CHAPTER 5 AND GRAMMAR

Novel Proposal

Complete the handout get it signed by TT at any time during

class TODAY It will be your reading homework for the

next 2 weeks Be prepared to analyze the novel

Review: Narrative, Punctuation, Lead-ins/Conclusions

Play Millionaire! (play along at home! Ok, on paper then)

Interview: Your Article Choose a partner Role play an interview. You may

choose to be the author OR the main character of the story. We will be presenting this to the class if time allows.

Take turns role-playing reporter. Writing down your author/character’s answers (You may use the computer). Ask: about character’s history how/why/what happened in the story/article what happens to the author/character AFTER the

story/book ends the character/author to share one secret that is not

revealed in the story/article.

Punctuation (Cont.) pg 582 (new), Pg 554 (old)

The Colon (:)1. Introduce a long/formal list (but NOT

after “to be”)2. Introduce a quotation or definition. 3. Introduce a word, phrase, sentence that

emphatically or humorously explains, summarizes, or amplifies the preceding sentence.

4. IN the salutation of business/professional correspondence

Please pick up these items: garlic, wolfbane, mirrors, a prayer book, a hammer, and a wooden stake. In singer Jimmy Buffet’s Margaritaville store in Key West, a sign warns: “Shoplifters will be forced to listen to Barry ManilowAfter marrying nine times, glamour queen Zsa Zsa Gabor had simple advice for becoming a marvelous housekeeper: every time you leave a relationship, keep the house.

Practice – 583 (new), 555 (old)

1. Experts have discovered over thirty different kinds of clouds but have separated them into three main types cirrus, cumulus, and stratus.

2. To those folks who may talk too much, Abraham Lincoln gives the following advice: “It is better to remain silent and be thought a fool than to speak and and remove all doubt.”

3. A recent Gallup poll found that Americans consider only one activity more stressful than visiting the dentist hosting a dinner party.

1. Experts have discovered over thirty different kinds of clouds but have separated them into three main types: cirrus, cumulus, and stratus.

2. No changes, this is correct.

3. A recent Gallup poll found that Americans consider only one activity more stressful than visiting the dentist: hosting a dinner party.

Practice what You’ve Learned

Homework:due next week – written out on separate

paper

Colon Errors #4-8 – 555 (old), 583 (new)

Apostrophe (‘) Pg 584 (new), 556 (old)

1. Indicate omitted letters in a contraction

2. Create ownership/show possession

3. Add ONLY an apostrophe to a plural noun ending in S to show possession

4. To show joint possession between 2 people/things you need to add an apostrophe+ s ONLY to the 2nd noun. To show separate ownership, add apostrophe +s to both nouns.

It’s too bad your car burned. It’s = It is. Wouldn’t the insurance company believe your story. Wouldn’t = Would notJack’s dog ate the cat’s dinner.

Goldilocks invaded the bears’ house.She ignored her parents’ warning…

Isabel and Sharona’s design project will be presented today.Isabel’s and Sharona’s design projects will be presented today.

Apostrophe (continued)

5. Avoid adding apostrophe when the word is simply plural.

6. In some cases you may an ‘s to a singular word ending in an s – especially if it is a proper name.

7. To avoid confusion, you may need the ‘+s to form plurals of letters. BUT not on plural #’s or abbreviations.

Apples are on sale now. NOT Apple’s are on sale now.

Doris’s name was popular in the 1950’s.The silent screen actress’s favorite flowers were mums.

He made four “C’s” last fall. He wrote a’s and o’s.You use too many “and’s” in your sentences.

Practice what You’ve Learned

Homework:due next week – written out on separate

paper

Apostrophe errors – 585 (new), 557(old)

Quotation Marks (“ ” and ‘ ’)

1. To enclose someone’s spoken or written words

2. Around titles of essays, articles, chapter headings, short stories, short poems, and songs.

3. Around a word, phrase, or letter used as the subject of discussion when italics aren’t available

4. Around uncommon nicknames and words used ironically. Do NOT try to use it for slang or clichés, instead – use specific language.

“Watch out for that left hook,” said Tinkerbell to Peter Pan.

“How to Paint Ceramic Ashtrays” was an interesting story.

Never use the word “however” as a coordinating conjunction. Is your middle initial “X” or “Y”?

“Scat-Cat” Malone takes candy from babies. Her “friend” was an old scarecrow …

Quotation marks

5. The period and comma go inside quotation marks; the semicolon and colon go outside. If quoted material is a question, the question mark goes inside; the question mark goes outside if quote is a part of a whole sentence that is a question.

6. Use single quotation marks to enclose a quotation within a quotation.

7. If you are quoting fewer than 4 lines of poetry, enclose them within quotation marks, using a slash to indicate line divisions.

According to Matt Groening, “Love is a snowmobile racing across the tundra; suddenly it flips over, pins you underneath and at nice the ice weasels come.”Did he really say, “At night the ice weasels come”?Lisa asked, “Do you think you’re in love or just in a snowmobile?”As usual, Homer replied, “D’oh!”

One of my favorite songs is ‘In My Life’ by the Beatles,” said Jane. In possibly the first love poem ever published in America, … : “If ever two were one, then surely we./If ever man were loved by wife, than thee.”

Homework

Apostrophes and Quotation marks 588 (new), 560 old

Parentheses ( )

1. To set off words, dates, statements that give additional information, explain, or qualify the main thought.

2. The period comes inside the close paren. if a complete sentence is enclosed; it occurs after the close paren. when the enclosed matter comes at the end of the main sentence and is only a part of the main sentence.

To encourage sales, some automobile manufacturers name their cars after fast or sleek animals (Impala, Mustang, and Thunderbird, for example).

The Colorado winters of 1978 and 1979 broke records for low temperatures. (See pages 72-73 for temp charts.)Jean hates Colorado winters and would prefer warmer environments (such as Alaska, the North Pole, or a meat locker in Philadelphia).

Comma or Parentheses or Dashes?A. Use commas to set off information

closely related to the rest of the sentence

B. Use parentheses to set off information loosely related to the rest of the sentence or material that would disturb the grammatical structure of the main sentence.

C. Use dashes to set off information dramatically or emphatically

When Billy Clyde married Maybelle, his brother’s young widow, the family was shocked. This information describes the widow and tells why the family was shocked.

Billy Clyde married Maybelle (his fourth marrige, her second) in Las Vegas on Friday. This information is mrerely additional comment and not closely related to the sentence.

Billy Clyde eloped with Maybelle – only three days after her husband’s funeral – without saying a word to anyone in the family.

Parentheses (continued)

4. For clarity, parentheses may be used to set of numbers in a list that appears within prose.

5. May enclose the first-time use of acronyms (words formed from the initials of several words) or abbreviations.

Urban legends are popular stories that almost always share these characteristics: (1) they are spread through person-to-person communication; (2) they are virtually untraceable..

University of California at Los Angeles (UCLA) is a good school for medical studies. UCLA is also known for its football, though they are not as good as the Cornhuskers of Nebraska.

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REVISING AND EDITING

Teri Lynn Tosspon,

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Chpt 5 pg 95 (91 old book)

Revisions

How many of you have had positive experiences with editing and revisions? Peer editing? What went WRONG? What went Right?

Revisions are part of the THINKING process

1. It is NOT autopsy after your writing is DONE

2. It is not only editing/proofreading, it can be restructuring and rethinking

3. It is NOT punishment or busywork

What TO DO

1. Save multiple copies of your drafts – LABELED draft 1, 2, 3, etc.

2. Use spell-check and grammar-check on the computer. PLEASE!

3. Use the “Search” and “Find” (ctrl+F) to help you find your common errors

4. Use both computer and printed drafts

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Always remember these lessons: A good peer revision makes a

better self-editor because you learn by correcting other peoples’ work!

Treat your peer’s paper like you’ll be graded on his/her errors and weaknesses.

Lets set some ground rules – what do YOU think we should DO and Not do

Peer Revising

Do’s

-Take this serious, you will be graded on the quality and quantity of your comments.

-Comment in a polite, respectful language/tone

-Explain your comments, so if you say “I Liked it,” explain why! If you say “this is bad” explain how to improve it.

Don’ts

-Correct every spelling/ grammar mistake (the author should use spell check!)

-Fill the paper with vague comments like “great job” and “interesting”

-Insult the author- Phrases such as “this

sucks”, instead phrase as “This could be better if you added in…”

A Practice Paper

Partner up Help the “student” with their paper. Read it aloud to your partner, how does

it SOUND? How is the grammar? Look at the Lead-in/Hook? Is it

interesting? Effective? What changes would you suggest?

Follow our class rules Discuss as a class What are some NOT helpful comments

Now you’re ready to revise a peer’s paper

Get a partner. Hand him/her a copy of your paper (you

keep a copy as well) Complete the Peer Revision handout.

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STEP One (1) Read Aloud Read your peer’s whole

paper aloud to the author. This can be very quiet, but the point is to hear

whether the words flow or are awkward. After each sentence, give the author time to mark

up his/her own copy.

You now have 30 minutes to read aloud

If you complete this, continue ok the handout.

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In-Depth analysis on the paragraph level...

Double check paragraph 1: Lead-in/Hook Thesis statement (if present) Elaboration (detail) Establishment of topics discussed

Mark convention errors. Save time: don’t re-word sentences. Put “awk” by

awkward areas and move on. Don’t fix the spelling- just circle the word and write

“sp” Repeat this step for each paragraph.

For each paragraph and write a positive comment. Highlight one sentence/phrase you particularly liked. Positive feedback encourages, negative phrasing tears down and discourages.

STEP Two (2)

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Logical organization (whole paper + each paragraph)

Is there an easy flow of ideas? Double check: create an outline of the

paper Major points Details

Suggest improvements Does each topic sentence feed the thesis? Are the transitions clear and concise?

STEP THREE (3)

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Step Four (4)

Professionalization Address the language of the piece

Double check: precise/professional language? Make 2-3 suggestions on terminology and

language/vocabulary “Now-a-days” = currently, in modern times,

etc Correct/suggest improvements for vague

words such as “stuff” “really” “things”

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Step Five (5)

Format and Sources Use the checklist provided

Compare to your own paper for: Font Size Spacing Title Headings Page numbers

Citations Check format for direct quotes/summaries/paraphrases Check format for Works Cited page

Step Six (6)

General improvement suggestions

Suggest to peer what their greatest area of weakness is:

ideas/content Organization sentence fluency Voice word choice.

Suggest what your peer’s greatest weakness on conventions is.

Spelling/grammar/verb usage, etc.

Homework

Final draft of narrative essay (100 points)

Narrative essay checklist (20 points) Sentence/Grammar practice

Colon Errors #4-8 – 555 (old), 583 (new) Apostrophe errors – 585 (new), 557(old) Apostrophes and Quotation marks 588 (new),

560 old Complete your chosen novel/book by

our meeting on Nov 18th