Drafting for Finance LawyersIntroductory Sbssion: Handout

Original wording:

I want to eat burgers with you.

Lawyer's markup number 1:

I want to eat burgers with you. Fo1

Lawyer's markup number 3:

I want to eat burgers with you. For the avoioance doubt, the imm,ediately preceding sentence:(i) shall not be construed to mean

of you) in, on or unrler i

I want to eat a burger that has you (or any part

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Lawyer's markup number 4:

I want to eat burgers with you. For the avr:idance doubt, the immerdiately preceding sentence:

I want to eat a burger that has you (or any part(i)

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shall not be construed to meanof you) in, on or uncler: and

shall be construed ernly-to mean that I want you to eat a burger and,i want mein the same plar:e.to eat a burger at th,e same time a

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Final wording:

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shall not be conslrrued to mean fhat

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sumplion of said fi in 10 minuters her (A) the completiorL ofconsumptir]n qf the seconrnotice in writing_(siqned byfhe th

that ilof said sec(rnd pgrr-son,s bulqer); and

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