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Day 1
Revision of an illogical comparisonRevision of choppy sentences
Capitalization of name of town
“The Street of the Cañon” has more details about old Mexico than any story I have read.
The story opens in a village. San juan iglesias is the village. It is May.
Day 1
“The Street of the Cañon” has more details about old Mexico than any other story I have read.
Revision of an illogical comparison
The story opens in May, in the village of San Juan Iglesias.
Revision of choppy sentencesCapitalization of name of town
Day 2
Correction of commonly confused words
Use of commas with nonrestrictive clause
Elimination of unnecessary preposition
A stranger walks passed the dark homes of the village.
The stranger who is carrying a package enters into the home of Don Roméo Calderón.
Day 2
A stranger walks past the dark homes of the village.
Correction of commonly confused words
intoThe stranger, who is carrying a package, enters the home of Don Roméo Calderón.
Use of commas with nonrestrictive clauseElimination of unnecessary preposition
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Day 3
Changing word order to improve style
Spelling out ordinal number
Use of adverb to modify a verb
It is Don Roméo Calderón’s daughter’s 18th birthday.
The stranger quick gets permission to dance with her.
Day 3
It is the eighteenth birthday of Don Roméo Calderón’s daughter.
Spelling out ordinal numbersChanging order to improve style
The stranger quickly gets permission to dance with her.
Use of adverb to modify a verb
Day 4
Use of quotation marks with title of song
Correct formation of contractionCorrect past participle of irregular verb
The stranger asks the band to play The Shy Young Maiden, the favorite song of his village.
Because of a quarrel, his people and the people of San Juan Iglesias have’nt spoke in years.
Day 4
The stranger asks the band to play “The Shy Young Maiden,” the favorite song of his village.
Use of quotation marks with title of song
Because of a quarrel, his people and the people of San Juan Iglesias haven’t spoken in years.
Correct formation of contractionCorrect past participle of irregular verb
Day 5
Use of apostrophe to show possession
Elimination of superlative form of absolute adjectiveElimination of double subject
The strangers package contains a delicious cheese made by his father.
As the guests enjoy the most perfect cheese, they realize that the stranger he is from the other village.
Day 5
The stranger’s package contains a delicious cheese made by his father.
Use of apostrophe to show possession
most heAs the guests enjoy the perfect cheese, they realize that the stranger is from the other village.
Elimination of superlative from of absolute adjectiveElimination of double subject
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