Common Mistakes You Made in Narrative and Logical-Division-of-Idea Writings14-0220

Pronoun Inconsistence• The three experience when I went to the Meinung, a small

town in Kaohsiung. That was a sunny day, and we arrived there in the morning. (N: Jane)

• The very first reason that I want to share is that you can adjust the air-conditioner to the perfect temperature you desire. (L: Tony)

• …, the first advantage comes to most people’s mind is it is easy to make more friends. It is very obvious because small schools have few students. (L: Anita)

• Everybody wanted to stay in car, so they can warm up their body by the heating machine in the car. (L: Erin)

• Swimming is the best exercise for everyone. When you are swimming, you can get a lot of advantages. (L: Wendy)

• TS: Recently, we have faced plenty of food safety problems, and these events caused everyone gradually can not trust… (L: Elaine)

Sentence Fragment• Until all the pieces come together that I can find the

truth. (L: Tina)

• At the beginning, I was afraid of making friend in college. Because I heard that no one will be sincere to other in college, people will try to achieve what they want at any cost. (N: Jessica)

• My boy friend has bad ability of poise. When he staking from small hill to ground. He bumped into my brother… (N: Tiffany)

• The three experience when I went to the Meinung, a small town in Kaohsiung. (N: Jane)

• The last reason is family. If let parents know that their child who be a villain to break others family. (L: Tiffany)

• For example, taking eyes off the road and read the texts or respond while driving. Some pedestrians use… (L: Ellen)

Comma Splice•We all enjoyed in the process, the biggest

reward to us is our strong friendship. (N: Astrid)

•This was my first time to visit the island; I really like everything there, I think I will come back soon. (N: Joyce)

•Even she saw other people cleaning their areas, she still acted the same. (N: Anita)

•Five days passed, we found that nothing was difficult if… (N: Tiffany)

Run On•He encouraged me to speak English with

people then I tried to do what he wanted me to do. (N: Belle)

•… we played the popular songs, people stand in the circle then we threw the glow sticks into the circle… (N: Panerai)

• I keep all my attention on the shops that is why I will not feel tired. (L: Jessica)

•She was starring in the opera, and disguised as a man however, she was penetrated by the main actor, falling in love with him. (L: Panerai)

Relative Clauses•Last year I joined Mayday concert that I

get unforgettable experience. On the December twenty second, we chose different stations to get on the train… (N: Wenty)

•The other sport I really like is jogging. (N: Linda)

•Then we went to visit Penghu Bay Bridge where was a splendid view. (N: Joyce)

Chi-Eng Expressions • All in all, I think that just have my friends

company; it can make me feel relieved and delightful, even in the bad situation. (N: Jessie)

• Fortunately, I did not have big injury, only got a purple left eye. (N: Wendy)

• To sum up, the concert brought a special experience for me, so… (N: Wenty)

• Jogging can sweat a lot and enhance my metabolism. (N: Linda)

• I deeply felt that people who did not have anything to eat and drink was painful. (N: Sally)

• The animal which impressed me most were… (N: Valentina)

• …, but later the truth told me what I thought was completely wrong. (N: Anita)

Strange/Unclear Expression• An extraordinary summer changed me a lot in 2003.

(N: Winnie)

• … there was an important examination about into a university. (N: Michelle)

• The first special reason of this trip is experience of ice skating. (N: Tiffany)

• First of all, I think that independent is important for me. (L: Linda)

• Moreover, go abroad for studying can make many friends. (L: Linda)

• …, there are always some murder cases happened. (L: Tina)

And/But at Sentence Initial

•For example, we often go shopping together, after that, we have dinner at restaurant. And we go to mountain to enjoy the view of night. (N: Jessica)

•We all guess when she would leave the school because of her bad grades. But amazingly, she wasn’t conscious that she did all these things above. (N: Anita)

句子的關聯性文句越精簡越好• We held the Christmas Charity Bazaar on Christmas Day, and

we sold something that we did not need to use. (N: Sally)

• We had an experience called “Twelve Hours Famine.” This activity was that we could not… (N: Sally)

• I had a trouble sending his words to my superior, and it also caused some serious problems. (N: Belle)

• She never folded and washed her bed quilt. She never clean our public area as well. (N: Anita)

• It is always helpful for me to drive. The following reasons can fully explain why I think so… (L: Tony)

• We knew that the was a backpacker, and he came from the US.

• I will forget the trouble which bother me and get rid of bad thing. It is because buy new product that I like will… (L: Jessica)

• For these reasons, I think I still will attend camp in the future. My life has been more colorful since I joined summer camp. (L: Winnie)

Present/Past Participle Structure•There are some benefits when playing

basketball. (N: Ellen)

•I had many special experiences when entered the college and joined in many activities… (N: Panerai)

•Compare to these two activities, I preferred the second activity to the first… (N: Panerai)

Determiner•On the way to cram school, we found that … (N:

Erin)

•We found a small red car which… Finally, she found us behind a red car. (N: Erin)

• I received the present wrapped with envelope and… When I opened present and looked… (N: Louie)

•… she was very excited about this gift and gave me hand-made birthday card and … (N: Louie)

•A part-time job told me that I should… (N: Belle)

•Doing the sports regularly profit the body. (N: Linda)

•Last year I joined Mayday concert that I… (N: Wenty)

Comma in Relative Clauses•I have to go to the gym frequently for

weight training which can make me become more powerful. (N: Ellen)

•For example, the main actor was Lee Min Ho who was played the leading role in the famous drama… (L: Panerai)

Informal Expressions•But now, I take part in the basketball

team and the kind of service club. (N: Ellen)

•An irreplaceable thing in my life is the emotion between my friends and I. (N: Michelle)

•As a Taiwanese, I always hear someone complains that Taiwan was suck, bad, and terrible. (L: Kox)

Using a New Word to Explain the New Word •Then her friend asked if I wanted to help

pastor, a pastor in my high school, play the piano as they sang poems in the morning. (N: Tony)

Title

•Why I Like Australia My love to Australia

•Why I want to travel to Korea Reasons of Travelling to Korea

• I Do Not Want to Go Out to Celebrate the New Year

•Why I Love Going Shopping Shopping, My Love

•Why I Like to Read Detective Novels In Love with Detective Novels

And Other Issues•However, through our frequently contact,

even if he cannot always by my side, but I just can feel that I have his arms. (L: Astrid)

•在描述某故事時 , 講重要議題即可 , 不相關的資料不需出現 , 會讓故事失焦 (Special Experience of Mayday Concert, N: Wenty; The camp experience vs. family help, N: Winnie)

•首尾句的呼應 (correspondence), 小心為了使前後呼應 , 卻寫出與文章本文無關的前後句 !

•No contraction! Ex. couldn’t could not •文章中避免自問自答 , 不討喜 .