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Ethical The Vortex

Beep! Beep! Lyndsay came

to pick me up. We were going toKings Island. When we arrived at

the church we got our stuff andgot on the bus. I couldnt waitfor what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited.

On the way t

here Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess we

were very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M.


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When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortex

first. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.

As I got on th

ey strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, I know Im going toregret this. The wind was blowingin my hair. I couldnt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going to

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die. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.But it wasnt helping. Im surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.

As we slowed down I startedbreathing again.

When I got off I wasso dizzy I fell over. I would

never ride it again. The Vortexwas very scary. It seemed likeI rode it forever.

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That day we had lotsof fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex to

never ride it again. Its way to scary.

You do the apostrophecorrectly here. Checkyour paper for others.

Youhave good sentence variety wit

hmanycomplex sentences. Review pp. 64-67 in your

grammar book or check your work from ourmini-lesson on commas after introductoryadverb clauses.

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When we arrived Lyndsay

and I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped me

in.Th

en it took off. I thoug

htto myself, I know Im going to

regret this. The wind was blowingin my hair. I couldnt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going todie. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.

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But it wasnt helping. Im surprized itcould stop, it was going so fast. As weslowed down I started breathing again.

When I got off I was so dizzy

I fell over. I would never ride it again.The Vortex was very scary. It seemedlike I rode it forever.That day we had lots of fun.

We rode everything like the logs,the boat, and the bestie. I learnedfrom the Vortex to never ride it again.Its way to scary.

You do the apostrophe correctly here.

Check your paper for others.

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The Vortex


to pick me up. We were going toKings Island.

for what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited.

On the way t



When we arrived at

the church we got our stuff andgot on the bus. I couldnt wait

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When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.

As I got on they strapped me in.

Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, I know Im going toregret this. The wind was blowingin my hair. I couldnt see a

thing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going to

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die.

But it wasnt helping. Im surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.


As we went through the

loops I kept screaming and screaming.


When I got off I was

so dizzy I fell over. I would

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That day we had lots

of fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex tonever ride it again. Its way to scary.

Youve done a good job proofreading, but youseem to be having a problem with commas afterintroductory elements and apostrophes incontractions.

Read aloud the sentences Ive

highlighted. Seewhere you have a natural pause to decide where to

place the commas. Check pp. 64-67 in yourgrammar book if you need more help. Also, check52-54 for apostrophe rules.

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S = spelling

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first. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, I know Im going toregret this. The wind was blowingin my hair. I couldnt see a


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die. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.But it wasnt helping. Im surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.



never ride it again.Th

e Vortexwas very scary. It seemed likeI rode it forever.

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of fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex to

never ride it again. Its way to scary.

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On the way there Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess wewere very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M.

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first. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, I know Im going toregret this. The wind was blowingin my hair. I couldnt see a


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die. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.But it wasnt helping. Im surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.As we slowed down I startedbreathing again.



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of fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.

I learned from the Vortex tonever ride it again. Its way to scary.

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