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Objective:• Encourage Environmental Health

Professionals to Record Their Experiences

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Your Purpose:

Making Your Writing Better:

My Own Selected Topics

Examples of Other’s Stories:

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Your Purpose:• For family• For students• For the general

public

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How to begin:• Just start writing• People in our careers• Significant events• Don’t be overly critical at first• Plan on rewriting

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“I SUFFER ALWAYS FROM FEAR OF PUTTING DOWN THAT FIRST LINE. THE HARDEST PART IS GETTING STARTED.” JOHN STEINBECK

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“I’M NOT TERRIBLY CAREFUL MYSELF, ACTUALLY. I WRITE FAIRLY RAPIDLY IF I GET GOING…IN TREATING WORDS AS CHISEL STROKES YOU RUN THE RISK OF LOSING THE QUALITY OF UTTERANCE, THE RHYTHM OF UTTERANCE, THE HAPPINESS.” JOHN UPDIKE

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Making Your Writing Better:• Work with other writers• Read your work to the group• Critique everyone’s writing• Rewrite

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“WHAT MAKES ME HAPPY IS REWRITING…IT’S LIKE CLEANING HOUSE, GETTING RID OF ALL THE JUNK, GETTING THINGS IN THE RIGHT ORDER, TIGHTENING THINGS UP.” ELLEN GOODMAN

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“I NEVER THOUGHT OF MYSELF AS A GOOD WRITER. BUT, I’M ON OF THE WORLD’S GREAT REVISERS.” JAMES MICHENER

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My Navajo Years :• Bruce M. Etchison

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Examples of Other’s Stories:• Larry Gordon• Jack Womack• John Dietemann• Web Young• Jim Waskiewicz

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Seated1 Perry Brackett, 2 James R. Buchetel, 3 Jim Cox, 4 Jim Justice, 5 Jim Pees, 6 John Todd, 7 Kenneth Bailey, 8 Keith Sherer, 9 Don Myer, Standing10 Alan Dellapenna, 11 Del Larson, 12 Craig Shepherd, 13 Jim Crum, 14 Bill Ryan, 15 Dick Anderson, 16 Gary J. Hartz, 17 Geoff Keele, 18 Lew Fox, 19 Dale J. Johnson, 20 Al Stevenson, 21 Jerry Butler, 22 Harry Doutt, 23 Bill Wheatly, 24 Tim Bergin, 25 Bob Marsland, 26 Jim Shoemake, 27 Jack Womack, 28 Mike Randolph, 29 Bruce Etchison, 30 John Steward, 31 Bill Pearson

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Memoirs- credit Elmore Leonard

• Interactions between people are better. Readers tend to like dialogue.

• Avoid passive voice particularly the use of “was”

• Careful with excessive detail.• Be careful in describing characters.

They can be imagined by the reader through the dialogue, tone in their voices, mannerisms, etc.

• Avoid opening with the weather.• Show rather than tell what is

happening in your story.• The verb “said” is used to carry

dialogue.

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Self-editing:

• Use metaphors sparingly. Too many can be distracting or cause the reader to pause to try and figure out what you mean.

• Keep it personal when writing a memoir.

• Too much direction can be insulting, i.e. he bent over to tie his shoe.

• “Started” is overused by many writers. Actions are usually self-explanatory.

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Reasons for Rejection:

• Too many similar stories• Small sales potential• Too narrow in scope• Author not well-known• Author credentials lacking • Poor

writing/spelling/punctuation• Expense to produce• Not remarkable enough or

exciting

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Helpful Websites:

• www.writingthroughlife.com• www.anaelectures.wordpress.com• www.larryjgordon.com• www.lulu.com

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QUESTIONS?

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