Friday! 9/16/2011Plan for the

day:◦Get your typed

rough draft◦Your pink sheet◦2 markers◦A pencil or a

pen

Remember:◦You need to fix

the mistakes found in your rough draft for homework.

◦You will bring a fresh typed draft MONDAY!

◦Turnitin.com practice DUE!

Editing #2Editing #2This is very easy…if you have bothered to write your paper.

You need these You need these things:things:Pen or pencil2 different colored markers2 small post itsSILENCEIf you do not have ATLEAST 3 pages written or 1 ½ typed you will work on your essay and edit for homework.◦This is your ONLY option for today.◦You will show me an edited draft at

the beginning of class tomorrow.

MLA FormatMLA FormatWrite this down: Your Name Ms. Clendenin English I- (class period) 22 September 2011

This is important and necessary to your paper

MLA FormatPaper has a creative title

All margins are set at 1 inch

12 pt font Times New Roman

Intro. Intro. Read your first paragraph.Using your pen/ pencil underline:

◦The characters◦The setting

All of these things should be in your intro.

Body paragraphsBody paragraphsUsing your pen/ pencil number

your body paragraphs◦Do your paragraphs “flow” into one

another?◦Do they change when the scene or

topics change?◦Is there a new paragraph when the

speaker of dialogue changes?

DialogueDialogueRead through your paper. Take a

marker and highlight your dialogue.

You should only have 4 to 5 sentences of dialogue.

If you have more than 4-5 lines, pick the most important/ most powerful lines of dialogue to keep.

ConclusionConclusionHighlight the last sentence of your essay.◦Does it give your paper a sense of finality and closure?

◦Is there a feeling of resolution?

Step 1Highlight every sentence

(Not lines!) in your essay using alternating colors.

For example: If you use yellow for the first sentence, use orange for the second; alternating sentences following that pattern- yellow, orange, yellow,etc.

This allows you to look for variation in your sentence lengths, as well as run-on sentences and fragments.

If you notice that your sentences are mostly the same length, try combining some of them to create complex sentences. Fix any run-ons or

fragments that you discover.

Step 2 Put brackets [ ] around the first word in every sentence.

This shows you whether or not you’re beginning too many sentences the same way. Unless it’s for effect, try not to start several consecutive sentences the same way.

If you discover that you’ve begun several sentences the same way, find ways to change some of them.

Also check and make sure your sentences do not start with AND, BUT or BECAUSE.

Step 3 switch with someone or keep yours

At the top of the page write “be verbs- your name”

Circle all “Be Verbs” in your essay (am, is, are, was, were, be, being, been).

“Be Verbs” are passive and can make your writing sound weak. As often as possible, use action verbs to make your writing more alive.

Add up the total # of “Be Verbs” in your essay. Find a way to change 1/3 of them into action verbs. Again, this may mean re-wording some sentences.

Step 4switch with someone or keep

yoursAt the top of the page write “spelling- your name”

Read the paper backwardsUnderline any words ,that you think are misspelled, twice

Step 5Read the paper backwards Look for commasCircle every comma that you find

in the paper with a marker or pen.You need to make sure that your

commas are serving their purpose.

Step 6At the top of the page write

- “2nd person-your name”

2nd- you, your, you’re . Read the paper backwards Put brackets [ ] around all 2nd

person pronouns.

Step 7 switch with someone else or

keep yoursAt the top of the page write

- “first person-your name”

First-I, me, my, mine, we, us, our, ours.

Read the paper backwards Put brackets [ ] around all first

person words

Rough Draft 2/3:Rough Draft 2/3:By Monday, this paper should be

corrected, typed, double spaced, 12 pt font and ready for a 3rd editing. (1 ½-2 pages)

Not having your essay is NOT an option, you have 3 days to figure it out.

No essay Monday will mean you make a PERSONAL phone call to your parent in my class.