Exercise 19

No.1

(Worse) Being made of concrete, the construction worker had difficultly in breaking the pavement.

(Better) The construction worker had difficultly in breaking the concrete pavement.

No.2

(Worse) Unable to pay their monthly bills, the finance company provided solutions for debt-ridden consumers.

(Better) The finance company provided solutions for debt-ridden consumers unable to pay their monthly bills.

No.3

(Worse) After examining available options, feasible payment schedules were arranged by the financial consultant.

(Better 1) After examining available options, the financial consultant arranged feasible payment schedules.

(Better 2) The financial consultant arranged feasible payment schedules after examining available options.

No.4

(Worse) Registering for the fall semester, many elective courses were selected by the student.

(Better) The student selected many elective courses when registering for the fall semester.

No.5

(Worse) Before moving into the student dormitory, full payment for the semester was required by the school.

(Better) The school required full payment for the semester before one could move into the student dormitory.

No.6

(Worse) As a computer instructor, students must be closely monitored.

(Better) A computer instructor must closely monitor students.

No.7

(Worse) To excel in academics, concentration skills must be developed.

(Better 1) To excel in academics, a student must develop concentration skills.

(Better 2) A student must develop concentration skills to excel in academics.

No.8

(Worse) To compensate the invited speaker for his participation, hotel accommodations and roundtrip airfare were provided by the conference committee.

(Better 1) To compensate the invited speaker for his participation, the conference committee provided hotel accommodations and roundtrip airfare.

No.8 (cont.)

(Better 2) The conference committee provided the invited speaker with hotel accommodations and roundtrip airfare to compensate for his participation.

No.9

(Worse) When applying for graduate school admission, my academic advisor gave me valuable advice.

(Better) My academic advisor gave me valuable advice when I was applying for graduate school admission,.

No.10

(Worse) To make sound administrative decisions, many perspectives should be considered.

(Better) A manager should consider many perspectives to make sound administrative decisions.

No.11

(Worse) While scrolling down the screen, the monitor display suddenly turned off.

(Better) While the computer use was scrolling down the screen, the monitor display suddenly turned off.

No.12

(Worse) After attending the seminar that lasted all day, small group sessions were attended after dinner.

(Better) After attending the seminar that lasted all day, participants attended small group sessions after dinner.