phrase.

SITTING ALONE: Its now or never, I think, and begin to saw (Collins 187). Katniss is using the tracker-jackers to kill her opponents so that she can get away.

INTEGRATED: Katniss demonstrates great presence of mind as she develops a plan to escape the so-called Careers. Although she is hurt and scared, she thinks, Its now or never and begin(s) to saw (Collins 187).CitationsCite things you paraphrased from the articles in addition to citing direct quotes.Articles with an author but no pages or line numbers(Author).Articles without an author, pages, or line numbers(first three words in article title).

Cite paraphrased sections as well as direct quotes.Claim Check Topic sentencesMust make a claim about how that literary character/historical figure:If it looks like this, they do not have a claim:Reflects characteristics of your archetypeHarry Potter was typical of the orphan archetype.

BETTER: Because of his desire to fit in with the group, Harry Potter fits the Orphan archetype. BETTER: In the Harry Potter series, Harry shows both a fierce desire for independence and a longing to fit it, seemingly contradictory aspects of an Orphan.Commentary CheckShould:WAIT! Look again:Show how the literary character/historical figure embodies certain qualities of your archetype (the ones you named in your claim or thesis). Connect the literary character/historical figure to the characteristics of the archetype with (specific) EXAMPLES from the book or their lifeExplain your example

DO YOU HAVE EXAMPLES?ARE YOU SURE?Mechanics Check. DO IT NOW.The moment youve all been waiting for! Check for:Comma usagePlural vs. Possessive Capitalization of proper nounsRun-on sentences and sentence fragmentsSpellingWord choice that isnt quite rightAnything else you seeEven if you arent sure, mark it. You know when something doesnt look or sound quite right. You will double-check later

Language Register CheckAre you staying in formal register? Look back at notes to check.Use a pen or a pencil to circle any register drops and write register next to these circled areas.You may use personal pronouns like I, me, and my.Absolutely no you or your unless it is in one of the quotes you are using.CHECK AGAIN because a lot of you used YOU in the song analysis.

Now decide:Are you going to turn it in or revise it and turn it in tomorrow?If you have errors, REVISE.

IF YOU TURN IN A PAPER WITH ERRORS IN FORMAT, SPELLING, CAPITALIZATION, OR GENERAL NONSENSE THAT SHOWS YOU JUST THREW SOMETHING TOGETHER JUST TO GET IT DONE, EXPECT A VERY POOR GRADE. Dont waste my time.