FOREVERMORE

By Tami Paish

Hells awake, hells asleepOpen wide my helms deepDreaded fears open wide To show what I feel inside

Dreams of love have broken meWhile passion and hate envelope me

When sky meets earth and heaven meets hell

Will I be able to still tellHw much you have changed

And then passed on the blameBreak me now my spirit swells

With distrust I am now compelledTo kill everything that makes me wellSo break me now just break me now

Fires in my cauldron bubble Though I dare not toil or cause trouble

For you have done enough of that.

I burn away sins and turmoil For I am full of pain and grief

That you have shared with me in briefI throw away all my pain

For it has caused me no gainI give away all my hope

For it is just a broken ropeYou have done this to my heart

Never again will you dare to startFor when you do

I will lay a curse upon you That thy own hands are idle at best

Until we lay you down to restOnly until that last time

will you remember this little rhymeAnd then still you will forgetJust how much you regret

These evil things that you have done.

For now just run my little oneRun from everything that you know

For it is soon your time to go

Today may not be the day Neither may it be the next

But on my life I promise thisNo longer will we share true loves kiss

Not again will I lingerFor no longer do I hungerFor your touch so tender

So go on and be free, be free indeedFor I no longer need your greed

Take it back I will succeedWithout your need for me

Leave me now in sweet peaceFor forever will you be in pieces for I

am sick of your controlLeave me now for I am whole

I now have my self-controlAnd now behold I am happy

For I am no longer your lackeyI am my own.

I will be known.As my own forevermore.

Summary

The whole point of this poem is that an old relationship has ended and the writer was bitter and hurt from the way that their partner treated him/her. He curses in anger, and declares his/her independence at the end saying how he/she will be a whole on his/her own now, and doesn’t need the other to feel like a whole or even like a person.

Critique of the poem.

This poem is an expression of many feelings and past experiences. They are expressed threw speaking of hell and gates leading to hell . Anger is also expressed threw the curses to the other party. Metaphors are used in a few places here to show how something's have lost their meaning as in “hope” is compared to a or said to be a “broken rope”. I chose this poem because its meaning is very close to my heart, and means a lot to me and to my past. This poem doesn’t have to be about a lover but it can also be about a father or a mother or some sort of controlling relationship. It relates to everyone in some way. The mood is very differentiated threw out the poem it is mostly anger and grief. But turns to a bold confidence of self.

Questions

1.This poem can be about many kinds of relationships between many different people. How many different

relationships can you name?

2.In the second line the word helms deep is present, what do you think this is or this means to the writer?

3.If you could change 1 of the few select repeated words in this poem what one would you change

and what would you change it to??

4.How does this poem speak to you, what relationship do you see in it most?

5.Would you shorten this poem if you had a chance to re-write it?