Embedding Embedding Quotations in a Quotations in a Short Answer Short Answer

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Embedding Embedding quotations using quotations using transition helps transition helps quoted material quoted material

flow naturally and flow naturally and coherently into coherently into your response. your response.

Example (transition is in red):

While traveling on a While traveling on a bus, the author isbus, the author is

“H“Heart-filled, head-filled eart-filled, head-filled with glee”.with glee”.

When written When written properly, the properly, the reader should reader should not be able to not be able to

hearhear where the where the quotation marks quotation marks

are when the are when the sentence is read sentence is read

aloud. aloud.

When done When done poorly, the poorly, the

transition is transition is choppy, choppy,

incomplete, and incomplete, and predictable.predictable.

Poor example: Poor example: This This is shown byis shown by “And he “And he was no whit bigger”.was no whit bigger”.

The prior example The prior example does not make sense does not make sense

when read aloud. when read aloud. Every sentence in a Every sentence in a

paragraph must make paragraph must make sense, regardless of sense, regardless of

whether or not it whether or not it contains quoted contains quoted

material. material.

You may need to You may need to change words change words

within your quote within your quote so that the so that the sentence is sentence is

understandable.understandable.

When When changing changing wordswords in a in a

sentence indicate sentence indicate the change by the change by

placing brackets placing brackets [ ][ ] around the around the

change in the word change in the word or the changed or the changed

word. word.

To To omitomit words in words in the middle of a the middle of a long quote, use long quote, use

ellipses ellipses (…)(…)

Example:Example: The The other boy “called other boy “called me ‘Shorty.’ / […] me ‘Shorty.’ / […] That’s all that I That’s all that I remember”. remember”.

Notice, anytime you Notice, anytime you change or add change or add

something in a quote, something in a quote, you must use a you must use a

bracket to indicate bracket to indicate your change. your change. In this In this

case, the original case, the original lines 9 through 11 lines 9 through 11 were were omittedomitted and and

were represented by were represented by […][…]..

How to create a How to create a good transition good transition

into a quotation: into a quotation:

1) give 1) give background for background for

all quoted all quoted material -- what material -- what is happening, is happening,

who is who is speaking? speaking?

2) only use the 2) only use the most most important important

partpart of the of the quotequote

3) read your 3) read your sentence sentence

aloud--can you aloud--can you “hear” the “hear” the quotation quotation

marks? You marks? You shouldn’t.shouldn’t.

4) omit 4) omit unnecessary unnecessary words and words and

phrases; use phrases; use ellipses (…) and ellipses (…) and brackets [ ] to brackets [ ] to indicate your indicate your

changeschanges

The creature even describes himself as a “fallen angel [with an] accumulation of anguish” in his seclusion.

Write a response Write a response of your own of your own

using transitions using transitions and embedded and embedded

quotes from quotes from “Cask of “Cask of

Amontillado” and Amontillado” and “Stolen Party”“Stolen Party”

How is the theme of How is the theme of good vs. evil portrayed good vs. evil portrayed

in both “Cask of in both “Cask of Amontillado” and Amontillado” and

“Stolen Party”. Use “Stolen Party”. Use evidence from both evidence from both

texts to support your texts to support your answer. answer.

From “CoA” and “SP” *Remember to EMBED your quote/s