Extended ResponseExtended Response

Mrs. HagyMrs. Hagy

Extended ResponseExtended ResponseParagraph 1:Paragraph 1:•Opening Statement-Restate the question/prompt, Opening Statement-Restate the question/prompt, including your position, include two points including your position, include two points supporting your positionsupporting your position•List your two points/reasonsList your two points/reasonsParagraph 2:Paragraph 2:•(Key Idea) Reason #1(Key Idea) Reason #1•(Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example•(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example•(Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example•(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example•(Connection) Connection(Connection) Connection

Paragraph 3:Paragraph 3:•(Key Idea) Reason #2(Key Idea) Reason #2•(Key Idea) Reason #1(Key Idea) Reason #1•(Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example•(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example•(Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example•(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example•(Connection) Connection(Connection) ConnectionParagraph 4:Paragraph 4:•Closing Statement- Restate opening using Closing Statement- Restate opening using different words. different words. Remember to mention your three points or reasons.Remember to mention your three points or reasons.

Before I Start:

I have read the prompt at least 3 times and underlined the most important words.

I am sure that my essay addresses the prompt and ANSWERS THE QUESTION.

I have filled out my graphic organizer with the main points of my story

While I’m Writing:

I re-read the prompt from time to time to make sure I’m answering the question.

I check my graphic organizer to make sure I’m on track.

My introduction uses words from the prompt and begins to answer the question

Narrative from the Life of Narrative from the Life of Frederick DouglasFrederick Douglas

Commenced-to begin

Perceive-To become aware of

Injurious-harmful, hurtful, or detrimental, as in effect: injurious eating habits.

Pious- having or showing a dutiful spirit of reverence for God or an earnest wish to fulfill religious obligations.

Divest- to strip of clothing, ornament, etc.: The wind divested the trees of their leaves.

Mourner- a person who attends a funeral to mourn for the deceased.

Lamblike- to be like a lamb

Precepts- a commandment or direction given as a rule of action or conduct.

Instruct-To teach

Apprehension- suspicion or fear of future trouble or evil.

Incompatible- not compatible; unable to exist together in harmony: She asked for a divorce because they were utterly incompatible.

Ell- an extension usually at right angles to one end of a building.

Errands-chores

Urchins-a mischievous boy

Unpardonable-unforgivable

Reader Response RubricReader Response RubricParagraph 1:Paragraph 1:• Opening Statement-Restate the question, including your position, include three Opening Statement-Restate the question, including your position, include three

points supporting your positionpoints supporting your position• List your three points/reasonsList your three points/reasonsParagraph 2:Paragraph 2:• (Reason) Reason #1(Reason) Reason #1• (Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example• (Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example• (Connection) Connection(Connection) ConnectionParagraph 3:Paragraph 3:• (Reason) Reason #2(Reason) Reason #2• (Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example• (Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example• (Connection) Connection(Connection) ConnectionParagraph 4:Paragraph 4:• (Reason) Reason #3(Reason) Reason #3• (Evidence) Cite text Example(Evidence) Cite text Example• (Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example(Interpretation) Explanation of Text Example• (Connection) Connection(Connection) ConnectionParagraph 5:Paragraph 5:

Closing Statement- Restate opening using Closing Statement- Restate opening using different wordsdifferent wordsRemember to mention your three points or reasons.Remember to mention your three points or reasons.

Grade 6 Reading Response Standards-Based Rubric

Task Element Insufficient Response Below Mastery Emerging Mastery Mastery

Identify key ideas and supporting textual evidence using a graphic organizer

0 Points

Students could not identify a third key idea AND

All textual evidence is irrelevant to key ideas

2 Points

Student could not identify a third key idea OR

Only 1-3 pieces of textual evidence are fully consistent with key idea

4 Points

Student could identify a legitimate third key idea AND

4-6 pieces of textual evidence are fully consistent with key idea

6 Points

Student could identify a legitimate third key idea AND

7-8 pieces of textual evidence are fully consistent with key idea

Cite evidence to construct a written response 0 Points

No textual evidence is cited OR

Student writing is off topic OR

Not enough was written to determine if standard was met

4 Points

Student cited textual evidence but does not explicitly state key ideas OR

Student states key ideas but does not cite textual evidence OR

Connection between key idea and evidence is unclear OR

Irrelevant information interferes the basis of student’s analysis

8 Points

Student responds to the prompt with a legitimate key idea and uses 1-2 pieces of relevant textual evidence to explain their response AND

Connection between key idea and evidence is unclear AND

Irrelevant information does not interfere with, and is not the basis of the student’s analysis

12 Points

Student responds to the prompt with a legitimate key idea and uses 3 or more pieces of relevant textual evidence to explain their response AND

Connection between key idea and evidence is clear AND

Irrelevant information does not interfere with and is not the basis of the student’s analysis

RI.7.1: Cite textual evidence to support analysis of what the text says explicitly as well as inferences drawn from the text.

W.6.9: Write arguments to support claims with clear reasons and relevant evidence.

0

Insufficient Response

0-5 Points

1

Below Mastery

6-10 Points

2

Emerging Mastery

11-15 Points

3

Mastery

16-18 Points

 

Student Name: _____________________________________ Room: _______________

Score: _______________/18 Possible Points

Mastery Level: 0 1 2 3

In the story In the story SoupSoup the author describes the bad behavior of Albert the author describes the bad behavior of Albert Yeganeh. The reason why he acts in the manner he does is that he is insecure Yeganeh. The reason why he acts in the manner he does is that he is insecure and has an intense need to keep control of everything around him. He also has and has an intense need to keep control of everything around him. He also has an inflated ego and insists that his business be better than every one of his an inflated ego and insists that his business be better than every one of his competitors so he can brag about how great he is at making soup.competitors so he can brag about how great he is at making soup.

Albert Yeganeh is an insecure person who needs to control Albert Yeganeh is an insecure person who needs to control everything around him and this leads to his bad behavior. In the text he wants everything around him and this leads to his bad behavior. In the text he wants to control everyone from his workers to the customers that come in off the to control everyone from his workers to the customers that come in off the street to order his soup. He threatens his workers with jail if they do not follow street to order his soup. He threatens his workers with jail if they do not follow his kitchen procedures and even fired someone for leaving a mushroom on the his kitchen procedures and even fired someone for leaving a mushroom on the floor. The way he acts toward these employees is evidence that he needs to feel floor. The way he acts toward these employees is evidence that he needs to feel like he is in total control of his work place and if anyone goes against his rules like he is in total control of his work place and if anyone goes against his rules he goes out of his way to punish them.he goes out of his way to punish them.

Another way that Albert shows he needs to be control is the way he Another way that Albert shows he needs to be control is the way he treats his customers. He has a sign flashing in front of his store that tells treats his customers. He has a sign flashing in front of his store that tells everyone what soups are available and exactly how to act when ordering. It everyone what soups are available and exactly how to act when ordering. It states “…Pick the soup of your choice…Move to your extreme …Left after states “…Pick the soup of your choice…Move to your extreme …Left after ordering…” When one of his customers did not follow his directions he was ordering…” When one of his customers did not follow his directions he was very rude to her, told her she talked too much, and yelled “Next” instead of very rude to her, told her she talked too much, and yelled “Next” instead of taking her order. This is yet another example of Albert’s need for control and taking her order. This is yet another example of Albert’s need for control and the terrible behavior that results when he feels that this control is threatened. It the terrible behavior that results when he feels that this control is threatened. It is my belief that people like Albert, who are unsure of themselves often need to is my belief that people like Albert, who are unsure of themselves often need to feel be in control. I remember a girl in my third grade class who always had to feel be in control. I remember a girl in my third grade class who always had to run all the games at recess. If she was not in charge she would have a fit and run all the games at recess. If she was not in charge she would have a fit and refuse to play with us. refuse to play with us. Although I did not realize it at the time, I believe she had Although I did not realize it at the time, I believe she had the same problem as Albert. She was probably an insecure person who needed the same problem as Albert. She was probably an insecure person who needed to be in control and when not given that control she would act out.to be in control and when not given that control she would act out.

Another reason Albert acts he way he does is that he has a huge ego Another reason Albert acts he way he does is that he has a huge ego and thinks he is better than everyone else. Especially those in the soup and thinks he is better than everyone else. Especially those in the soup business!business!

This type of behavior is cruel and reflects the insecurity of a man who This type of behavior is cruel and reflects the insecurity of a man who cant stand not being in control at all times. Anothercant stand not being in control at all times. Another