Bus 304 Week 7 Day 1

Today in Class:-Dictation #6

-Essay & Options Analysis Feedback-Abstract/Executive Summary

Peer-Review

Dictation #61. While nine service representatives is great, 10 would be ideal.

2. Because the U.S. laws do not require it, we will not list these ingredients.

3. Seeing 90% of employees using the invention was the highest compliment someone could pay the inventor.

4. The cost will affect the final contract; therefore, the effect of the merger will create problems too.

5. Because the chemicals’ reaction had adverse effects on her system, the doctor reduced the doses by seven percent.

Essay FeedbackPart I: What is a corporate culture?

●Describe the corporate (nonprofit) culture at your org.●Cite DJ

Part II: Analyze the semantics in your final draft (Options Analysis).

–How do semantics help you make (or detract from) your argument?–Be specific about words used throughout your final draft.–Cite LZ

Corporate Culture● “a shared pattern of beliefs, expectations, and

meanings that influence and guide the thinking and behaviors of the members of that organization” (DesJardins, 2014, p. 82).– Standards– Expectations– Ideal types– Implications for ethical behavior– Implications for leadership– Values & mission statements– How would you describe the culture here at CSUMB?

Semantics● Denotation &

Connotation● Clean & dirty words

(a.k.a. God & Devil terms)

● Emotional appeal (pathos)

● Oversimplification● Stereotyping

●False dichotomies●Contrasting words

●Euphemisms

●Abstract vs. concrete language

●Analogy

●Bias

●Literal & figurative

Options Analysis Section [Feedback]● Why ignore your reviewer? How does that reflect on you?● No sources cited? This is a RESEARCH PAPER. (-10)● Explain why your evaluation criteria were chosen (cite

sources to support their importance to org)● Details about each option [see next slide]● Conclusion – How did you arrive at your decision?

Implementation? Minimizing costs?● Refer to your visual! Don't let it stand on its own.

Example● Instead of: “This organization should hold some sort of fundraiser to

raise money.”

● Elaborate and cite: “In May of 2014, a similar non-profit in the area (Save the Otters) was able to raise $250,400 in one night with a casino night fundraiser (Jones, 2014). Therefore, it is recommended here that a similar fundraiser be planned for Org X. Renting a ballroom at the Hilton costs $1,500 for the night (Hilton.com), and 15-20 volunteers can staff the tables and bar. With roughly 300 attendees (at $100 per head), $30,000 will be raised with attendance alone. Additional poker chip purchases ($10 per chip) and drink tickets ($5 for wine and $10 for cocktails) could raise as much as...

Authoritative Voice

•Use authoritative voice – i.e. avoid the passive

•The nonprofit provided the reports.

•Please review the reports for clerical errors immediately.

•By the time the agency implements the option, they will incur more debt.

Avoid starting sentences with “it” and “there.”

1. It can range from a few hours to a couple of months to publish a website.

2. It typically takes up to a few days to find a web designer.

3. It is important that the best solution is gauged off of its ability to supply reliable protection near-term and long-term.

4. By adapting and the use of social networking websites, it can allow patients to find information about the organization much easier.

Help keep the reader on track.

•Keep recapping for the reader.

–Remind the reader of where we are, where we’ve been, and where we’re going

•Refer to the option/criteria by name.

•Explain what, how, why, who

Using recapping/restating to improve cohesion/transitions---instead of

relying on reader to remember the pronoun referents

1.By implementing this plan the organization can save money and put it to good use by helping the community.

2.They solely rely on the website and social media, such as Facebook and Instagram. This would be a better situation if they had all the pertinent information on these sites, but they do not.

Language awareness for precise language use

“wordiness”With a partner, see if you can eliminate the wordiness of the following sentences…

•https://owl.english.purdue.edu/exercises/6/9/24

Precise Words

•Look for the little words like “help” “give” “get”

•Can I say these more precisely? Provide, offer, obtain

•If you get stuck, ask a friend or classmate. Use the collective brain power in the class for help. This isn’t easy.

Peer Review Abstract & Exec. Summary•Abstract – number of words (200-250)– Does first sentence explain the type of paper? (case study analysis,

topic/name of nonprofit, issue being addressed). – Are options presented in brief? Is solution and recommendation

given?•Should include references•NO VISUAL AIDS in abstract•One solid paragraph?•Executive summary- more detail than abstract•NO REFERENCES in executive summary•Can include visual aids•Multiple paragraphs?

Sections of the Nonprofit paper

•Title page, abstract, table of contents, executive summary, background/problem, options analysis, recommendation, conclusion, bibliography, corrected annotations.

•Do you have a running header throughout?

Looking Ahead•Most people have a lot of changes to make in their papers. The abstracts & executive summaries will change to reflect the new information you decide.

•I will NOT collect your abstract & executive summary

–So ask questions if anything is unclear before the end of the week.

•Read DJ and Lazere Chapter 6

•Bring laptops with completed NP report drafts next week (Day 1)