june 2013 unit 3 (4eto_03) coursework exemplar materials

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International GCSE in English Literature

Exemplars for Paper 3

4ET0/03



Candidate A



Commentary and mark:

The requirement for 6 poems is met. The work shows a detailed knowledge of the poems and a sensitive

well‐informed understanding. There are insights into the use of language and a fair amount of analysis

using technical language though there are occasions when the analysis is incomplete or imprecise e.g.

ignores 'boom' in the onomatopoeia in Piano, does not really analyse fully the use of 'tossing' and

'seasoning' in Poem at 39 etc. There is focus on the assignment and, though the style is a little impersonal,

there is engagement shown through the informed personal evaluation. The wider reading poems are

treated with the development expected at this level, perhaps even more than strictly necessary, though

not more than the poems from the Anthology.

The folder has enough detailed analysis just to reach the 23‐26 Band with a mark of 23.



Candidate B:




The requirement

for

6 poems

is

met.

The

work

shows

a sound

understanding

with

some

detailed

reference and a clear understanding of meaning and tone. There is appreciation of the poets' use of

language and style including the use of technical terms but comment is confined to explanation of meaning

and describing general effects e.g. 'is a strong visual image', 'makes the reader feel nauseated by evoking

this suffocating smell' etc. (The one exception is 'crystal stair'.) There is focus on the assignment. The

wider reading poem references are brief but do refer to specific quotations used in comparison. The

criticism shows engagement with the poems.

The folder falls at the lower end of the 15‐18 Band with a mark of 15.



Candidate C:




The requirement for 6 poems is met. The work shows detailed knowledge of the poems and generally a

sound understanding

though

this

does

falter

e.g.

with

regard

to

the

'act

of

no

consequence'

in

A

Mother

in

a Refugee Camp, War Photographer exploring the loss of soldiers etc. Appreciation of the poets' use of

language and style is shown and there is some success in linking structure to meaning but otherwise there

is a tendency for quotation + naming of figure of speech + general effect e.g. negative memories in Piano,



the manic background in A Mother .....Camp, the assonance of 'boom' etc. There are a few examples of

attempts at precise analysis e.g. the metaphors in War Photographer .

Focus on the assignment is maintained for most of the time but does drift occasionally. The wider reading

references develop one detailed comparison for each poem but are fairly brief. Although referring to 'the

reader' throughout

(with

one

exception)

engagement

with

the

texts

was

clear.

The folder falls within the 19‐22 Band with a mark of 19. The analysis would need to be more

consistently precise and the detailed understanding more secure for a higher mark.



Candidate D:




The requirement for 6 poems is met. A limited knowledge of the poems is shown and there is a general

understanding. There is a response to the assignment though the references to the wider reading poems

move away from the named theme.

Though relevant material is selected and specific lines are identified, overall not enough of the criteria are

met to move this into the higher band.

The folder falls into the 4‐6 Band with a mark of 6.



Candidate E:




The requirement for 6 poems is met. There is sound knowledge of the poems. Understanding of meaning

in general

is

shown

by

summary

and

some

explanation

of

quotations

but

this

is

fairly

superficial

and

sometimes falters on the detail e.g. the rust‐coloured hair does not belong to the refugee mother.

Some recognition of the writers' techniques is evident with description of the structure and naming of

figures of speech and one attempt at analysis with 'tacks and splinters' in Mother to Son.

Focus is generally maintained and there is a clear personal response to the texts. Brief points of

comparison with the Anthology poems are made.

There is no consideration for the style and accuracy of the candidate's writing in the mark‐scheme but it

does hamper

communication

of

the

ideas

in

places

e.g.

the

refugee

mother's

motives.

The folder just falls into the 11‐14 Band with a mark of 11.



Candidate F:




The

requirement

for

6

poems

is

met.

The

work

shows

highly

detailed

knowledge

of

the

poems

together

with a sensible mature understanding. There is sophisticated appreciation of the use of language and

technical vocabulary is used skilfully in the analysis.

Though the wider reading poems have been treated in a great deal of detail, this has not been at the

expense of the Anthology poems.

There is clear focus on the assignment, the exploration of memory, and a well‐argued personal response.

Just occasionally the candidate's knowledge of the context perhaps takes the interpretations beyond what

the poem itself justifies e.g. with Remember.

This folder falls in the top band 27‐30 and receives a mark of 27.



Candidate G:




The requirement for 6 poems is not met as only one wider reading poem is included. There is sound knowledge of

the Anthology poems with some detail and understanding of how meaning develops in one of the poems but thin on

the others. To offset this a little there is some recognition of the writers' techniques: repetition, imagery and so on.

There is response to the terms of the assignment and opinions are offered. The standard of the work on the

Anthology poems would bring this folder just below the 11‐14 Band but as only 4 poems are referenced 3 marks

need to

be

deducted

giving

a final

mark

of

7.

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