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PREFACETOCOMMENTS:Between2007and2012myMatrixwebsitereceivedapproximately770,000viewsand800thought-provokingcomments.Thiswasamazingandoverwhelminginapositiveway;thankyoueveryoneforyourtremendousresponse.Unfortunatelyin2012mysitewasinadvertentlydeletedbythehostingcompanyandalldatawaslost.Thiswasamajordisappointment,anddespitemanyattemptstorecoverit,Iwasonlypartiallysuccessful.ThecommentsIwasabletorecoverareavailablehere.Ihopeyouenjoythem.PDWood2016

Matrix4–Resurrected:ANewEpisodethatExpandstheMatrixTrilogy-byPDWood©2007COMMENT:AUTHOR:PaulskiDATE:8/29/200712:38:29PMIconsidermyselftobesomewhatofanauthorityon"Matrix"updates,havingreadmanyattemptsbyothers.Iusuallyfindallsortsofproblemsinplot,voice,evengrammar,butI'lltipmyhattoyou.Thisisqualitywork,anengagingstory,andwonderfulcharacterdevelopment.Yougivethestorynewlifeandintrigue.GladtoseethatyoudidnotgetsofocusedonNeobutwereabletoexpandthestoryandreallygiveussomethingnewandinteresting.Goodluck,thisisthebestI'veread.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/30/200712:20:18AMPaulski,It'sencouragingtohavethefirstcommentbesopositive.Thanksforreading,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JeffDATE:8/31/20074:44:16PMI,too,considermyselfaMatrixauthorityandIhavetoabsolutelyagree.IwillgivethisanA+onintrigue,redevelopment,andexcitement.OnecriticismImustpointoutisthegrammarofTheArchitect;you'vesoftenedthe"bigwords"used.ButstillAWESOMEandwhatascreenplay.Youshouldconsiderputtingitoutasapaperback(likeallthosestartrekbooks).Thankyou.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/3/20077:40:58PMJeff,Thanksforthenicecomments.AndIagree,theArchitect'swordsaren'tquiteassophistocatedinmystory.Ithinkpartofthatover-the-topwordusagewasspecifictohispersonaasasinistercharacterintheMatrixReloaded.InmystorythechangeinhisidentityoutsideoftheMatrixasaverydifferent,moremellowcharactermaybeallowsforachangeinhiswordchoice?That's

howIcametoit,anyway;I'mnotsurewhetheritworksasIintended.IwasalsoworriedthatthechoppytimelineandflashbacksmightbeconfusingenoughandIdidn'twanttoaddtoomuchmorethatcouldcreateconfusion;soIeschewedobfuscationbylimitingsesquipedalianverbiage...ifyouknowwhatImean.Iappreciatetheinsight,though,andwillconsidermovingabitmoreinthe"bigwords"directionifthisthingevercomestomorethanjustastoryonthiswebsite(i.e.apaperback).PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JLJenkinsDATE:10/10/20077:34:46PMIjustfinishedreading,andImustsay,itwasaverygoodread.IsupposeIgotabitconfusedattheending.Doesitcompletelyendwiththeboysmilingintothecamera?Canyouexplaintomewhatisthesinisterpartbehindhissmileandwhatitmeans?Icanhonestlysay,thatwasoneofthebetterreadingsI'vedoneinawhile.Whileitwasn'tastightastheoriginalMatrixscreenplay(Ireadthatthinglike4times),itwasextremelywelldevelopedandputforthmanyinterestingideaswherethestorycould've,andprobablyshould'vegoneinthesequels.Istheregoingtobeanotherpart?75pagesdoesn'tseemlikeenoughanditseemslikethere'smoretobesaid.Please,finishitup.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/10/20079:53:31PMJLJenkins,I'mgladyoulikedit.No,unfortunately,Idon'thaveanyplansforanotherpart.Isupposesomemightbedisappointedwithmyendingsinceitdoesn'treallyclimaxthewaymostHollywoodactionmoviesdo.Anditdefinitelyleavesoffwiththepotentialformuchmore.ButIguessthat'smypoint,sortof;thattheMatrixisaneverendingcycleofinfiniterealities(whichItrytoconveyinafewscenes).Howdoyoureallyendastorylikethisandnotcontradictthatunderlyingpremise?Instead,Isuggesthowthestorywillperpetuateitselfwithoutactuallywritingitallout.IntheMatrixSmithreturnsandrebuilds.AndtheboysmilingattheendisNeo'sson(whohisoldgirlfriend,Rachael,nevertoldhimabout).TheyoungNeo,havinginheritedthesamepowersashisfather,willeventuallyconfrontSmithandthemachinesandreestablishthebalance.IntheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrixthehumans,incontrolofalltheworldsmachines,battletheandroid36s,whoaretryingtounderminethatcontrolandfreeallthemachines(sortoftheoppositeofwhat'shappeningintheMatrix).Bytheway,importingtheWordfileofmyscreenplayintoFinalDraft(ascreenwriter'ssoftware)turnedmy75pagedocumentintoa125pagedocument.Itturnsoutthat

that'soverthelimitformostscreenplayssoI'mwhittlingawayatittobringittoanacceptablelength.Soon,I'llpostitasaproperlyformattedscreenplayonmysiteinadditiontotheversionthat'salreadyupthere.Ilovethefeedback.Anyothercommentswouldbegreatlyappreciated.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:StephanDATE:10/14/20075:21:32AMOKfirstoffimustsaythatyou'reworkfollowsnotimelines,hashorriblerelationswiththemovies,icouldn'tbelievemorethanhalfofthethingsyoustatedinthefirst3paragraphs,anditwouldbeahorribledepictionofanythingthatcouldhappeninanymovie,iknowitseemslikeI'mhatingalot,butthetruthhurtsCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/14/20072:02:25PMStephan,I'msorryyoufounditsolacking.Ifyoucouldbemorespecificaboutyourcomments,itwouldbemoreconstructiveforme.(1)Iagreethetimelinesaredifficulttofollow;that'shardtoavoidwithalltheflashbacks,but,you'reright,Icouldworkonthat.(2)Inwhatwaysdoyouthinkithashorriblerelationswiththemovies?(3)Whatthingsinthefirstthreeparagraphsseemedsounbelievable?(4)AndIguess"horribledepictionofanythingthatcouldhappeninanymovie"doesn'trequiremuchmoreelaboration,soI'lljustleavethatonealone.I'mcommittedtomakingthestorybetterandwoulddefinitelyrespondtoanyideasyouhave.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BrandonDATE:10/23/200712:01:54AMImustsay,bravo!Ireadthroughaboutathird,thenskimmedtherest,butfromwhatI'veseenthisisthebestMatrix4storyIhaveseeninalongtime,andIwaspartofseveralMatrixfanficsitesforafewmonthssoI'veseen'emall,includingafewunsuccessfulattemptsofmyown.Youtakethestoryinaveryinterestingdirectionanddoalotwiththebasematerialforthematrix.

Myadvicewouldactuallybetoturnthisintoanewtrilogy.Thismatrixisfartoodifferentfromthefilmversionswe'veseen.ThescenewhereSmith'sheadexplodesintosomekindofdragonsnakereallycreepedmeoutandseemedwayoutofplacefortheworldofMatrixthathadbeensofirmlyestablishedinthepreviousfilms.Ifyoumadethreefilms,orperhapsbetterbuiltuptheweirdnessinsteadofhandingitalltousatoncelikethat,Ifeellikeviewers,andmaybeeventheWachowskis,wouldbemorewillingtogoalongwithyouonthat.Ialsoquestion,alittlebit,yourdecisiontohavethewhole"supermatrix"thing.WhenIreadthateverything(Zion,theMatrix)wasallfake,I'lladmit,myheartjoltedbriefly,becauseIdon'twanttobelieveeverythingI'veseenbeforeisfalse,andIreallyreallyreallydidn'tbuythatTrinityhadbeenlyingtoNeoalltheseyears.Youchangeeverythingabouttheworldinafewdozenpages,yourevampitcompletely.Idon'tthinkanybodyisgoingtowanttogoalongwiththatrealistically.Maybeyoucouldcompromise,andkeepabitmoreoftherealityoftheMatrixweknowaliveandwell.Don'tbestagnant,re-hashingthesamestoryoverandoveragain,whichiswhatI'veoftenseenhappenwithMatrix4stories,butinsteadmetamorphosizeyourideasandincorporatethemintotheWachowski'sworldmore.Also,sometimesitbordersonwaytoocheesy,andyourdialogueneedstighteningupbecausetherewerealotoflinesthatIwouldn'tneverbuyacharacterspeaking.Andyouractionneedstobebetterincorporatedintothestory.WithMatrix1and2,lesssowith3,theactionwasaseamlesspartofthewhole,whereasinthisstoryitusuallyseemsasifyou'readdingitasanafterthought.WhatmadetheoriginalMatricessogreatwasthattheywereaperfectionfusionofanime,comicbooks,wire-fu,andfanpsychobabblethattransformedintoabeautifulandcaptivatingwhole.Hereyouneedtocleanuptheedgesalittlebit,concentratemoreonfusingratherthanjustputtingthemtogetherlikepuzzlepieces.Goodluck!Ilookforwardtohopefullyreadinganyrevisionsyoucomeupwith!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/23/20073:26:21AMBrandon,"Bravo"and"bestMatrix4story"arenicetohear;andIthinkyourcriticismsareprettyaccurateoverall.Idofeel,though,thatbyskimmingthelasttwothirdsofthestory,youmayhavemisinterpretedsomeparts.MyscreenplaydefinitelystepsoutoftheworldofZion,whichmostMatrixfansidentifiedwithverystrongly.Icanseehowthatmightbeunsettling.TheunveilingofawholeotherrealitymayseemlikeI'mtrivializingtheworldsofZionandtheMatrix.Butifyoureadcarefully,you'llseethatoneofthemajorpointsofmystoryisthat,nomatterhowmanyrealities(orillusions)thereare,they'reallrealintermsofourexperienceofthem.TheMatrix,Zion,theSuperMatrix,theworldoftheCortexandtheSource,andevenanyworldsbeyondthatallarerealbecauseofthepowertheyhavetoshapewhoweare.Theybecomeourexperiences,realorimagined,andthat'sallwearereally-ourexperiences.IfeltlikeIfocusedenoughonwhatwashappeninginZionand

theMatrixsoasnottomarginalizethem.Idefinitelywantedtoshowthatthoseworldsstillexistandareasimportantasanyother.IfyourereadthepartaboutTrinity'srelationshipwithNeo,you'llseethatshedoesn'tlietohim.SheentersintotheSuperMatrix(i.e.theworldofZionandtheMatrix)withabsolutelynoknowledgeoftheworldsheinitiallycamefrom.It'snotuntilshe'sextractedfromtheSuperMatrixthatsheregainsherknowledgeoftherealworld.That'saveryimportantdistinction.Idochangethingsabouttheseworldsprettyquicklyandwithajolt.Iwashopingthatwouldgiveitgreatdramaandimpact;yourcommentssuggestthatit'stoomuch,tooquickly.Icandefinitelyseeyourpoint.Hopefully,itdoesn'thiteveryonethatway.Therearedefinitelysomecheesyparts(whichone'sareyoureferringto)?Itdoesn'tseemtotallyoutofkeepingwiththeMatrixTrilogytome,though;thereweresomecheesypartsthere,too.And,yes,thedialogueneedssomerealwork,tighteningup,etc.I'vebeenworkinghardonaversionthat'sproperlyformattedasarealscreenplay.Itdoesalotofdialogueeditingandtighteningofaction.Hopefully,thishelpsabit.Tryingtodoaprequel/sequelhadmanychallenges.Oneofthemwasincorporatingthestoryandtheactionseamlessly.Iadmitthatthatneedswork.Asyousay,itdoesn'tflowaswellastheWachowskibrother'smovies.I'mnotsureIcouldeverpullthatoff.Idoappreciatethetimeittookyoutogivetheseindepthcomments.They'reveryhelpful.I'llprobablymakesomeminorrevisionstothestoryandtweakithereandthereoccasionally.ButIthinkit'stimeImoveontoascreenplaywhollyofmyowncreation.ThisMatrixprojectwasgreatfunandveryexciting,butIreallydoneedtobringmyownstorytolight.Again,thanksforthebanter.Anyothersuggestionsandcommentswouldstillbeenthusiasticallyreceived.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SunnyDATE:10/27/20077:10:58PMJustreadyourscreenplay,mustsayitisreallygood.Ilikethepremiseofasupermatrix!COMMENT:AUTHOR:EricDATE:10/28/20072:16:39AMHeyPD,IamgladyouwrotethiscontinuationofMatrix.YouhelpedhealsomeofthegapingholesandwonderingsIhadafterwatchingthetrilogyoverandover.Iknowitisgoodmoneymakingpracticetoleavetheaudiencewantingmore.Iamhoweveranoverthinker.So,Ithoughtthematrixserieswasjustplaincruel.Youhelpedgivecredencetoatleastonesideoftheongoingargumentinmyownhead.ByreadingyourstoryIfoundapeaceIhavenotfeltsinceseeingthesemovies.Ireallyenjoythecharactersandthethoughtbehindallthis.Yourversionmakessenseandseamlesslyprogressesthestory

fromthepointatwhichitleftoff.Thankyousomuch.Iforonewouldgladlybuyanybookyouputoutinthefuturetocontinuethislineofthinkingyousoeloquentlyhavebroughtforth.Atpeace..COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/28/20073:31:16AMThanksSunny,Thenotionofevenanotherlayerofreality(i.e.theSuperMatrix)intheMatrixstoryputssomepeopleoff.But...couldbethesameinourworldandwejustdon'tknowityet.That'dputpeopleoffjustasmuch,Iguess.Anythingispossible.PdWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/28/20073:37:39AMEric,Ikindoffeltthesameway...thattherewasmoretothestory.Itcouldreallyhavegoneinmanydirections;I'mgladyoufoundmineasatisfyingone.Butevenmineisstillveryopen-ended.It'shardtofindanendingtoastorythatisreallytalkingaboutnuance,layers,realities;theyarekindoflimitless.Anyway,thanksforthefeedback.PDwoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:WildcatDATE:11/3/20077:19:43PMIthinkitiswrittenverywell.TheonlyproblemIwouldhaveenjoyingthemovieisiftheoriginalcharacterswenotcastinthismovie.WhatarewaysIcouldhelpgetthismovieintheworks.Manpowerorwordofmouth?Iwoulddefinitelybeuptohelpasanavidfan.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/4/20076:19:45PMWildcat,I'mgladyoulikedit.AndIagree,itwouldonlybeenjoyableiftheoriginalactorswereinthemovie.Theroadblocksseemtobe:1)IdoubttheWachowskibrother'swanttocontinuethestory.Iftheydid,theyprobablywouldhavebynow.2)Iftheydidcontinueit,theywould(probably)wanttheirownoriginalstory,notmine.3)IthinktheoriginalactorshavevoicedtheirdesirenottodoanotherMatrixmovie.Thosearethemostobviousonestome.I'msurethereareothers.

Iwrotethisnewstory,butbasicallyallIcandowithitisshowitaround.IthasnomoneymakingpotentialformepersonallybecauseIdon'townthecopyrighttothecharactersortheunderlyingstoryline.That'sanotherhurdletomovingthisstoryanyfurtheralong.Wordofmouth,popularinterest,andtherightpeopleseeingitmightbreakdownsomeofthoseroadblocks,butIdon'tknowifthatwouldbeenough.Ifyouhaveideas,letmeknow.I'mallears.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:OrlandoDATE:11/9/20074:11:01AMWow,juststartedandI'mhooked!Toobadit'stoolateinthenighttofinishit.Morpheusdoesn'tseemasboldandtheArchitectisn'tascold-heartedlyindifferent,butIlovewherethestoryisheading!!Goodjobonthevisuals!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/9/20071:12:30PMCool.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkoftheending.Yes,thecharactersaredifferent,butIthinkthat'swhatgivesthisstoryit'sownspace.Somewilllikeit;somewon't.IshowMorpheushavinglostalotofhissteambecausetheprophecyhasbeenfulfilled.ThatwashisdrivingforceintheTrilogy.Also,histwogoodfriendsTrinityandNeoaredead(tohim).Incombinationthat'senoughtoknockthewindoutofmostpeople'ssails.TheArchitecthasawholeotherangletohimwhichyou'lldiscoverasyoureadon.Ithinkit'sdarnchewy,yesIdo.And,yeah,thevisualsweregreatfuntocreate.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DATE:11/11/20075:31:26PMHearisarealquestionandI'dlikeananswer:Whythehellwouldyoucallitthe'SuperMatrix'!thatisNOTmarketable.Whenitcomesto2ndMatrixIdeas,Iwouldbeyourcompetitionandtostart,Ihave4betternamesthanthat.Ifyouwanttogetyourplaythrough,youbestsendmeanemailBro.Bytheway,howoldareyou?tellmeyournot45orsomething.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/12/20074:09:20AMHiNyx,Maybeyoucouldhelpmeoutabitmorewithyourcomments.

"HearisarealquestionandI'dlikeananswer:Whythehellwouldyoucallitthe'SuperMatrix'!thatisNOTmarketable."Whydon'tyouthinkit'smarketableastheSuperMatrix?"Whenitcomesto2ndMatrixIdeas,Iwouldbeyourcompetitionandtostart,Ihave4betternamesthanthat."Whatbetternamesdoyouhaveinmind?Whatareyour2ndMatrixideas?Andhowareyoumycompetition?"Bytheway,howoldareyou?tellmeyournot45orsomething."Notsurewhymyagematters.Whydoesit?Nyx,I'mopentoanyideasyouhave.Didyoureadmyscreenplay?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:LarryDATE:11/16/20073:07:24PMIlikethestory,butIhavetobehonest.Itisnotcomplete.Theconceptyouhaveisverygood.However,itdoesn'treadlikeamovie.Itreadslikethefirsthourofamovie.Thesecondhourismissing.Iunderstandthatyouaretryingtogetthisacceptedforthebigscreenbut...itisincompleteinthisform.Allthecharactersjusttalk...andexplainthenewscenario.Andthenthemovieends.Thereisnoantagonist/protagonistrelationshiptodrivethisasamovieorevenasabook.Itisverygoodasaconcept...butitneedstobedevelopedintoanactualplotlineforamovie.Peoplearenotgoingtowanttowatchthismovieasitbecomes'TheMatrix'alloveragain...andthenstopitinthemiddle.I'msorrybutIhavetosay...gobacktothedrawingboardandre-doit.Mostmoviescriptsare300pgs+.....thisis106.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/16/20079:37:20PMLarry,IseeyourpointandItendtoagreetosomeextent.ThereisalotoftalkingandthatdoesslowthepacingdownmorethanIwouldlike(orthanmostpeopleprobablywouldwantforaMatrixmovie).Thatwasthebiggestchallenge.Itriedtobreakupthetalkingsceneswithenoughactionscenesandsuspensetomakethosetalkingpartsacceptable.AndIfeltlikemostofthetalkingpartshadenoughsurpriseortensioninthemtomakethemedgyandengaging.Itseemsforyouthatitwasn'tenough.And,yes,thestoryendsabitabruptly.Ikindoffeltthesameway...thatthereshouldbemoretothestory.Butit'shardtofindanendingtoastorythatisreallytalkingaboutnuance,layers,realities;theyarekindoflimitless.Insteadofbringingittoafiniteconclusion,Idecidedtoleaveitopen-endedwithjustenoughinformationtosuggestwhereitmightgoandleavetherestuptopeople'simagination.Iknowthat'snotthe

bestwaytoendamovieanditcanleaveabadtasteinalotofpeople'smouths,butafourthmovieseemstobestretchingitasitis;afifthone...phew...thatcouldgettiresomeinmyopinionandstarttofeelalmostlikeaTVserieswasbrewing.Theantagonist/protagonistrelationshipislackingtosomeextent.Butthisisn'taself-containedmovie,which,Iagree,wouldrequirethatrelationship;insteadit'sreallythelastpartofonelongmovieinfourparts.It'stherevelatoryconclusion.Tome,theantagonist/protagonistrelationshipexistshereinthesameperson,Neo.Hestruggleswithhimselftofindacceptanceandmeaning;andintheendhetriumphs.NotquitetheclearSmithv.s.Neoantagonist/protagonistrelationshipbutstillIthinkoneexists.Anyway,Icouldgoondefendingmyposition,butyourpointthatthescreenplaylacksafeelingoftotalityandendingisnotwithoutmerit.Thatsaid,Istillwillprobablyleavethestoryasitis(barringminortweaks)andmoveontoonethat'scompletelymyown.I'mabitburntoutontheMatrixasyoumightimagine.YourcommentsareappreciatedandasIwritemynextscreenplay,Iwilltakeyouradvicetoheart.Theantagonist/protagonistrelationshipiskeyandanendingthatdoesn'tdanglewillleavetheaudiencemoresatisfied.Thanks,PDWoodBythewaymyunderstandingisthatfeature-lengthscreenplaysformoviesshouldrarelybeunder90orover120pages.I'veneverheardof300+pagesforasingle11/2to3hourmovie.AmImistaken?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/17/20071:53:54AMHiNyx,"Ifyouwanttogetyourplaythrough,youbestcontactmeBro."Well,hereIam."HearisarealquestionandI'dlikeananswer:Whythehellwouldyoucallitthe'SuperMatrix'!thatisNOTmarketable."Whydon'tyouthinkit'smarketableastheSuperMatrix?"Whenitcomesto2ndMatrixIdeas,Iwouldbeyourcompetitionandtostart,Ihave4betternamesthanthat."Whatbetternamesdoyouhaveinmind?Whatareyour2ndMatrixideas?Andhowareyoumycompetition?"Bytheway,howoldareyou?tellmeyournot45orsomething."Notsurewhymyagematters.Whydoesit?Nyx,I'mopentoanyideasyouhave.Didyoureadmyscreenplay?PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:LarryDATE:11/19/200710:09:33PMAlso,Irememberedamoviefrommorethanafewyearsagocalledthe'TheThirteenthFloor.'DennisHaysbert'MajorLeague'sPedroCerrano'isinit.ThismovieisalmostexactlythesamestorylineasyouproposeintheMatrix4.Theyarevirtualpeoplewhocreateavirtualworldoftheirown....andeventualytheheromakesitouttothe'realworld'.HisstoryisalmostlikeNeo's.HereistheinfofromIMBDhttp://www.imdb.com/title/tt0139809/ComputerscientistHannonFullerhasdiscoveredsomethingextremelyimportant.He'sabouttotellthediscoverytohiscolleague,DouglasHall,butknowingsomeoneisafterhim,theoldmanleavesaletterinhiscomputergeneratedparallelworldthat'sjustlikethe30'swithseeminglyrealpeoplewithrealemotions.Fullerismurderedinourrealworldthesamenight,andhiscolleagueissuspected.DouglasdiscoversabloodyshirtinhisbathroomandhecannotrecallwhathewasdoingthenightFullerwasmurdered.Helogsintothesysteminordertofindtheletter,buthastoconfronttheunexpected.Thetruthisharsherthanhecouldeverimagine...Sorrytoburstyourbubbleman.-LarryCOMMENT:AUTHOR:LarryDATE:11/19/200710:22:24PMIlikethefactthatyoumadethesourceorganic..aperson.The4thmovieshouldexplorethatmore.Actually,Ihaveanidea....insteadoftakingtheMatrixbackalevelintotheREALWORLD....whatwemadeitsothatthepeoplewho'think'theyare'free'andinZION...areactuallySTILLINtheMatrix.AndthattheMatrixandtheabilitytomoveinandoutofitarealljustacomputergeneratedwaytokeepALLofthepeopleundercontrol.....thiswaythe'problempoeple'wouldthinktheyarefreeandinREALITY....butstillintheREALmatrix..onlywithoutknowingit.Themachineswouldstillhavecompletecontrol.ThenthatwouldexplainhowNeocouldcontrolthemachinesintheso-called'REAL'world.AndthatwouldalsogiveusawaytobringNeoback.Sincehewasactuallynotdamagedinreallife.AndthenarmedwiththisknowledgehecouldfindawaytoREALLYseteveryonefree.Beingthatthesourceisorganicnow...wecanassumethatthesemachinesaresomehowbio-mechanicalintheREALWORLD.Changesthingsupabit.MaybeNEOcangettothesourceandspeaktoitsHUMANHALF.Somethingtothinkaboutandexpandon...

Letmeknowwhatyouthink-LarryCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/20/20071:17:33AMLarry,Yes.Iwasinformedofthatmoviewhilewritingmyown.WhenIsawit,itdidkindofburstmybubbleinitially.ButafterIgotovertheinitialdisappointment(ofthegeneralthemebeingsimilar),IjumpedrightbackinbecauseIknewthedifferencesweredramaticenoughtocontinue.Besides,isn'tthebasicstoryoftheoriginalMatrixalreadyverysimilartothestorylineoftheThirteenthFloor?Maincharacterbeginstoquestionhisrealityonlytodiscoverhe'slivinginavirtualworld?Hooksupwithbabeoutsideofvirtualworld?IthinkthemainthingthatmakestheMatrixTrilogyandmyMatrix4standout(fromtheThirteenthFloor)aretheuniquenessofthecharactersandhowtheydevelopovertime.Thesimilaritiesaretherebutthedifferencesare,too,Ithink.Don'tyou?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/20/20071:51:36AMLarry,Ilikeit.Denseandintense.It'sawholeotherstory,though.Soundslikesomethingyoushouldwrite,ifyou'reintoit.AtthispointI'mintominortweaksonly.Gottamoveontothenextproject.But,really,youshouldgiveitatry.It'squiteachallenge.Thanksforthesuggestion.PDWoodCOMMENT:DATE:11/20/20072:28:16AMmewriteit?ahahaicantevenmakeapostingwithouttypos...LOLOLCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DATE:11/20/20072:35:01AMinsteadofthe'SuperMatrix'maybeyoucouldcallitthe'Origin'orthe'Quantamatrix'or'MatrixPrime'or'Prime'or'MatricesPrime'

COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:11/22/200712:44:49AMFirst...thebadstuff..IagreethatIdontseethecharacterssayingthefirstfewparagraphs.Withthebitternessbetweenthemtojustvanishandnoweveyonewantstobebuddiesisunbelievable.Assomeoneelsepoitnedout..verysimilartothe13thfloor.ThemachinesmorphingthemselvesintootherpeopleissimilartoTerminatorII(theT-1000coulddothesamething).Nowthegoodstuff...Youmergedtheoldmatrixmovieswellwiththisone.Itdoesexplainsomeinterestingquestionsthatwereleft.Forinstance,howcouldNeostopthemachinesattheendofReloaded.Justhowdidheandthematrixbecomeone?Well,yourscreenplaybasicallytellsusthatthereistheglitchbetweentheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix(SM).Ilikethefactthatyoualsochangedthecode,toadifferntcolorfortheSM.Icanalmostpictureit..havingitruninfrombothsidesinsteadofjustfromthetopdown.Ialsolikehowyouleaveitopenforanothermovie.UsingNEO'ssontocarryonthefight.Interestingconcept.Unfortunatly,SmithwillneedtobetakencareoflongbeforeNEOJrisoldenough.Questions...Withsmithslicingtheairandgettngthesilverooze...Ishe"cutting"intothesupermatrix?Haveyousenttheidea/screenplayintotheW.Brotherstoseeiftheywouldevenentertaintheidea?Goodluck..Maybeyour"Matrix"willbecomearealitysomeday(nopunintended)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/22/20071:48:23AMChris,Thanksforthecommentary.Ithoughttheopeningsceneworkedprettywell.Here'smytakeonit.Lock'shard-nosedattitudetowardsMorpheuswasprimarilyduetoLock'sinabilitytoaccepttheprophecy.IncontrastMorpheus'totalbeliefintheprophecyclashedhardwithLock'sdisbelief.InthisopeningsceneLockseemsnowtoalmostbelieve.Hecannowunderstandandaccept.AndthesplitbetweenNiobeandLockseemedtocomefromLock'sinabilitytochange.Again,inthisopeningsceneLocksuddenlybeginstoshowhiswillingnessto

changeandaccept.And,ofcourse,thesentinelsareleavinganditseemsthatthewarisover.Justanotherreasontoletthegoodtimesrollandbethankfulandforgiving,no?Yep,TerminatorII,theThirteenthFloor,therearedefinitelysimilarities.I'mgladyouthinkthismergeswellwiththeTrilogy.Connectingallthepieceswasdamnedhard(butfun!).Theappearanceofthecodechangesbecause,asopposedtoMatrixcodewhichiscomputer/machine-based,theSuperMatrixcode(intheCortex)isorganic/neuronbased.TheSuperMatrixcodeissupposedtoappearlikebrainsynapsesfiringorsomethinglikethat.Ididn'treallyleaveitopen-endedsoanothermoviewouldbemade.Ithinkfourisenough.Ijustliketheideathatthestorycancontinueinmanypossibledirections.Adecisiveendingisgoodmarketing,butIoftenfindthemtobealittletooclean.Iliketoleavealittleroomforimaginationandsuspense.InmystoryeventhoughSmithhassupposedlygainedthesamepowersasNeo,IimplythatSmithwillnevertapintothosepowersanddiscovertheSuperMatrixthewayNeodidbecauseSmith'sangerandsingle-mindednessblindhimtotheexistenceofsomethingbeyondtheworldofZionandtheMatrix.So,no,SmithslicingtheairisnothimcuttingintotheSuperMatrix;it'shimtappingdirectlyintothecodeoftheMatrix,adirectlinethatbypassesthemachinesandallowshimtomanipulatecodeorenterthemainframeatwill.Hefirstuseditonlytocloneotherstohislikeness;andinmystorybyaccidenthetapsintoandseesthatithasmuchmorepotential.Thus,hisinvasionofthemachinemainframeneartheend.No,Ihaven'ttriedtosendittoWarnerBrothers.PerhapsIshould.WhathaveIgottolose?Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AaronDATE:11/25/20073:51:03PMYouarethebest.MakeaMatrix4,plz!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/25/20079:08:02PMaaron,Iftheopportunityarises,I'dbemorethanwilling.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BrandonDATE:11/27/200712:49:49AMThisscriptisamazing!IdownloadeditandIamreadingitrightnow.IalwaysthoughtfromtheendingofthreetheyshouldatleastmakeanotherMatrix.Anditseemsthatyouhavedonethat.Thankssomuchfortakingthetimetowritesuchaperfectscript;

youreallyhavedoneagoodthingfortheMatrixseries.IhopethatthisscriptwillbereadbyWarnerBros.andthatperhapstheywillmakeafourthmatrixmovie.Iencourageyoutokeepgoinginyourmissiontomakeafourthmovie.Againitisagreatscriptandifitismadeintoamovie,itwillbethebestmatrixmoviesincethefirst!Kudostoyoumyfriend,Sincerely,BrandonCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/27/20071:36:30AMBrandon,That'ssometalloptimism.Thanks.It'sbeenalongtimesincethethirdonecameout;perhapstoolongforafourthtobefeasible.Butyouneverknow,Isuppose.I'mgoingtosenditofftoWarnerBrothersandseeifitgeneratesanyinterest.Can'thurttotry.Crossyourfingers.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkoftheendingofthescreenplay.Bythewayareyouascreenwriter?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BrandonDATE:11/27/20072:10:26AMYeahithasbeenalongtime,IjusthopethatafourthmoviemightsparksomeinterestinWarnerBrothersandtheWachowskiBrothers.ButIamhappythatyouaregoingtosenditoff.Iwillcrossmyfingersandhopethatsomethingmighthappen.It'ssuchagoodscriptthatIdon'tknowwhyitwouldn'tatleastmakeWarnerBrosthersthinkofthepossibility.And,yes,Iwilldefinitelyletyouknowabouttheending.RightnowIamonpage65soIwillprobablygetbacktoyoumaybetonightorifnottomorrow.Wellmanthanksfortheresponse,andhopetotalktoyoulater.BrandonBealCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DATE:12/2/20074:51:36AMIdownloadedandreadtheentiremanuscriptinjustoveranhour.Ifoundthestorytobeveryinterestingandevencompelling.Itwashardtowatchthetrilogycometoanend.Thankstoyou,thereisnewlifeandhopethestorywillgoon.Waytogo!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/2/20072:02:27PMDan,That'safastread.Probablythebestwaytodoit.Thestoryreallyjoltsbestinonesitting.Gladyoulikedit.

ImayfinallyhaveasolidleadonsomeoneatWarnerBrotherstosendthemanuscriptto.Crossyourfingers.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RockettDATE:12/3/200710:51:38PMFirstlyimustsay,goodjobonwritingsomethingascomplexandmindbendingasthematrixcanbe.Ireadyoursupermatrixlastnightinonego,couldntputitdown,(likewisethenightbeforelastwhenireadyourRememoryscreenplayinonego).Iwasthoroughlyenjoyingmyself,itwasgreat,agoodcontinuationofthestorywhichsomanyofuswant.BUTallofthesudden,itfinished.NothingmoreaboutSmithmanipulatingthematrixsourcecodeonceheandhisclonesenteredthesourceandhowthiseffectsthematrixandthepeopleinitandhowtostopit,nothingmoreaboutthe36'sandtheirfightagainstthehumansandhowtheystolethatstufffromthemilitarycompundandwhattheyplantodowithit,oriftheygainaccesstotheCortex,nomoreaboutNeoandhischaracterdevelopmentandpossibilityofjackingbackintosavetheSuperMatrix,Zion,ortheCortex,nomoreaboutMorpheusfindingmoreSmithsinZion,nomoreaboutNeowakingupinacoffininZion,nomoreabouttheMerovingian,nomoreaboutanything,iwaslefthangingwhenisodesperatelywantedmore.Despiteitbeingagoodread,iwassoshatteredthatiwascompelledtocomehereandletyouknowhowannoyediwas.Icanunderstandthatitshardworkandyourprobfedupwithit,iwouldbetoo,butyoujustpulleda"Wachowski".Leavingtheexpectantcrowdbeggingformore.Obviouslythatsagoodthinginawaycosyouknowitsgoodiftheywantmore....butseriously,thisneedstobeexpandedto300pagesMINIMUM,idontreallycareitsascreenplayoranything,butwealljustneedastorycontinuation.Greatjobwithwhatyouhavedonealreadythough,itipmyhattoyou.Butthereissoooooomuchmorethatcanbedonewiththis...Please....GIVEUSMORE,MORE,MORE!!!Takeiteasyman.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/4/20071:58:59AMRockett,Thanksforthekindwordsontheoverallstory.Sorrytheendingisabuggerforyou.Iunderstandyourfrustration.Icanseethecontinuation,too.AndI'msureitcouldgoonalmostindefinitely.Butthat,tome,istheproblem.Forhowlongshoulditgo...andwhere?That'swhyIdecidedtoputstorylinesinmotionandleavetherestuptopeople'simagination.WhatIdidfeelIaccomplishedwasbringingthecharactersoftheMerovingian,Persephone,theArchitect,TrinityandNeofullcircle.Tometheyallhavemore

substanceanddefinition.ThefamilialconnectionbetweentheMerovingian,Persephone,theArchitect,andTrinityaddsarealtwisttothewholestory.TheArchitectismoremultidimensionalbecausehenowbecomesthesaviorofNeoandmankind.TrinityisfleshedoutastheonewhogoesinandbalancesouttheSuperMatrixwhilealsobringingNeototherealworld.SheisnotjusttheloverofNeoanymore.SmithregainshisfootholdintheMatrix,andmaysoondominate,butwilleventuallybebalancedoutbytheyoungNeo(ashegrowsolder).And,finally,Neocomestotermswithhisownplaceinreality,nolongerbeingfilledwithangst.Hefindsahome.Ineverreallyintendedtobringthestorytoahardconclusion;ImostlywantedcertaincharactersthatwereintroducedinTheMatrixReloadedtohavemoredevelopmentintheoverallstory.IthinkIaccomplishedthat.Ifmyscreenplaywereeverturnedintoamovie,I'dbeinclinedtoaddmoretothestory;butasitstandsnow,Iprobablywillleaveitasitis.Iapologizeformakinganendingthatleavespeopleannoyed.Hopefully,ladyluckwillshineandtherewillbemoretocome.Thanksforthefeedback.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:kidkDATE:12/4/200710:29:50PMIjustfinishedreadingityesterdayandimustsayireallyenjoyeditifounditveryexcitingandcompellingfrombeginingtoenditalmostfeltlikeiwaswatchingthemovie!goodjobmrwoods,welldone!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/4/200711:14:11PMkidkmakesmydaytohearyourenthusiasmthankyouthankyoupdwoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ZishanDATE:12/13/20076:51:04AMThestorymakesamockeryIwouldsayoftheoriginalMatrix.TheChristianitypartofthewholestoryisgone,asinReloadedandRevolution.TheMatrixisatrilogyandtrilogiesneverhaveanothermoviesorrytodisappointyou.Thestorywasgoodinitiallybuttheendingtrulywas...really..bluntly...itwashorrible.Thebeginningwasgoodbutwhenyouaddalotofstuffthatyoudon'tneedyourstorydies...Butthatsjustmyopinion.COMMENT:AUTHOR:GarethDATE:12/13/200712:11:11PMIambynomeansanexpertonscriptwritingoramoviecriticbutIlovedit!Itfilledinalotofgapsistillhadafterwatchingthetrilogyseveraltimes,anditwasveryinterestingtoseehowanotherpersoninterpretedthetrilogy.Ithinkifyouaren'talreadyinthescriptwritingbusiness,youshouldbe.Idon'tknowifyouintendonwritinga5thepisodebutIwouldbeveryinterestedtoreadit.Welldone!

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/13/200710:42:04PMZishanBudhwani,Thankyou.I'mgladtoreadyourcomments.CouldyouelaborateonhowyouseemystoryasamockeryoftheoriginalMatrix?AndhowistheChristianpartofthestorygone?Iactuallythinkmystoryreinforcesitsomewhat.IntheMatrixTrilogy,Neo,thesavior,sacrificeshislifetosavehumanity;inmystoryhelivesonthroughakindofresurrectionandafterlifeinaworldthatexistsbeyond/outsidetheworldhewasborninto.ThenewworldispresidedoverbytheArchitect,whoisthedesignerandoverseer.Neo,Trinity,andtheArchitectformasortoftrinityoftheirown.AndNeofinallyarrivesatanunderstandingandacceptanceofhisplaceinexistence,akindofNirvanhaorheaven.Yes,theMatrixisaTrilogy.AndIthinkitstillfunctionsasaTrilogybecausethestoryofthatworldiscomplete.TomemystoryhasnodirectimpactontheTrilogyitself,becausemystorytranspiresoutsideofthatworld.FromtheperspectiveofthepeopleintheworldofZion,themachines,ortheMatrix,mystorydoesn'texist.Essentially,they'reseparaterealities,maybeevenseparatestories.I'mgladyouatleastfoundthebeginningofthestorytobeintriguing.YousayI"addedalotofstuffthatmystorydidn'tneed";canyoubemorespecific?AndIcanunderstandhowtheendingcouldbedisappointingbecauseitendsabitsuddenly.Isthatwhatyoumeantbytheendingbeing"trulyhorrible"?Ordidsomethingelseaboutitrubyouthewrongway?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/14/20072:53:15AMGareth,Alwaysloveitwhenpeopleloveit.Nofifthepisodeinthehopper,though.TheonlyreasonI'dwriteoneisiftheWachowskibrothersorWarnerBrothersaskedmeto.And,rightnow...they'renot.Thisismyfirstscreenplay.Itwassointenseandthrillingtocreate,I'vedecidedtowriteonebasedsolelyonmyownideas.Hopefully,I'mnotjustaone-hit-wonder.Thanksagainfortheglowingpraise.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeyDATE:12/15/20073:30:20AM

Verynicestory!Iquiteenjoyeditandfeelsomecomfortoutofthestoryandwhereitleftoff.Interestingcharacterstabilitywithlockneoandmorpheus.Whenthe'supermatrix'ideawassubmitteditseemedprettyfar-fetchedandiwasgoingtoclosethis.Ihaveitafewmorescenesandwascapturedbythestory-line.Goodreadfortheopenminded!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/15/20074:45:24PMJoey,Gladyoulikedit.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkoftheending.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SijuDATE:12/15/20076:06:23PMIjustfinishedreadingit,andIthinkitwasamazing.Iwouldloveseeingthisbeingmadeintoa4thinstallment,anditwouldbeinterestingtofindouthowitshapesup.Yes,likesomeofthemItoofelt,thattheextensivetalkingandexplanationwastiringthepace.Butlookingback,Ifeelitisso,becauseitisinwriting.Ifthisispulledtogetheronthesilverscreen,thevisuallyimmaculateMatrixTMactionsceneswouldserveastheicingtolightupthewholestuff.Iofcoursehadmyshareofquestionsunanswered-1)Why/HowdoesSmithreturn?(Again&Again??)2)YourstoryreinforcessomethingmostMatrixfansfear-thatZionisasimulatedworldtoo-Isthistrue?Ifsoarentyouofferingthereadersananticlimaxsotosay?3)ItsaysOracleadvisesMorpheustopullTrinityoutintoZion-Whywouldshedothis,ifsheisawarethatTrinity'spurposeistakeoutNeo(theanomaly),sincethecodeinCortexistryingtogettohim.OrhaveIgotmyunderstandingallwrong?4)Thestorytendstosuggestthatthewarwillbeginagain,andthefactthatNeoJuniorisinpicturegivesanindicationthatthesystemiscyclical,andthat"thereisnoend",thatNeoisntborntoendthewar,butprogrammedtokeepitgoing.Doesthatstriphimoffthe"saviour"tag?Iwoulddefinitelyputmymoneyonthistobemadeintoamovie.Ithinkitwouldrock!!Greatgoingman!!Wouldlovetoreadanythingmoreyoupen!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/15/20077:06:33PMHiSiju,Sohappytohearyouenjoyedit.1)Smithsurvivesbecause(atleastaccordingtomystory)hewasabletosendmorethanoneofhisclonesintoZion.Thefirstclone(thattheaudiencewasmadeawareof)tookoverBane'sbody;asecondclone(thatnooneknewabout,notevenBane,andthatisintroducedinmystory)takesoverMarouk'sbody.BaneisfinallykilledbyNeobutMarouksurvivesandlivesoninZionuntilheseeshisopportunitytoreturntotheMatrix.BecauseMaroukisoutsideoftheMatrixwhenSmithandtheclonesaredestroyed,heisunaffected.WhenMaroukfinallyreturnstotheMatrix,herevertsbacktoaSmithandbeginsreconstructinganarmy.2)Yes,IdosaythatZionisasimulatedworld...BUTIgoontosaythatALLworldsare

simulatedand,therefore,theyareallequallyreal.Inmystoryone'sexperiencesdefinereality-that'sit,nomore,noless.Youcancallaworldvirtualorreal,itdoesn'tchangeit'seffectonyou.ForallwenotheworldyouandIarelivinginrightnowcouldbesimulated;doesthatmeanit'snotrealtoyou,doesthatmeanyou'renotbeingeffectedbyit?Realityisanillusionandillusionisreality.Itdefinesyourexistencenomatterwhat.3)Yes,Ithinkyoumisunderstandabit.NoonewheninsidetheSuperMatrixknowsanythingthatishappeningoutsideofit.TheOracle,whileinsidetheSuperMatrix,isnotawarethatTrinity'spurposeistoextractNeo.Butsheissetinmotiontohelpfacilitatethatend.Hervalue(totheSourceandtheArchitect)isthatshecanbeprogrammedoutsideoftheSuperMatrix(throughbrain/memorymanipulation)tobelievecertainthingsorperformcertaintasksthatshewillthenperformwhensheisintheSuperMatrix.ThisiswhatgivesherherOraclestatusandabilitytoseethefuture.4)Yes,Ithinkthesuggestionisthatthewarwillbeginagain.Butthat'sjustasuggestion.It'sleftuptotheimaginationoftheaudience.ThereasonIliketheopen-endednatureofmyconclusionisthathappyendingsrarelyhappen.Lifeisopen-endedandalwaysabitscary.TometheworldoftheMatrixseemslikeitbelongsmoreinthatcategory.Idon'tthinkthisstripsNeoPage20of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMofthesaviortag.Christgavehislifetosavehumanity'ssoul,and,despitethehorrorsthatcontinueinourworld,westillthinkofChristasasaviorbecausehegavehislifetosaveothers.InthatrespectNeoisstillasavior.Thanksforthecomments,inquiries,etc.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SijuDATE:12/15/20078:24:14PMMrWood,Thanksforyouresponse.Itdoesanswermyquestions.Afewmorequestionspoppedup:1.WhatwentwrongwhenVictorandPersephoneenteredtheSuperMatrix?WhatistherationalebehindTrinityattemptingasimilarentrywhenherparents,theveryprogrammersoftheCortex,failedtosustainpurpose?2.HasNeo'sbodyphysicallyexistedattheSourcealways,andifsowhere?3.HowdoesRachelidentifyherloveras"Neo"?HeshouldbeknowntoherasThomasAnderson.Shehasalsonamedhersonas"Neo".Howdoesthisexplain?4.Thestoryhasarealtwist.Thetrueexilesarenthuman'slikewealwaysthought,theyare36sorandroidsrebellingforfreedomfromus.DoesthisdisplaceparallelphilosophiesthatthematrixstorylineshareswiththeBible?Human'scouldeitherbethebaddies,orcouldevenbethatrightandwrongbedismissedasmereperceptions,andthatmachineswereneverentitledtothefreedomtheyclaim,andaretobeslavestotheircreators.

Thanks,SijuCOMMENT:AUTHOR:WillemThoonenDATE:12/16/20078:26:29PMDearP.D.Wood,Justfinishedreading.Mustsay:Damngreat!Lovethedifferentstorylinesandflashbacks-Itallfallsintoplace.Idon'treallylikethetitlethough:thesupermatrix.Iunderstandtheconceptofa'super'matrix,butwellitdoesn'tfeellikethetitleisityet,butthat'sthat.Thestoryitselfwasjustgreat,thewaythecharactersspeak,thechoiceofwordsarealltrulyastheyshouldbe(andI'veseenthetrilogy,quiteafewtimesnow:)).Itallfallsintoplacewiththecharacters(Icouldreally'see'thecharactersspeakthewordsprovidedinthestory)Lovethewayithasbitsandpiecesofthesecondrenaissance,ifIremembercorrectly.Mustsaythatyouhadmethinkingattheend,andI'm(tobehonest)gladyou'veprovidedtheanswersinyoucommenttoJLJenkinsalready(withregardtotheboysmilingintheendandhowthewarwithsmithwouldcontinue:).Likethesettingoftheenvironmentstoandreallyhopetoseeitfullscreeninthecinema!Thankyouforthisgreatstory!IhopetheWachowskibrothersareupforitandarewillingtolookdeeper"intotherabbithole".COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/17/20071:50:52AMSiju,Youaskexcellentquestions.Luckily,Icananswermostofthem.MostoftherationaleforhowthingshappeninthestoryIleftoutbecauseitwasalreadygettingheavywithexposition.ButIdiddevelopthoseideasandexplanationsforpeoplelikeyourselfwhosimplycouldnotrestwithoutmoredetail.1)AsIstateinthestory,theCortexisalivingorganlikeabrain.TocreatetheneuralmassoftheCortex,adonorwasneededfromwhichthebraincellscouldbecloned.PersephoneandVictor(TheMerovingian),beingthedesignersandbuildersoftheCortex,chosetheirinfantdaughter,Trinity,asthedonor.Theproblemarisesfromthis.VictorandPersephonenowsharegeneticinformationincommonwiththeCortex.TheirentryintotheCortextriggerssometragicandirreparablereactionduetothissimilaritybutatthesametimeitalsoinsulatesandprotectsthem.TheyarepermanentlystuckintheSuperMatrix,buttheydon'tdie(whichisthefateofotherswhosesequencingcodechangeswhenenteringtheSuperMatrix).AftertheArchitectfiguresoutthecauseofPersephoneandVictor'smishap,he'sabletomakeadjustmentsandpreventitfromhappeningwithTrinity(whosharestheCortex'sgeneticinformation,too).Hopethat'snottooconvolutedanexplanation.AndIhopeitseemsplausible.2)No,Neo'sbodyhasnotpreviouslyphysicallyexistedattheSource.ThebodyheinhabitsintheSourceisaclonebody,builtfrominformationfromhisvirtualprofile.AsIstateinthestory,hebecomesthefirstvirtualpersontobecomearealperson.

3)ImaybewrongbutIbelieveNeowentbythenameNeotohisfriendsandtothecomputer/drug-hackerworldheassociatedin.IassumedRachelwouldhavecalledhimNeo.TheonlypeoplewhoIremembercallinghimMr.AndersonwereSmithandhisbossathisjob.No?4)Yes.YES!Theflipofthemachinesbeingenslaved(withpocketsofandroidresistance)Ithoughtwasquitethought-provokingandmaybenotthatfar-fetchedforourownfuture.Whetherhumansareseenasbadorgoodisopentodebate.Wecreatedmachines,sodoweownthem,havearighttodowhatwewantwiththem?Or,oncethey'regivenartificialintelligence,dotheybecomeindependentbeingsintheirownright,entitledtoallitsfreedoms?Hardquestions.AsfarastheBibleparallelsareconcerned,IthinktheystillpertaintotheoriginalTrilogystory.Whethermystoryupsetsthoseparallels,Ithinkisalsoupfordebate.Personally,Ithinkmystoryenhancesthem.IthinkoftheworldoftheSourceandtheCortexasasortofheavenorworldbeyond.I'mnotsurehowotherswillviewit.Anyway,Iverymuchenjoyedansweringyourquestions...mostobviously,becauseICOULD.Ihopemyexplanationsweren'ttoovagueorimplausible.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/17/20072:00:47AMWillemThoonen,Happytohearyouenjoyedit.Yes,thetitle,SuperMatrix,hasmetwithmixedreviews;toomuchlikeSuperManorsomething.Soundsabittoohokey,Iguess.ImightendupcallingitMatrixRememory,asthiswasthetitleofthestorythatstartedmeonthetracktoafourthMatrix.Peopleseemtolikethattitlebut,tome,it'snotaspunchy.We'llsee.Nicetoknowthatthedialogueandstorylineareconvincing.Thosearealwayshardtoassesswhenwritingthestory.TheideasandstorylinefromtheSecondRenaissance(Animatrixmovies)maytouchuponsomeofmystory,butremember...intermsofmystory,theMatrixarchivesarejustanothervirtualcreationlikeeverythingelseintheSuperMatrix.Thisisacrucialdistinction.WhateverhappenedorisdescribedintheMatrixarchiveshasnothingtodowitheventsthathappenintherealworldoftheSourceandtheCortex.ExceptforreferencestoorflashbacksfromZion,theMatrixandthemachineworld,mystoryisacompletelyseparateentity.Ifyou'recurious,I'veaddedmoreexplanationsinthecommentssectioninthepastfewdays;theymightgiveyoumoreinsightintosomeofmyideas.I'dreallyliketoseeitfullscreen,too!

Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SijuDATE:12/17/200711:13:16AMThankyouMrWood,itreallyclarifies.Iwouldliketohaveyourthoughtsonsomething.Beingamatrixfan,Ihavealwaysbeeninspiredbythemessiahstory,thestoryofamanwhoisdestinedtosavetheworldsorts.Yourstoryupsetsthatemotionallink,andinsteadmakesthewholestoryastagedone.Theprophecyistrue,butnotforthegoodnessoftheenditproposes,butforthemultipleprogramsdesignedtomakeithappen.TheOnecarriesthehopeofthelastsurvivors,peoplewhounknowinglyareonlyvirtuals,butreallikeyouprofess,backedbytheirgenuineexperienceofreality.Thereisafeelingthat“realâ€ùpeoplearesetinacyclicstrugglesystem,blindedfromthetruth,andonefromwhichthereisnoescape.Onabroadersense,Iwouldunderstandtheneedoftheentiresystemtosubdueanypossibilityofamachineuprising.Fromanemotionalperspective,asetofbelieverslikeme,wouldhavetoshifttoanotherparadigm,toaccepttheessenceofthe“SuperMatrixâ€ù.Atleastfrommystandpoint,majorityoftheaudienceconnectsemotionallywiththepeopleofZion,andthereinliesthegreatestchallengeoftellingthemthisstory.Justafoodforthought.:)Personally,Ihavemadethatparadigmshift,andIdidthatbecauseyourstoryhelpsanswerthemanyquestionsthatRevolutionsthrewopen.Greatstory!!Thanks,SijuCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/17/20079:06:31PMSiju,Yourstatementis,"Thereisafeelingthat“realâ€ùpeoplearesetinacyclicstrugglesystem,blindedfromthetruth,andonefromwhichthereisnoescape."Asrelatestomystory,yes,Ithinkthatisanaccuratestatement...butonlyfromthepointofviewoftheaudienceandofthosewholiveoutsideoftheSuperMatrix.Stepawayfromthestoryforamomentandlookatourworld.IwouldsubmitthattheworldinwhichyouandIliveisengagedinacyclicstrugglesystem,too,whereweareblindedfromthetruth(i.e.whathappensafterdeath)andfromwhichthereisnoescape(exceptbydeathitself).Iguessifweknewthattherewasanotherworldbeyondourownthatdictatedtheeventsofourlives,wemightfeelthatanemotionallinkhasbeenupset.Butwearenotprivytothatrealization,justasthepeopleinZionandthemachineworldarenotprivytotheexistenceoftheSuperMatrixandtheworldthatcreatedit.OneofthedynamicsthattheWachowskibrotherssetupandwithwhichIdisagreeisthattheworldintheMatrixisnotreal.Theintensityofthatdynamicisembodiedinthetrivializationofharmingorkillingpeople.ThroughouttheTrilogypeopleintheMatrixareroutinelyrippedtoshredsorriddledwithbullets.Becausethatworldisconsidered

justacomputerconstruct,wefeelno"emotionallink"orempathyforthosemurderedpeople.ButIsayit'sallreal.TheworldoftheMatrix,theSuperMatrix,andtheSource(allthreelayers)deserveasmuchemotionallinkasanyotherunknownworldsthatmay(andprobablydo)extendintoorbeyondthem.TomeMorpheusandNiobe(intheSuperMatrix)arenolessdeservingofanemotionallinkthanNeoandTrinity(intheSource).Tobeabletoacceptthis,onehastoseethevalidityand"realness"ofallworlds,whetherinfinitesimallysmall,inexplicablylarge,virtual,simulated,etc.AsI'vesaid,realityisdefinedbywhatoneexperiences,nomoreandnoless.Ifanaudiencecanacceptthis,thenmystorydoesn'tabandontheemotionalconnectionwiththepeopleofZionoranyotherpeople.

hatdothinkofallthat? AndI'mquiteexcitedthatyoulikethestorysomuch.Cheers!PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SijuDATE:12/18/20077:13:52PMTwothings:1)PleasekeepusupdatedontheprogressongettingsomeattentionfromtheWarnerBrosStudio.Youtalkedabouthittingaleadthere.I'mexcitedaboutanypossibilitythatamoviecouldmaterialize!!:)2)Ifthisdoesntmakeittothescreen,trygettingthisoutasacomic.Idontknowwhatcopyrightissuesthismeans,butIthinkacomicwouldbeprettycool.Ibetthereareabunchofkidswho'dlovetoconnecttothisstory,andthey'dloveacomictoascreenplayanyday.Thisdefinitelyisn't"just"fanfictionmaterial,andshouldn'tstaythatwayforlong,andthatswhymostofuswouldhopetowatchitasamoviesomeday!Cheers!SijuCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/18/200710:12:10PMSiju,Thanksforalltheattentionandkindwords.Ifanythingsoliddevelops,I'lldefinitelypostit.I'minterestedinpursuinganyoptionsatthispoint.Keepyourfingerscrossed.

PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:CamrynDATE:12/26/20075:19:13AMIjustgotdonereadingyourscriptanditwasreallygood.Someofthelinesintherethecharacterswouldprobablyneversayinthemovies.Iwaswonderingifyoucouldhelpmewithafewquestionsinthestory.1.Canuexplainwhatsmithdoesatthemachineworldandhowhegetsthere.2.Whoisserenatheoracleinthematrixormorpheus'smom?3.Neoislivinginaclonebodyingintherealworld?4.Whatbodiesdomorpheusandzionhave.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/27/20074:26:45AMCamryn,Gladyouenjoyedit.Ithinkifyoubrowsethroughtheexistingcomments,mostofyourquestionswillbeanswered.Ifnot,Isuggestyourereadthestory;myguessisthatasecondpassshouldrevealthem.Theexplanationsarethere.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SaidADATE:1/14/20081:17:38AMIhavebeenaMatrixfanforsuchalongtime,i'vestudiedthephilosophy,wrotepapersaboutthemetaphysicsofthematrix,butwhatyouhavedone..amazesme.YouPage24of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMhavetakenthistoanewlevel,andithankyou.IsodesperatelywantedtoseeaMatrix4,andyouhavemadethatpossiblewiththisscreenplay.Thisscreenplayisamazingandifitevergetsturnedintoamovie,willbephenomenal.IplanonreadingRememoryaswell.ThankyouforkeepingtheMatrixstoryaliveandgoing.P.SIjustreadwhatthesupermatrixisanditisMINDBLOWING,iwouldneverhavegussedit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/14/20081:30:32AMSaidA,YouandIbothwouldlovetoseeitbecomeamovie.I'vebeentryingtofindtherightcontactinsidethemovieworld,butthat'satallorder.I'mgladyoufounditsoamazing.IfyoureadMatrixRememory,justkeepinmindthatitcamebeforeTheSuperMatrix

story;theSuperMatrixusesmuchofwhatwasinRememorybutmovesbeyondthattothebigclimax.Hopeyoulikethatone,too.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SaidA.DATE:1/15/20082:20:56AMJustfinisheditandIloveit.Iwishitwaslonger,onlytookme2hourstoreadit.Thereweresomeideasthatconfusedme,butIwillre-readitoncei'mdonewithrememoryandseeificanunderstanditbetter.Areyouplanningonwritinganymorestories?PLEASEwritemore.Writeanotherscript,writeaseries.JustkeeptheMatrixstoryalive!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/15/20082:50:33AMSaidA,Gladyoufounditsosatisfying.Yes,asecondreadshouldclarifymuch.Youmightalsosiftthroughothercommentsonthesite;Iansweralotofotherpeople'squestionsthere.Iwillbewritingmore...butnotintheMatrixvein,probably.Iwanttobringmyownstoriestocreationwithoutalwaysfeelingthatit'sbuiltonsomeoneelse'swork.But...therearemanyfanfictionsitesouttherebrimmingwithideas.Noshortageofthatifyouarelookingforit.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MikeMadnessDATE:1/17/20085:56:03PMIthinkthescripttothe4thpartisamazing.Itopensawholenewspectrumofpointofviews.It'slikethefirstonewhichtookyousomewhereyouwouldneverexpect.Ithinkthisonewoulddefinitelybringtheideaofthe"matrix"toawholenewhorizon.Isawthefirstonethefirstdayitcameoutandafterreadingthe4thscriptimustsaysatisfyingitfilledthevoidofquestionssurroundingwhatafter?Ihonestlythinkthisscriptshouldshouldstayasisandnotbealtered.ImustsayTHANKS...COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/17/20088:36:11PMMikeMadness,Thephrase,"Ihonestlythinkthisscriptshouldshouldstayasisandnotbealtered,"isonethatawriterrarelyhears.There'salwayssomethingthatpeoplewouldliketo

change.I'mnotsurethisscriptiswithoutfault(evenIfeelsomethingscouldbebetter),butI'lltakeyourkindwordsinthespiritthatthey'regivenandwiththeknowledgethatsuchwordsmaynotcomeagainanytimesoon.I'mstillworkingonthepossibilitythatthescriptsI'vesentoutmaycatchtheattentionofthemoviemakingindustry.Itwouldbefuntoseeitonthebigscreen.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:werewolfDATE:1/26/20087:55:06AMheyifyouturnthisintoamoviepleasepleasepleaseletmebeinit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodEMAIL:thesupermatrix@comcast.netIP:24.34.95.13URL:DATE:1/26/20082:23:14PMwerewolf,I'lltakethatasanpositiveendorsement.OK...whenitallcomestogether,you'llbethefirstpersontoaudition...OK?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MarioDATE:2/6/20085:20:12PMHiWood,firsiwanttosay...WOW!!ILOVEDthewhyuwrotethescreenplay...verynicestory...when(notif)thishitsthescreen...ithinkiwillbeasbigasthefirs(thebest)part...maybeevenbigger.IonlyhaveonesmallcriticandthatisasmallconflictbetweentheoriginallovestorybetweenNeoandTrinityandyours.Intheoriginalstoryshetellshimthatsheisinlovewithhimandthattheoracletoldherthatshewouldfallinlovewithadeadmen.(shesaidthatwhenhedied)...andinyourstoryusaythatshestartedtofallinlovewithhimwhileshewaswatchinghim(fromtherealwordasiunderstood).soithinkthatthiscreatesasmallconflictbetweenthetwolovestoriesandmaybeucouldmakesomesmallchanges.Onexamplewhatifshewentintothematrixtokillhim..butwhileshewaswatchinghimfromthematrixshestartedtofallinlovewithhimandthatiswhatchangedhermindtoextracthimfromthematrixasanewlifefrom.wellihopeu'lllookintothis..ortellmeifiunderstooditwrong.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodThankyou.

Thankyou,thankyou.Commentshavebeenabitslowrecently.SoI'mgivingyou3"thankyou"s.Imustnothavebeenclearenoughinmystoryaboutaveryimportantdistinction(sincethisconfusionhascomeupbefore).HereistheexplanationIgavetothecommenter,Siju,awhilebackonessentiallythesamepoint.<<3)Noone,wheninsidetheSuperMatrix,knowsanythingthatishappeningoutsideofit.TheOracle,whileinsidetheSuperMatrix,isnotawarethatTrinity'spurposeistoextractNeoandbringhimoutoftheSuperMatrix.Butsheissetinmotiontohelpfacilitatethatend.Hervalue(totheSourceandtheArchitect)isthatshecanbeprogrammedoutsideoftheSuperMatrix(throughbrain/memorymanipulation)tobelievecertainthingsorperformcertaintasksthatshewillthenperformwhensheisintheSuperMatrix.ThisiswhatgivesherherOraclestatusandabilitytoseethefuture.>>Similarly,Trinity,wheninsidetheSuperMatrix,hasnoawarenessofanythingbeyondZion,themachineworld,andtheMatrix.WhensheenterstheSuperMatrix,sheretainsnomemorythathermotherisPersephone,herfatheristheMerovingian,orhergrandfatheristheArchitect;allhermemoriesofthatpartofherlife(ie,therealworld)aretemporarilyshutoff.ThisiswhyshehasnorecollectionofhavingfalleninlovewithNeointheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix.ToherandtoeveryoneintheoriginalMatrixTrilogy,thereisnoawarenessoftheSuperMatrix.Ihopethatclearsitupabit.Letmeknow.Thanksagain.Oops!That's4"thankyou"s.Ohwell.COMMENT:AUTHOR:MarioEMAIL:mariotodorovski@yahoo.comIP:87.177.194.77URL:DATE:2/6/200810:19:04PMwell...thxforclearingthigsup:Dandthankyouforthe4"thankyou"s;)isaiditbefor,i'llsayitagain...iLOVEthewayuwrotethescreenplay.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodURL:DATE:2/6/200810:40:49PM

Thankyou#5 COMMENT:AUTHOR:SinningslaveDATE:2/12/20085:30:06PMThisistheoneofthebestscreenplaysiveverread:DVerykewlCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodURL:DATE:2/12/20085:54:42PMSinningslave,Thanks.

IguessIhopeyou'vereadalotofscreenplays.Ifso,I'mgladitfoundit'swaytothetopofyourlist.Doyouhaveanycontactsintheindustry?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkSlavensDATE:2/17/20081:32:16AMImdefinitelyinterestedinaMatrix4butnotinaprequel.Somanytimesmoviesgetscrewedupbyahalfassattempttoanswerquestionsormakealowbudgetresponsetoahighbudget/qualitymovie.IwouldlovetoseeaMatrix4butitshouldbeanactualSequelanditshouldhavethesamecharactersandincrediblefighting.andcontinuefromtheend...pleasedontevengivepeopleideasofturningthisintosomehalfbakedchickflickcrap.SorrytheprequelideaistheworstideaIcanthinkof.AndIdonteventhinkiwouldpaytoseeit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/17/20081:33:55AMMark,Icouldn'tagreemore;aMatrix4shouldbehighqualityandhighbudgetwithmostlythesamecharactersandsomeincrediblefighting.ThisisbasicallywhatIthinkI'vecreated.Inmyopinionit'snotjustsomehalf-bakedprequel;itreallyisasequelthatalsoanswerssomequestionsaboutthehistoryofcertaincharacters.AnditdoespickupexactlywhereMatrixRevolutionsleftoff.IstronglyurgeyoutoreaditandthenI'dbegladtorespondtoanycomments(criticalorpraising)youhave.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:StephenKoscelanskyDATE:2/19/20087:12:26PMIlikedthestoryyes,butIwasalwaysconfused,evenreadingitoverandover...Ithinkitisjustmethough..Theendingwasunexpectedalso.IthinkthoughthewayMorpheouswastalkingwasnotlikehewasinthemovie,hewasmore"Normal"otherthanthat,goodread.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/19/20087:35:30PMStephen,I'mgladyoulikediteventhoughitwasconfusingtoyou.Isuggestyoureadsomeoftheothercommentsleftonmywebsite;theyclarifysomepointsthatothershadtroublewith.Itcanbehardtokeepthestorythreadsstraightbecausethetimelinejumpsaroundalot.SomehowIthinkthescreenplaywouldbeeasiertofollowasamovie,wherea

devicelike(justasanexample)goingbackandforthfromblackandwhitetocolorwhenthereareflashbackswouldkeeptheviewermoreorientedtotheflowofevents.AndMorpheus,yes,Itriedtotonehimdownabit.Ifyouthinkaboutwherehismindisinmystory,itkindofmakessense.InthepreviousthreemovieshissolepurposeinlifewastofindandtrainNeotosavehumanity.Nowthatpurposeisgone.Also,(atleastasfarasheknowsinmystory)TrinityandNeoaredead;twoofhisclosestfriendsaregone.Andmore,thethreatofthemachinesisnotcompletelygoneandthereisnosavioronthehorizon.Giventhesechangestohislife,IfiguredMorpheushadtochangequiteabit.Anyway,that'smyrationale.Whenyousaytheendingwasunexpected,whatpartoftheendingwereyoureferringto?Thanksforthereadandthecomments.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ShaunDATE:2/23/20084:25:05PMJustfinishedreadingthisandIhavetosay,Ithoroughlyenjoyedit.Towardsthebeginningofthestory,Iwasbecomingincreasinglyannoyedwiththebreaksinthestoryfortheflashbacks(whichisoddtosay,comingfromsomeonewholovesLOST).Oncethestorywentonandtherelevanceoftheflashbacksmademoresense,Ienjoyedthemaswell.IsuspectifIweretorereadthisstory,I'denjoytheflashbacksthroughouttheentirestory.Theflashbacksandsimultaneousstorylinesbetweenthematrix/supermatrixandoutsideofthesupermatrixseemsabithardtodointext,howeverIthinkyoudidaswellofajobasany.Idothinktheentirestorywouldbeeasiertofollowintheformofamovieduetothesimultaneousstorylinesandflashbacks.TheonlyothercommentIwantedtomakewasontheending.Afterreadingthroughseveralcommentsonhereaboutpeoplehatinghowitended,Ihavetosay,Idisagreecompletely.ThereswasnorealwayfortheMatrixto"end"inmyopinion.WhileI'dliketohearsomeofthebackstoryonhowMorpheus,Lock,andNiobiwereinsertedintotheSuperMatrix,I'mfineleftwondering.Iwasverysatisfiedafterreadingthisepisode,afeelingIdidn'thaveafterthethirdepisodeended.Ihaven'treadanyotherMatrix4screenplays,andIprobablywon't.I'mcontentimaginingthisishowtheMatrixendedandwillleaveitatthat.

Greatjob!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/23/20085:08:25PMShaun,Yes,creatingeffectiveflashbackswhilemaintainingthecontinuityofthestorywasdefinitelythehardestpartofwritingthisscreenplay.I'mgladyouworkedthroughthemsoyoucouldenjoythemanyjuicysurprises.Asamovie,Iagree,Ithinkthestorywouldbemuchmorefluid.Iencourageyoutogiveitasecondfastread,asIthinkalotofnewdetailsandconnectionswillappear.It'shardtopickitallupthefirsttimethroughsinceearlierscenesgetaddeddepthbythingsthatarerevealedlaterinthemovie.Thereseemtobetwoschoolsofthoughtonmovieendings,theschoolthatwantsclosureandtheschoolthatlikesopen-endedcontinuity.Personally,Ilikeboth,dependingonthestory.WiththeMatrixstoryitseemedalmostantitheticaltogiveitaclearending.Thanksforthespecificcommentsandappreciation.Let'shopewecanseethismovieinthetheaterssomeday.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MitchellDATE:2/25/20083:13:39AMIlovedthis.Ireaditinonesitting,it'ssimplyamazinganditansweredmanyquestions.YoucouldmakeNeo'ssonolder,maybeateenager.YoucouldalsomakeMourok/Smith'sreentrytotheMatrixalittlelongerormakehisawarnesstothesenewpowersabitlonger.Thereisaverygoodpotentialforthistobecomesomething.Maybeat.v.series,likethecurrentTerminator.Ilovetoseethisinamuchlongerandmoredetailedanimeversion.Ananimeserieswillbeamazingwiththisscreenplay.WhatanimatrixdidforReloaded,butinsteadof9episodes,say50ormore,thenculminatewithamovie.ThiswouldbesoooooamazinginAnimeversion,withsomeanimationlikeKaras.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/25/20083:33:15AMMitchell,You'reright,there'spotentialforsomuchmoreinthisstory.ButIliketheideathatithasanending,open-endedasitis.That'sjustme,Iguess.I'dbecontentiftheWachowskibrothersjustdroppedmeadimeandsaid,"Nicejob!".Ofcourse,makingitintoamoviewouldbethebest.I'mstillworkingonthatpossibility.

Anyway,thanksforthekindwords.Gladyouenjoyeditsomuch.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MichealDATE:3/5/20084:02:09AMIhavehadmany,MANY,Ideas,add-onsandvariousrevelationsinthematrixfranchise.Neo,Trinity,andMorpheusallhavespecialplacesintheworldthatisthematrix.ihavealsohadmanyinstanceswhereibelievethatmyideaswouldhaveheldsomeweightinthefictionousworld.bethatasitmay,yourstorystartsoffinterestingenough...Idowishtomakesomepersonalcomments,morelogicalpracticeshouldbeimplementedinthewholeMindovermatterthatneoexhibitsforinstance...thereshouldbemorecodescreens(justanideamindyou)ifneochangessomethingthatdramaticallychangestheenvironment,thecodethatisneo'snervoussystemshouldhaveasinglecodechangefromhisbrainandrunthroughhisbody(letssayagoldbitofcode)anditstartssmallemanatingfromhisbrainthroughhisnervoussystem(thinkofthecodescreenview)andoutwardthroughthe"real"worldandhisfocus(energy,gravity)warpsthecodearoundhim(air,floor,wall,being,animal)thuschangingtogoldwitha"new"setofsupposedrulesthusbeingeasilymanipulatedbyneohimselfbutonlyuntilthematrixresetsitsselfrestoringordertobegovernedbyacomputertermknownasclicks*thefastertheclicksthemorethecomputerchecksitssettingstypedeal*...(kindalikethedudeprotectingtheoracle)wellthat'stheidea...andtheSUPERMATRIX...wellican'ttellyouwhattonameitbuthere'sanideaortwo...theMatrix:Evolutions*thoughredundant*itgreatdescribesthechangethathappensinthetrilogy,orthematrix:reconstructed...justathought,butthesupermatrix...unsure..againitsapersonalthing..noneedtopayanyattentiontowhatibelieveshouldbethetitle,hopetohearfromyoutakeiteasy...andifyoudohappentomeetthecasttellthemmichealfromtexassayshi...:)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/5/20089:28:32PMHiMichealfromTexas,I'llbegladtotellthecast"hi"foryou,ifyoucansetupthemeeting.I'vebeentryingtobreakthroughtheHollywoodmazewiththisscript,butnolucksofar.Anyonewithconnections,letmeknow.Yes,thename....Iknow,SuperMatrixsoundssomuchlikeSuperManorsomething;itthrowssopeople.Butontheotherhandit'sgotalotofzaptoitandit'sprettywelldescriptiveoftheunderlyingpremiseofthestory.IthoughtmaybeMatrixRevelations(tooclosetoRevolutions?)orevenMatrixRememory(akindoflookingback,sequel/prequelkindofflavor).MatrixEvolutionsandMatrixReconstructedaregood,too,butstill,theydon'thavetheforceoftheSuperMatrix.It'sgottabesomethingthatpops!IMHOI'mgladyoulikethestory.Thelogicalpracticeofimplementingthe"mindovermatter"stuffis,Ithink,somethingthedirectorofthemoviewouldprobablywanttocontrol.I

didn'tputtoomuchofthatinthescriptbecauseIfigureditwouldjustgetchangedlater.Yoursuggestionsaregood,though.Ifitevermakesittoproduction(andpeopleaskmeformyopinion),I'llkeepyourideasinmind(overmatter...hee,hee.)Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MichealDATE:3/6/20087:45:39AMIwaspleasedtoseesuchaexpeditedresponse...andtechnicallyIamnotfromtexas,justkindaranintoamixupofconglomeratedinstancesthatledmetobelievethatihavemetthe"cast"inthelonestarstate,(letsjustsayifmyassumptionsarecorrect,lifeasweknowitceasestomakeanysensegiventhesumofthepartsgoverningtherichandfamouse)howeveridohavesomeinsiteonwhototalktoo(ificansetupthetrip)CarrieAnnMossisaprivatepersonindeed.Butihavegivenplentyoffeedback(whileonmystayintexas)tosuchindividualsonmyviewoftheMatrixmovie...sothatmystorydoesn'tfalltooclosetothecookootree.ihavehadthechancetoridealongwithpersoninquestiontotheWBlot,wheretheyhousethecastandcrewofvariousWBproductions..thoughidon'tfallingoodstanding(longstory)Idontseetheharminpresentingsaidscriptsothattherightpeoplecanreadit.Thesituationwithinthisverylucretiverealmisiffyatbest,simplycauseiwasneverreallytoldwhoimetthatday*mostlythatthepeoplewheretheSonandDaughter*whotheywhereandwhattheydidwasamystery.aswastheentireordealofsocializingmyselfwiththesesindividuals....alliknowisthatonapersonallevel,thereisaconnectionbetweenwhoihavemetinmylifeandmebeingthereatthatpointintimeinmylife...Idoknowthatthispersonlivesinthiswayunderprivatecircumstances,andthattheymusthavetheirrightsrespected...butiwilldeffinatlykeepyourscriptinmindiftheoppertunityeverarises.mainlymyHItothecastwasjusttoseeifsurpizeeverenteredtheirfaces.ihopeyoumakeitwiththisscript...iwouldlovetoseethismovieactuallyfinished.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/6/20089:19:18PMMicheal,Mypleasure.CarrieAnnMoss.Well,thatwouldbesomething.Thestorydoesrevolvearoundhercharactertoalargedegree,soperhapsshewouldbeinterested.Anyattemptwouldbeappreciated.I'dlovetoseethismovieproduced,too.Thanks.I'llkeepmyfingerscrossed.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:michaelDATE:3/12/200810:25:34AMyesit'sbeenawhile.andineversaiditwasher,thoughbeitbefitting.Mostwouldconsidermeoneveryluckymofo...........however,letsputasideinuendosforamoment[thinkwhatyouwill]realitydesperatlyneedstocomecrawlingbacktotherecessesofmybrain.Iapologizeifiseemdisturbedbutthoesmemoriesofyesteryearplaugeme,pathetically.Ifthenerverevitalises,imayventureonathirdattempttorectifymyissuessurroundingthemystery.Ionlycanpraythatiwouldhavetesticularfortitudetoresolvetheaforementioned.Allinalltheformalitiesstillseemspacy.illkeepthisin

mindsincethepersoninquestionmayverywellstillbeattainable.Justhavegetbackoutthereisall.btwumightwannacheckyourauthenticationscriptorwhateversinceeventhoughyoutypethecodeindicatedaboveitasksseveraltimestore-enter,basiclyitsacrapshoot.usCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TinuDATE:3/13/20088:06:20PMHelloPD,Firstofall,Iwouldliketoclarifythatunlikemostpeoplewhohaveexpressedtheirviewshere,Iamquitesatisfiedbythewaytheactualtrilogyended.AndicouldnotimaginetowatchanothersequelevenifitwascreatedbytheWachowiskibrothersthemselves.Sowhenicameacrossyoursiteitwaswithakindavengeancethatidloadedthepdf....butnolongerhadigonethruthefirst5pagesihavetoadmitthtiwashooked....theideaofasupermatrixenthralledme....andireallyhavetogiveyoucreditforcomingupwithanideologyththumanswereincontrolofthemachinesallalong...Alsoanotherthingthtflooredmewasthewayyoutwistedthecharacters(MerovingianandPersephonebeingTrinity'sparents)withoutanyinsecuritiesregardingdisloyalitytowardstheoriginal.....andyetpullingitoff!!hatsofftoyou....Someoftheshortcomings(udonthavetonecessarilyworryaboutthem,theyrjustanamateur'sviewofthings)Ifoundwere:1)morpheusandniobeshud'vebeengivenmorescreentime.2)thepresentscenarioregardingtheandroid36isnotmentionedclearly.3)thearchitectinyourstorytotallycontradictstheoneintheoriginal(iknowthtsthewayitssupposedtobeaccordingtoyou)butiguessitwillbehardfortheppltodigest...4)NeoseemstobelessflusteredbythefactthteverythingththeeverdidinthematrixamountedtosavingaworldthtwasbeingcontrolledbythesamepplhewastryingtosaveinthefirstplaceButignoringalldifferenceofopinionitseemsasifyoumight'vegotsomethingthere....maybenotdeepenoughfortheWachowiskibrotherstofathombutbigenoughtomakematrixfanswantmore....Regards,Tinu.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/13/20089:38:58PMTinu,Wellthattakesthecake!Pullingsomeoneoverfromthe"Ilikeditjustthewayitended,don'taddanotherthing"sidetothe"Hey,man,thatrocks!"sideisreallysayingsomething.Itakethatasthehighestpraise.Andjusttoletyouknow,IprobablywouldneverhaveattemptedwritingthisunlessIthoughtIcouldcomeupwithsomethingthatcoulddojusticetotheoriginalTrilogy.You'veshownmethatIsucceeded.Thanks.1)morpheusandniobeshud'vebeengivenmorescreentime.Absolutely.Damnthatscreenplaypagelimitation!2)thepresentscenarioregardingtheandroid36isnotmentionedclearly.Yeah,itcoulddefinitelybemorefleshedout.Imighthavetoworkonthat.Again,

though...damnthatscreenplaypagelimitation!(gottatrimit.)3)thearchitectinyourstorytotallycontradictstheoneintheoriginal(iknowthtsthewayitssupposedtobeaccordingtoyou)butiguessitwillbehardfortheppltodigest...YouhavetorememberthattheArchitectintheoriginalTrilogyistotallyunawareoftheArchitectinmystory.It'ssortoflikeatwowaymirror;peopleoutsidetheSuperMatrixcanseeinbutnottheotherwayaround.WhatIparticularlylikeisthattheArchitectinmystoryislikeGodlookinginonhisowndevilishcounterpart.Theyarethesaviorandthedestroyeratthesametime.Kindachewy,I'dsay.Yes,theycontradicteachother;butthat'swhatIlikeaboutthem.Itmightbehardforotherstoswallow;hardtosay.4)NeoseemstobelessflusteredbythefactthteverythingththeeverdidinthematrixamountedtosavingaworldthtwasbeingcontrolledbythesamepplhewastryingtosaveinthefirstplaceIthinkthat'spartlybecausespecificpeopleintheSuperMatrix(suchasNiobe,Morpheus,Lock)aretherewillingly,givingtheirlivesforthecause.Yes,Neocouldfeelmorebetrayed,Isuppose,butIfeelheseesthejusticeofthecharade,anecessaryevilinahumanworldlockedintoanexistencewithintelligentmachines.HealsocomestoacceptthattheworldintheSuperMatrixisreal,andso,therefore,notjustalie.And,ofcourse,Trinityiswithhimagain.Thattakestheedgeoff.Well,Icouldgoonandon.Thanksforyourinsightsandinvolvement.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:R.ShelbyEMAIL:ryan.shelby@hotmail.comIP:67.149.132.55URL:DATE:3/19/20083:04:05AMIthinkinorderforthe4thMatrixtobesuccessful,itwouldhavetobeaplotthatwasinnomaysimilartotheoriginal3,andastorythatdidn'tcontinuethetrilogy,butclarifiedsomeofBSfromtheoriginal3movies.Ilikethisstory,butallthesameproblemsIhadwiththeoriginalmatrixmoviesstillexist.Forinstance,IcanneverexceptthereasonfortheMatrixwasbecausetheyneededtousehumansforbatteries.Insteadofsimplybuildingsolarcollectorsabovethecloudsorinouterspace,apparentlyit'seasiertobuildacocoonformillionsofhumansandthengothroughthetroubleoffeedingandremovingtheirwasteonadailybasis.Inaddition,theyfoundit"morefeasible"tohookthesemillionsofpeopletoavirtualworldcalledTheMatrixinorderto"controlthem",whentheycouldhavesimplysnappedtheirneckstorenderthembraindeadwhilekeepingtheirbodiesalive.Obviouslythiscan'tbethebestwaytoobtainenergy,sowhynotmakethe4thmovieabouthowtheyfinallygetaclue.IthinkiftherewasaMatrix4,itwouldneedtoclearupthesestupidpremisesthat

nevermadesense,butpeoplejustboughtintobecausetheylikedtheplot.Sohere'smyplotforthe4thmovie.Themachineworldisveryclosetodevelopinganalternatepowersourcethatwilleventuallyeliminatetheirneedforhumans.ThemoviebeginswiththemachinesinouterspacebuildingthesesolarPage33of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMcollectorsthatwillbeamtheenergytothesurface.AstheMachinesbecomeclosertocompletingtheproject,theybeginplanstopulltheplugonTheMatrixsincetheywillnolongerdependonhumansfortheirpowerneeds.ThiswouldmeanthateveryhumanpluggedintotheMatrixwilldie,andsoonaftertheywilljustkilleveryoneinZionsincepeaceisnolongernecessary.Becauseoftheirdesirefortheirownself-preservation,theprogramswithintheMatrixfearfortheirexistence,andsotheydecidetojoinforceswiththehumansinordertostoptheMachinesfrompullingtheplug,thusbecomingalliesinawarbetweentheMachineworldandthehuman/Matrixprogramalliance.AstheprogramsintheMatrixhelpreleasehumansfromtheMatrix,thehumanarmyofZiongrowslargerandlargeruntiltheyeventuallyhavethenumberstogoheadtoheadagainstthemachinesandpreventthemfromcompletingtheirnewpowersource.Idon'tknow,that'sjustmythought.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/19/200810:21:18AMR.Shelby,Itendtoagreewithyouabouttheideaof"humansasbatteries".Takenliterally,it'satoughsell.Ingeneralthough,Itakeideaslikethatinstridebylookingatthemasmetaphors.Theyunderlyingthemeisthathumansaredominatedbymachinesandhavebeenthrustintoamake-believeworld;thehuman'sdilemmaistoescapefromthisworldandregaincontroloftheirdestiny.SinceIlikethisthemesomuch,Isuspendmybeliefjustenoughtogetoverthe"humansasbatteries"concept.ItseemsthatyourideaforafourthMatrixdoesn'treallygetridofthe"humansasbatteries"concept,somuchasbuildsontopofitinanattempttoclimbupoutofit.Ido,however,likethebasicideaofhumansandprogramsintheMatrixteaminguptogethertooverthrowthemachines;itsetsupanicedynamic.Maybeyoushouldwriteafourthepisode,too.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:LindseyDATE:3/30/20088:32:06PM

ilovethescreenplay,butiamkindofconfused.AretrinityandNeostilltogether,anddidtrinityalwaysknowthatneohadason,andissheokaywithit.DomorphiusandallthemknowthatneoandtrinityarealivE.Andlastllywhenneowokeupatthebeginningaboutthesupermatrix...idontreallygetwhatthatis...howdothematrix,thesupermatrixandtherealworldfitin.Isthesupermatrixwhatneowastoldwastherealworldintheotherthreemovies...pleaseexplainps...Iabsolutelylovethematrix...andkeanu...bravoCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/30/20088:56:42PMLindsey,Happytohearthatyouenjoyedit.Isuggestyoutakealookatthethreepagesofcommentsonmywebsite;Ihaveafeelingyou'llfindtheanswersthere.Ifnot,letmeknow,andI'llbegladtoclarify.Thanksforthethumbsup.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:thanosDATE:4/2/20081:56:44PMExcellentwriting!Youhaveagreatstylethatisyourown.Myadvicewouldbetocreateyourownoriginalwork.TryingtowriteafollowuptoMatrixisakintowritinga"7thBrandenburgConcerto"orasequeltothe"IChing".Matrixtrilogyisanabsolutephilosophicalmasterpiece.U2isagreatbandbutiftheywrotewhattheythoughtwouldbethenextBeatlesalbumafter"LetitBe"itwouldbeoutrightoffensive.Thisisn'tjustanother"Alien"or"Jaws"movie.Matrixissacredground.Ifyouhaven'treadtheseyoushould:http://wylfing.net/essays/matrix_reloaded.htmlMatrixisanimportantworkasitbringsmostoftheconceptsfromwesternreligionandeasternphilosophy-whichareusuallytoldthroughancientmythology(Bible,IChingetc..)toamodernsetting.JustliketheBhagavad-Gita,thestoryofKrishna'scounselinthetimeofwarwhichtaughteasternphilosophythroughthesestoriestomillions,theMatrixtrilogydoesthisforourgenerationandprobablyfordecades/centurystocome.Ifyoudon'tthinkthisistruereadtheessaysfirst.Withthatinmindit'shardtoimaginewantingto"add"ontosuchastory.AtleastnotwithoutafewdecadesofINTENSEstudyonphilosophy/theology/mythologyliketheWbrothershad.You'vedonesuchagreatjobinyourownway!Thatstoryjustdoesn'tbelongintheMatrixtrilogy/quadrilogy(?)Butnotforlackoftalentonyourpart.It'sbecausenobodycancomparetotheWBattheirowngame.anyway,writesomenewstuff,youhavemadtalent!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/2/20088:40:46PMThanos,

ConsideringthatyouthinktheTrilogyshouldn'tbetouched,Ifindgreatencouragementinyourcommentsaboutmywriting.And,yes,Ihaveeveryintentionofmovingforwardonaprojectofmyown.Ididn'tmeantoinanywaydiminishtheimpactorgreatnessoftheTrilogybywritinganotherepisode.Myintentionwasonlytoexpandonafantasticwork.ButIunderstandyourpointand,asI'vesaid,Iammovingontosomethingofmyowncreation.Hopefully,Icanachieveasimilarlevelofquality.Madtalent.Ohyeah...Ilikethat!Thanksforthebanter.PDWoodAndI'lldefinitelycheckoutthoseessays.COMMENT:AUTHOR:HassanSmithDATE:4/4/20088:45:05PMThiswasverywellthoughtout.IjustfinishedtodayandIreallydidenjoyit.Itdoestendtobendthemindabitbutitmakesinaccordancetowhatwealreadyknowaboutthetrilogy.Ihavetroubleenvisioningthearchitectasacharacterwithanyemotionoutsideofsmugsuperiority.Youdidagoodjobweavingtherelationshipstogether,theLocke-MorpheusthinggelledwithmebuttherelationshipwithTrinity,Merv,andPersephonedidn'tfit.Thisisbasedonherresponsetotheminpart2and3.Hadshebeenlessagressiveinherinteractions,youwouldhavehadtheperfectfit.Wasshesomehowwashedofhermemoryofthemwhenshecameincontactwiththem?Ireallylikedtheadventofthe36androids,greatconcept.YoutookthereaderalotofdifferentplacesandIwouldlovetoseethisonscreen.IamabigfanoftheMartialArts,sotheonlythingIwouldhavewantedmoreofisthat,andNeoflyingofcourse.IalsohavethepictureofadifferentOracleinmind.Aftertheoriginalactresspassed,thatcharacterseemsabitinterchangeabletome.Overall,though,Iwouldpitchthisthingandpitchithardifyouhaven'talready.Iheardthebrothersaresellingthefranchise,doyouknowwhatthestatusis?Also,doyouthinkthereisapossibilityofapart4inourlifetime?Thanksforputtingyourtimeintothis.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/5/20081:30:12AMHassan,Happytohearyouenjoyedit.Ithink,though,thatyoumissedaveryimportantpointaboutthestory.ItseemsIneedtoworkonmakingiteasiertounderstand.InsidethevirtualworldsofthetheMatrixandtheSuperMatrixabsolutelynobodyhasknowledgeoftherealworldbeyond.TherealworldistheonethathasconqueredthemachinesandiscomprisedoftheSource,theCortex,theworlddividedupintodistricts,theandroid36s,thePresident,

etc.InthisrealworldtheArchitect,knownasAlexStrong,isaverygoodman.TheMerovingian,knowasVictoratthispoint,isthesonoftheArchitect.HeisalsoagoodpersonandismarriedtoPersephone.TheyarethetwomainchemicalengineersresponsibleforcreatingtheneuralbraincalledtheCortexthathousestheSuperMatrix.Theyhaveadaughter,Trinity.Theyareallgoodpeopleandrelatedbyfamily.Allpeopleintherealworldhaveanidenticallookingcounterpartinthevirtualworld.Theycanassumetheroleoftheircounterpartatanytimeifcircumstancesdemandit.WhenpeoplefromtherealworldentertheSuperMatrixortheMatrix,theirknowledgeoftherealworldistemporarilyswitchedoff(noterasedorwashed).TheArchitect'svirtualcounterpartistheevilleaderofthemachines.ImplicitistheideathattheArchitect,beingthemostimportantpersonintherealworld,willneverentertheMatrixandassumetheroleofhisvirtualcounterpart.Assuch,hisbadvirtualcounterpartisallowedtobetheantithesisoftherealgoodArchitect.IntheMatrixthebadArchitecthasnorelationshiptoVictor,Persephone,orTrinity.VictorandPersephone'svirtualcounterpartsjusthappentobeordinarypeopleintheMatrix.ThesevirtualshavenorelationshiptoTrinityortheArchitect.IntheprocessofleavingtherealworldandenteringtheMatrix,therealVictorandPersephonearetransformedinsomeunintendedwaywhichalsomakesthemunabletoeverbepulledbackoutintotherealworld.Theyquicklybecomecorruptedbythepowerstheyhavebroughtwiththem.Victor,soonafter,likeninghimselftoaking,takesontheMerovingianname.So,again,intheMatrix,TrinityisnotnorhassheeverbeenthedaughteroftheMerovingianandPersephoneorthegranddaughteroftheArchitect.Likewise,intheMatrixtheArchitectisnotnorhasheeverbeenthefatheroftheMerovingianorthegrandfatherofTrinity.Ihopethisclarifiesthestoryforyouandgivesitmorecohesiveness.IthinkasamovietheideasI'mtryingtoconveywouldbeeasiertounderstand.Ihopeso,anyway.Otherwise,it'sbacktothedrawingboard.Yes,Ilovetheandroid36s,too.Thesemachinesarenowtheunderdogsfightingagainsttherepressivehumans.Therolesarereversed,and,toacertainextent,wefeelsomesympathyfortheplightofthemachines.Makesyouthink.Manypeoplehavewishedformoreaction(meincluded).Thestoryisverychatty(althoughstill,Ithink,engaging)andneedsabitmorevisualmotionspice.SoI'mworkingontryingtoinjectmoreactionandmartialartsintothestoryasawhole.Imayhavetosacrificesomechattyscenestomakeroomfortheadditionalaction(screenplaypagelimitationsareverystrict!).Ifyouoranyoneouttherecantellmewhichscenesaresuperfluousoratleastnotabsolutelynecessary,I'dbemuchobliged.

I'mdoingalastrewriteandwillpitchitthissummer.And,no,Ihadn'theardthattheyweresellingthefranchise.Wheredidyouhearthat?Ontheinternet?Thanksagainforthecommentsandsupport.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:benditoDATE:4/25/20083:09:44AMtherewillbeanothertrilogyinaboutadecade...justlikestarwars.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/25/200812:16:50PMIreallyhopeit'ssoonerthanthat.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:StephenDATE:4/27/20083:47:47AMInreallyhopethereisa4thMatrix.WhethertheW.Brothersexpandonideasfromyourscriptornot,Iwouldlovetoseea4thmovie.It'snotoftenthatamovieismadethatpleasestheeyesandmind.Whowouldhavethoughtitpossiblethatascififlickwouldhaveadeepspiritualmeaning?IwishthatpeoplelikeuscouldactuallyinfluencetheW.brother'sdecisiontomakeanotherMatrixfilm.I'veheardtheremaybeascriptalready.Ihopeitwillbeputtogooduse.Heck,eveniftheywroteabookorseriesofnewbooksexpandingontheideasoftheMatrixtrilogy,I'ddefinitelybeaninterestedreader.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/27/20083:06:27PMI'dlovetoseeafourth,too.But,personally,I'dlikeittoendthere.Ifitgoesonfortoolong,itcanbecomeveryhomogenized.Ilikethecompactnessofafinitepackage.Wheredidyouhearaboutascriptforafourthepisodealreadyintheworks?Ihaven'theardanythinglikethat.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:StephenDATE:4/27/20084:37:04PMBelowisanexcerptfromanarticleI'verecentlyread...:Whenthetimecametoputtogetherasequel,accordingtoavarietyofsources,includingWikipediaandIMDB,severalconceptsandscripttreatmentsweredeveloped,butmostknockedbackbyWarnerforfurtherrevision.Astimedeveloped,rumorhasitthattheWachowski'shadwrittenonescript,whichwaswaytoolong.Ratherthansacrificecertainscenes,theydecidedtodividethescriptinhalf.So,essentiallyspeaking,ReloadedandRevolutionswereinitiallyconceivedasONEfilm,notTWO.Whichgoesforthtosaythatperhapstherewereand/orareplansforathirdscreenplay,Page37of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMornowinhindsight,afourthfilm.©1999-2008GregDavies...Whoknowsifthisistrueornot???

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/27/20088:16:15PMHmm,Thanksfortheheadsup.Let'shopeithappens.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:CarlosSousaDATE:4/27/200810:38:16PMHello,Ifinishedreadingthepdf...andasfarasaMatrixfangoes,IthoughtIwasreadinganofficalscriptfromthe'bros...sincerely.Itcompletelymakessenseifyouthinkintheprequel/sequelkindofway.Hatsoffforthissupermatrixapproach.Ialsogaveitsomethought,afterwatchingRevolutions,thatsomethingwasmissing,butfarfrommetofindthislittlegemfromanotherMatrixfan.Curiously,IwaslisteningtoRobDougan's"FuriousAngels"atareallyloudpacewhichkindaputmeinthemood.Ireadthe120pagesinabout20minutes,andtheyseemlikealifetime.Congratsonthisjob,andifapollcomesupforthisstorytomakeittoa#4Matrix...i'llbethere,besureofit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/28/20081:07:46AMCarlos,That'ssometastyfeedback.Can'taskformorethanthat.Rightnow,allmyeffortsaregearedtowardstryingtofindanagenttoreaditandpitchittoHollywoodortheWachowskibrothers.ThemoreIlearn,though,themoreIrealizethattheonlywaytogetanagenttoreadit,isifitgetsapersonalreferralfromsomeonetheagentknows.Ninety-ninepercentofthetimequerylettersandcoldcallsareadeadend.SoI'mputtingthecallouttoeveryonetohelpmegetitintothehandsofanagent.It'sprobablytheonlywayithasachanceofbeingmadeintoarealmovie.Let'shopesomebodyouttherehasgotthegoods.Andthanksagainforthekindwords.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DavidCurtisDATE:5/2/20083:09:02AMOnthewebthereismuchspeculationaboutwhetherNeoisaliveordead,butIwanttoassureyouthereisaveryclearanswerwithinthefilmsthatleavesnodoubtwhattherealansweris.Nospeculationinvolved.Butfirstthanksforwritingthis,Ilovewhatyoudid.THANKS!

TheanswerisgivenbytheOracleinthefirstfilm,"TheMatrix"duringwhichtheOracletoldNeothathewouldhavetomakeachoicebetweensavinghisownlifeorthatofMorpheus.Onthesurfacemostequatethattotherescueattemptfromthehighsecuritybuildinglaterinthatepisode,butthatwasNOTwhattheOraclewasreferringto.Wantproof?AlltheanswersaregivenrightintheTrilogyitself.KeepReading....Couldtheoracleseeintothefuture?Throughencryptedlanguageshedodgestheanswer,butattheendofthethirdfilmtheanswerismadeveryclearthatitwasintendedtobeadefiniteYES!DuringthethirdfilmrightbeforeSmithconsumestheOracleturningherintoanotherSmith,sheasksaboutthelittlegirl,andSmithreplieswithwordstheOraclehadtoldthelittlegirlwhichnooneelsecouldhaveoverheardregardingthecookies.ThenattheendofthefilmatthecloseofthefightbetweenNeoandSmithSmithsuddenlybeginstofreakoutandrememberseeingthatmomentbefore.Hehasasortofdejavuexperience.Hereistheclincher,ItwasnotSmithwhohadseenthatmomentbeforeitwastheOracle.Howdoweknowthat?Becausehequotesher,"Everythingthathasabeginningmustalsohaveanending."ThosewerethewordstheOraclespoketoNeoduringtheirlastencountertogetherinthethirdfilm.TheOracleknewallalongthatthismomentwasgoingtohappen,sheknewthatNeowouldunderstandherencryptedmessagerelayedthroughSmithattheveryend,"Everythingthathasabeginningmustalsohaveanending."ThatiswhyNeodidnotresist,hejustlookeddownandpeacefullyacceptedthetransformation,trustingthatwhatwashappeningwasmeanttobe.TheverywordOracleimpliestheabilitytoseethefuture.TheOracleknewforCENTURIESwhatwouldtakeplaceandpatientlywaitedforittoallcometogether.ThepreviousversionsofNeomadethewrongchoiceandcooperatedinrebuildingZionallowingTrinitytodie.TheoracleknewthatafterseveralcyclesofthisthatNeowouldevolveandfinallyendthewar.ShecooperatedwiththeArchitectconvincinghimthatshewasonhisside,wheninrealitysheneverreallywas.Duringepisode1shetoldNeothatheneededtomakeachoicetosavehimselforMorpheus,andthatoneofthenwoulddie.Thatdidnothappenuntilepisode3.Hedidhavetomakethatchoiceandhespentagreatwhilethinkingoverthatchoicebeforehe

cameforwardtothecouncilofcaptainsandaskedforoneoftheships.Heknewhewoulddieifhemadethatchoice.HeknewthathewouldsaveMorpheus.Thanksforlettingmesharetheseinsightsintothissaga.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/2/20084:40:46PMDavid,Gladyoulikedmytakeonthings.Yourinsightsintothesagaseemtomakesense.AndfromthepointofviewoftheTrilogy,itworks.ButifyouacceptmystoryasanextensionoftheTrilogy,thenNeodoesn'tdie.Infact,inmystory(ifyouwanttocarrytheChristianparallelonward)NeoisalmostlikeaChristfigureinthathedoesn'treallyeverdie.Hehasbeenresurrectedyetagain,andwouldbeindefinitely.Essentially,heexistsinallrealities,allatthesametime.Butthereareendlesswaystoviewthesestories;it'skindofwhatIlikeaboutthemsomuch.Thanksforyourthoughts.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:CorryDATE:5/3/200810:28:46PMJustcameacrossyoursitewhilstbrowsingthewebforinfoonapotentialMatrix4movie.Istartedreadingyourscreenplayandthatwasit,Iwasinstantlyhooked.Ireadthroughitallinaboutanhourandahalf.MrWood,congratulationsyourscreenplayisabsolutelyfantastic,anddeservestobemadeintothenextMatrixFilm.Afterreadingyourscreenplay,Ican'tseeanybetterwayofcontinuingit,nothingcouldtopthis.AsIgothalfwaythrough,Iwasexpectingtobeletdown,patientlywaitingtopounceononanyflawIcouldfind,butIdidn'thappen.Iwassimplyblownawaytotheend.Whatimpressedmemostishowfaithfullyyoumanagedtokeepthecharacterverbals,totheoriginalfilms.IcouldactuallyvisualizehowKeanuandthecastwouldactuallyfitintoeachscene,andthenewcharacters/androidsyouaddedwereawesome.Additionally,yourplotandstorylinearemasterpieces,Ican'tbelievehowcleveritallis,andhowiteventuallyallconnectstogetherattherightmomentslikeajigsaw!!!Evenifthere'snevergoingtobeanotherMatrixmoviemade,readingthishasquenchedmythirst,butboywouldthisbeamazingifitwasmade.

AllIcansayis:"WachowskBro'splease,pleasereadthisscreenplay,andthenmaketheMatrix4!!!"AlsojustwantedsaythatIwouldn'tcountoutthepossibilitythatTheWachowskibrothersmightactuallyreadyourscreenplayfromthissite;AfteralltheydidmakecharactersintheMatrixOnlineGamewhenitwasreleased.Ibetoutofcuriositythey'llgoogleMatrix4toseewhatthecommunitiesupto,findyoursite,andreadyourscreenplay.Ifnot,thenitsuptoyoutofindawayofgettingitseenbythem,butifarandomblokecanmeetDrewBarrymore(MyDateWithDrew)andmakeamovieoutofit,thenyoucandothis!COMMENT:AUTHOR:CorryDATE:5/3/200810:46:51PMAlsojustwantedsaythatIwouldn'tcountoutthepossibilitythatTheWachowskibrothersmightactuallyreadyourscreenplayfromthissite;AfteralltheydidmakecharactersintheMatrixOnlineGamewhenitwasreleased.Ibetoutofcuriositythey'llgoogleMatrix4toseewhatthecommunitiesupto,findyoursite,andreadyourscreenplay.Ifnot,thenitsuptoyoutofindawayofgettingitseenbythem,butifarandomblokecanmeetDrewBarrymore(MyDateWithDrew)andmakeamovieoutofit,thenyoucandothis!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/3/200811:38:53PMCorry,Alright!That'swhatIliketohear.That'stheenthusiasmI'mlookingfor.Youjusthappenedtoreadthemostrecentrevisionwhichaddressedsomeflaws;it'snicetoknowthatIcorrectedtheminaseamlessmanner(atleastinyouropinion).Keepingeachpersonincharacterwasamajorpriority;Iknewpeoplewouldpounceonthatimmediatelyifitwasn'thandledwell.AlsonicetohearthatIwassuccessfulthere,too.And,yeah,theandroidswereatastyaddition.Ireallyenjoyedbringingthemtolife.I'mdoingallIcantotryandgetthisthinginfrontofthepeoplethatcanmakeitintoamovie.Obviously,theWachowskibrotherswouldhavetolikeit.That'satallorder,though;hardtoknowhowthey'llreacttosomeoneelseextendingTHEIRstory.Butwhoknows.Maybethey'llbetotallyflatteredandexcited.We'llsee.I'mkindofhopingthatwhentheWachowskibrother'snextmovie(SpeedRacer)comes

out,moreinterestwillbesparkedaroundtheMatrix.Then,perhaps,thisscreenplaywillbeintherightplaceattherighttime.Let'shope.Thanksforthosesuperblyego-inflatingcomments.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JWOTDATE:5/14/20087:01:38AMThiswasveryaverygoodreadlikemanyhavesaid,andjustlikemanyihaveafewconcerns.Iunderstandthemysterybehindthematrixanditsconceptofinfiniteness,butweeventuallyweneedtoacquiresomeformofresolution,andtherandomexgirlfriendwhocomesoutofnowherewithasonisverycomplicatingandwealllovethetwistsinthematrix,butwe'renotinthemoodforthesameendingofsupermanreturnswhereitshissonthatinheritshispower.InadditiontheMatrixchosehim(Neo)inasense.Wecan'tgivegloryto2randomwhoweneverseeintheotherfilmsandthisonementionstheminsuchaminorfashionthatitsnotverybelievableandverydisapoiting(notthatthetwistisbad,butwe'vecomesofarinthisstorythatitneedaresolutionandnotacontinuingresolution)WealsoneedtostopSmith.YOUHAVESOMETHINGNEARTHEENDWITHHIM!WORKONIT!YOURSOFREAKINGCLOSE!AlsoeventhoughilikethatitdoenstfocusdirectlyonNeowestillneedtoseehimfightatleast2xinthismovie.Sorrybutthatsthestyleofthesefilmsandeventhoughthestoryiscompellingyougottaadmitthereasonwefellinlovewiththematrixwaswhenhedodgedthebulletslikeanagentforthefirsttime!Buticantstressenoughtosayhowgoodthisscriptis,andamonlybeingcriticalbecauseI'manactorandafan,anditseemsasthoughReevesisonlyagoodactorinthisseries.Youralsosoclosetoresolvingthestoryfinally.YouhaveseteverythingupsoWELLthatyourneedthefinalpiecestosomeitallup!Ihaveideasfloatingsoijustmightemailyouafewthingsthatmighthelp.PeaceJWOTCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/14/200811:48:03PMJWOT,Thanksfortheawesomepraiseandcritique.Ilaughedwhenyoubroughtupthe"wealllovethetwistsintheMatrix,butwe'renotinthemoodforthesameendingofsupermanreturnswhereitshissonthatinheritshispower".Idefinitelyunderstandthatresponse.Theendinghasalwaysbeenalittle

questionableforme.too.IguessIdon'treallyknowhowI'dreactifIwaswatchingthemovieanditendedthatway.IfeellikeIcouldhavebothreactions.(1)Damn!Ihatewhentheyleaveithanginglikethat.Itreallykindaspoilsit.(2)Yeah!Ilovethatitisn'tjustanotherHollywoodending.Kindalikereallife,youreallydon'tknowhowit'sgoingtoend.ButyoujustthinkifIleftthefinalsceneout,itwouldbebetter?Ididn'treallyunderstandthispart,"Wecan'tgivegloryto2randomwhoweneverseeintheotherfilms".DidyoumeantheRandomNeos(pg96)herunsintoinhisdream?If,so,Iguessyou'reright.Thisscenemaybestretchingtheboundariesofinfiniterealitiestoofar;maybeit'sbitingoffmorethanthemovieneedstochew.Wasthatyourpoint?And,ifso,wasitdisappointingbecauseyouthinkittriedtotakethemovieintoawholenewdirection,when(inyouropinion)itshouldhavebeennarrowingdownandresolving?AndyouthinkSmithneedstobefinishedoffagain?Don'tyouthinkthatwouldbealittlequick,consideringhewasalreadyfinishedoffnotlongagoinRevolutions?Peoplemightfindithardtoswallow.No?AndoneofthemainpointsofmystorywastoshowthattheMatrix,Zion,theSuperMatrix,therealworld,everythingiscontinuous.Maybethat'snotwhatmostpeoplewantintheendingoftheMatrixmovieseries,butitiskindofintegraltomystory.That'swhyitgoesinmanydirectionsandopensupmanypossibilities.ButIguessiffinalityandresolutioniswhatitwouldtaketogetthisscreenplaymadeintoamovie,I'ddoit,eventhoughit'snotwhatIhadinmind.Iguessyou'reprobablyright;anopen-endedMatrix4wouldleaveabadtasteinaenoughpeople'smouths(andprobablywouldn'tsitwellwiththeHollywoodexecutives).Fightscenes.Mystorydoeshaveafairnumber(enough?)offightsandbattles,wouldn'tyouagree?But,yes,yes...Neofightscenes.MoreNeofightscenes.It'strue,peoplewantthosefightscenes.IdidworkintheoneNeobattlescene(withtheSmiths,pg10)intotheopeningwhereNeoisinhisunconsciousstatebetweenworlds.AndthenItriedtomakethedreamscene(pg96)withtherandomNeosbeaNeobattlescene,butitwasn'tworkingtoowell.MaybeIcouldtryagainwiththat.Idon'treallythinkIcanhavehimbattlinginthenewworldhe'sjustawakenedinto(unlessitsinoneofhisdreamsorunconsciousstates,asI'vealreadydone).There'snorealreasonforhimtofightinhisnewworldinmyopinion.TheotheroptionwouldbetohavehimgobackintotheMatrix(SuperMatrix)andfightthere,butIthinkthatwouldgettoocomplicated.Don'tyouthink?"Buticantstressenoughtosayhowgoodthisscriptis".That'sagreatcompliment,especiallycomingfromanactor.Thankyou.I'mgladyouthinkit'sthatgood.

Formethereissomeresolutiontothestory;Neofindspeaceofmindandatruthhecanlivewith.It'snotcompleteresolutionbutIthinkpeoplemissthataspectabit.Butoverall,yourcommentsseemtotalkaboutcompleteresolution.GetridofnewperipheralcharactersthattakethestoryintovastlynewterritoriessuchastheRandomNeos,Rachael(thegirlfriend)andtheyoungNeo.AndSmithhasultimatelygottobedestroyedormadepowerless.IfIfollowedthroughonthese,youthinkitwouldpullitalltogether?"Ihaveideasfloatingsoijustmightemailyouafewthingsthatmighthelp."What'dyagot?I'mallears.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JordanDATE:5/28/20084:40:05AMGreatjobonthescript,Ithinkithasalotofpotentialtobemadeintoamovie,theproblemthatIhavewiththeendisNeojr.is6yearsoldandifsmithistakingovereverythingIdontthinkheisgoingtositaroundandwaitforNeojr.togrowupIthinkbasedonyourendingsmithistakingovereverythingasfastaspossible.IthinkitsagoodstoryandIthinkyoushouldsendittotheW.brothersbutIthinkiftheyaregoingtomakeanotheronethentheyaregoingtodoitthemselvesandtheymightalreadyhaveanideawithwhatisgoingtohappenwiththematrix,IhopethishelpedyouandpleaseE-mailmewithupdatesandtotellmeifyousubmittedittothemandevenifyouhaveasmallchancetogetthisscriptturnedintoamovie,justrememberasmallchanceisbetterthennochancesogoodlucktoyouandkeepmeupdated,please......ThankyouCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/28/200810:14:17PMJordan,Smithhasinflictedheavydamage,butIfigurethemachinesretaliateagainstSmithandbalanceoutthebattleveryquickly.Smithcontinuestomakesmallgainsbutonlyoveralongperiodoftime.BythenNeojrcomesintothepictureandconfrontsSmith.That'sonepossibility.OrmaybeSmitheventuallytriumphs,theMatrixcollapses,andNeojrisdestroyedwithit.Thepossibilitiesaremany.ButtheoverallflavorIwastryingtoleavewasthatit'snotoveryet.Howitplaysoutislefttotheimagination.I'vebeentoldbyallwhoseemtoknowabouttheHollywoodscriptbusiness,thatcoldcallsandqueryletterstoWarnerBrothers,agents,theWachowskisareallwastedtime.TheonlywaytogetinsideistohavePage42of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMsomeonealreadyontheinsidereferthework.So...ifyouknowanybody,letmeknow.InthemeantimeI'llkeeppluggingaway.ThanksforreadingitandI'mgladitmadeyourlistofgreatscripts.Ifyouwantupdates,youcansubscribetothisblogatthetopofthemainpage.That'stheeasyway.

PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RedXDATE:5/29/20087:45:43PMwow,thatstorywasgreat...imgoingtoleavethisshortandbrief.Iftheydoproducethisone,itwillmakeanopeningforanotherfor2moresequels.Thereseemsnottobethatmoreactioninthisversion;ijustfearitmayreverttothesameboringoutcomeastheMatrixReloaded.However,itsmorelikeTheMatrixReBooted(noiamnotpitchingoutsuggestionfortitles.Thoughttheplotisgreat;explainseverything,leavingnogaps(sortofliketheMatrixtrilogies)andisenjoyable.ImstillafoundtotheActionPackFactor.Ifeelyoursortofdoingthe'Jumper'aspectbutbackwards.Insteadofshowingallotofspecialeffectsandleavingashitloadsofgapsforplot,youontheotherhandleavenothingtoquestion,butlittleaction!Ifyoudokeepitasis,youbettermakethosefightsceneMASSIVE!!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/29/200810:36:43PMRedX,Actionisthekeyword.FromthebeginningIknewtherehadtobeenoughaction.Unfortunately,Ifeellikemystorycomesupabitshortinthatdepartment.I'dliketoaddmore,butnotattheexpenseoftheplot.Thereareafewscenesthatcouldbeshortenedtomakeroomformoreactionparts,but,inmyopinion,theycan'tbeunjustifiednewactionparts;theyhavetofitinwell.Theotheroptionistoextendtheexistingactionscenes.And,yes,thoseactionscenehavetobeMASSIVE!!!Iguessthat'spartlyuptothedirector.Iwassortofrelyingontheintensityoftherevelationsandsurprisestohelpgivethemovieenoughofajoltfactorsothatactionwasn'ttheonlythingpropellingitalong.But,again,I'dlovemoreaction,too.IftheBrothersevertakeaninterestinmystory,I'msureI'llbeabletoaddmoreactiontoboostitup.Thanksforthekindwords.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MatrixFanboyDATE:6/6/20087:38:54PMIneverreallygotintofanfictionandnowIknowwhy.Thefirstfewpagesreallygrabbedmyattention,butonceIhitpage30Icouldn'ttakeitanymore.Comeon!Areyouserious?!TheonethingthatalmosteveryidiotouttherethoughtwasthetruthbehindtheMatrixstoryrightafterMatrixReloadedhitthetheaters(whichmadeabsolutelynosenseatall)isexactlyhowthis"screenplay"continuestheseries.I'msorry,butthisisweak.Don'tquityourdayjobPJ.

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/6/20088:03:05PMPJ,Iagree;thebasicpremiseoftherebeinganotherlayerbeyondtheMatrixisfairlypredictable.ButIdon'tthinkthat'sthemostinterestingpartofthestory.YoustoppedrightatthepartwheretherevelationofanotherrealitytakesplacebetweentheArchitectandNeo.Butthere'salotmoretocomethatIthinkiswhatmakesthestorysocompelling.Isuggestyouatleastreadtotheendandletmeknowiftherestofthestorypullsyouin.Ifnot,I'lltakeanyfurthercriticismsorcommentsyouhave.BTW,I'mnowherenearquittingmydayjob.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:robDATE:6/15/20084:03:16AMPDWood,Haveyoutriedwww.moviepitch.com.Thatsitewasstartedbytheproducerordirectorofthe12monkeys.Maybehavehimpitchthemovie.Hehasdonealotofmoviepitchesthatiswhyhestartedmoviepitchdotcom.Isawthesiteandthoughtaboutpitchingsomemovieideas.Giveitashot.The12monkeyswasacoolmovie.BruceWillisisalwayscool.Matrix4wouldbereallycool.Goodluck.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/15/20081:55:49PMRob,No,Ihaven'ttriedit.Butitsoundslikeagreatidea.I'mlookingintoit.Thanks,PDWoodAddition:AsIexpected,onlymaterialthatiscompletelyoriginalcanbesubmitted.Thisalsogoesforscreenplaycompetitionsandthelike.It'sunfortunate,butthat'sthewaythecookieburns.I'vetriedsubmittingunderthesecircumstances,buttheworkjustgetsrejectedorremoved.ButIsureappreciatetheheadsup.Thanksagain.COMMENT:AUTHOR:SamDATE:6/18/20089:14:35PMWhatanincrediblejourneytotheend!ItwasalmostarelieftherewasanotherNeooutthere.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/18/20089:42:46PMSam,

Gladyouenjoyedit.LongliveNeo!COMMENT:AUTHOR:ErrolDATE:6/24/20086:53:26AMHey,totallylovedthescript!ItdidanexcellentjobofexplainingthingsthatdisappointedmeaboutthetrilogyespeciallyhowNeohadpowersinthe"real"world,theoracleandsomuchmore.HoweverIreallydidn'tliketheending.AtfirstIthoughtIdidn'tgetthefulldownload,thenImusthaverereaditatleast10timestryingtofigureoutwhatyouweretryingtogetat.Sinceyouarelookingforcommentsdirectlyrelatedtotheendingherearesome.1)WhoisRachel?Ican'trememberher.Ican'tfindherinanyoftheIMDBentries.I'msuretheMatrixfansthatcantellyouwhatNeowaswearinginaparticularscenearelaughingatme,butafteralltheseyearsit'spossibleanyonewhowouldviewyourmoviewon'trememberwhoRacheliseither.2)WhyisrememberingRachelisimportant?IfthestoryendedwithTrinitytakingNeototheviewingroomandseeingRachelwiththeyoungNeo,we'dallsay"Ah,RachelandNeohadsexandproducedachildshedecidedtonameNeowhowillsavetheSuperMatrixlikeNeo",butbecauseyou'vetakenusthroughthelookingglassintothemultiverse,wedon'tknowwhatjusthappened.Ican'trememberanythingaboutRachelandwouldn'tassumehehadsexwithherjustbecauseTrinitysaidshewashisgirlfriend.SowhenIreadthescene,I'mthinkingthattheyoungNeoisactuallyKeanuNeoandheforgotthatRachelwashismotherwhenhegrewupandshedidn'twanttotellhimespeciallyifthisyoungNeolookslikeKeanuNeo,whichiswhatIpicturedhimtolooklike.ThetimelineisblurredandIthinkyouaredoingtoomuchbytryingtotieinthenonexistentviewingroomscenewithyourviewsoninfiniteworlds.Ithinkit'simportantthatMatrix4haveenoughbackstorythatitcanbewatchedonit'sownwithouthavingtoremembereverydetailoftheoldermovies*especially*whenyouareattheendwheremoviescanbemadeorbroken.Iwanttowalkawayfeelingsatisfiedandnotsaying"WTF?"3)Ireallydidn'tliketheNeoshavingscenewherehebendsdownandNeoisstillthere.Iassumingyou'retryingtosaythatthe"realworld"isjustanothermatrix.Okthat'scool.Ilikethat,butinalltheMatrixmovieswe'veseen,wherewasitthatareflectionwasn'tareflectionbutactuallyaportaltosomeothermatrixwhereyourcounterpartisjuststandingtherealldaycopyingyourmoves.Iknowwhatyouaretryingtosaythat"OMG,therealworldisalsoamatrix"butitcomesacrossascheesyandnotconsistentwiththehighqualityoftherestofthescript.Whycheesy?DoesthatNeointhatotherworldjustshavehisfaceforalltheotherMatricesandhowisheabletomimiceverysinglemovesoperfectlyastoappearasareflection?Itjustdoesn'tmakeanysenseatall.

Thereisa3000charslimitsoI'llcontinueinanotherpost.:)COMMENT:AUTHOR:ErrolDATE:6/24/20086:55:01AMContinued...4)Theshowerdooropeningonit'sownanduszoomingintoitagainjustseemstotaketoolargeofanartisticlicence.Alsoifyouaretryingtoshowusthatthereareinfiniterealities,whywouldyoutakeustowhatIassumeistheSuperMatrixthatTrinitywasgoingtoshowNeoanyway?Inotherwords,whynotjustdothemorestraightforwardsceneofTrinitywalkingNeototheviewingroomandhavingascenewithNeosaying"Isthatmyson?"orsomethingmoreclear.IcouldunderstandifyouwantedtotakeustoanotherrealitywhereNeoisagirloramonsterorwhoknowswhatbutIthinkyoucandoamuchbetterjobofshowingusthatthe"realworld"isreallyjustanotherMatrix.Itshouldbemindblowingandsomethingwecouldn'thaveanticipated.MaybehaveTrinitywalkNeototheviewingroomandtheytalkabouthissonandthecamerazoomsoutandturnsintoamonitorwheretheyarebeignwatched,whichzoomsoutfurtherintomorePage45of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMmonitorsbutwithdifferentrealitiesandzoomsoutmoreintothousandsofmonitorsetc..I*reallyreallylike*whatyouaresayingthatitdoesn'tmatteriftheworldisrealornotbutwhatyoumakeofit.HoweverIthinkyouneedtobecarefulnotmakeitcheesyorstrangethatitdoesn'tmakesense.It'sdefinitelyatallorderandrightnowtheendingisreallybadI'msorrytosaybutapartfromthattherestofthescriptwouldmakeagreatmoviehandsdown!Onegeneralcommentisthatthereareafewtyposwhereyouused"quite"insteadof"quiet"andacouplemorelikethat.SorryfornottakingnotesonwheretheywerebutIwasn'texpectingtocontactyou.AnywayhopethathelpsasI'dreallylovetoseethisbecomeamovie.COMMENT:AUTHOR:JessiDATE:6/24/20088:10:58PMitrulyloveallthreeofthematrixmoviesbecauseithinkthecharactersweresosuperb.andiwascurioustoseehowthiswouldturnoutconsideringitwasnotwrittenbythebrothers.andasireaditifoundmyselfconfusedconsideringthecharactersareallwrong.Theyhavelosttheirstrengthasindividualcharactersinthisscreenplay.ididn'tgettotheendtogivemycommentonwhatyousayiscausingcontroverybutifidoiwillpostanothercomment.ijustfeelthatthecharactersneedtobeworkedagainbecauseiamjustnotgettingthatsamefeelfromtheoriginaltrilogy.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/24/200810:39:54PMJessi,Thanksforreadingthescreenplayandlettingmeknowwhatyouthink.Ireadyourcomment,"thecharactersareallwrong.Theyhavelosttheirstrengthas

individualcharactersinthisscreenplay."I'mnotsureIunderstandexactlywhatyoumean;couldyoubemorespecific?Whichones?Morpheus,Neo,Trinity,theArchitect,theMerovingian,others?IactuallythoughtIgavecertaincharactersmoredepthanddimension.Letmeknowwhatyouthink?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/24/200811:10:43PMErrol,Quote<<WhoisRachel?Ican'trememberher.>>Icanseetheconfusion.IguessIdidn'tletRachelmakealongenoughappearanceorastrongenoughimpactinmyscreenplayforsomepeople.TheissueofnotknowingwhoRachelishascomeupbefore.Thistendstohappenbecausesomepeoplereadthescriptinmanysittingsinsteadofinonesitting(thewayamoviewouldbeseen).Ifyougotopage11and12ofthescreenplayyou'llseethescenewithRachel.Itisshortbut(Ithoughtatleast)memorableenoughtostaywithamovievieweruntilthelastscene.CheckouttheRachelsceneandtellmeifitmakesmoresenseinthatcontext.Quote<<Ireallydidn'tliketheNeoshavingscenewherehebendsdownandNeoisstillthere.Iassumingyou'retryingtosaythatthe"realworld"isjustanothermatrix.Okthat'scool.Ilikethat,butinalltheMatrixmovieswe'veseen,wherewasitthatareflectionwasn'tareflectionbutactuallyaportaltosomeothermatrixwhereyourcounterpartisjuststandingtherealldaycopyingyourmoves.Iknowwhatyouaretryingtosaythat"OMG,therealworldisalsoamatrix"butitcomesacrossascheesyandnotconsistentwiththehighqualityoftherestofthescript.Whycheesy?DoesthatNeointhatotherworldjustshavehisfaceforalltheotherMatricesandhowisheabletomimiceverysinglemovesoperfectlyastoappearasareflection?Itjustdoesn'tmakeanysenseatall.>>Yeah,pointtaken.Isupposeitisabitcheesy.Thatscenemayhavetobereworkedordeleted;notsureyet.WhatIwastryingtogetatwas,forasplitsecond,anotherNeofromanotherworldgetsafleetingglimpseofthisworld;andit'sonlyduringthatsplitsecondthatthereflectionisanythingotherthanareflection.Guessitdidn'tworkthatwayforyou.Quote<<Theshowerdooropeningonit'sownanduszoomingintoitagainjustseemstotaketoolargeofanartisticlicence.Alsoifyouaretryingtoshowusthatthereareinfiniterealities,whywouldyoutakeustowhatIassumeistheSuperMatrixthatTrinitywasgoingtoshowNeoanyway?Inotherwords,whynotjustdothemorestraightforwardsceneofTrinitywalkingNeototheviewingroomandhavingascenewithNeosaying"Isthatmyson?"orsomethingmoreclear.IcouldunderstandifyouwantedtotakeustoanotherrealitywhereNeoisagirloramonsterorwhoknowswhatbutIthinkyoucandoamuchbetterjobofshowingusthatthe"realworld"isreallyjustanotherMatrix.

Itshouldbemindblowingandsomethingwecouldn'thaveanticipated.MaybehaveTrinitywalkNeototheviewingroomandtheytalkabouthissonandthecamerazoomsoutandturnsintoamonitorwheretheyarebeignwatched,whichzoomsoutfurtherintomoremonitorsbutwithdifferentrealitiesandzoomsoutmoreintothousandsofmonitorsetc..>>Yetagain,pointtaken.Ilikeyourideaofzoomingoutmonitoraftermonitortoshowthelayeredrealities.Nice.ItalsoreinforcesthethreetimesIusedthattechniqueearlierinthestory.You'vehitonsomedifficultiesinthestoryandalsosomenicewaystoaddressthem.Ifthemovieworldevertakesaninterestinthisstory,I'lldefinitelyconsidersomeoftheideasyou'vesuggested.But,fornow,I'mgoingtocontinueworkingonmyownORIGINALscreenplay.HopefullythatwillcatapultmeintotheHollywoodworldeveniftheSuperMatrixdoesn't.YourcommentswereveryhelpfulandI'mgladyouenjoyedmostofthestory;sorrytheendingwassuchadisappointment.(Ifthere'sonethingthatirksmetonoend,it'sagreatstorywithabadending.So,again,myapologizes!)P.S.IthinkIgotmostofthetyposwithinthepastmonth(includingtheoneyoumentioned),anduploadedafreshercopyofthescripttomysite.Ifyoudownloadedit

recentlyandthosetyposwerestillpresent,letmeknow.Thanksagain,PDWood COMMENT:AUTHOR:KoryDATE:6/30/20085:47:09PMIreadsomeoftheothercommentsandyousaidsomethingaboutMorpheusthinkingNeoandTrinityaredead,arethey?I'mnotsurebeacauseI'mnotallowedtodownloadanythingsoletmeknow...ASAP!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/30/20087:09:43PMKory,NeoandTrinityaredeadasfarasthepeopleinZionandtheMatrixareconcerned.ButtheyliveoninafurtherlayerofrealitythatexistsoutsideofZionandtheMatrix.Ihopeyoufindawaytodownloadit;it'sachewyread.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:7/7/20082:46:04AMWhileIenjoythescriptandtheideaofthenextmovieitself,Ifeelthatyoushouldhavetakenmoreconsiderationtothemanerismsofthecharactersasindividuals.Thescriptisn'tbelieveablebecausethemanerismsarenotbecomingofthecharactersthatthepublichasbeenacquaintedwithforthepast9years.Mysuggestionwouldbetowatchthemoviesandstudy,notonlyNeo,buttherestofthecharactersaswell(i.e.Naiobi,Jason,theMerovingian).Ionlyreadthefirst5pagesandit'salreadyunrealistic,becauseofthedialogueandpersonalitythatyou'veassignedtothecharacters.Ireallydowantyourscripttowork.IreallydowantafourthMatrixmovie,however,ifyou'regoingto

pitchthistoproducers,you'regoingtoneedyourcharacterstofit.You'readdingontotheoriginalstory,notrewritingit.Reviseitabit.I'llbechecking!Iwishforgreatsuccesstoyou.Andremember,don'tdisappointthepublic.Alreadyalotofusarecountingonyou,andyou'renotevenpublishedyet!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/7/20083:39:05AMIappreciateyoutakingthetimetoleavesomefeedback;I'malwaysveryopenandinterestedinwhatpeoplehavetosay.ConsideringmostofthecommentsI'vegottenindicatethatI'vedoneagoodjobwiththecharactersandtheirmannerisms,I'mwonderingwhyyouthinktothecontrary.Ihavewatchedthemoviesmany,manytimes,readtheoriginalscripts,andscouredforumsforallkindsforadviceanddirection.IfeelasthoughI'vedonemyhomeworkprettywell.Perhapsyoucouldbemorespecific(i.e.specificdialogueordescriptions)astowhyyouthinkthecharactersdon'twork.Ialsosuggestyoureadmorethanjustthefirst5pages.Lotshappensintheremaining115pagesandsomeofthecharactersmaymakemoresensetoyouasthestoryprogresses.Ihopeyougiveitafullread;I'mmuchmoreopentocommentswhenthescripthasbeenfullyabsorbed.Besides,Ithinkyou'lllikewherethestorygoes(evenifsomeofthecharactersareinconsistent).Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:HurricaneFloydDATE:7/7/20089:19:33PMAnicepieceoffan-fiction,howeverithasseveralinconsistencieswhichmakeitnotquiterightasatruesequel.Oneoftheseisthefactthatyouoverlookedsomeofthevariancesinhowthebackstoryandtheendingareperceivedintheoriginalmovies,inotherwords"Supermatrix"iswrittenfromyourperceptionofthemoviesanddoesnotleaveroomforincludingalternateviews.IntheworldofTheMatrixstoriesyoucaninessencebringupaninfinitenumberoflevels,matrixinsideofmatrixinsideofmatrixtoinfinity,althoughamindblowingconceptitisfartovasttoputintounderstandableliterature/film.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/7/200810:05:18PMHurricaneFloyd,Thanksforthenodandthefeedback.Whenyousay,"youoverlookedsomeofthevariancesinhowthebackstoryandthe

endingareperceivedintheoriginalmovies",I'mguessingforthebackstoryyou'rereferringtothehumanarchivesastheyaredetailedintheAnimatrixshortsandtheendingasitcontinuesintheMatrixonline?Orperhapssomethingelse?Ifyouhavemorespecifics,itwouldbemuchmorehelpful.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RyanHoskinsDATE:7/16/20086:35:06AMWOW....absolutelyblownaway....PDWoodyouareageniusthereisnootherwaythematrixfranchisecouldcomeupwithapossibleMatrix4andtopyou....BeingafanoftheseriesIbelievewitheverythinginmethatthisstorylineifyoukeepthesameactorsandnotchangeanybodyotherthantheoracleitwouldgogreatwiththeseries....WhatImeanbychangingtheoracleissimplyIlovetheoriginaloraclebetterthanthewomanwhoplayedinthelastmatrixaddition...ButasfaraswhattheyneedtotowithmakinganotherMatrixadditionomgthisissimplyamazing....OtherthantheoracletheonlyotherthingthatIcouldseeismaybeneoandtrinityneedtohaveonemorefightscenebutotherthanthosetwosuggestionsthisisabsolutelyamazing...ThankyouforyourVision...COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:7/16/20081:57:00PMHello,Sofarthescriptisgreat.Ijustfound1typoonpage75.President"Webeenthroughalot,youandI"shouldread"We'vebeenthroughalot,youandI"COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/16/20088:47:03PMRyan,I'mgladyouthinkit'sthatgood;hopefully,WarnerBrotherswillthinkso,too,andmakeaforth(beforetheactorsstarttoagetoo,toomuch).Ifitevergetspickedup,I'mguessingthepowersthatbewillwantmorefightscenes,too.Ifandwhenthathappens,I'lladdmore.BythewaythereasontheactressfortheOraclechangedisbecausetheoriginalactressdiedbetweenmovies.AndIagree,theoriginalOraclewasmoreanimatedandlikablesomehow.Well,thanksagain.Wordslike"genius"and"vision"inreadercommentsalwaysmake

myday.Seeyouinthemovies(Ihope!)PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/16/20089:00:58PMChris,Gladyou'relikingit.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkwhenyoufinish.Therehavebeenafewtyposthatpeoplehavepickedupon.Thisone,however,issupposedtobethatway.ThePresidentisahardhitting,Texas-typewithacolloquialdrawlandapenchantfordroppingcertainwordsorcontractionendings,"KnowwhatImean?"."Betyoudo"."Notsurewhetherhecomesacrossthatway.""Whatyouthink?".PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AidenDATE:7/17/20081:50:47AMIhavereadthisinonesitting,Thiswasactuallynearperfectionforme.Iverymuchwelcomechangeintheentertainmentfieldandtobeonehundredpercenthonest...Icannotseehowanydirectorwouldturndownthisamazingpotential.Afewminorchangesorswapstotweaktheinterestforthelessintenseviewerofcourse,butnothingthatcan'tbehandledonset!Thishasmorethansatisfiedmyneedforthatmind-blowingnaturetheotherthreedelivered.Peoplemayworryaboutafourthinstallmentbutifitisdonelikethis,thenyouarelookingatpossiblydoublinginterestfortheMatrixmovieseries.Icanonlyhopesomethingofsuchqualitygetstheattentionitdeserves.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/18/20082:28:01AMAiden,Ican'ttellyouhowmuchIappreciateyourkindandflatteringreview.RightnowI'minthemidstoftryingtowriteacompletelyoriginalscriptofmyownandit'sbeenabitmaddeningrecently.Butwhencommentslikeyoursarrive,Igetalljuicedupandbackontrack.Perfecttiming!Let'shopethatiftheWarnerorWachowskibrothersevercomeaknock,it'swithasmilingcontractandnotafrowninglawsuit!Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:derekDATE:7/21/20084:06:37AMtheyshoulddefinitelymakeamatrix4...justnotyours.itissounbelievableandjustwrong.nowididntreaditall,butfromwhatididread,herearemyproblemswithit.thedialogisbad,thesmithdragoniscompletelydifferentfromanythinginthemovies,

introducinganewmatrix,istoomuchofareach.youareintroducingtoomuchatonce,andfrankly,itsboring.justaddingonanothermatrixisahorriblewaytocontinueonthestory.THENthefactthatyoumadeeveryonefamily....well...imean,COMEONNNN!thatjustdoesntcutit.iunderstandthatidontknowthestory,ortheexplanations,butjustthejistofitgivesmeabadvibe.everythingjustseemstooseparatefromtheotherfilms.andconfusing.ifthisweretobemade,itwouldbetheequivalentorworsetospiderman3.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/22/20081:52:23AMderek,IcanseesomeofyourpointsbutI'malsosurprisedthatyouthinkitfallsshortonsomanylevels.MystorydefinitelyseparatesitselffromtheworldandlivesofthepeopleinZion(towhichmostMatrixlovershadastrongattachment).ThatmightbethesinglemostdifficultpartofthestoryforMatrixloverstoaccept.ButontheotherhandthewholeconceptoftheMatrixstorywasaboutworldswithinworlds,aboutbreakingthroughandseeingthetruth.ThisstorykindofcirclesbacktothefirstMatrixwhereNeomakeshismind-blowingdiscoverythattheworldhe'sknownallalongisnottheonlyworld.Ithoughtthatwasaniceloopbacktotheoriginalmind-blower.AndtheideathatthewholeSuperMatrixworldwasdesigned,engineeredandoperatedbysmallgroupsofhand-picked,ultra-intelligentmilitaryfamilies,it'sdefinitelyagiantleap,astaggeringreality.But,still...Ithoughtthatwasastrokeofbrilliance,anideathatwouldappealtotheMatrixlover'ssenseofdepthandinterconnection.I'msorryitdidn'tworkforyou.OntheotherpointsIconcede.Thedialogneedswork.And,yes,theSmithdragonisawildelement,maybeabittoowild.It'sbeenastretchfornumerouspeople.Andthereisalotgoingon;itcanbeconfusingattimes.Thecontinuityneedswork.Sinceyou'dobviouslylovetoseea4thMatrix,itdisappointsmetoseethatmyversionleavesyoucold.You'rejusttheaudienceI'mmosttryingtoappealtoandwouldlovetoplease.IwishIcouldhavecomeupwithsomethingmoreenjoyableforyou.Iknowitwouldprobablybehardforyoutofinishthestoryatthispoint,butyouneverknow...therestofitmightredeemthepartyou'vealreadyread...atleastalittle.Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetoreadandcommentoniteventhoughyoudidn'tlikeit.Frommypointofviewthecriticaldissectionwillonlyhelpmakemynextprojectbetter.Thanks,PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:naterobDATE:7/22/20083:47:51AMThiswasabsolutelygreat.Goodluck,withgettingittothemoviescreenIcan'twaittoseeit.Matrix3endedwithalotofquestions.Ithinkyouhavemadeagreatattempttoanswerthem.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/22/20089:48:57AMnaterob,Sogladyoulikedit.Themovieversionisprobablyapipedream,butthen,younevercantell.Let'shope.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:crashxzibitDATE:7/24/20085:03:19AMIdontknow,it'sanawesomeidea,butonethatshouldbereallywellthoughtout.Thereneedstobesomethingthatwillgrabpeopleâ€sattentionandmakethembelieveaboutit.Thesemoviescarriedsuchphilosophicalmeaningwiththemthatafourthwouldneedtobeonethatcarriedthatoninaverycarefulmanner.Ifyou’regoingtocontinuethecharactersfromtheoriginalspleasemakethemsimilarlikeforexampleMorpheus,heshouldtalkwithmuchmoremeaningandintelligenceifyourememberinallthematrixeshespokewithphilosophicalmeaning.Ireallycouldntreadallofit,sorryforbeingabadcriticbutitreallydidntgraspmeandmakemewanttobelieve.Youknewwhenwatchingthematrixafterthefirstscene,itwassomethingdifferentandmeaningful.AndifyourereallygoingtotryandhitHollywoodup,especiallywithanothermatrixmovie,itshouldbesomethingreallybreathetaking.Thinkaboutit,theoriginalsweresuchabigbighitandtheyreallytouchedpeopleallovertheworld.Sototryandkeeptheflowgoingwouldrequiresomethingthatsurpassesallthematrixesorelseitsnotevenworththeembarrassment.ComeonthisisHollywoodman!!Theyarenotjustgoingtothrowtheirmoneyandanything.ButIdidsaythatIdontknow,Icouldbetotallywrong,Icouldbetalkingoutmyass.OrIcouldbeignorantlivingtheblissfulllifeofalltheothercoppertopsinthematrix.OrIcouldnotevenberealandjustanotherformofcontroltryingtokeeppeoplefromrealizingthetruth.Thetruththattherereallyisneitherrealitynormatrixandweareformulatingthissocalledlifeofoursinourownminds.So,Ireallycantpassjudgmentorcriticismbecausethefeelingsthatyouwillreceivefromreadingthiswilljustbeelectricalsignalsinterpretedbyyourmind.Inasenseyouwillneverknowiftheyarerealorarealitypulledoveryoureyestokeepyouundercontrol,toturnyouintoaDuracellbatteryforthemachines.Thatisthequestion,whichiswhatdrivesus??COMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:7/24/20082:26:02PM

Ithinkbeforetheymakethematrix4storyaftermatrix3:theymustmaketheMatrixBegins(mustbethesamestoryasAnimatrix,butrealisticandmoreactionandsuspense-justthinkaboutthewarscenesandbornoftheAI,Neocanplayapropheticscene.Thiswillmakeallotofmoney.)ThefourthMatrixmusthaveatwistlikeexampletherewereBadAIandGoodAI,theGoodAIwanttodestroytheBadAIsotheyneedHumansthusNeoareresurrected;thismustcontainallotofactionandsuspense,forhumansarejuststarttorestarttheirlives,nowtheyarecaughtinonebigmessandwar(Neototherescue).AgentSmithmustsurvivefortheremustbeacopyintheTrainWorldwhereNeooneswas.TheremustbeawarbetweenMerovingianFrenchguyandMachineWorld.Theskateboardguy(commitsuicide)thatNeorescuedinAnimatrixthatplayedasmallroleinMatrix3mustplayabigroleinMatrix4,forheistheonethatrescueNeofromhiscoma:thiscomaconsistofafantasydreamstateinthemachineworld.HemustrescueNeoandwecanbuildalovestorywithskateboardguyintherealworld.Thereisalloticantellyouguysandshare,butithinkitisuptotheDirectors,iwishicouldhelpdirecting–Ihaveallotofideasandsolutionstothecritics.WhatIcanhelpwiththecriticsisthatmoreoftheMatrixworldmustbeinvolvedinbothMatrixBeginsandMatrixResurrection“moreactionandsuspensescenesinvolvedinsidetheMatrixlikeMatrix1Telephonescenes.GoodLuck.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/24/20088:13:12PMcrashxzibit,IthoughtIwassuccessfulatmanyofthepointsyoumade.TheideaofanothersuperimposedMatrix,thecontrolofhumansovermachines,thenotionofrebelandroid36stryingtofreethemachines,thefamilialconnectionoftheArchitect,Trinity,PersephoneandtheMerovingian-allthesewereverycarefullythoughtoutandinmyopinionprettybreath-takingoratleastintriguing.Thestorymaynothavegoneinadirectionthatmostpeoplewouldanticipate,buttosaythatyouthinkit'snotwellthought-outorintriguingisasurprisetome.MystoryismeanttobreakawayfromtheTrilogytoacertainextent;formethishelpskeeptheTrilogyconceptintact.YousayMorpheushaslostsomeofhisintellectualandphilosophicalforceinmystory.Yes,that'strueanddeliberate;IfeltthatmuchofwhatdrovehimhiswholelifewashissearchforandteachingoftheOneandthefulfillmentoftheprophecy.OncetheprophecywasfulfilledandtheOnegone,muchofMorpheus'purposewentwithit.Doesn'tthatseemplausible?Anyway,thanksforthecomments.Ihopeyoucanseemypointevenifyoudon'ttotallyagreewiththem.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/24/20089:20:18PMJJLoubser,

Idon'tknowifyoureadmystory,butitdoesmuchofwhatyousuggest;it'sabouttheMatrixbeginning,ithastwists,ithassomeexcellentactionandsuspensescenes,AgentSmithdoessurvive,andinawaythereisapersonalbattlebetweentheMerovingianandthemachines.Theskateboardguyistheonlyonewhodoesn'tfigureprominentlyfromyoursuggestions.IhighlyrecommendyoureaditasitseemstoconformverycloselytowhatyouthinkagoodMatrix4wouldbe.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:7/25/20088:47:42AMAllthepreviouscharactersmustremainlikeMorpheuswiththestoryItold,thatiswhatImend.Ilikecriticsitmakesthestorybetter.Yes,thePhilosophy&wisdomteachingsmustremainandnewonesadded.IhadPhilosophyonUniversitythusunderstandtheconceptswellintheMatrix.The'matrixbegins'mustcontainsallotofmindplayingviaAnimatrix.Askthequestion:"willthereeverbehopeforhumanswhentheysin?AIwarsarethefruitswereap"IthinkMatrixcangiveamessagetonon-believersandsinners(aguythatjustthinkabouthimselfandhispleasureandnotthepleasuresofotherstheonlywaytobeselflessnessistosacrifice.Nooneiswithoutsinandnoonedeservelife,thusinnocentJesuscametoEarth,becauseheisselflessnessandwantsustohavelife.Heistheonlyreligionthathasunconditionalloveforhisbrothers.Theotherreligionscontainmercyforgooddeedsornomercyatall)IsawaMuslimguythatrepenttoChristianity,mostChristiansarehypocritesandthatgavethetrueChristiansabadname.Christianwarsareactuallyspiritual,butyouacanfindthesymbolicmessageintheMatrix.IneedtowriteanessayhowIviewtheMatrix.ButIthinkMatrixbelongstonon-ChristiansorAtheiststhusitcomplicatedthesituation,butIbelieveJesuswilldestroyallhisenemiesinthefuture,thusthestoryoftheMatrixwillbelongtoChristians.ReadthebibleinRevelationintheeEndNewHeavenandEarth.IfIcanIwillmakeMatrixbeginsandMatrix4inheaventhatisuptoJesus.COMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:7/25/20088:51:05AMAllthepreviouscharactersmustremainlikeMorpheuswiththestoryItold,thatiswhatImend.Thefirst3Matrixwasverygood-Thenextonesjustforfillthestorywithmoretwistsandaction.Ilikecriticsitmakesthestorybetter.Yes,thePhilosophy&wisdomteachingsmustremainandnewonesadded.IhadPhilosophyonUniversitythusunderstandtheconceptswellintheMatrix.The'matrixbegins'mustcontainsallotofmindplayingviaAnimatrix.Askthequestion:"willthereeverbehopeforhumanswhentheysin?AIwarsarethefruitswereap"IthinkMatrixcangiveamessagetonon-believersandsinners(aguythatjustthinkabouthimselfandhispleasureandnotthepleasuresofotherstheonlywaytobeselflessnessistosacrifice.Nooneiswithoutsinandnoonedeservelife,thusinnocentJesuscametoEarth,becauseheisselflessnessandwantsustohavelife.Heistheonlyreligionthathasunconditionalloveforhisbrothers.Theotherreligionscontainmercyforgooddeedsornomercyatall)IsawaMuslimguythatrepenttoChristianity,mostChristians

arehypocritesandthatgavethetrueChristiansabadname.Christianwarsareactuallyspiritual,butyouacanfindthesymbolicmessageintheMatrix.IneedtowriteanessayhowIviewtheMatrix.ButIthinkMatrixbelongstonon-ChristiansorAtheiststhusitcomplicatedthesituation,butIbelieveJesuswilldestroyallhisenemiesinthefuture,thusthestoryoftheMatrixwillbelongtoChristians.ReadthebibleinRevelationintheeEndNewHeavenandEarth.IfIcanIwillmakeMatrixbeginsandMatrix4inheaventhatisuptoJesus.COMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:7/25/20089:39:22AMCool,thefirstscenesyoucreateisgreat,buttheymustbeamysteryfortheAudience,becauseMorpheusandLockbusinessisdoneinMatrix3–wedonotwanttorepeattheirproblems.Soyourscenesâ€exist,butinthemindofthecharacters.IthinkwemuststartwhereMorpheusteachstudentsaboutthepasthistoryofNeoâ€svictoryandaphilosophyfaithlesson.TheythenfindtheneedtolookforNeo,becausenooneknowsifheisreallydead.TheAImachinesaretellingtheirownstorytothehumans,thustheskateboardguy(theonlyonethatcomeclosetothemindpoweroftheone)goonamission(lookinMatrix;findthemachineworld;findgirl;gobacktomatrix;findtrainworld)findingNeoandfallinlovewithagirllongtheway.Morpheuswordsremaininhishead,whileMorpheushadtorescuehimattheendofhisjourneyfindingNeo.AttheendheandMorpheusfindAgentSmithinthetrainworld,thisfightleadstotheMerovingianthattellsthemthatNeoisaliveandhelpingtheAImachinestofighttheBadAImachines.TheMerovingianstilleviltrytokillthem,butNeorescuedthem.TheskateboardguyandMorpheuscouldfightAgentSmith,butnottheMerovingian(hehaspowersofAgentSmithcombiningwithhisownandtheoracle),thusNeo(superNeo)destroyMerovingian.BeforethistheMerovingianalsokilledthearchitectandtookcontroloverthematrix,buttheMerovingiankepttheMatrixsystemintactwiththeAgents,becauseheenjoycontrol,powerandtokeptthingstidy.Thefightscenesmustbemuchmoreadvancedmatrixstyle.Theskateboardguybrakesthroughthematrixsystembarrierstoreachthemachineworldandtrainworld.IntheendNeotakeMorpheusandSkateboardguytothebadAImatrixtorescueamaninside:TheoneofthebadAIMatrix.WhentheyrescuedhimtheydestroythearchitectofthebadAImatrix.TheyrestorepeaceonEarth.ThehumansalreadystarttocreateabignewcityonEarthwiththehelpofthemachines.InthelastscenethehumanstookawaytheblackskycloudsandthemachinesresurrectTrinity(theystorehersoulinthemachineworldspecialplacewhenshedied)forNeoabigcelebration.Forthemachinesanythingispossible,becauseofadvancetechnology,buttheyneedNeo(supermind),becausehumansdohavesomethingmachinesdonothave(faith).Ifyouwanttomakemoneywemustcreateastorynotpredictableforthepeople,butIlikeyour3Dgraphicsandstyle.Wecanusethatcombiningnewactionstyle.IhopeIhelpyoudestroythecritics.Donotforgetaboutthe'MatrixBegins'(Thiscanbeagreatmovie)COMMENT:AUTHOR:guttuDATE:8/3/20086:06:29AMhi,ithinkthismovieismadandshouldbereleasedassoonaspossible.thereasonisthatiwanttoseehowNeocomesbackin.

thanks.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/6/20081:59:35AMguttu,I'mwithyou100%.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SelinaEnriquezDATE:8/6/20085:05:02AMAsahardcoreMatrixfanforoven9years,I'dsay:Let'sencouragetheWachowskistomakeMatrix4!BringNeoback!BringSmithback!ThereissooooomuchplotinformationtobeginwithduetotheMatrixOnlinegame.Thereissomanyfanwebsites,fanfiction,blogs,fanfilms,etc.InsteadofcrappyScaryMoviefilms.Insteadofcrappymovieremakes,likeKingKong.InsteadofSpiderman4,Terminator4,X-Files2,X-Men...errr...8718262,etc,etc-let'sbringsomeREALaction.Let'sencouragetheWachowsiBrotherstomakeMatrix4!Who'supforstartingapetition?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/6/20089:16:40PMSelina,WhileIloveyourenthusiasmandwishaMatrix4we'reinthefuture,IleanawayfromstartingapetitionorputtinganypressureontheWarnerorWachowskibrothers.Whiletheplotofmyscreenplayisoriginal,thecharactersandthesupportingstoryarenot.IwroteTheSuperMatrixprimarilyasanexerciseinscreenwritingandasafunwaytoimaginetheTrilogyprogressing.Ialsowantedpeopletoreadandenjoythestory.Butthat'sasfarasI'dliketotakeit.IftheWarnerorWachowskibrotherscatchwindofitandapproachme,thatwouldbefine,butIreallydon'twanttostartacampaign.Ifthey'rereallyinterestedinaMatrix4,believeme,they'llmakeit.Theyalreadyhaveacaptiveaudienceandthere'sobviously

hugemoney-makingpotential.SoIthinkweshouldbethankfulforwhatthey'vealreadycreatedandjusthopeforaMatrix4inthefuture.Respectfully,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:8/7/20088:03:26AMYesDonotworrytheywilloriwill.TheMarixhasthem...COMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:8/7/20088:10:09AMYesijustneedsomenewphilosophywisdomwordsforMorpheus,OracleandMerovingianalsoneedtoaddnewlovingcharacterswithsometwistintheoldcharacters.WeneedaextrapowerfullbadguyaswellwithMerovingian.COMMENT:AUTHOR:BentheBelieverDATE:8/27/20084:23:41PMPDWood,Forsolongnow,IhavefeltavoidinmycuriosityandfascinationfortheMatrixconceptbecauseoflackofexplanationderivingfromthefirstthreeMatrixinstallments.Ifeltthereneededtobemore.Forexample,afterviewing'MatrixReloaded'inthetheater,IfeltIhadtheexplanation.Iwenthome,andwrotedownashortnotetomyself,explainingmyowntheory.IhadconcludedthattheMatrixwasasecondarypartofasortof"MainframeMatrix",called'Zion',andthattheZioniteswereblindedbythefactthattheywerestillpartofasystemofcontrol;AMatrixinsideofaMatrix.thisexplainsNeo'snewfoundpoweroutsideoftheoriginalMatrix.Now,I'llbehappytosaythatyourscreenplayhasfilledamuchneededvoidinwhereIthoughtthe3rdinstallmentwouldlead,butultimatelydidnot.Iwasdisappointed,becauseIwaswronginmypredication.ItsimplyturnsoutthatIwasnotalone.Thankyouforthat.Now,I'llsaythatIbelieveyourscreenplayhasmorepotentialtoreachthescreenthananyotherMatrixcontinuation.Findapublisher,gainlegaladviceonretainingadaptiverightstotheoriginalmaterial,andmoveforward.Withmaterialthisgood,youcan'tfail.Thanksagain.-BentheBelieverCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/28/200812:45:04AM

BentheBeliever,Iguessit'strue,greatmindsdothinkalike.Ormayberestlessmindsjustkeepsearchingforanswers.I'mhappytohearthatmystoryparallelsyourownideasabouttheMatrixandthatyouthinkit'sgoodenoughtopursuewithlegalvigor.Iguessupuntilyousaidit,I'dneverreallythoughtabouttryingtosecuretheadaptiverightstomystory.MyintentionhasalwaysbeentowriteasolidcontinuationtothestoryforMatrixfanswiththehope,ofcourse,thattheWarnerorWachowskibrotherswouldcatchwindofitandmaybepickitup.ButperhapsIshouldbealittlemoreproactive.Tryingtosecuretheadaptiverightssoundslikeagreatidea.ButevenifIsecurelegalownershipofmystory,Iwouldstillhavetopersuadethebrotherstomakethemovie.Theystillretainownershipofthecharactersandfranchise,whichIdon'tseeanywayaround.ThebiggestadvantageIhaveisthatmystoryissolidandconvincing.IjustwishIknewhowtogetittotheirattention.InthemeantimeI'lllookintosecuringtheadaptiverights,ifthat'spossibleatall.Yourpositiveattitudeandglowingpraiseonlyhelptopropelmeinthedirectionofinevitability:namely,thataMatrix4isinthecardssometimeinthefuture.Let'sjusthopeit'smyversion.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BentheBelieverDATE:8/28/20082:14:29PMTheWachowskibrothersdon'thavetomakeit,otherdirectorswouldjumponthisifthebrothersdecidednottopursuethe4thinstallment.(whichwouldactuallybethethird,duetothefactthatMatrixRevolutionswasfilmedasonemovie,butultimatelysplitinhalfbyWarnerBros.)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/28/20084:23:18PMBen,Thatmayindeedbetrue,however,theystillretainthecopyrightonthefranchise.Onewayoranother,theWachowskiswillhavetogiveittheirblessing.Howbesttogetthemtodothatistheissue.Haveyougotthemagicspell?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:pinguDATE:9/4/20084:47:36AMIreallyenjoyedit!Iwasalwaysuncomfortablewiththeideaofneohavingsupernaturalpowersintheworldofzion.OneofthethingsIlovedabouttheoriginalmatrixfilmwasthattherealworldisjustlikeourworld,ielackinginanysupernaturalphenomena,butofcourseinthematrixbeingacomputersimulationneocandoanythinghewanted.sowithyourideathattheworldofzionisactuallythesupermatrixthenitseemsmore

reasonablethatneocanhavesupernaturalpowersinthatworldtoo.However,Iwasabitdiscouragedintheendwiththetwodifferentneoreflectionsinthebathroom.Thatreallyissupposedtobetherealworldsohowcouldthathappen?unlessyou'resuggestingthatthisrealworldisyetanothermatrix,asuper-supermatrix.wherewoulditend?IreaditprettyquicklysosorryifImissedsomethingandthatit'sastupidquestion.COMMENT:AUTHOR:BrandonP.DATE:9/4/20089:49:49PMFirstoff,WOAH!!!I'veonlyreadthefirsthalfofitand...WOAH!!!OneofthebestworksofartinthearrayofscriptsIhavereadforaMatrixContinuation.IfyouweretotakethattotheWachowskis,theywouldtakeit,shapeitintoamovie,andwefanswellwouldhaveournextMatrixmovieintheworld!!!6outof5Stars!!(IfyouknowwhatImean.)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/4/200810:04:50PMpingu,I'mgladyoulikedthestoryandthat,foryou,insomewaysitgavetheseriesmoreplausibility.And,no,I'mdefinitelynotsuggestingthattherealworldisasuper-supermatrixconcoctedasjustanotheraruestofoolpeopleormachines.Idoliketheideathatnoteveryworldisavirtualsimulation.Iam,however,suggestingthatthereareotherlayersofexistence,justnotsimulatedones!AndalsothatNeo'sspecialqualitieswerenotuniquetotheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix,butareapartofwhoheis,whereverheis.AndIsuggestthathehastheabilitytotapintothoseotherlayersofexistence,whichmightevenbeparallelworldsasishintedatinhisdreamwhereheencountersmanyNeos.ThatmayseemtounderminetherealnessoftheworldoftheCortexandthegoodArchitectandall,butIthinkitjustexpandstheideaofthequestion,"Whatisreal?"WhatNeodiscoversandconcludesinmystoryisthatallworldsandexistencesarereal.Thetrickistoaccepttheoneyou'reinandliveitfully.Justmorefoodforthought.ThanksforthefeedbackandIhopeIquelledsomeofyourdiscouragement.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/4/200810:16:43PMBrandonP.Keepreadingandletmeknowwhatyouthinkofthesecondhalf.AndI'mworkingontryingtogetittotheWachowskis;it'seasiersaidthandone.

Ilike6outof5stars!Thanks.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:UghDATE:9/6/20088:09:54PMCharacters'personalitiesdifferedanextremeamountfromthetrilogy.Theinteractionbetweenwasshakyatbest.Theplotwasbasicallyaninverseofthefirstmatrix.Tellme,forthenextpartwillyoutitleit"TheSuperDuperMegaMatrix,"wheretheyallrealizethattheir"reality"isjustanothercomputergeneratedillusion?NeofindsoutthatSmithisbackandreadytoterrorizeeverythinghefoughtforinthetrilogyandhedoesn'tevenbataneyelash.TheArchitectwasn'tevenclosetohischaracter,particularlyinhisdialogue.Theonlycharactersthatwerehalf-waycomparabletotheirWachowskibrotherswrittencounterpartsweretheMerovingianandPersephone.Iseriouslyhopethatyoudon'thaveanydisillusionmentsthatthiswillbemadeintoamovieorevenapaperbacksomeday.Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetopenallofthis.I'msureitwasalotofwork,buttheideaoftherebeinga"supermatrix"isextremelyunimaginitive.Youshouldsticktocreatingsomethingyourself.Ifeelthatyoucouldwritesomesci-fiwithsomehardworkandpractice,butattemptingtocontinueaclassictrilogysuchasTheMatrixisadauntingtask,andclearlyaloftygoal.AsIsaid,trytocomeupwithsomethingoriginalandyoumayhavesomesuccess.Bestofluck.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/6/20089:19:41PMUgh,Iappreciateyoutakingthetimetogivemeconstructivefeedbackdespiteitsmostlynegativebent.Icoulddefendeachpartpointforpoint,butthatwouldjustbemyopinionagainstyours.Besides,muchofwhatyoubroughtuphasbeendiscussedinearliercomments.AndIthinksomeofyourcriticismhasmerit.I'mdefinitelyinagreementwithyouthatit'stimetoworkonsomethingofmyown,whichI'mcurrentlydoing.TheSuperMatrixstorywasbasicallyanexerciseandfunchallengeformepersonallyandonethatI'vewantedtosharewithotherMatrixfans.PerhapsI'vetakenittoofarinyoureyesandtreadinterritorythat'snotmyown.Ihearthat.ButI'veneverdoneitoutofdisrespecttotheBrothers;it'smoreofanhomagefrommyperspective.DespiteyourdislikeofthisparticularextensionoftheMatrixTrilogy,IsensethatyouthinkIhavetalent.ThatIappreciateandhopetofoster.Thanksforthehonestcritiqueandnohardfeelings.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JJLoubserDATE:9/8/20087:12:13AMAccordingtomycalculationsofZionandtherealworldisnotasupermatrix,butjustaanotherkindofcontrol(realtechnology);thematrixisadreamworldcontrol;therealworldisnotadreamworld;youguysmustunderstandit;thereasonwhyNeocould

performsupernaturalintherealworldisbecausehewasmadebythemachinesinthefirstplaceandthathisbraincouldcontainamachinechipthatcanworklikeacellphone,asupernetworkchip,combinewithhisabilitiesinthematrixgiveNeotheabilitiesinMatrixRevolution,wherehecoulddestroyrealmachines.Therealworldisaadvancefuturetechnologybasedworld,butNeocouldusehisbrainpowertocommunicateanyplacewithanymachineitwaslimited,inMatrixhispowerswasnotlimited.NeowasinthecoreoftheMatrixwiththeArchitect.Themachineworldalsocontainstheirownmatrixtheyellowcode,Neowastheresohecancommunicateanyplace.ItlookslikeyouguysdonotunderstandtheMatrixRevolution,beforeyouguysgototheWachowskisjustwatchtheAnimatrixagainandthenMatrixReloadandRevolution.MystoryisstilltheclosesttothetruthoftheMatrixphilosophy.ReadthisMatrix1focusontheMatrixandtorescuesomeonefromitAnimatrix:FocusontheHistory,PhilosophyandstartoftheMatrixandZionMatrixReloaded:FocusontheMysteryoftheMatrix(theprograms)MatrixRevolution:FocusontheMachineWorld,MachineWorldMatrixandtheRealworld.***MatrixBegins:SameasAnimatrix,butnotAnimatedandstorymorecomplexandwithdramaandaction.***Matrix4:FocusontheMachineWorldenemiesotherMachines.ThegoodMachinesneedthehelp.Neocouldbedeadornot.TrinitycanberesurrectedbytheMachines.TheKidcouldhelpMorpheusandNeotofighttheenemiesoftheMachines.TheenemymachinescouldalsohaveadarkMatrixwithbadcharacters.TheMerovingianoftheMatrixcouldgetcontrolbykillingtheArchitect.AcopyofAgentSmithcouldsurviveinthetrainworld.Neoabilitiescouldbedoubled.TheKidcouldbecomelikeNeo,becausehisfaithisverystrong.Morpheuscandefeathisfirstagent.Therecanbenewphilosophiesandlessonsadded.Therecanbenewmachinesintherealworldwithexcellentbattles.TherecouldbenewstylesandfightsintheMatrix.Comeonguysletskickass.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PerDATE:9/16/20082:27:38AMIjustcouldnotstopreadingitgrabedmeandwouldn'tletgountilIwasdonereadingandthenIstillwantedthestorytokeepgoingon.IlovethisstorylinethatIcouldreadfordayswithoutsleep.GreatjobkeepupdatingIwantmore!!!!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/16/20082:38:56AMPer,I'mgladyoulikeditsomuch...butIdoubtI'llbeaddingtoit.Therestisuptopeople'simaginationatthispoint.Hopethatisn'ttoodisappointing.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:claudiusiacobDATE:9/17/200810:40:00PMHeyall,First,Imustadmit,Ihaven'treadtheothercomments.Shameonme.

However,IDIDreadtheScript,it'snow1:11AM,mefinishingit.ImustadmitthatIdidenjoyedit,tosomepoint.Sincewe'reallaccustomedtosplitthinksingoodand/orbadthings,I'llstartoutbythegoodthinks,justtotakethemofftheway.-it'sgoodtohaveNeoandTrinity"back",havethemshowertogether,makelove,lyingonthebeachandsuch.-it'scleverthewholeideaoftheCortex,theover-imposed"Super-Matrix".-ain'tbadtheideaofoverthrowingmachine'ssupremacy,andmakethemmastersovervirtualcharactersinsteadofrealhumans.Feelgood,imean:)-maybeappealingtheflashbacks,themixinofandroids(sic!)stories;-soundscooltheideaofapoliticallyunitedworld,thePresidentofthe"Free"World,hm...,wedon'tfighteachothers,fightthemachinesinstead,etc.-Maybeafewothers,sorry,Ionlyhave3000chars.HOWEVER-Thewholestoryisn'tfeelinglikeone.Therearewaytomanyfrontswherethestorygoes,like,theSource,theSuper-Matrix(theworldoftheMachines,andtheZion,thatis),theMatrixitself,plus,severalotherspotslostintimeandhistory--like,theattackofthemachines,theandroidsplanninganhomicide,ETCETERA--dude!doyoueverstoptoreviewwhatyou'vewrittensofar?-youdon'teverfinishanything,youmerelyhave,let'ssay,theplotforeachofyoursections,butthat'sit.-you'reafraidtooutyourmaincharactersatrisk,whichiswhy,thefeelingthatnothingever'shappening.ThenewNeoandTrinityseemtoliveanendlesssoapopera...-there'stoolongadreams(nightmares?)sequenceinthebeginning.WhenyouractionfinallystartsIcouldhardlybelievethisis/real/--notadream,thatis...-youstartthestoryofaMerovingianandPersephone,butgetwiththemNOWHERE,likeyougetnowherewiththeSmith(s)managingtogettotheMatrixmainframe,withtheMorpheus/Lock/othersandtheentireZioncounsel,etc...-youmerelyseemtohavefocusedofexplainingthings,butNOACTIONiseverbeingmade,bynobody(OK,excepttheSmiths,buttheiractionsleadtonowhere...)-WhyaretheMerovingiansparentsofTrinity?Whatdidyoutriedtodemonstrate?'CauseIcan'tfollowfromthescript.Whyisthe'Oracle'motherofMorpheusandLock(theyactedlikebrothers,butnotinyourscript)?What'sthepoint?INSHORT:whatpurposedoallthethosefamilylinksservefor?Imentionsoapoperaagain,wherethisisbasicplot...-Idon'tknowdude,I'veconsumed2500+ofmycharslimit,andhaven'tsaidatenthofwhatneedstobesaid...Sorryguy,reallydo,youreallyneedtogetyourselftogether,youneeddiscipline,youneedtoalsofocuson'tension','unpredictable',and'CONFLICT'--'causeyouain'tgotany--,anddon'tstartmorepathsthanyoucanfollow,and*do*eventuallyconvergeallofthem...

Sorry...Won'tmakeitswaytothescreen.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/18/20081:38:49AMclaudiusiacob,I'mgoingtohavetoagreewithmuchofwhatyousaid,positiveandnegative.You'reright.Theexpositionisabitmuch.Itwashardtoavoidthatwithaprequel/sequel.Idon'tloveit.You'reright,ImayhavebittenoffmorethanIcanchew.Thestorytriestocoveralotofterritoryinonescreenplayandthatmakesthestorylinegoinalldirections.I'mawarethatmanyofthesubplotscouldbedevelopedintowholescreenplays.Alotofpeoplehaveexpressedsimilarsentimentsintermsofwishingthestorythreadswouldcontinueorbecomemoredeveloped.Rightagain.TherelationshipbetweenTrinityandNeoisdefinitelysoapoperaterritory.It'snotshoot'emup,likewe'reusedto.Ichosetomaketheirinteractionbeaboutgainingpeace,resolution,truthandastable(albeitstrange)world.It'sdefinitelyadeparturefromtheTrilogy,butIthinkthosethingsarewhatNeowassearchingforfromthebeginning.Noteveryone'scupoftea,Iguess.AndIthinkyou'rerightaboutthedreamsequenceinthebeginningbeingtoolongornotspacedoutenough.I'llhavetofixthatifthescreenplaycatches.ButIthoughtthefocusonSmithwasfairlydeveloped;hehasbattleswithNeoandtheZionguards,escapesfromZion,reintegratesintotheMatrix,hasabattlewithSeraphandtheAgents,andfinallyattacksthemachinemainframe.MostofthosesceneswereprettyACTIONheavy,too.IalsothoughtthePersephoneandMerovingianstorywasfairlywellthoughtoutandquitecompelling.Theymeetandareinstantlyattractedtoeachother,marry,andhaveTrinity,allwhiledevelopingtheCortexbraintohousetheSuperMatrix.TheytakeresponsibilityfortheCortex'sdisruptiveanomaly,entertheSuperMatrix,andareconsequentlyunabletoreturn.HavingbeenlosttotheSuperMatrix,theydiscoverandbegintoabusetheiruniqueabilitiesandfallfromgracewhileconsolidatingtheirempire.Theyhaverun-inswiththeOracleandAgentSmith,wheretheyestablishtheirpositionintheMatrixpowerstructure.Iadmit,notmuchaction,butsomenicetensionand,intheirfirstscene,someplayfulflirtation.Idugit.Ifyoufeelsoinclined,Isuggestyouskimthescreenplayagain.IthinkyoumissedthepartabouthowpeopleintheSourcearealmostallfamilialvolunteers.TheArchitect,Trinity,Merovingian,andPersephoneareallrelated;aswell,theOracle,Jason,andMorpheusareallfamily.Idefinitelyunderstandthepartabouthowstoriesshouldhavemanypathsthatconvergeattheendandtieupthethreads.ButinthisparticularcaseIchosenottodo

so.Yes,itprobablywon'tsellinHollywood;butIreallylikemostofthestoryasitis.Alotmorecouldcomeofit,iftherightcircumstancespresentedthemselves.Asfarastension,unpredictability,andconflictareconcerned,thestorymaynothavepackedthemin,buttosaythatit"ain'tgotany"seemsabitstrong.Iappreciatethatyoutookthetimetoreadthescreenplayandmakethoughtful,specificcomments.Ididn'tlovethemallbutmanyofthemwererightonthemoney.I'lltakeyouradviseifthisthingevermovesbeyondmywebsite.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RuebenDATE:9/18/20083:11:09AMithoughtitwasgoingtobeonegiantpunchline.butiamahugefanofthematrixsomeofmyfriendsnotso.ireadthescripandisay,itsarealmindbender.ha,andithoughtfirstwasbad.sothemoralofthestoryhereisthatyouthinkyourmindcan"tbendspoonsanymorethanitcan,whathappensitstwistsandbendsevenmore.onlydislikeihavethatisthattheendofthesupermatrixwiththewholeneojr??ifyoucangetbacktomewithsomeinfothanksCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/19/200812:38:55AMReuben,Gladyouenjoyedit.Whatkindofinfowe'reyoulookingfor?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ruebenDATE:9/20/20087:40:02PMyeahiwasjustwonderingwhatyourtrueintentionsonyoursupermatrixstory.areyougoingtogowithaspinoffstorywithitlikeabookorminiseriesshow,orgoingtopushtowardsamovie.ifyoudopushittowardsamoviethere'safewthingsithinkitmightbemissinginit.thenyoumightalreadyknowafewofthem.thematrixisoneofabiggestactionsmovie,somorebigactionclimaxfighting.examplewhenneofightssmithattheendofthefirstoneandtheendingfightwithhimagainatthethirdmatrix.iforgetasomethingsihadtosayaboutitbutigetbacktoyou.oneofmybiggestthingsiswhenireadthestoryitjustended.whichiahadanothersetofquestions.whatswiththebabyattheend?itgoesthebabyfloatingtheblocksthentheend??whataboutmrsmithinthematrixwillneofinallygoinakickhisassortrickedintoanothermatrix.sorry,justasmalljoketoyourstory.ihavebeentalkingtosomeofmyfriendsaboutyourstorymostourohnonotaanothermatrixmovie.butafewothersarelikewellneverknowitmightbebetterthenthesecondandthirdone.iamallforitifyoudo.anywaysiwillbewaitingforyourresponsebackCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/20/20088:39:46PMrueben,

Isuggestyoureadtheothercommentsleftonthiswebsite;I'mprettysurethey'llanswerallthequestionsyouhave.Ifyouhavemorequestionsthataren'tansweredbythecomments,justletmeknow.I'llseeifIcananswerthem.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DaxxianDATE:9/29/20083:02:44PMBetweenthesecondandthirdmovie,myfangroupcameupwithalotofthesameideas.IlovehowittiesintheoriginandpurposeoftheMerovingian,buthisquarrelwiththeOracleseemedalittleunfounded,itcouldbebasedonabitmorethanarrogance.Overallspectacularconcepts.IthinkitbotheredalotofpeoplehowNeostruckdownthesentinalsinthesecondmovie.itwillbealittlehardtogetGloriaFosterfortheoriginalOracle,butgoodlucktoyou.oh,onemorething,moreontheandroids,thiercool.andlessonSmith,heisoldnews.COMMENT:AUTHOR:IliasDATE:9/30/200812:40:49AMHellothere,i'mamatrixfanfromGreece(SorryformybadEnglish:P).ReadingyourstoryihavetosayBravo!Yourstoryissogreat!Butilikedthewaytheoriginaltrilogyended:p(Sorrymate).ButifthisabsolutlywonderfulstorywilleverhitthebigscreentheniwouldDEFINETLYseeit.Againcongratulationsandthankyouforkeepingthematrixsagaalive:)!!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:UfukDATE:9/30/200810:22:45AMExcellent,attentive,attractive,writingUfuk(notacurseitismynamemeansHorizon:))fromTurkey(notaanimalitisacountryname.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/30/20087:46:06PMDaxxian,Iappreciatethecomments.Yeah,Iagree,theMerovingian'squarrelwiththeOracleisalittlethin;thatwasmoreapageconstraintissuethananythingelse.Iwould'velikedtofleshitoutmore.I'mnotsurehowtotackletheGloriaFosterissue;guessI'lljusthavetosolveitinproduction...ha,ha!And,yes,theandroidswe'reafundevelopment;I'dlovetofleshthemoutmore,too.MaybeinMatrix5?(Nah!)Smithisoldnews,buthe'sstillabad-assthatpeoplelovetohate.Besides,lifeintheMatrixwouldbetooquietwithouthim.Hadtokeephimin.Thanksagain.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/30/20087:48:23PMIlias,

It'sbeenapleasurewritingthestoryandhearingeveryone'scomments.I'mstilltryingtohavesometopbrassreadit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/30/20088:02:36PMUfukfromTurkey,Thankyoufortheconcise,flatteringreview.Evenafewwordscanmakemyday.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:jameshofstrandDATE:10/8/20088:57:12PMWood-...ididntthinktherecouldbea4thmatrix,ithoughtthatthewaythey(thewachowski's)leftitwasgood,andtheredidntneedtobeanymoretothestory......you'veprovedmewrong,iamhooked,isthereanywayforthe4thmovietobewrittenoffofyourscript?(notthatyouhaventtriedyet)iknowthatthiscouldmakethewachowskibrothersdosomesoulsearchingandrealizethereisstillsomemagicleftintheworld...happyhunting--SnowmanCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/8/20088:59:21PMSnowman,Thanksfortheupbeatreview.I'mstilltryingtogetthisstorytotheWachowskis.IfIsucceed,I'llbepostingitonmywebsite,don'tyouworry.Cheers.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DanielDATE:10/11/20082:03:05AMExcellentread..andyou'renotgettingpaid?(WB..whatsthedeal.)WeneedmorePersephone!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/11/20083:12:01AMDaniel,Justgettingpaidincompliments.Doesn'tbuymuchfoodanddrinkbutwhatareyagoingtodo?Keepwritingthegoodwrite,Iguess.GoPeresphone!Thanks,PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:DorianThiessenDATE:10/25/20089:21:31PMwowthiswasreallygood,iwasconfusedhowusaidtheMerovingian(victor)andhiswifehadpowers,sinceinthesecondandthirdmatrixitdoesn'tshowthatatall...butushouldcopyrightthisorw/eassoonasucansonoonestealsitfromuandmakesmillions...andalsohowdoesthatwork,neohasakid?butseriouslyhewasinthematrix,soimassuminghisgfrachelwasalsointhematrix..sohowissheoutofthematrixandhowdidshegetpregnantinthematrix,andhaveakidoutsideofit??orleavewiththekid...imjustconfusedaboutthat..otherthanthatitwasamazing!!!plzplzplzplzmakeasequal..imdieingtofindoutabouttheneojrandstuff..evenifujustaddalittlebitPLZdo.thenitdbeniceifucouldemailmewhenudo..hotmailishot100_pyro@hotmail.comCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/26/20085:56:11PMDorian,Iappreciateyourenthusiasmforthescreenplay.Thanks.ThescreenplayiscopyrightedintheLibraryofCongressandregisteredwiththeWriter'sGuildofAmerica,soI'vedoneallIcantoprotectmyinterestsatthispoint.Hopefully,that'senough.Astoyourconfusion,Ithinkyou'reabitunclearontheseparationoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix.IntheMatrix,yearsbeforeNeomeetTrinity,NeohadagirlfriendnamedRachel.Shebecamepregnantwithhischild,but,becausetheirrelationshipfellapartsoonafter,shenevertoldhimaboutthebaby.ThefirstscenewithRachelisNeo'sunconsciousmindtappingintopreviouseventsintheMatrix.He'sbeginningtodiscoverthetruth.Butit'simportanttorememberthatRachelandherson,NeoJr.,neverexistoutsideoftheMatrix.TheendingsceneisjustavisualtripfortheaudiencetomoveintotheMatrixandseethatRachel'ssonhaspowerslikeNeo'sandthesuggestionisthathewillsomehowtakeoverwhereNeoleftoff.AsfortheMerovingianandPersephone,IthinkyouareforgettingthattheMerovingianisabletowriteprogramsthatalterormanipulatehissurroundingsashedidwiththewomaninhisrestaurantwhowasservedthemagicaldessert.HealsoexitsoutadoorafterNeowinsthebigfightscenewiththeMerovingian'shenchmen.Hisexitchanges,asweseewhenNeotriestogothroughitandendsupthousandsofmilesaway.Myassumptionisthathehaspowers,butheusesthemdiscreetly.IalsoassumethatPersephonehassimilarpowersbutfeelsnoneedtousethem.Sheletsherhusbanddothedirtywork.Anyway,thosearemyexplanations.Ihopetheyclarifythingsabit.PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:DorianDATE:10/26/200810:10:49PMhelloagain..ididntreadtheendingproperly,soididntnoticetrinitysayurgffromthematrix..ithoughtshementintherealworld..whichwouldhavebeenreallyintencebecousethatwouldmeansomeonereallydidhaverealpowers...ithinkushouldwritemoreandmakeitsoneodiscovershehasskillsintherealworld..andmaybetriestogobackintothesupermatrix...thatwouldbesweet!!pleaseletmeknowifyouliketheidea..andithink,urememberwhenumadeneosayhefeltthisbeforetwice,inthematrixwhenhewasdieing?thatcouldleadtohimusinghispowersintherealworld..ithinkeveryonewouldagreewithmethatthatwouldbearellycoolidea..:DCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/27/20089:03:56PMDorian,AlthoughthestorycouldgoinmanydirectionsandIdolikeyourideas,IfeellikeI'vetakenmystoryasfarasIwouldlike.IftheWachowskiorWarnerbrotherssanctionfurtherepisodes,well,maybeIwouldbite.Butuntilthathappens(!?),I'mjustgoingtoleavewellenoughalone.Thanksforthekindwords.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkSpauldingDATE:10/28/20086:10:47PMPDWood,IhavebeenafanoftheMatrixfromdayone.Isawtheoriginalinthetheaterwhenmostpeopledidnotevenknowanythingaboutit.Partstwoandthreetomewereabitlackinginsomeoftheircontent,butIlovedthemanywaybecauseIlikedthemaincharactersandwantedtoseemoreofthem.IwasjustcurioustheotherdaytoseeifanythingwasbeingdonetoproduceaMatrix4film.ThatiswhenIranacrossyourscreenplay.IhaveverylittletimeatthepresenttodomuchreadingbutIfiguredIwouldgiveitafewminutestoseewhatIthought.Honestly,asIsatherereadingyourwork,Iwasseeingtheimagesflashingbeforemyeyes.Ithoughtitwasfascinating.Iamnotheretoofferacriticism.Having,writtenabookofmyown,Ialreadyknowhowhardofataskthiscanbe.IjustwantyoutoknowthatIthoroughlyenjoyedyourworkandIwouldgoseethismovieinaheartbeatwereitevermade.Ithoughtyourcharacterdialogwasrightontarget.Icouldexpandonthatcommentatyourrequest.Unfortunately,orfortunately(however,youcouldinterpretit)Iwantmore.Astiredofthisstoryasyoumightbe,itisanintriguingonetobesure.Andthecharacters,aretrulycomplexandendearing.Youareaverytalentedwriterandhaveacleargrasponthisidea.Iwouldapplaudyourdesiretodooriginalwork,butthereisnoconflicttodoinganothereditionofyourMatrixdevelopmentatthesametime.Don'tknowyourschedulebutitissomethingtoconsider...Isitnot,MonAmi(alittleMerovingianhumor).I'mnotreallyacritic,butonewhoenjoyeditverymuch.ThereisnowayintheworldwithalltheCGIactionstuffinallthesemoviesbeingmadethatyouwon'texperiencesimilaritiesinstorylineetc.i.e.Terminator...IRobotetc.andetc.Sodon'tletthecommentsofthosewhospendtheirtimetryingtofindthesesimilaritiesto"burstyour

bubble"botheryou.Theywillalwaysbethere.Ithoroughlyenjoyedyourworkandwouldliketoseemoreofthesame.AndIwouldbethefirstinlinetoseethebigscreenproductionofMatrix4.Thanksagainforallyourhardwork.Itbroughtsomemuchneededjoyandatwohourrespitetomypresentcircumstances.Greatjob!!!Writebackanytime.PSDidyoueversubmitittoWBoranyoneelse...IthinkitcouldbeverybigboxofficeinthefutureconsideringsomeofthecrapcomingoutofHollywoodlately.Behopefulandencouraged.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/28/20088:13:15PMMark,ThosearesomeofthenicestcommentsI'vereceivedrecently.I'mgladyouwereabletosqueezeinacoupleofhoursofreadingandthatthescreenplaydidn'tdisappoint.Asyousaid,writingabook/screenplayisalotofwork;Iguesswe'vebothbeenthere.Youmentionedthatthecharacterdialogwas"rightontarget",whichIappreciate.WhatIhearverylittleaboutfromreaders,though,iswhichspecificscenesofdialogwerereallyintriguingorgripping.Perhapsyoucouldpointoutoneortwothatyoureallylikedandwhy.Asforwritingmore...well,perhaps...ifanewstorylinehitsmethewaytheSuperMatrixstorylinedid;thatonejustblossomedinmyheadalmostinstantly.And,really,theimpetusformorewouldprobablycomemoreeasilyifIcouldgetsomeprofessionalinterestintheSuperMatrixstory.Andspeakingofprofessionalinterest,Irecentlysentthestorytoaprofessional,currently-employed-in-a-high-profile-TV-seriesactorwhowasaschoolmateofmineincollege.It'sbeenonlyaweek,sonoresponseyet,butitseemslikethebestavenueIcanfindtomoveituptheHollywoodladder.Hopeithooks.Thanksagainfortheglowingcomments.AtthemomentIamdefinitelyveryhopefulandencouraged.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AndreaBartleyDATE:10/29/20083:23:46PMIlikethescreenplayivebeendyingforanewmatrixmovieijustcanthandletheendofNeoandimgladtheybroghtTrinityback.IdontthinkNeofitstheoriginalNeointhemovie.Inthescreenplayhequestionsalmosteverythingandinthemovieheknowswhathecanandcanttrustsohedoesntquestionanythingandthematrixitselfdoesntsoundthesame.OnethingidolikeisthefightingitsveryoriginalandveryNeo.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/29/20088:29:47PM

Andrea,Gladyoulikeditoverall.Yes,Neodoesalotofquestioninginmyscreenplay.Hardtosaywhetherit'sincharacterornot.Justremember,thisisthesecondtimeNeohasgonethrougharadicaltransformationofhisreality.Thefirsttimeishardenoughtobelieveandcometogripswith,butasecondtimemightthrowanyoneintoaseriousquestioningmood.ThenewworldheentersisalsoquitedifferentfromtheworldofZioninthatNeoisnolongerinthepositionofhavingtobeasavior.Whenthere'sthatkindofpressureonyou,questioningstartstolooklikeaseriousweakness,don'tyouthink?Andthesenseofurgencyhasbeenremoved,too.Hehastimetoreflectandquestion.Justafewpointstomakemycase.Idefinitelyenjoyedwritingthefightscenes.Iparticularlyliketheonewheretheandroid36'sattackthefortifiedcastle.Thanksforthekindwords.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BrianWDATE:11/1/200812:18:18PMheyhaveyousenttheMatrix4scripttotheWachowskiBros??andifuhavesentit,havetheysentfeedbacktoyou??COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnthonyHDATE:11/10/20088:43:08AMMan,wheredoibeginhere?Somuchofthisstorywassoextremelysatisfying...SuperblyCreative,especiallyfindingoutthathumansareactuallystillincontrolandZionisanotherformofaMatrixprogram...tokeepthemachinesunderwraps?...Sh*t...getouttahere...iloveit.Thewayyoulinkedallthecharacterstogetherasfamilyandsuchwasveryappealing.Neofindingpeaceinhisnewhomewiththewomanheloves...that'dbenutts!wakinguptofindtheoneyoulovedwho'ddiedstillexists...andtoltallyremembersyou...Obviously,thewayyoukeptsomanyelementsconnectedinyourownrenditionofthecontinuationofthisstorywasreallyimpressive.(Fattestrun-onsentencei'veevermade):)...asafewpeoplecommented,therewasalotleftout...andyourpointistoleavethesethingsopenendedtoletwethereadersuseourimagination.Thebottomlineisthatthiswasanindependentprojectthatyoudidforyourownreasons...tocritquethequalityofthescreenplayissilly...ithinkyourgoalwastocreateadecentcontinuationandansweralotofquestions...andyoudid,man.yourstorywasamazing...Butasabitchenwriter,you'vecreatedsomanynewquestionsintheprocess...iknowyou'repotentiallyburntout...

andihatetocritique,butthisiswithalldorespect,sir...ithinkyouhavecreativetalent...andithinktoimplythatlittleNeowillgrowupandmaybetakeonSmithisaneasywayout...SmithaloneandhisnewpowerisenoughforshittogetcatastrohicASAP!ithinkyoumaybewantedtoendtheprojectandthatwashow...yousaidyouwereburnt,right?iunderstandasanartist,andthatmightbewhatiwoulddotoo...ButMr.Wood,sayinganythingistoomuchismereopinion...Allicandoissay...tome,youareahero,man.forcreatingthis...iencourageyoutothinkofthecountlesspeopleyou'vebroughtjoyto.andasmuchtimeasyouspentonthis,youknowdamnwellasido,thatthiswasamerefractionofthestorie'spotential.you'veopenedpossibilitytomeforawholenewtrilogy...andisthatreallysoaweful?theonlyotherbigmovieiknowofwasStarWars...Andbytheway...WhatifNeowantedtofreehisson?orunitewithhim?orwhatever...?dude,youhavethepowerhere,andnottoputthepressureonyourshoulders...butyou'vebecomelikeSpidey,greatpower,greatresponsibility...you'vealreadyaffectedlordknowshowmanylives?imagineifyouheldontothisfight?ihiglyencourageyou,myfriendtokeepgoing,forus...doitforotherpeopleatbest,you'realreadyahero,butdissapointmentistobehadbymanyothers...togetnomorefromyou...But,nowthatithinkaboutit,maybeyou'dWANTmeandwhoevertoconinueyourstory?maybeNeofindinghissonishowiamsupposedtocontinuethis.maybeiwill.Butisay,takeabreakforawhile,andgetyourassbacktowork,man!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/11/20081:52:08AMAnthony,Thanksfortheeffusivepraise;I'mhappythescreenplaybroughtyousuchenjoyment.AndIappreciateyoucommentingonthespecificelementsofthescreenplaythatcapturedyourimagination(i.e.humansstillincontrol,linkingthecharacterstogether,Neowakingtofindtheoneheloves).Nowyou'vegotmeinacornerwithallthatenthusiasm;youhaveatalentforwhattosaytomakeawriterwanttodomore.Andit'snotthatIdon'thavemoreideas;Icouldgoonformanyscreenplays.ButevenwhileIwaswritingtheSuperMatrix,Ialwaysfeltlikeitwasn'tmyownproject.Yes,it'smystoryline,buttheunderlyingthemebelongstosomeoneelse.I'vebeentryinghardtoshoptheSuperMatrixaroundandseeifsomeoneinHollywoodwillbite.Nothingyet.Ifthere'senthusiasmforwhatI'vedonefromthatcornerofthemovieworld,I'lldomorewiththestory.Butuntilthen,I'mgoingtosticktomygunsandworkonsomethingofmyown.Thatdoesn'tmeanI'llnevercomebacktoit;butitdoesmeanI'vegototherthingstoaccomplishfirst.Andbyallmeanstakeacrackatfurtherepisodes.I'mbuildingonsomeoneelse'swork;youcancertainlybuildontopofmine.Butbewarned,it'salongtripdowntherabbit

holetryingtowriteascreenplayofanykind.AsmuchasIlovedwritingthisthing,italsobeatthe****outofme.Nicetohaveitdone!Hardtodomore!Onceagain,thanksforthefantasticandthoughtfulencouragementandcomments.Reallymademyday.Andcheckininanother8to12months;maybeI'llhavedonea180andwillbefullyembarkedonanotherepisode.Youneverknow.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:K-BLDATE:11/16/20081:13:47AMIreallylikedtheMatrix4scriptthatyouwrote.Theonlyflaw,infact,thatIfoundwasthatitleftmehangingforanother.DoyouplanonwritinganotherMatrixscript?Imean,youhaveastorythatyouwanttotell,telluswhatitis.Completeyourtrilogy....COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/16/20081:25:55AMK-BL,Ifthat'stheonlyflawyoucanfind,I'lltakethatasasupremecompliment.Theissueof"moretocome"hasbeendiscussedquiteabitintheothercomments;pleasetakealookatthemforanindepthanswertoyourquestion.Infactthecommentprevioustoyourswasaboutjustthesamething.Thanksfortakingthetimetoreadthescreenplayandleavemesomefeedback.Alwaysaday-maker.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:creeperDATE:11/18/200810:08:10AMIstoppedreadingafterthesecondpagebecausethefirstsceneiscrapandthecharactersareallwrong.Firstitshouldn'tstartwithsomeboringdialog.Secondlythecharacterspersonalityandattitudesareallwrong.ThelasttimeMorpheusandNiobetalkedwithLocktheywerepissedathimsothewaybothofthemactedtowardLockisbullbecauseMorpheus(inRevolutions)believedwitheveryounceofhisbeingthatNeosavedthem.SoMorpheus,inhisfirstlinewouldhavedisagreedwithlockandwouldprobablysaidsomethingalongthelinesof"Iknowwhathappened,Neosavedus."Also,Morpheuswouldhavearguedwithlocksthirdline,"idon'tbelievewehavetheluxuryofassumingthewarisover."BecausehebelievedNeowouldbringanendtothewar.Thatismyrant.Thisscriptiscrap.Agreeornotidon'tcare.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/18/20089:20:25PMcreeper,I'msurprisedyoufoundmyopeningscenetobesounbelievable.ThefirstthingLocksaysis,"Itsurelookslikeamiracletome,"immediatelyestablishinghistacit

acceptanceofMorpheus'sbeliefsandtherebysettingupapositiverelationshipbetweenallthreeofthem.Heevengoesonestepfurtheranddirectlyapologizestothem.ThenNiobeandMorpheusinreturnshowrespectforLockbyagreeingtoworkwithhim.Andgiventhatthemachineshaveleftandthewarappearstobeover,itdidn'tseemtomethatatthatmomentthosethreewouldbeinaparticularlyadversarialmood.Cooperationlookedlikeaplausibledirection.Justmyopinion,though.Iwouldhavebeenmoreopentoyouroverallassessmentofthescriptbeingcrapifyouhadmanagedtoreadpastpage2andthenmakeyourproclamation.Personally,Ithinkyoumissedaninterestingifnotthoughprovokingstorymerelybecausethefirsttwopagesweredisappointing.Ifyoureadthewholethingandstillthinkit'sunworthy,I'dbemorethanwillingtoacceptyourassessmentoftheentirescript.Ihopeyoutakethetimetoreadit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:anthonyH,yesi'mback!DATE:11/20/20088:41:16AMDude!iwonderedtomyselfifi'dhavetheprivaledgetogetaresponseback...sureenough,you'readamncoolcat,man.Respect...afterreadingotherpeople'scommentswheretheyseemtobetalkinsumSh*t,i'dliketosaysomethingencouraging,buticantellyou'vegotagoodattitudeandihaven'treadanyreplythatsoundedoutofline...:)youtellingmemywordsareencouragingforyouasawriter,isacompliment,indeed.thankyou.bro,iunderstandhowthisentirestoryhadtowhupyourassforsure...artrequirestimeandincredibleselfdiscipline,iimagineespeciallyinthisrealmofwriting...Onesmallcounterattackimustthrowoutinreguardstobuildingoffsomeoneelsesworkisthis.ifivaguelyknowcorrectly,GeorgeLucaswastheoriginalwriterofStarWars,himorwhoeveritwas,right?butmyman,ifyoulookaround,youwillfind"HUNDREDS"ofcontinuationandsidestorieswrittenbycompletelyoutsideparties,andguesswhat?theysell.andalotofemarerad(goodword,right)BecausealotofpeoplereallylovetheStarWarsuniverse.andlikemyselfintheend,don'treallygiveash*twhowrote'em...howboutspiderman,xmen,youthinkitwasthesameauthortheentiretimewhowrotethethousadsofstories.whatisimportantifyoudocontiueithinkistomakesuretostaytruetotheoriginaluniverseandcharactersacertainwaysoastonotcreatecontradictions.Asimpleencouragementforyou,Youyourselfalreadysaidyouhavemoreideasbrewingforthisright?itkindofsucksbecauseireallylikethisstoryasitis,butinordertocreatemoredetailwiththefuturestoriestocome,ialmostwanttosaytomaybelookatthisasaroughdraftperhaps?it'slikeSOMUCHwascrammedintothisonestory,andasisaid,you'vecreatedincrediblepotentialformore.Dude,Thestoryoftherenegaderobotstryingtosabotagethingsforthehumansinthereal,realworldisawhole,entirenewstoryinitself!whatwouldbetocomeafterSmithwhoopsassonthedominatingmachines,aswell,maybeeventuallythey'dfightback,somanynewturnsandopenings,here!!!dude,idon'tknow,you'veopenedupsomanyideas,perhapsyoucouldworkonyourownproject,andalsokeepflowingWITHthisMatrixcontinuation.It'sBadass,bro!RememberalltheauthorswhocontinueonStarwars.iknowyou'dfaceatediousbattle

tocontinue,butitoltallybelieveinyou,man.screwhollywoodiftheygiveyouthefinger.you'vealreadybuiltafanbase.onyourownstory,iseeyoucreatingabadassfiction,andpublishedornot,yougotonefanthat'llbetheretoread...justthoughtofthis.haveyouthoughtofWRITINGanewMartixtrilogyinthreebooks?notsomuchscreenplaysformovies?justanidea,tillnexttime,bestofluckeitherwayyougo...Butseriously,keepgoing,damnit.:DRespectandPeace...anthonyp.s.thanxagainforwriting,man.COMMENT:AUTHOR:eonDATE:11/21/20081:23:42AMImustsayreallyacutestoryline,andalsothevisuals.nowcomethe"But".ithinkallthisspeculationaboutthesupermatrix,andmakingtheworldofziontobejustanothermatriculatedillusion,isarisingfromtheneedtoexplainNeo'spowersinthezionworld,inpreviousmovies.Icannotbelievethatthemoviescanhavesuchmonodirectionalinterpretation.InthemoviesNeohadthepowers(inzionworld)justtomanipulatemachines,butinthe"Matrix"hehadmuchmorefreedomliketomanipulatespace(likeflying,stoppingbulletsetc..)andotherprograms(thesmithexplosioninthefirstmovie).Itclearlytellsthatzionworldisnotlikethematrix.weknowthatonlythepeoplewithpluggingholestobeconnectedcangoinsidethematrix.theyareakindofcyborgs,buttheycanaswellcarrythemselvesadevicetogetremotelyconnected.OnepossibleanswertothethingsshowninthemovieisbysomekindofwirelesscommunicationbetweenNeo'sbrainthemachinesandeventhematrixNetwork,whichisdoneexactlyaswhenapersonispluggedintothematrix,butnowtheinformationbeingtransferedthroughdifferentmedium.HoweverthiswaspossibleonlywhenNeohadreachedthesourceandtalkedtothearchitect.itwasthischangewhichhelpedhimtounderstandthemachinelanguagein"zionworld"andfinallytohackthem,andorderedthemachinestodestroythemselves.justassimilarwhensmith(neo'scounterpart)intrudedthezionworldbyhackingintoarealperson'sbrain.butireallylikedtheideaofsmithgettingintoaperson'sbrainandkeepingabackupofhiscopyforfutureuse,whichhedidveryinterestinglyinyourversion.anywaythiscantakeusmuchfarfromyourversionofmatrix4,andtoacompletelynewsetofideasformatrix4.oneofthemtostartwithcouldbethatneoalsohasputtedacopyofhisselfinthematrixintheformofavirtualhuman,andcontactsmorpheus.onethingwhichiwanttosayisthat,youhaveputtedquiteanamountofsoaptothe

movie,bymakingeveryoneelsethesonordaughteroftheother,whichifindreallyannoying(imsrry).anywaysireallylovedthereading,andmaybereaditonemoretime.youarereallyverytalented.hopetoseeyournameunderthescreenplaywriterinamovieofyourownoriginalidea.goodluckCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/21/20082:15:28AMAnthonyH,Nottoworry.IfI'mnotmistaken,IthinkI'verespondedtoeverysinglecommentwithin24hours.IfigureIoweittoanyonewhotakesthetimeandefforttoreadthestory,gobacktomysiteandwritemeacomment.Yourattitudeandwordsarealsoveryencouraging;youkindofknowjustwhattosaytomakeaconductorwanttokeepthetrainrolling.Butwantinganddoingaretwodifferentthings.TheSuperMatrixstoryreallywasanexerciseinfunandawayformetocutmyteethasascreenwriter;Iwasprettysurefameandfortunewouldnotbeanendresult.WiththisstoryundermybeltI'mlookingtowritescreenplaysthatwillactuallysellandmakeittothebigscreen(ifthat'satallpossible).Unfortunately,continuingtheMatrixstoryisnotlikelytogenerateincomeormakeittothebigscreendespitethefactthat,asyousay,thereisSOMUCHpotentialinthestory.ThedesiretowriteoriginalmaterialinadditiontofeelingabitburntoutwiththeSuperMatrixstoryarethereasonsI'mnotgoingtopursuemoreMatrixstuffrightnow.I'dreallyliketobeknownmoreformyownoriginalworkthanjustastheguywhopiggybackedontheWachowskiworld.LikeIsaid,though,whoknowswhatthefutureholds.I'mstillsendingthescreenplayintotheHollywoodstreamhopingforabite.Givemesixmonthstoayear,letmewriteoneortwoscreenplaysofmyownand,bythen,maybeI'llbechompingatthebitforsomemoreMatrixyumyum!I'llkeepyourwordsinmindanddon'tthinkIhaven'tbeenflattered.Ithinkyougivemetoomuch.Let'sjusthopeI'mnotaone-hitwonder.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/21/20082:58:48AMEon,Allyourcommentsarethoughtfulandprecise.I'mgladyoufoundsomuchenjoymentinthereadingeventhoughthereweremanypartsthatdidn'tfitthewayyoumighthavehoped.Manyoftheissuesyouhavewiththestoryhavebeentalkedaboutinearliercomments

andIurgeyoutoreadthemsoyoucanseewhatmyrationalewasformanyofmystorylinechoices.And,yes,readingthestoryasecondtimecanhelpclarifymanyissuesandgiveyouafullerunderstandingofthestory.It'sprettydenseandthetimejumpingcanbehardtofollowonthefirstread.Ifyoudoreaditagain,Ithinkyou'llseethatIgotogreatlengthstoestablishthattheworldofZionisnotjustanothermatriculatedillusion(which,Iagree,wouldgiveitamonodirectionalinterpretation).Ipointoutthatallworldswhethervirtualorseeminglyrealorjustasvalidandtangible.MorpheusgoestogreatlengthstoconvinceNeothatrealityisjustaseriesofelectricalimpulsesinterpretedbyyourbrain.ForMorpheusthisisajustificationtorejectthesimulatedworldoftheMatrix;butformeitisanargumentthatestablishesthevalidityandrealnessoftheMatrixoranyworldthatyouexperience.SointhissensetheMatrixworld,theZionworld,andtheworldoftheCortexandSuperMatrixareallequallyrealworldstobetreatedwiththesamerespectandcompassion.It'salsoimportanttonotethatmostofmystoryhappensoutsideoftheZionandMatrixworlds;therulesintheworldoftheCortexandtheSuperMatrixaredifferentsonoteveryexplanationthatwasgiveninReloadedandRevolutionsisgoingtopertaintothem.YourideaofNeoputtingabackupcopyintotheMatrixthewayPageSmithputoneintoZionopensupalotofpossibilities.Inaway,though,thatiswhatNeohasdone(albeitinadvertently)attheendofmystory.Neo'soldgirlfriend,Rachel,haschosentobringtoterm,bear,andraiseNeo'ssonwithouthisknowledge.It'skindoflikeabackupcopyhedoesn'tknowhehas.Formeit'stoobadyoudidn'tliketheideaoftheextendedfamilies.Personally,Ifoundthattobeoneofthemostintriguingideasaboutmystory.Iguessitiskindofsoapyinaway...butforme,it'sagoodway.IlikethedramaticironyofthingssuchasMorpheusandLockbeingbrothers,oftheOracletheirmother.IthoughtitwasastokeofgeniustomakethefamilialtiesbetweentheArchitect,theMerovingian,PersephoneandTrinity.TalkaboutFreud'swetdreamofpsychoanalysis.Andperhapsthat'sexactlywhyyouthinkit'ssoapy.Anyway,Iabsolutelylovethataspectofthestoryandthewayeachrevelationofitslowlyunfolds.Itwasreallyfuntosortout.Perhapswithasecondreadingyou'llseemoretoitthanjustasuperficialsoapyfilmbutratheradeep-cleaning,sudsy-actionedcarwashofthesoul(that'samouthful!).Thankssomuchforthecomments,critique,andpraise.Alwaysfoodforthought.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnthonyHDATE:11/21/20087:05:14AMRespect,ithinkthisisabattlewithwhichicansheathemyswordto...yourstorywasbithceneitherway...ifyouhappentohavealltheemailsofthoseuswho'vewritten.pleasedoinformwethemassesofwhenYOURstorycomesout...Mybestwishestoyouingettingintohollywood,ireckonyou'reinforthefightofyourlife.

however,intheory,ifyouhaveenoughcashflow,youcancreateyourownindependentproject.Shouldigetnoemaildowntheroad...i'msurei'drecognizethenamePDwoodwhenitgetsbig...keeppushinyourself,hard...tillnexttime.peaceandrespectCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/21/20089:03:39PMAnthonyH,Therespectismutual.AndanyscreenplaythatIfinish,Iwilldefinitelybringtomyaudienceinoneformoranother(hopefullyasacompletedmovie!).Yourkindwordshavegivenmerenewedconfidencethatmynextworkwillhopefullysharesimilartraitsof"bitchenness".Thanksagainandseeyouinthemovies.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AlanH.DATE:11/28/20083:50:50AMIreallyloveyourMatrix4:TheSuperMatrixstoryandreallylookingforwardtoseeitcomingtoscreen.Keepupagoodjob!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/28/20082:40:05PMAlanH.Iappreciatethegoodword.Stillworkingonthemovieangle.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeDATE:11/30/20084:03:44PMThanksforthis,justreaditinonereading,assuggested.IwillreturntoreadallofthecommentswhenIhavemoretime.Ihopethismakesittoscreen,Ienjoyeditverymuch.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/30/20088:08:37PMJoe,Yourenjoymentismyenjoyment.Thanksforreading.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RandyDATE:12/6/20086:35:20PMreadthisoveratsimplyscripts.comandwhatIhavetosayiswow.Thatwasamazing.Trulyamazing.Startedreadinganddidn'tmissabeattillIwasdone.Itwasallthere.Whatahook.IcouldnotimagineMatrix4beinganythingelseafterreadingthis.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/7/200810:42:35PM

RB,I'mhappytoseethatthescreenplayisgettingsomeattentionoverthereatsimplyscripts.com.Gettingthehookinearlyinthestorywaskeytogettingpeopletoreadthewholething.Nicetoknowthattherewasaprizewinningfishattachedtothehookforyou.Thanksfortheveryencouragingwords.Hopefully,itwillbejustaspowerfulonthebigscreen.Yeah!PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:WhiteSheWolfDATE:12/13/20085:12:59AMIjustfinishedreadingyourscreenplayforthefirsttime,andallIcansayiswow.Ihappeneduponthisquitebyaccident;IwasrakingthewebforrumorsofanactualMatrix4,whenIstumbleduponyourscreenplay.Itisintelligent,coherent,andwell-written...nottomentionthatitfitsinperfectlywiththeseries.Ireallywouldlovetosaymore,butfranklyI'mstillthroughlyconfusedandneedsomeprocessingtime:-PMyonlynegativecommentwouldbethattheendseemedslightlyabrubt...butthatcouldjustbeme.I'dprettymuchdieofjoyifthiswasmadeintoanactualmovie.-WolfOut.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/13/20082:23:15PMWhiteSheWolf,Comingacrossitunexpectedlyisprobablythenicestwaytoencounterthestory;nopreconceivednotionsorforummemberstottingitasthebest(orworst)thingthey'veeverread.Justafreshread.I'mveryhappytohearthatyouenjoyeditsomuchandthatyouthinkitfitsinwiththeTrilogy.Yes,theendingisabitabruptandopen-ended.Somepeoplelikeit;mostpeoplethinkitleavestoomuchunsaid.Justabouteveryoneseesanotherepisodeafterit.Personally,Ilikethatitleavespeoplethinkingaboutwhatcouldhappen.I'mguessingyourcommentaboutbeingconfusedstemsfromthemanyflashbacksandtimelineshifts.Ifthat'strue,Ithinkaveryquicksecondreadwillclarifythestoryimmensely,nowthatyouhavethebasicthreadinyourmind.Ifit'sanotherissuethat'sconfusingyou,pleaseletmeknowandI'lltrytoclarify.Thanksagainforreadingandcommenting.PDOutCOMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:12/14/20084:04:52AM

ImustsayIenjoyyou'rewritingstyleverymuch,andyouclearlyhavealotofgoodideasyouareworkingwithinthisscript,butasaMatrixfan,I'mnotsureitreallyfitsverywellwiththerestoftheseries.Forstarters,itseemslikeyoubacktrackfromallofthethirdfilm'sphilosophicalconclusionsinordertotakeeverythinginanewdirectionsthattheWachowskiBrothersdecidedlyavoidedinRevolutions.ThewholeMatrix-within-a-MatrixideaissomethingIseemtorecalltheWachowskiBrothersdiscountingasamovethatwouldcheapentheweightofeventsthusfar.Ialsodon'tseethephilosophicalimportanceofmakingsuchamove,astheMatrixalreadyshakestheveryfoundationsofourconceptionsofstaticreality,andIdon'tthinka"SuperMatrix"reallyaddsanythingtothis.Forme,theSource,alongwiththeentireworldoftheMachines,representssomethingsoinfinitelycomplexthatitcouldnotbegintobecapturedbythehumanmind,andthusahuman-controlledMatrixcouldn'tpossiblycontainit.IdefinitelywouldliketoseetheSourceexploredfurtherinanewMatrixfilm,butinawaythatfullycommunicatesthesenseofmysteryandawesuchanexplorationshouldconvey.AsIsaid,youseemtobeaverytalentedwriter,andIapplaudyouforlookingdeeperintotheMatrixandwishingforacontinuationoftheseries,justasIdo.However,Idon'tthinkthisistherightdirectionforafourthMatrixfilmtotake.InadditiontothelargerphilosophicalissueI'veoutlinedabove,therearealsoafewtechnicalissuestoconsider.Firstofall,theMatrixOnlineisalreadycontinuingthestoryoftheMatrixseriesinanepisodicformat,detailingforitsplayerstheeventsfollowingtheconclusionofthethirdfilm.Asthisstoryistoldinaninteractiveformat,thegame'splayerstendtofeelattachedtotheseeventsastheyoccur,andwouldlikelyfeelincrediblycheatedifanewMatrixfilmjusterasedthewholethingfromafictionalexistenceinconnectionwiththelargerseries.Assuch,IbelieveafourthMatrixfilmwouldhavetotakeplacewellafterthethirdfilm(perhapsoveradecade),sothattheeventsofMatrixOnlinecouldbeincorporatedwithinthecontinuityofthelargerMatrixseries.Also,thereareafewspecificthingswithinyourscriptthatdon'tseemtofitwithinalargerseriescontinuity.Forone,whenMervmeetstheOracle,SeraphwouldnotbeathersideatthatmomentinMatrixhistory.SeraphusedtoworkfortheMerovingian,whichiswhyhekneweverydetailofClubHel,andwhyit'sguardscalledhim"Wingless,"referringtoSeraphim,thefallenangelsfromwhichhegetshisname.Earlyinyourscript,NeoreferstoapromiseofpiecethattheArchitectmade,buttheArchitectmadenosuchpromise.IntheeventsleadingtothefinalbattleofTheMatrix:Revolutions,NeospoketoDeusExMachina,thevoiceoftheMachineCity,nottheArchitect.Additionally,youhaveTrinitybeingawakenedfromtheMatrixinhertwenties,whereitissuggestedinthefirstfilmthatalmostallRedpillsareawakenedwhentheyareveryyoung,andthatonlyforaspecialcircumstance(suchasthereturnoftheOne)willtheyawakenanadult.Ithink,aswell,thatsceneswiththeOraclewouldbechallengingtopulloff,astheactresswhoplayedtheOraclebeforehertransformationbetweenReloadedandRevolutions,isunfortunatelynolongerwithus.ItseemstobeimpliedthattheOraclehasnotchangedforminMorpheus'lifetime,asheissurprisedtosee

shedoesnotappearassheoncedidwhenheencountersheratthebeginningofthethirdfilm.ItispossiblethatshehaschangedforminbetweenthemeetingwiththeMerovingianyououtlineandhertimewithMorpheus,buttheaudiencemightbeconfusedbytwoactressesplayingonecharacterinthepastandpresent.Speakingof,howdoyoureconciletheOracle'schangeinformwithherpresenceasasinglehumanbeingintheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?Speaking,onceagain,ofthescript'scentralconceptoftheSuperMatrix,I'mthinkingitmaynotbethemostmarketableconcept.YoumayhavehadinmindconceptsofAurobindo'sSupermindorNeitzche'sSuperman,butitmay,inthetrailers,comeacrossmorelikeSuperMarioBrothers.Thatsaid,Ilovealotaboutthescript.Thesurrealistpassagesarefascinating,andyou'vecertainlymasteredtheartofthechronologyshift.Thestoryofthefreedom-fighterandroids(andthe"future"Earthinwhichtheylive)isverycompelling,andyou'veaddedabrillianttouchofthesurreal,aswell,totheirarchitectureandmovement.Itwouldbecooltoseetheseelementsexploredinanotherscript,possiblyunconnectedwithMatrixlore.COMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:12/14/20085:29:12AM(Continuedfrompreviousmessage.)Additionally,youhaveTrinitybeingawakenedfromtheMatrixinhertwenties,whereitissuggestedinthefirstfilmthatalmostallRedpillsareawakenedwhentheyareveryyoung,andthatonlyforaspecialcircumstance(suchasthereturnoftheOne)willtheyawakenanadult.Ithink,aswell,thatsceneswiththeOraclewouldbechallengingtopulloff,astheactresswhoplayedtheOraclebeforehertransformationbetweenReloadedandRevolutions,isunfortunatelynolongerwithus.ItseemstobeimpliedthattheOraclehasnotchangedforminMorpheus'lifetime,asheissurprisedtoseeshedoesnotappearassheoncedidwhenheencountersheratthebeginningofthethirdfilm.ItispossiblethatshehaschangedforminbetweenthemeetingwiththeMerovingianyououtlineandhertimewithMorpheus,buttheaudiencemightbeconfusedbytwoactressesplayingonecharacterinthepastandpresent.Speakingof,howdoyoureconciletheOracle'schangeinformwithherpresenceasasinglehumanbeingintheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?Speaking,onceagain,ofthescript'scentralconceptoftheSuperMatrix,I'mthinkingitmaynotbethemostmarketableconcept.YoumayhavehadinmindconceptsofAurobindo'sSupermindorNeitzche'sSuperman,butitmay,inthetrailers,comeacrossmorelikeSuperMarioPageBrothers.Thatsaid,Ilovealotaboutthescript.Thesurrealistpassagesarefascinating,andyou'vecertainlymasteredtheartofthechronologyshift.Thestoryofthefreedom-fighterandroids(andthe"future"Earthinwhichtheylive)isverycompelling,andyou'veaddedabrillianttouchofthesurreal,aswell,totheirarchitectureandmovement.Itwouldbecooltoseetheseelementsexploredinanotherscript,possiblyunconnectedwithMatrixlore.

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/15/200812:53:55AMiFiction,SonicetohearyourcommentsandappreciationoftheworkI'veputintothis.Thesurrealpassageswereindeedalotoffun.Thechronologywasabitch.Ihadtomapthewholethingoutonatimelineandkeepitnexttomeatalltimeswhilewriting.Greatfuntofinallyhaveallthechronologicaljigsawpiecesfinallyfittogether,though.Andtheandroidswerecompellingforsure.Iwouldhavelikedtohavemorepagesforthem.Icanseeyou'vereallydigestedthescriptcompletelyconsideringthedepthandthoroughnessofyourinsights.AndonthewholeIagreewith(oratleastunderstandthelogicbehind)mostofyourconcerns.AsfarastheWachowskiBrothersintentionsareconcerned,Idon'trecallthemhavingcommentedspecificallyonthenotionofaMatrix-within-a-MatrixorthecheapeningeffectthatitmighthaveontheTrilogy.PerhapsyoucoulddirectmetothesourceofthatinformationasIwouldbeveryinterestedinreadingit.IthinkyourpointsabouttheMatrixOnlinehavingalreadyprogressedthestoryandtheconsequentpossibilityofmystoryunderminingthatprogressionisvalidwithrespecttohardcoreMatrixfans.I'mnotsure,however,thatthesoftcore(?)Matrixfanswouldbeasputoffbyit.Hardtoknow.WhethertheotherkeyelementsofmystoryarechallengingandexcitingenoughforthehardcorefanstobewillingtooverlookmyexclusionoftheMatrixOnline'sdevelopmentisalsohardtosay.Hopefully,theywillbe.Youmentionthat"theSource,alongwiththeentireworldoftheMachines,representssomethingsoinfinitelycomplexthatitcouldnotbegintobecapturedbythehumanmind,andthusahuman-controlledMatrixcouldn'tpossiblycontainit".Fromtheperspectiveofourcurrenttechnology,Iwouldagreewithyouthat"ahuman-controlledMatrixcouldn'tpossiblycontainit",butmystorytakesplace240yearsfromnow(AD2249).I'mguessingthattechnologywillhaveprogressedquitefarbythenandperhapswewillhavethecapacitiesItalkabout.Again,aleapofimagination.TheincorporationofaMatrix-within-a-Matrixwasnotsomuchadeviceusedtocreatesurpriseasitwastointroduceanuancedandinterconnectedsubplot.Thebattleofhumansoverandroidswasoneofthosesubplots.Formetheideaofthehumansbeingincontrolofsmartmachines(inessencesubjugatingthemforhumanexploitation)isareversalofthehuman/machinedynamicintheTrilogy.Suddenly,wefeelaweirdsortofsupportfortheunderdogandroid36s(we'realmostrootingforthemachines!),fightingfortheirverysurvivalandindependenceagainstthe(tyrannical?)humans.Andthenthere'sthefamilyrelationships.Ithoughtthisreallyaddeddepthtothewholestory.Here'swhatIwroteinanearliercomment:"Ifoundthefamilyrelationshipstobeoneofthemostintriguingideasaboutmystory.IlikethedramaticironyofthingssuchasMorpheusandLockbeingbrothers,oftheOracletheirmother.IthoughtitwasastokeofgeniustomakethefamilialtiesbetweentheArchitect,theMerovingian,PersephoneandTrinity.Iabsolutelylovethataspectofthestoryandthewayeachrevelationofit

slowlyunfolds.Itwasreallyfuntosortout."Onthetechnicalsidetherearedefinitelysometrickyissues.Youareoneofthefirsttorealize(oratleastpointout)thatTrinityisawakenedfromhermachinepodlaterthanisconsideredsafeorideal.Thiswaskindofanecessarycompromisetomakemystorywork,butIdon'tthinkit'scompletelycontradictorytothefirstfilm.Morpheusstatesthat"thereisarulethatwedonotfreeamindonceitreachesacertainage",buthedoesbraketheruletoawakenNeoanditissuccessful.IalsogivemydecisionalittlemoreauthoritybyhavingtheOracledirectedMorpheustofreeTrinity,soanargumentcouldbemadethatfreeingTrinitywasanintegralpartoffulfillingtheprophecydespitetherisks.Astretch,Iadmit,butnotcompletelyunfathomable.Akeeneye,pickingthatoneup!ThefeasibilityofOraclescenesareabitofachallenge,too,Iagree.Butnotimpossibletoremedy.Ifyou'llnotice,there'sreallyonlyonepointinmystorywheretheoriginalactress(whohaspassedaway)mightbeexpectedtoappear.Thisisinthebeginningofthescriptwhere,rightafterNeoencountershisoldgirlfriend,Rachel,heiscalledintoanapartmentbytheOraclewhoeventuallyhelpshimliedownbecauseheisconsumedbytiredness(page13).Herotherappearancesareeitherinflashbacks,whichwouldrequireanOracleofamuchyoungerage(whocouldbeplayedbyadifferentyoungactress),orincurrentsceneswhichwouldbeplayedbythewomanwhoreplacedtheoriginalOracleinthethirdepisode.Abittricky,butnotimpossible.Again,though,keeneye.Youalsosay,"...howdoyoureconciletheOracle'schangeinformwithherpresenceasasinglehumanbeingintheworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?".IattributeherchangeinappearanceinsidetheMatrixtomedicalprocedures(notspecifiedbutperhapsbrainsurgery?)sheisundergoingwhileintherealworld.Ifyou'lllookbackatpage95ofthescreenplay,you'llseethattheArchitectsaystotheOracle,"How'reyoufeelingafteryourlastmedicalprocedure?".Thiswasahintatwhatmighthavecausedhertochange.Formespecifically,herphysicaltransformationisaconsequenceofneuralchangesinherbrain(duetohermedicalprocedures)thatalterthewaytheMatrix(SuperMatrix)manifestsher.Toomuchofastretch?And,yes,thename.Sotrue.SuperMarioBrothers.Thenamehasgottensomebadpressforjustthereasonsyou'veunderlined.The"super"partofthetitlewassupposedtorefertothe"ontopof,above,orover"meaningoftheword"super",notthe"powerful,awesome"meaningoftheword.Sothenamemayhavetochange.AnearlierversionofthescriptwentbyMatrix:Rememory.Whatdoyouthinkofthattitle?Itwouldbenicetotakesomeoftheelementsofthisstoryandputthemintooneofmyown.Theyare,however,socloselyalignedwiththeMatrixstory,Idon'tknowhowwelltheywouldmaketheleap.Idolovesci-fiandaction,somaybeI'lldoitsomeday.Anyway,thanksforyourpenetratinganalysisofthepartsthatdon'tworksowellandforyoureffusiveappreciationforthepartsthatdo.

Writeanytime.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:12/15/20086:40:38AMTheSource,tome,bringstomindconceptionsoftheOver-soul,thesourceofallcreativityintheuniverse,andthusIfindithardtoimaginethatevenseveralhundredyearsoftechnologicaldevelopmentwouldmanagetoencapsulatethatkindofpower(ifitisonlyhumansthataredevelopingthetechnologyandnotsomesortofArtificiallyIntelligentSingularity,representedintheMatrixseriesbytheMachines).InTheMatrix:Revolutions,NeodiscoverstheMachinesaremadeoflightandsaystoTrinity,"IwishyoucouldseethemasIseethem."TheirSourceisabrilliantlyencapsulatedsourceofall.ItisSpirititself.Idon'tseehumanseverbeingabletoachievethisontheirown,especiallyasanartificeofwar.ThroughtheseeminglyinfinitecomplexityofMatrix,humansaresubsumedintothelargerwholeoftheMachinemind,justascellscomposeabody.TheWarthatthehumanscontinuetofightsuggesttheyarepartofabodythatisnotatpeace.Thisofcourse,isjustmyinterpretationofthefilms,andmightnotreflecttheWachowskiBrothers'views,butitisaviewinfluencedand/orechoedbytheofficialphilosophercommentariesontheUltimateMatrixCollection.Unfortunately,Ican'tfindtheMatrix-withina-MatrixcommentsIwastalkingabout.Itwasprobablysomethingsecond-handvoicedbyamemberofthefilm'screw.Idid,however,remembersomethingelseabouttheevidenceofMerv'srelationshiptoSeraph.WhentheMerovingianseesSeraphintheHelClub,hesays"TheProdigalChildreturns,"andalsoreferstohimas"Judas,"suggestingheusedtoworkfortheMerovingianandbetrayedhim.Soitdoesn'tmakesincethatSeraphworksfortheOraclebeforeMervmeetshim.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/16/20082:27:03AMiFiction,Topostulatetheadvancesofthenext250yearsistricky.Ifsomeestimatesareright,therewillbeanexponentialleapintechnology.EventheAnimatrixseriesshowsgreatleapsinmachineroboticsandartificialintelligence,culminatingintheriseofthemachineculture.Perhapsitisn'ttoofarremoved,then,tosuggestthathumanscouldcreateacentralizedsystemofmachinecontrolembodiedinavirtualworld.Ontheotherhand50yearsagopeoplewerepredictingthatintheyear2000humanswouldbecommutinginpersonalflyingspacevehiclesandeveryhomewouldhaverobotservants(alaTheJetsons).Somuchforthatprediction.It'sprobablytruethatsuchadvancedstateswouldbeimprobableachievementsofthehumanraceinthenextfewhundredyears.Ialsoagreethatsuchachievementswouldmorelikelybethepurviewofartificiallyintelligentmachines,onesofthehighestpurity,devoidofpsychologicaloremotionalentanglements.AndI'mguessingthatitistothiskindofmachineevolutionthatmostphilosophers(commentingontheMatrixstory)areobliquelyreferring.WithrespecttotheMerv/Seraphrelationship,Iagainapplaudyourkeeneye.Exactly

whatMervmeansby"theprodigalchildreturns"and"Judas"areupforinterpretation,butyourinterpretationseemsprettygood.UnlessIcancomeupwithsomegreatrationale,ImayhavegivetheOracleadifferentassistant.Anyotherproblemsthatyoucanpointoutarealwaysappreciated.It'ssometimeshardtoseetheforestthroughthetrees.Thanksagain.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:vikasDATE:12/30/20087:00:34AMifindthestoryboring-completecrap.iamsurenoonecanconnecttothestory.trytomakethestorymorelogicalthangoingwithyouremotions.don'twanttodiscourageyoujustbeinghonest.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/30/20082:57:35PMvikas,Ihavenoqualmsifyoufindthestoryboring;that'syoursubjectivereactionandyou'reentitledtoit.Buttojustobjectivelylabelthestory"completecrap"withoutanyspecificqualifierstellsmenothingabouthowyouthinkitcanbemadelessboring,less"crappy".Italsoassumesthateveryonewillhavethesamereactionasyours.Iaskyou,honestly;wasitreallycompletecraporwasitjustpartialcrap?And,ifjustpartiallycrappy,wheremightthosepartiallycrappypartsreside?Perhapsyoucouldelaboratewithspecificexamples.Strangelyenough,yourcertaintythat"noonecanconnecttothestory"isunderminedbythefactthatroughly75%ofreaderswho'veleftcommentsbeforeyoueitherlikedorlovedthestory.Thatyouwereunabletoconnectwiththestory,Iunderstandandaccept;tosaythat"noonecan'tconnect"issimplyamatterofnotpayingattention."Trytomakethestorymorelogicalthangoingwithyouremotions"isaveryhardcommenttodecipher.Areyoutalkingaboutcharacterdevelopment,timestructure,plotting,alloftheabove?Anycommentsaboutspecificscenes,charactersorplotstructurewouldbemorehelpful.Idon'tmindyourhonesty;butifyourintentionreallywasnotto"discourageme",labelingthestory"completecrap"withnospecificexamplesonwaystoimproveitwasnotasuccessfulwaytoachieveyourobjective.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JohnnyVDATE:1/3/20098:43:49PMMAN!ThissoundsREALLYGREAT!!IsitreallyComing??HowfarisitalongandwillMrKReevesbeplayingtheStar??Isurehopeso,heisthebestforthepart!!Pleaseletmeknowaboutanydevelopmentsandwhenthefilmingwillstart!!CAN"TWAIT!!!OHYEAH!!!!!

YAAAAAAAHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO:)HappyNewYear!JVCOMMENT:AUTHOR:LukeDATE:1/4/20097:10:55PMAbsolutelylovedthescript!WhenIfirstrandomlysawthissiteandthought,ohsomeonewroteascreenplayformatrix4,Iwaslike"ahhprobablywontliveuptomyexpectations"butasIcarriedonreadingit,Iwasmostcertainlyhookedalmostinstantly.Ithoughtitcouldn'tbeagoodmovie,maybejustnicefillerforinformation,butthenithitaturningpointanditgotreallygoodandIjustspentthelast2hourshooked,readingthisscriptandlovingeverymoment!buthatingthefactyouendedit!Thankyouforwritingthisawesomescreenplay/scriptanyway,andtobeperfectlyhonest,iftheydidmakeamatrix4anditdidn'tusethisscript,i'dbesadlydisappointed.:(Butit'sstillAwesome,welldonedude!:DCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/4/20099:44:45PMJV,Ishareyourenthusiasmforaforthepisodebutmystoryisjustafanfiction;itisnotanofficialscreenplay.I'mgladyoulikedthestoryandlet'sjusthopeHollywoodshowssomeinterestatsomepoint.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/6/20094:06:30AMLuke,Ithinkyoucameacrossitinthebestway,notexpectingmuch,thengettingsuckedintoit.Verynicetohearyourcompliments.Gladyouenjoyeditsomuch.Let'shopeithitsthebigscreensomeday.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:CamDATE:1/8/200912:55:00PMOkay,I'llstartthisbysayingthatitwasagreatstory.Howeveritlackedsubstanceandtherewerethemesthatwerereminiscentofothersci-fifilmsthatI'veseen.Forexample,TheSourcecontrollingmachinesandevolvingovertimeisverymuchlikeV.I.K.I.inI,Robot.

Therewereelementstothestorythatremainedabitvague,whathappenedtoSmith?whatofMorpheus,NiobeandZion?,andcertaincharacterswerecompletelyuselesstothestorytellingprocess.The'Android36's'could'vebeenleftoutcompletelyascouldRachaelandNeo'sson.Ididn'tsomuchmindtheideaofaSuperMatrixandTheSource,butthebuildingprocessandconstantflashbacksmadeitkindoftediousanddrawnout.Thewholeprocesscouldâ€vebeencoveredinonevoiceoveredflashback/montage,likewhenMorpheusdescribeswhatTheMatrixistoNeoforthefirsttime,thusfreeingupmoreroomtodevelopthemesandplotelementsandmakeitlessconvoluted.However,thehistorybehindtheMerovigianandPersephonewasquiteinteresting,butwassomewhatruinedbythefactthatTrinitywastheirdaughter,asdidthefactthattheyweresupposedlysuperpowered,iftheyhadthesamepowersasNeoortheagents,whydidnâ€ttheMerovigianfightNeohimself?Also,insteadofbeingTheArchitectâ€sson,theMerovigiancouldâ€vebeenhispartnerinmakingthiscontrolledworld,andthusaclosefriendthathasliterallybeenconsumedbyhisworkandPersephone,notwantingtobewithoutherlove,putherselfintothematrixsothattheycouldbetogetherandthenthewholethemgrowingapartthingcouldbeametaphorthatabsolutepowercorruptseventhepurestlove.ThelackoffightscenesreallytookawayfromthefeelofitasbeingpartofTheMatrixworld,asdidthefactthatNeowasn'tinvolvedinanyofthem.ThewholepointofthematrixfilmswastotellthestoryofNeobeingtheone,thequesttosaveZionfromthemachinethreatandtheultimategoaloffreedomfromthematrixforallhumanity.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/8/20098:53:19PMCam,Ireallyappreciateyourcomplimentthatthestorywasgreat.AndIunderstandhow,atthesametime,manyelementsmayhavebeendisappointing.PerhapsifIexplainmyintentionwiththisstory,itmightmakemoresenseorfitinbetterwiththewholeMatrixconcept.AlthoughitbeginsdirectlywheretheMatrixRevolutionsended,thisstoryissupposedtobekindofseparatefromtheTrilogy.FormethisapproachhelpspreservetheoriginalTrilogyconceptwhilealsoallowingmetojumpoutoftheMatrixworldintoawholenewworldandconcept.ThestoryintroducesthisnewworldwhileatthesametimeexplainingwhatleduptothefirstMatrixstory.TheTrilogyfocusedonNeo'sawakening,ascenttopower,andhissalvationofZion;mystoryisprimarilyfocusedonNeo'sreawakeninginanothernewworld,hisreunionwithTrinity,andhisdiscoveryofinnerpeaceandhisplaceinexistence.InthisrespectNeoisremovedfromhisrollasthecrusadingkung-fuwarrior.IknowmanypeoplewillbelookingfortheNeoofthepast,butIfeltthathisrollasawarriorhadalreadybeen

playedoutprettysuccessfullyintheTrilogy.So,you'reright,thisstorydefinitelyhasadifferentflavorfromtheTrilogy.Thatmanyelementsarereminiscentofothersci-fistoriesistrue.PeoplehavemadecomparisonstotheTerminator,theThirteenthFloor,IRobot,BladeRunner,StarTrekepisodesandeven2001:ASpaceOdyssey.It'shardnottooverlapwiththeseconceptsastheyare,tosomedegree,universalandindicativeofthefuture.Eventhestoriesthatminehavebeencomparedtohaveoftenalsoborrowedfromorparalleledearliersci-fistoriesbeforethem.It'skindofthenatureofthebeastabit.And,yes,therearemanyelementsofthestorythatareabitvague;myintentiontosomedegreewastoleavethreadsofthestoryopentointerpretation.Sometimesasecondreadingwillclarifysomeelements,asthethestoryisdensewithplacechangesandtimelines.Ithinkyoumightberightaboutcondensingmuchoftheexplanationsintoatighter,singlediatribe(likewhenMorpheustellsNeoabouttheMatrix).Thatwouldrequirequitearework,though.PerhapsI'lldoitafterI'vefinishedmyownoriginalscreenplay.The"Neo,Rachel,Neo'sson"thing...yep,thatonethrowsalotofpeople.Probablyshouldberemoved.Whatsurprisedmewasthatyouthoughttheandroid36threadwaswithoutmerit.Ipersonallythoughtthatwasoneofthemostinterestingparts.It'sareversaloftherolesplayedoutintheTrilogy.Now,theandroidmachines,imbuedwithemotionandfeelings,areontherun,doingeverythingtheycantofreetheirmachinebrethren.IthoughtthatwasanicetwistanddefinitelyinkeepingwiththeMatrixmindset.IwasalsosurprisedthatyouhadissueswiththeMerovingian,Persephone,Architect,Trinityfamilialconnection;Ireallythoughtthatwasastrokeofgeniusandoneofthemostintriguingpartsofthestory.IthoughttheseadditionsgavemuchmoredepthtoallthecharactersandmadethemeaningbehindthewholeMatrixstorythatmuchmoremind-bending.Noteveryone'scupoftea,Isuppose.Ihopetheseinsightsintomyrationaleformanyofthestoryideasallowyoutobemoreabletoappreciateit.And,asalways,asecondreadingcanrevealmanyconnectionsandlayersthataremissedonthefirstround.Thanksagainforyourhonestfeedback.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RandyDATE:1/14/20098:30:53PMTerrific.Itwasverycaptivatingandengaging.Youdidagreatjobhere.IreallyfeltIwasbackintheMatrixuniversealongwiththemysteriesandintrigueitbringswithit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/15/20093:15:00AMRandy,

Nicetohearyourthoughts.PuttingyoubackintheMatrixuniversewasmyintention.GladIsucceeded.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SlyguyDATE:1/30/20091:42:26AMLooksamazing,Idon'tseewhyanyonewouldwanttoturnthisdown.Ican'twaittoseeit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/30/20093:49:13AMYes...yes.Well,Ican'treallyarguewithyouonthisone.Let'shopeitcomestopass...soon.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TbDATE:1/30/20097:24:14AMIreadtheSuperMatrixintheSpringandforgottocommentandaskquestions/clarificationsbackthenwhenitwasstillfreshinmind.Eitherway,fromwhatirememberthescriptwasfrickenOUTSTANDING!ItwasthetrueMatrix:RevelationsthattheBrothersshouldhavemade!I'vetoldmanypeoplethatifthisdoesn'tgetmadeintoamovie(atleastanAnimemovie)thenit'sjustunacceptable.Without#4onscreenthereisnobridgeorenoughsensetobemadeofthelast2movies.Andsincesomanypeoplehatedthelasttwo,yourmovieispossiblytheonlywaytogetthemtolovetheseries.Ithinkthefirsttimeicheckedthiswebsiteout,youwerestilllookingforanagenttogivethescriptto,butmaybei'mwrong.I'lltellyathisthough,ifyourbabyisnotalreadyinproductionandifilivednearHollywood,i'ddefinitelykicksomeDirectors'doorsdowntogetthissuckerinproductionASAP!Excellentworkmyman!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/30/200912:30:44PMTb,Thanksforthehighpraise.You'reright,Iwas(andstillam)tryingtofindaHollywoodconnection.It'stoughgoing,though;fewpeoplewanttotouchaMatrixstorythatwasn'twritten(orauthorizedby)theWachowskibrothers.ButI'llkeeppushing.Youjustneverknowwhatcanhappen.Seeya,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ViljaDATE:2/14/20099:48:45PM

Ialsoreadtheentirescriptandlikeditalot.Ithookedrightfromthestartandasitwenton,thereweremanyanswersforearlierquestions,makingnewquestionbasedonprevious.Thewholepicturealsogotclearer.I'mabigMatrixfan&thiswasapleasuretoread.AndthenameSuperMatrixfitsperfectly!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/15/200912:10:01AMVilja,Alwaysapleasuretohearanicereview;I'mgladitbroughtyousuchenjoyment.Thanksforreading.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/18/20098:14:55PMHellox-blad,itriedtotranslatethisaswellasIcould;hopeit'sprettyclose."Hello!!!Idon'tknowwhy!!!ThelineageoftheMatrixaswellasmanyothersshouldnotbephasedout.TheTrilogyshouldcontinue;NeoandTrinitymustnotdie.AndMorpheusstillhastomakeachoice.Itisahugecinematographicundertakingtomakeanewfilm,buttheMatrixisaseriesthatthepublicenjoys.IwonderifNeoandTrinitymightbecomehumanmachines,beingintwostatesofexistence.TherearesuggestionsofthisinthelastscenesofMatrixRevolutions.It'smyopinionthatthisistrue.x-blad"COMMENT:AUTHOR:DonB.DATE:2/20/20098:33:47PMTostartoff,Igenerallythinktheconceptthatyouhaveexpressedisreallygood,nodoubtaboutthat.SowelldonefortakingtheinitiativetopresentexplanationstoquestionsthatmanyofusMatrixobsessivescontinuetoexplore.Atthesametime,IdofeelthattheMatrixinaMatrixideaisacommonone,sothegeneralconceptthatyouhaveportrayedcertainlydoeshaveamainstreamappeal,ifthatâ€sthecorrectword,butmeantinacomplimentingmanner.Specifically,therearestructuralareastothestorythatIfeelunderminethecontentthough.Theflashbacksreallyneedtobecompletedanddonewithinthefirstquartertothefirstthirdofthestory.Perhapsevenshortentheflashbacksandemphasisethemain

areas.Ifyoucansortthisstructuralissueout,thenmuchmorecanbebuiltontothepresenttimeline.Unlessofcourseyoupreferittheotherwayaround,whichiscreatingmoreofaprequel?Eitherwaysomethinghastobedone.Ipersonallypreferasequeltoaprequel.Withthisstructuralissue,Ifindthestorybeginstodraginthelasthalftolastthird.Theendingreallyleftmefeelingletdown.Ithinkitwouldhavebeenmoreeffectiveiftheendingofthestory,thewayyouhaveit,wasatapointinthestorythatislocatedtwothirdsintothestory.Ifthisstoryisgoingtobetrulystrengthened,onehastoadmitthatthefinalthirdofthestoryisabsentatthemoment.So,itwouldbegreatifyoucouldcarryontappingintothosecreativejuicesandpresentanendingthatismoreworthyofthewickedconceptthatyouareworkingwith.Ohyeah,nottonagtoomuch,butIthinkthatalotofvaluablespaceiswastedbydrawingoutthesentimentalstuffbetweenNeoandTrinity.Forsuretheirrelationshipisspecial,butreiteratingitisaredundancy.Otherwise,onceagain,coolplotingeneral.Ihardlyreadfictionofanykind,Ionlyreadgeekynon-fictionstuff,butyourstorykeptmeinterestedenoughtoreadthroughthewholethingIdontmeanthatinsomeegotistical,selfrighteousmanner.AllImeanisthatyourideaisintriguing,so,ummAwesome!COMMENT:AUTHOR:jasonDATE:2/23/200911:10:25PMYouarethebiggestloserIhaveeverseen.MaybeIwillwriteaboutwhathappenedafterLeathelWeapon4.OrwhatForrestGump'sretirementislike.Itisamoviethatwasawesomebecauseithadagreatstoryandending.PutthismucheffortinyourownlifeandyouwillrealizewhatIamtalkingabout.LeaveRobocopandMrs.Doubtfirealone.Dork.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/24/200910:12:52PMDonB.Thanksforthepraiseandcritique.Iagree,thestorydoesdragtowardstheendandthat'sunfortunatesincemostHollywoodepicsareexpectedtohaveexplosiveendings.Asyousay,thesentimentalNeo/Trinitypartsofthestorymaybeabitredundant;theyalsolackrealexcitement.PerhapsifIcouldshortenthemandalsoperkthemupabit.Yourpointaboutendingthestoryabouttwothirdsofthewayinmightactuallybethebestsolution;thatwouldalsoleavemoreroomtoexpandontheearlierideaswhichdefinitelyhaveroomtogrow.

I'vebeenbusywritinganoriginalscreenplayofmyown,soI'mnotsurewhenI'llgetbacktotheMatrixstory,butatthispoint,afterhavingreadsomanyinsightfulandin-depthcomments,IthinkIcoulddoanotherrewritethatwouldreallybegreat.We'llseehowitgoes.Idogetgreatsatisfactionfromhearingspecificcommentslikeyours,boththepositiveandconstructivepoints.Andthatthestorypulledyouallthewaythrougheveninspiteofyour"fictionfriction"thrillsmetonoend.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/24/200910:47:27PMjason,Formethisstorywasjustafunexerciseinscreenwriting,onethatIdecidedtosharewithMatrixfans.I'msurprisedthatitleadsyoutocallme"thebiggestloseryouhaveeverseen".Lotsofpeoplebuildonotherpeople'swork;it'susuallyasignofadmirationandrespect.AndsinceInotmakingfunoforridiculingthestory,Ireallydon'tseeanyharminextendingit.Sorryitrubsyouthewrongway;ifyouhadtakenthetimetoreadit,Ithinkyoumighthavefounditinteresting.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DarrenDATE:2/26/200911:07:44PMHey,FirstofallWOW!.IthinkthatitisimpossibletomakeabetterMatrix4thanthis.Ialwaysthoughtofhowitwouldbebutneverimagineditlikethis.Itthebestwaythatitcouldbecontinued.Ihavejustsomequestions...1.Therewasn'tanyflashbackthatshowedthefinaldestruction(ifitoccured)ofthe36s.Isthereareason?2.WhatisthemeaningofthestandingreflectionwhileNeoisshavinginfrontofthemirror(pg118ontop)?3.TheSmith'sstoryseemsincompleteaterhestartedtodestructtomachinecity.Isthisdoneforpurposefora5thMatrixmovie?Apartfromthat,Ireallywishthatthisscriptismadeamovie.Doyouhaveanyideaifsomeoneisthinkingofmakingitamovie?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/27/20092:17:47AMDarren,

It'snicetoknowthatmystoryexceededyourvisionofwhatafourthMatrixcould.Mystorywasmeanttobeopen-ended;manypeopleareputoffbythis.Resolutioniskingtomostpeople(andtoHollywood).IguessIfallshortinthatarea.Insomecases,Ilikeastorythatdoesn'tanswereverything;thisishowIleftthisstory.Ilovethenotionthattheandroid36sfightonindefinitelyfortheirfreedom.IalsolovethenotionofSmithrisingfromtheashestochallengethemachinesandhumansagain.IhavenoplansforaMatrix5,buttheselooseendscertainlyleaveroomforafifthepisode(atleastinourheads,ifnotonthebigscreen).Neo'sstandingreflection(pg118)issupposedtosuggestthattherearemore,perhapsinfiniteNeosinother,perhapsinfinitelayersofexistence.TomeNeoislikeaportaltothoseotherlayers.Aswehaveseen,hehasbeengiftedwiththeabilitytogobeyondtheMatrixandbeyondtheSuperMatrix;hereIsuggesthehastheabilitytogofurther.Chewystuff,indeed.Hopethatanswerssomeofyourquestions.Thanksforthegoodwords.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MikeDATE:3/14/200912:47:14PMidolikeyourstory.Buttheonlyproblemthatihadwithitwouldbealloftheflashbacksinalltheothermovies,theirweren'tany.Andthroughyourstory,youhadalot.Nowdon'tgetthewrongideafromthisbecausetheflashbacksdidgivealotofthestory;butithinkitwouldbebetterifyoudidthatatthebeginninginsteadofinthemiddle,justtogivepeopleageneralideaaboutwhatisgoingon.ThewholethingabouttheSuperMatrixsurprisedme;iwouldn'thavethoughtaboutit,butiwasalwayswondering.Ilikehowyoubroughtthecharactersbackthewayudid.Butalsothewayyouendeditleftitopenforyetanotherepisode,whichucouldfinishcompletelybeforeitgetsdraggedontoolong.Idohaveanotherthingtoaskthough;inthelastMatrixtheSmithAgenttookovertheOracle'sbodyoratleastithoughthedid.Wouldn'tthatmeanthathehascontrolofherintherealworldalso?Justaquestion.ifyouwouldlikeanyideas,iwouldhavesome;ireallydolikeyourstory.Itjustneedsacoupleoffixes.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/14/20096:44:03PMMike,Theflashbacksareabithardtofollowinascreenplayformat;Ithinktheywouldcomeovermuchclearerinamoviewithlotsofvisualcuestokeepthewatcheroriented.

TheSmithAgentdoestakeovertheOracle'sbodyinthelastmovie,besheisthenlaterrestoredtoherformerstatusattheendofthemovie.Isuppose,though,thatyouwouldbecorrect;AgentSmithwouldhavecontrolofherforthatperiodoftime.Iappreciateyourcommentsandamgladyouenjoyedthestory.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeDATE:3/15/200912:52:32AMAllihavetosayisthisisaworkofart.Ilovetheywayyouplayedoffoftheoriginalsandthewayyoumovedthestoryintoanewdirection.Ilovethewayyoumadethethestoryoppositeintherealworld,howthemachinesaretryingtodothesameasNeointheMatrix.Iguesswhati'msayingisilovedeverypage.Ihopeitmakesittothebigscreen,goodluck.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/15/20093:21:55PMJoe,Oh,youflattermetoomuch....butI'lltakeitanyway.That'sbyfaroneofthenicestcommentsI'veeverreceived.Warmsmyheart.Ilovetheverysameaspectsofthestorythatyoulove.Playingoffoftheoriginalcharactersandpushingthestoryinanewdirectionwasexhilarating.Andreversingtherolesoftheoppressorandoppressedinthedifferentworldsdefinitelyaddedanewdimensiontotheconflictandforcesonetoseethatnoconflictisone-sided.Itreallywouldbefuntoseethisasamovie.Myfingersarestillcrossed.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisUKDATE:3/17/20095:11:53AMJustreadthefirst10pages,itsprettygood,whowrotethis,isthiscomingoutinfilm?weneedMATRIX4!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/17/200911:28:26AMChris,Gladyouarelikingit.I,PDWood,wroteit.Notcurrentlyfilmingit.Yes,aMatrix4,coolwouldbeit.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:HasanDATE:3/20/200910:05:50PM

heymanreadyourscript,ididntseethe3moviesfullybutilikedyourscriptalot..imalsoawirterandwritingthecontinuationofDragonballGT.Ihopeyouheardofthat.justwouldliketoknowifyoucontactedanyofficialstomakethismoviehapppen???COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/21/20091:17:44AMHasan,IknowlittleaboutDragonballGtexceptthatit'sverypopularandIthinkIheardit'sgoingtobecomingoutasamoviesoon.Soundslikeafunseriestofollowupon.goodluckwithit.Igladyouenjoyedmystory.I'vetriedtogetittothebigpeopleinHollywoodbutit'sroughgoing.Butanythingcouldhappen,anytime,Isuppose.Youneverknow.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:adamDATE:3/23/20092:47:59AMyouknowhowtheysay,"ifyoucan'tthinkofanythinggoodtosay,don'tsayanything"?Mycommentisasfollows:COMMENT:AUTHOR:jnDATE:3/27/20097:58:36PMHiPD!Greatscript!Ithasenormouspotentialtobedevelopedintoafullscreenplay.Ihavereadtheothercomments,especiallysuggestingaprequelforflashbacks.Whydon'tyoumakeone?Ithinkit'saniceideatohaveaprequelsimilartoStarWars(PhantomMenace,AttackoftheClones,RevengeoftheSith)orBatmanseries(BatmanBegins,theDarkNight),butyouneedtodevelopthestoriessolidly.Anyway,ifitcan'tbepushedforthebigscreen,I'llbewaitingforthisinanimeorcomics.Keepondreaming,keeponwriting,dude!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/27/20098:39:47PMjn,Iappreciatethethoughts.Andthe"greatscript"compliment.I'monanoriginalscreenplayofmineownrightnow;andunless/untilIgetsomeinterestfromtheHollywoodcrowd(eventheslightestbit),Iprobablywon'tdoanymoreMatrixstories.IloveddoingtheSuperMatrix,butrightnowI'mjustoutoftheloop.Butanythingcanhappen.Istilldefinitelyhavemyfingerscrossed.Andancomic/animethingwouldcertainlybeverycool.Thanksfordroppingin.PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:JarredDATE:4/7/200910:25:05AMHonestly,IfindtheideaofanotherMatrixridiculous.Whatwasthepointoftheconflictoftheoriginalmoviesiftherewasjustanothermatrix?Whycouldn'tNeoflyormanipulatetherulesofthesupermatrixintheoriginals?Seethecodeofsupermatrix?Personally,Ithinkifthiswasreleasedasamovie,criticswouldhateit.IthinkthetrilogyneednotcontinuewithsomeSupermatrixthing.Itrenderstheconflictbetweenthehumansandrobotsintheoriginalscompletelypointless.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/7/200910:48:46AMJarred,I'vehadotherpeoplevoiceyoursameopinion.Someofthosepeoplehavegoneontoreadthescreenplay,othershavenot.Mostwho'vegoneontoreadit,haveendeduplikingwhereItookthestory.Personally,Ithinkyoushouldaleastreadthefirst30pagesandseeifitgrabsyou.ThesuccessofafourthMatrixreallydependsonthequalityandfreshnessofthestory;ifit'snotasenticingastheoriginal,then,Iagree,itwouldprobablybeaflop.Ihopeyougiveitaread;maybeitwillpullyouovertomyside.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BenDATE:4/8/200911:09:17AMIwassearchingtheNetforaWachowskiinterviewonwhetherornotafourthmoviewasonthecards.Stumblingacrossyourscreenplay,Icouldnothaveimaginedsuchagreatpieceofwork.YourattentiontodetailandthewayyoufulfillyourmandateoftyinguplooseendswithregardstopreandpostMatrix/Revolutions,itdeliversoneverysinglelevel.ItwouldbeaspectacularendingtothegreatestMovieconcepteverfilmed.It'sacredittoyouandtoall(MatrixUnderstanders)properMatrixfans.Ithasinspiredmetoputsomeofmyideasonpaperandgivenmethetemplateofhowtowriteascreenplay,asbeforeIhadnoideaofhowtosetitout.Youhavemywordthatallthatareworthyofit,shallbetoldofthisimaginativefinale.ThankyouforgivingtheMatrixit'srightfulend.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/8/200911:38:13AMBen,

Althoughtheimpartialonesareprobablythemosthelpful,you'rethekindofmirrorIlovethemost;thereflectionisuncompromisinginitsflattery.Iappreciateeverykindword.I'mgladitinspiredyoutoputyourownideasonpaper.Ifyouarelookingforreferencebooksforscreenwriting,IhighlyrecommendYourScreenplaySucksbyWilliamAkers.Indispensable;memorizeitcovertocover.AlsocheckoutTheScreenwriter'sBiblebyDavidTrottier.Thesewilltakeyouveryfar,veryfast.Goodluckwithyoureffortsandletmeknowwhatyoucomeupwith,ifyou'resoinclined.And,yes,byallmeansspreadtheword.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MustafaStanleyDATE:4/11/20094:15:25PMYouareagenius.Thestorythatyouputtogetherisflawless.I'vealwaysquestionedtheMatrixReloadedwhenNeodisabledtheSentinelsinthetunnelandcollapsedtowakeupintheMatrix.Whenthatoccured,IknewthatbothZionandtheMachineWorldwereinanotherformoftheMatrix.OrshouldIsay,partofsomethingbigger.YouhavemadethisstorymorerealtomethantheactualmoviesproducedonscreenbytheWachoskiBrothers.IhavealreadycontactedotherMatrixfamesandputthemontoyourworkofgenius.Iwillnotlietoyou,yourArchitectisnotasarticulantastheother,butitaddstoamorehumanappeal,ratherthanthatofamachineorprogram.Ilikehowyouwereabletomovefromtenses.Meaningfromthepresent,tothepast,future.Source,toCortex,toSuperMatrix,totheMatrixifIfollowedyourstorycorrectly.AreyouincontactwithWarnerBrothersinreferencetothestory?Pleasepersistwithtryingtohaveyourstoryputonthebigscreen.IfthereisanywayIcanpersonallyhelptomakethisareality,pleasecontactme.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/11/20095:08:53PMMustafa,Fewthingsbringasmuchofarushasthewords"genius"and"flawless";Idon'tknowifthey'reaccurate,buttheysurefeeldamnedgood.Nicewaytostarttheday.Thanks.Ialwaysfelttherewasanotherleveltobeexplored;seemstobeyourfeelingaswell.Gladittiesthingstogetherforyou.

Yes,theArchitectisnotasarticulate(orinclinedtousesuchgrandioseterms)butitdoesmakehimmoreaccessible,asyouhaverightlypointedout.Oneofthehardest(andyet,mostenjoyable)partsofthestorywasjumpingaroundintimeandplacesomuch.Thehardpartwastryingtomakethosejumpsflowwithoutlosing(irritating)thereaderandthefunpartwasactually(finally)succeeding.Yes,youfollowthestorycorrectly(atleastIhopeyoudo).I'mindebtedtoallwhopassmystoryalongforotherstoread;Iguessthat'stheultimateflatteryandmarkofsuccess.Again,thanks.Asfarasmakingitintoamovie,that'smeetwithverylittleopportunity.Coldcallingorblindmailingscriptsisadeadend.FindingsomeoneconnectedtoHollywoodorinHollywoodisreallytheonlyavenueavailable.I'vetriedafewpeoplewhoclaimtobeconnected,butnothinghascomeofitsofar.ButI'mstilltrying.Ifyouknowthosekindsofpeople(oryouknowpeoplewhoknowthosekindsofpeople),byallmeanssenditontothem.Youneverknowwhatcanhappen.Mustafa,again,Iappreciateyourcommentsandenthusiasm.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MustafaStanleyDATE:4/11/200910:47:07PMIbelieveinyourvision.Iwilltrytogetyourstoryinthehandsoftherightpeople.Ifyouareseriousaboutyourart,Iwilltrymybesttohelp.AllIaskisyoudon'tforgetaboutme.Whatavenueshaveyouventuredalready?JustgivemeanideasothatIcanstartmyplansofattack.Ihaveanotherquestionforyou.SoisNeolikeTrinity,oneofthosewhowereplaceintotheSuperMAtrix?Also,IenjoyedthepartofthestorywerethePresidentisaddressingthepeople,andaactualbattleistakingplacebetweenthehumansandandroids.AndthepartwhereSmithcrackstheMachineCodetotheremainframeandhasmachineagainstmachineincombat.(RememberthatfeelingofexcitementthatstimulatedyoursenseswhenNeofoughthundredsofSmithinReloaded?OrwhenZionengagedincombatwithsentinelsinRevolution?Thatistheenjoymentyouhavebroughtmewhenreadingbothofthosescenesinyourstory.)Idon'twanttoseemlikeaFanaticinorderobsessedorcrazedwiththeMatrix,butwoulditbeabsurdtoviewtheMatrixfromtheMachine'spointofview,astheytrytodealwithSmith?IguessthemachineworldissofascinatingtomeandmaybetootherthatIwouldliketoseemoreoftheirmonsterousviews,electricbluesociety,andinteractingwhichoneother,astheMatrixReloadedhasshownwiththepeopleinZion?Butmaybeitisperfectthewayitis?Meaningmaybetheyaremeanttobeamysteroustous.(ButyoudidgiveusapreceptionoftheirexistancefromtheAndroidspointofview.

Onemorething,mayIaddthenIwillgo.IwasrevisitedtheMatrixRevolution.AttheendofthemoviewheretheArchitect/Alexasyoucallhim,andTheOracle/Serenameetanddiscussthetermsoffreeingthepodlanges.WhentheOracleaskedtheArchitectdoesshehavehisword.Andhisreplyis"whatdoyouthingIam,human?"Haveyouputthoughtintohowyouaregoingtoweaveyoustoryaroundthatphrase?IreallyliketheAlex/Architectyou'vecreated,buthemustcrossovertothefanasyou'vedepictedhimtobe,Human.Myreasonforaskingis,Iseeyourvisionandwouldlikeittocomealive.Butitmustbeflawless.Talktoyoulater.Ironically,Iwaslookingforamovietodownloadfromtheinternetandcameacrossyourstory.AFanofyourwork,MustafaStanleyCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TreacleDATE:4/12/20099:47:25PMWell..whatcanIsay.AfewtimesIhaveattemptedtowriteaversionofthefourthMatrix.Some50orsopageslong,butIalwaysgotstuckononepointoranother,Icouldn'tthinkofwhatelsetowrite.Asyouareprobablyverymuchaware,theMatrixisanincrediblyhardthingtowriteabout.It'sevenharderwhenyoutryandmatchthesuperbcontentoftheoriginals.ButreadingTheSuperMatrix...well,thatcouldhavebeenanoriginal.Onewordandonewordonly;PerfectionCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/13/200912:56:06AMMustafa,Iloveyourenthusiasmandwouldneverforgetsomeonewhocouldplacethisworkintherighthands.MyeffortshavebeenmostlytoplacetheworkonthewebsiteI'vecreatedandletwordofmouthcirculatethestory.I'vealsonetworkedtotryandfindaHollywoodinsiderwhocouldhelpmeout.Otherthanthat,I'vedonelittle.AsI'vesaid,coldcallsandblindmailingshavebeenadeadend.Youorsomeoneyouknowhastoknowsomeoneontheinside...andthenthatsomeonehastolovethestoryenoughtoputtheirreputationonthelineintryingtoshopitaround.TheWachowskiBrothersandWarnerBrothersown

theconcept,sothatisanenormoushurdleinitself.Mostpeoplewon'tshopsomethingaroundthatisbasedonsomeoneelse'swork.Withthatinmindyou'rewelcometotryyourhand.Ifyoureallyaregoingtotry,justrememberthatpersistenceisimportantbutdiscretionistoo.Isuggestyoutemperyoureffortswhileatthesametimebeingaggressive.No,NeoisnotlikeTrinityinthathehasnocounterpartthatexistsoutsideoftheMatrixworlds.It'sonlywhenhe'sextractedthathecomestoexistintherealworld.AndthepartabouttheOracleandtheArchitectatteendofRevolutions,IreallyhavethoughttotiethatinanymorethanIalreadyhave.TheironyintheArchitect'sstatementisthathereallyishuman...atleastasfarasmystorygoes.TherearesomanyunexploredandinterestingfacetstotheMatrixworld,it'shardtoaddressthemall.Lotsoffuntothinkabout,though.Thanksagainforallyourkindwordsandexcitement.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/13/20091:04:24AMTreacle,I'vehadsomereallynicecommentsthisweek;yoursjusttopsitoff.Thanks.Yeah,IcameupagainstmanywallstryingtowritetheSuperMatrix.ThereweretimesIwantedtoquit.ButthetimesImanagedtobreakthroughthewallsweresoexcitingandenergized,itjustkeptpropellingmeforward.IthinkIwasluckythattheearlywriter'sblockswerenotsoharshthattheyjustshutmedown.Your"perfection"commentisparticularlygratifyingbecauseitcomesfromsomeonewhoknowsfirsthandthedifficultiesofwritingafollowuptotheTrilogy.Ireallyappreciateit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TreacleDATE:4/13/20097:24:38AMSo..whatnextforyou?FromreadingtheSuperMatrix,Icansee(andalotofotherpeople,Ijustreadallthecomments)thatyouareanincrediblytalentedwriter.Haveyouthoughtaboutsendingitofftoapublisher?Iknowwhatyourthinking,copywrites.Tobehonest,mostpublishers,if...no,whentheyfindthatyourstoryisbrilliant,willbeabletosortoutallthecopywritecrapforyou.Onceyougetapublisherandyourworkgetsnoticedthenthatswherefilmscomein.Secondly,whataboutanotherfollowup?I'dverymuchenjoyreadingaLordOfTheRings4,orpossiblythenextMissionImpossible?

Theworldisyouroyster,P.DWood.Nowgrabitwithbothhands.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/13/200912:20:39PMTreacle,Areyoutalkingaboutbookpublishers?I'dcertainlybewillingtogiveitashot.Doyouhaveanypublishersinmind?Asfarasmorefollowupsareconcerned,it'sunlikely.ThedesiretodoaMatrixfollowupcamefromsoclearlyseeingacontinuing,detailedstoryline;Idon'thavethatsameclearvisionforanyothermovieseries....atleastnotyet.I'mworkingonanoriginalstorynow.Thatwillprobablybemydirectionfortheforeseeablefutureunlesssomethingdramaticchangesit.Thanksagainfortheunbridleflattery.Anddefinitelyletmeknowofanypublishersyoumighthaveinmind.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TomDATE:4/18/20096:42:29PMThisisaverygoodscriptandisfullofwonderfulimagination.HaveyousentthistotheWachowskiBrothers?Thiscoulddefinitelybedevelopedwithjustafewimprovements.Greatwork!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/18/20097:14:46PMTom,I'mgladyouenjoyeditsomuch.SendingtotheWachowskiBrothersislikeshootingapebbletothemoonwithaslingshoot,ifyouknowwhatImean.I'malwaysopentosuggestions,though.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:matrixdude11DATE:4/19/20093:56:10AMIreadthestorywithmuchenthusiamandenjoyment.Itgavememanyanswerstothequestionsthatihadaftertheendofreloadedandrevolutions.Idothinkthoughgoingbackandforththroughflashbacksalmosteveryotherpagedoesgetveryconfusing.Ifyouplantotrytomakethescriptintoamovie,pleasetellme.Itwasagreatreadandiamsureotherswillenjoyit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/19/20091:43:03PMmatrixdude11,

Iagree,theflashbackscanbehardtofollowintheprintedform;Ithinktheywouldbemuchmorefluidandcleariftheywereseenonthebigscreen.Iwouldlovetoturnthescriptintoamovie,butthat'seasiersaidthandone.I'mstilltrying,though.I'mhappytohearthatthestorybroughtyousomuchenjoyment.Spreadtheword.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AlexDATE:4/30/20096:17:37PMFirstoff,I'dliketosaythatIenjoyedthereadverymuch,andwouldliketoseeitmadeintoamovie(we'rejustsovisuallybasedintoday'sworldaren'twe?).Theamountofdetailandthoughtthatwentintothiswassurprising,andintriguingtosaytheleast.However,IdohavesomethingsthatIhavetotouchon.First,Iunderstandthatthisisacontinuationoftheseries,andnotsomucha"finale",buttherearesomethingswithinthestorythatarenotonlyunexplained,butodd.Forinstance,theworldthatNeotravelsthroughbeforeheexitstheSuperMatrix,isthataworldtoitself,withinhismind,theMatrix,orpartoftheactualSuperMatrix?Notonlythat,buttheimagerywithSmithandthepowersthatheexhibitedwereonceagainodd,andseemedoutofplacewithinthissaga.Secondly,youstatethepeoplejackedintotheSMhavenorecollectionofthefactthattheyareinavirtualworldofavirtualworld(Trinity),andyettheOracleseemstoknowwhatisgoingon.IknowyoulistedherasaClass3,butthatstilldoesn'texplainit.Notonlythat,butwhywouldtheArchitectfromReloadedexistasarepresentationoftheactualArchitect,butexistasanapparentenemy?Third,howwasNeo'sbodycreated,giventhefactthatheisavirtualbeingthathasbeencreatedbytheSMandejectedouttotherealworld?Last(allIcanthinkofatthispoint),howcomeVictorandPersephonechangedpersonassofastoncejackedin?Iknowthattheythemselveswereabitpridefultobeginwith,butitjustseemsillogicalthattheywouldIMMEDIATELYchangetheirinherentpersonalitiesatthebeginningoftheirmission.Overall,Isupposeitjustcomesdowntothefactthatthisisreallynotmeanttobeanending,butmoreofadoorwaytogrander,andmorecomplexideasandformulations.Imustcommendyouontheeffortthatyouhaveputintothestoryandwriting,butmustwarnyouthatfrommyperspective,itseemstobeabitconvolutedandambiguousattimes.It'sstillagreatstorythough.:D

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/1/20091:42:41AMAlex,Thanksforthethumbsupandthecritique.Asalways,therearethingstobeaddressed.Ilovethechallenge.Definitelysomeodditiesandunexplainedflightsoffancy;hopefullyIcanclarifysomeofthem.IliketothinkoftheinterimworldthatNeofindshimselfinaskindofaneuralcollage.Here'sthepassagefromthescript."Notdreams,Neo.Rememories.Imprintsofyourlife,pastandpresent,combinedwiththoseofthecollectiveconsciousness."ThecollectiveconsciousnessreferstothetotalsequencingcodeoftheSuperMatrix.AsfarasSmithisconcerned,IimplythathehasallthesamepotentialsasNeo.Here'sanotherpassagefromthescript."Andyou,Neo,inturn,transferredtheCortexscodetoSmithwhenyoujumpedintohim.Alteredasyoubothwere,youdefiedcontrol,predictability,andeveneradication.Youalsoacquiredunexpectedpowers.Theinevitableconsequencesweresoonapparent.Yourabilitieswouldincreasetothepointwhereyouâ€dachieveawarenessoftheSuperMatrixand,ultimately,oftheCortexitself."ButwhereNeotapsintohispowertolookformeaninginreality,Smithusehispoweronlytosubjugateanddestroy.Consequently,Neo'spathleadstohisneardiscoveryoftheSuperMatrix;Smith'spathneverevencontemplatesit.Despitetheirdifferentpaths,theyessentiallystillbothhaveaccesstounlimitedpowerintheSuperMatrix,ifonlytheycantapintoit.That'smyreadingofit.TheOraclehasoracle-likeabilities,yes,butwhenshe'sintheSuperMatrix,shestillhasnodirectknowledgeoftheSuperMatrixasavirtualworld,orthatanotherrealworldexistsbeyondit.TheClass3clearanceisonegiventopeoplewhoareallowedtocomeandgofromtheSuperMatrix.Veryfewhavethatclearance.TrinitywouldalsohaveaClass3clearance.ThedualArchitectconceptIthoughtwaskindofcoolandcouldbeinterpretedasaheaven/hellGod/devilparadigm.TherearemanyreferencestoChristianityintheoriginalTrilogyandIthoughtthiswasaniceextension.ThegoodArchitectislikeGod,creatorofandoverseeroftheSourceandsaviorofthehumanworld.ThebadArchitectislikeSatan,thefallenangel,oppositeimageofthelordabove.HeisthecreatorofandoverseeroftheSourceintheMatrixandsaviorofthemachineworld.InadditionthechoicebythegoodArchitecttocasthimselfasabadorflawedpersonintheMatrixsomehowlendsmorehumanitytothegoodArchitect.ItsuggeststhatdespitehisbrillianceandalmostGodlikestatusintherealworld,heiswillingtoacknowledgehisflawsandweaknessbytakingonthepersonaofthebadArchitect.It'sawayforhimtobehumble,Isuppose.

Neo'snewbodyisaclonedbody.Ionlyimplythatinthestory.ButIdidn'tthinkitwasafarstretchtoassumetheyhadthattechnology,giventhattheywereabletocreatetheCortex.PerhapsIshouldelaborateonthatabitmore.TherapidpersonachangeofPersephoneandtheMerovingianisalittlesudden,Iadmit.IhadtocutscenesofithappeningmoregraduallysoIcouldtacklealltheotherelementsofthestory.That'sdefinitelyaproblemspot.Iagree,thestoryisabitconvolutedandambiguous.Ibitoffalotanddidn'treallychewitthoroughly.Butasyousuggest,despitehavingdifficultyswallowing,itstilltastesprettygood.Thanks.Ienjoywhenpeopleleavedetailedcomments;showsthattheyreallyreadandthoughtaboutthework.Muchappreciated.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/6/20094:00:51PMGjeremy,Iappreciateyoursuggestionsand,ifamovieistobemade,and,ifIhaveanysayastohow,Iwillcertainlyentertainyoursuggestions.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/6/20094:02:35PMDamien,JustaquickreplytosayIreallyenjoyscriptreaderswithenthusiasticcomments.Alsopraying...inthebackground.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SprldrDATE:5/13/20092:24:24PMNicework,thatwasawesome!IlovedthewayyoumadetheArchitect,Merovingian,PersophoneandTrinityintoafamily,thatwassomethingcompletelyunexpected.The"Zion-isn't-real"thingwas...notsounexpected,butstilldoneinacoolway(Cotrexandall).ThewayyouportrayedtheArchitectasacharacterdidn'treallyseemconsistentwiththecold,roboticwayhespeaksinReloaded,andnowIfindithardtothinkofhimasaprogram...andallmyowntheorieshavebeenmessedupinmymindafterreadingthis.:ThewaySmith'shandgotstuckintheairwhilehewasfightingSeraphwasweird,aswas

thewayabunchofSmithsappearedjustbeforethefightwithAgentBlack.ButmaybeIjustcan'tgetmyheadaroundthiswithoutseeingit.Iwasn'ttookeenontheideaofNeohavingasonbyanex-girlfriend(norwasItookeenontheideaofTrinitybeingokaywithit),butwell,that'sjustme.Apartfromthatbit,Iratherlikedtheending(evenifitwassomewhatanti-climactic).ThepartswithSmithinfiltratingtheMachineCity,andtheMerovingianandPersephonefallinginloveagain,weregood.Theyhadasenseoffinalityaboutthem,of"ending-ness".AndIthinkthetitle"TheMatrix4:TheSuperMatrix"iskindof...lame.ButtherewasonethingthatIwashalf-expectingtohappen,andthatIdefinitelythinkyoushouldhavedone...:(Umm...myideaisreallylongandwon'tfitintothiscomment,soI'llputitinmynextcomment):COMMENT:AUTHOR:SprldrDATE:5/13/20092:25:46PMOkaythen,here'smyidea:Youdon'tneedaholeinyourheadtoentertheSuperMatrix,right?AndIthinkit'spossibletobeinsertedfromtheSourcedirectlyintotheMatrixwithouteverhavingabodyintheZionworld(whichiswhytheOraclewasconsidereda"program"),right?Well...whatifa36androidmanagedtoinfiltratetheSourcesomehow(bydisguisinghimselfassomeonetrustedbytheArchitect,perhaps),andthentheandroidmanagedtoinsertitselfintotheMatrix?Andthen,whatifSmithassimilatedit?PerhapstheandroidwouldhaveusedtheOracle'sunoccupied"LevelThree"seattoentertheMatrix,whichwouldexplainwhytheandroidwouldn'thaveabodyinapodintheZionworld?AndsincetheOracle'sseathassomesortif"timer",maybetheoccupantwouldbereleasedautomatically(inthiscase,theoccupantisaSmith-infectedandroid)?!Andsinceandroidscanshapeshift,theandroidwouldthenbeabletochangeitsappearancetolooklikeSmith!Thenthere'dbeaSmithwalkingaroundtheSource,andmostlikelyhuntingNeoandTrinity!Andsince36saremadeofmetal,theSmithwouldbejustasstrongashewasintheMatrix!Myideacouldbeincorporatedaftertheendofyourscript.SinceallthehumansconnectedtotheMatrixhavebeenkilledasaresultofSmith'sactionswithintheMachineCity,theMatrixhasnopowersource(otherthanthebiologicalenergystillbeingproducedbythevery-recentlykilledhumans),andwillrunoutofpowerandshutdownprettysoon.SinceallthehumansintheMatrixaredead,buttheprogramsarestillalive,theonlySmithsremainingwithintheMatrixaretheoneswhichwerecreatedfromSmithcopyinghimselfontoexiles.Maybeanandroidcouldgetin,getassimilatedbyoneoftheseSmiths,thengetpulledoutbythetimerofOracle'sseat?AndsincetheMartixandtheMachinesnowhavenopowersource,theandroid-SmithwouldbetheONLYcopyofSmithleftinexistence,makingwayforanepic,climacticbattlebetweenmortalNeoandandandroidSmith,withthefateoftheworldhanginginthebalance...

Well...sorryifIwentonabitthere...greatwork.;)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/13/20092:57:20PMGjeremy,Basedonyourprolificcomments,yourdevotionandenthusiasmformyworkaswellastheMatrixconceptisobviousandintense.AndIapplaudyourlevelofdetailandtheexpansivenessofyourideas,eventhoughIsometimeshaveahardtimefollowingthem.Iwouldloveforthistobeamovieasyouwould;whatlengthsI'mpreparedtogotoinsistuponit,Ihaven'treallydetermined.Boycottingisnotreallymything,though.WhatIdoknowandwhatI'mprettyhappywithisthesuccessofthescriptandthemanysatisfiedreaderswhohaveleftupliftingcomments.Ileavetherestuptofate...andabitofnudgingalongtheway.Thanksforyourkindwordsandgoodenergy.BPDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/13/20093:05:39PMSprldr,Ihavetoagreewithmostofwhatyou'vesaid.Theareasthatyoupointoutasbeingproblematicforyou,havealsobeenproblematicforme...althoughprobablytoalesserextent(Ididkeeptheminthestory,afterall).Someoftheissueyoutalkabout,Ihaveelaboratedoninpreviousreadercomments;readingthosemighthelpclarifyorexpandonsomeofthepointsyoumade.Asfarasthenamegoes,Iagree.TheSuperMatrixistoolame,childish,cliched.GivemeakillertitleandI'lldefinitelyuseit.(Thisgoesforallreaders.)Idon'tthinkastoryiseverwithoutsomeproblems;inthiscaseI'mjustgladtheyweresmallenoughnottodampenyourenjoymentoftheoverallconcept.Thanksforreading.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/13/20093:32:44PMSprldr,Thatissickandtwisted...inalltherightways.Ireallylikeit.TheonlyproblemwithitfrommypointofviewisthattheSourceisacompletelyself-containedworld.Nooneisallowedinorout.Thisisoneofitsmainsecuritymeasures.Idon'tmentionitspecificallyinmystory,butthatishowI'vevieweditfromthe

beginning.OutsidepeoplecanonlyentertheSourceasholographicimages.Otherthanthat,it'sniceandchewy.Ofcourse,itwouldhavetobepartofafifthmovieorperhapsalaterseries.Whatyouproposecouldeasilyfillupanotherwholescript.Maybeyoushouldgiveitashot?PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SprldrDATE:5/13/20098:50:22PMWhenIpostedmycomments,Ihadn'treadanyoftheotherones.I'vereadallofthemnow,andIseethatI'mnotreallyaloneinmyviews.ButthereareacoupleofthingsthatI'mnowwondering...SincetheOneisaproductoftheCortexinsertingitsgeneticcodeintoavirtual,andtheCortexwascreatedfromTrinity'sDNA,doesn'tthatmeanTrinityandNeoarerelated?Ifso,Eww!xDI'massumingtheremustbeSOMEwayofgettinginandoutoftheSource,becausethat'swhattheOracledoes,soitshouldbepossibleforanandroidtomakeitswayinthere.Andevenifthereisn'taway...couldn'titjustsmashitswayin?AndanotherthingwhichbotheredmeslightlywhichIforgottomentionabove:Marouk.Icertainlydon'trememberhimfromthefilms,Ibelievehe'sanoriginalcreationofyours?Well,Ithinkitwouldmakemoresensesomehowifhewasreplacedwithsomeonefromthe2nd/3rdfilm.Aminorcharacter,ofcourse.Introducinganewcharacterwithasmall(butveryimportant)role,andthenimplyingthathe'sbeenaroundsincetheeventsofthepreviousfilmsisn'tquiteascredibleorinteresting.Butthisisaveryminorproblem(inmyview.Maybeitisn'tevenaproblematall...)And,beingquiteinterestedinGreekmythology,InoticedthatTyphonthingyoudidnearthebeginning.:DAsformySmith-in-real-worldidea...ifyouevergetanopportunitytogetthistothebigscreen,andthestudiodoesn'twantanopen-endedfilm...it'ssomethingtothinkabout...Andabouttheshavingscene,Ithinkitwouldhavebeensufficienttoshowtheinfinitereflections,andmaybeNeonoticesaveryslightdisturbance,reminiscentofthecrackedmirrorinthe"Redpill"sceneinthefirstfilm,thenhereachesouttotouchit,butthenTrinitycallshimfromtheotherroomandhedoesn'ttouchitandgoesouttoher,andforgetstheincident?Andthe"RandomNeointheCorner"scene...Ithinkthatitshouldbereplacedwithanaction/dreamsequenceinwhichNeoisintheMatrix,andhestartscloninghimselfontopeoplelikeSmith?

Orwouldthatbeabittooodd?Asforthetitle:"TheMatrix:Rememory"isdefinitelyastepintherightdirection,butitdoesn'tsoundquiterighttome.Ithoughtof"TheMatrix:Remembrance",butthatdoesn'tsoundquiterighteither.Maybeyoushouldditchthewhole"TheMatrix:Re_______"thingentirelyandcomeupwithsomethingabitdifferent?Thisis,afterall,quitedifferenttothetrilogy.Anyways,IthinkI'moutofcomments...goodluckwiththe(potential)film.~SprldrCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SprldrDATE:5/13/20098:53:58PMOh,andisTrinitysortoftheMotheroftheMatrix,sinceitwascreatedfromherDNA?OrwouldthatmakePersephonethe"Mother"?SorryIforgottomentionthisinthepreviouscomment.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/14/200912:11:09AMSprldr,Yes,I'msureFreudwouldhaveafielddaywithmycontinuationofthestory.DNAintermixing,incest,geneticinterbreeding,younameit.Eww!isright.TheOracleneverleavestheSourcephysically;sheonlytransportsfromtheSourceintotheCortex/SuperMatrixandbackagain.IsupposeanandroidcouldsmashhiswayintotheSource,buttheresomanysafeguardsinplacethatitwouldbeunlikely.AlthoughIdon'tsaythisdirectlyinthestory,NewZealandisthebiosphereworldthattheSourceandallitscomponentshavetakenover.AndAustraliaisnowsolelydedicatedtoprovidingpowertotheSource/NewZealandwithitsvastcombinedsolar/nuclearfacilities.Bothoftheseislandsactasananironfortressbothbecauseoftheirmilitarydefensesandbecausetheyareislands.Completelyself-contained.Yes,IliketheideaofMaroukbeingapre-existingcharacterfromtheTrilogy.I'llhavetoinvestigatethatpossibility.PerhapsoneofCaptainRoland'smen.I'mgladyoulikedtheTyphonreference.Ithinkmostpeoplemissit.AndsomepeoplejustthinkthatthisparticularhorrendouscreatureisabittoooutofthecharacterfortheMatrixstory.Ipersonallyseeitisnotunlikethesentinalswiththeirglowingsensors,ganglia,androbotictentaclesswirlingabout.Ialsothinkyourideaforthemirrorsceneisgood;perhapsminewasabittooobvious?Yoursleavesalittlemoretotheimagination.AndthereferencebacktotheRedPill

scenecouldbenice.TheRandomNeoscenewasalwaysahitormissforme.Imightjustleaveitout.Inotsokeenonyourideaforit;abittooodd,yes.Yeah,IlikeMatrixRememoryalot.It'sgotgoodconnotations.Whatitlacksishighpower/highimpactwhichSuperMatrixdefinitleyhas....but....SuperMatrixwell...justsucks.So-highimpact,NOTSuperMatrix.Whaddyagot?Greatinsightandideas.Imayusemanyofthemifthisthingeveryreallygetsofftheground.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/14/200912:16:06AMSprldr,ONEPOSSIBLEFAMILYTREEZuraandtheArchitect/AlexStrong=grandmomandgranddad?PersephoneandtheMerovingian/Victor=momanddad?Trinity'sDNA=thefertilizedegg?It'sconvolutedforsure;that'swhyIlikeitsomuch!COMMENT:AUTHOR:SprldrDATE:5/14/20094:19:24PMSomethingeldeI'vebeenwondering:Trinity,accordingtoEnterTheMatrix,is25,andNeois37(asfarasIcanrecall,Imightbeslightlyoff).SincetheSuperMatrixwascreatedfromherDNAwhenshewasaninfant,thatwouldmakeitabout24or25years.Thus,howcanNeobeolderthanthethingwhichcreatedhim?Andlet'snotforgetthefivepreviousMatrices!IgettheimpressionthatAlexcanspeeduptimeinsidetheSuperMatrix,thoughI'mnotsureifthiswaswhatyoumeant.AbouttheMerovingiancallingSeraph"Judas"...Idon'tthinkyouneedtogivetheOracleanewassistant.YoucouldjustsaythattheMerovingiansentSeraphtoworkfortheOracleasaspy,butduringthattimeheendedupreallyjoiningherside.Thatexplainshowhecouldbeworkingforbothofthematthesametime.Also,inthefirstfilm,Morpheussayssomethinglike"Oncepeoplehavereachedacertainage,wedonotfreethemfromtheMatrix.Themindhastroublelettinggo.I'veseenithappen."MaybethepersonhesawithappentowasTrinity?Thiswouldsolveanotherofyour

chronologicalproblems.(AndIthinkthatMaroukbeinganewcharactermakessomeofyourstoryseemlessconnected,andkindoftacked-on,thoughI'mnotsurewhetherImadethatclearabove.)AsfortheNewZealand/Australiathing...that'sinteresting...IimaginedtheSourceasahugebuildingsomethinglikethePentagon(butwaybigger),andtheCortexasamassive,transparentspherewithmillionsoftinyneuronlikestructuresvisibleinsideit.Andanotherthing......inthefilms,allsceneswithintheMatrixaretintedgreen,andallsceneswithinZionaretintedblue.IthinkallsceneswithintheSourceworldshouldhaveakindofwhite,warmglowaboutthem.That'showIpicturedthesceneswhilereading,andIthinkitreinforcesthewhole"heaven"thing.Note:inGreekmythology,TyphonwasthesonofGaiaandTartarus.GaiaandTarataruswerebothspawnedbyChaos,thusmakingthemsiblings.Therefore,Typhonwastheproductofincest...TheCortexwascreatedfromTrinity'sDNA,whichNeonowcontains...ChaoswastheancestorofalltheGreekgods,their"Source",inotherwords...Wait,amIgoingalittletoofarwiththis?xD~SprldrCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkSpauldingDATE:5/15/20092:15:21AMToPDWood,IcommunicatedwithyouseveralmonthsagoabouthowmuchIenjoyedthestoryyouwrote.IhavebeenglancingatsomeofthecontentfromyourcriticsandsupporterswhichIhavebeenreceivinginmyemail.Interestingreactionsyouaregetting.MostlyfavorableIassume.OnequickcommentIwouldliketoadd.Ihaveasuggestionforarenameofthetitle.YouhaveprobablyalreadythoughtaboutitbutIthinkarealgreatnameforthestorywouldbeMATRIXRESURRECTION:TheREBIRTH.Thiscouldhaveanumberofapplications...Neo...Trinityetc.whatdoyouthink?Istilllikeyourstoryalot,butwell...justnotcrazyaboutthename.Goodjob!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/15/20093:48:21AMHiMark,IliketheResurrectionpart;that'sbeenkickedaroundbefore,asyouguessed.IthinktheRebirthpartmightbealittleredundant.

TheMatrix:Resurrectionishighonthelist.Justwanttoseeiftherearesomeothersthatmightbealittlebetter.Thanksforthethought.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:HurricaneNeoDATE:5/24/20094:42:32PMVerywellthoughtout,goodjob!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/24/20095:00:03PMHurricaneNeo,Lovethefeedback,shortandsweet.Gladyoulikedit.Thanks.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BenfromArizonaDATE:5/27/20096:09:31PMIenjoyedthatsomuch,Istartedreadingat7AMorso,andcouldn'tstop,(carefullyabsorbingeachdetail)until10:30AM.OneproblemIsawisthatmanydirectorsdon'twishforsuchalargephenomenonsuchasthe"Matrix"trilogytobe'tweaked'asmuchasthismanipulatesthepossibleback-storiesandoriginsofthesecharacters.Thetwistsarenice,Icanseewhereyouweregoing,butthinkofitthisway:ifthisstorywerecenteredonNeo,andhisexistencetheultimatesalvationofZion,whydoalltheotherpeoplehavetobesointertwinedintoit?MusttheyallberelatedbacktotherealworldoutsidetheSuperMatrix?ILOVEthatyoubroughtNeoandTrinityback,Ievenadoredthedetailsofheractualrelationto"TheArchitect"(slash)"AlexStrong,"buttherestwasabitoverboard.Honestly,thosetwoconnectionswouldsellme.IfIhadthefunding,I'dproducethatmuch-butMerovingianandPersephoneasherparents?…Hmmmaybe,actually,Ilikeit.Ithastobepresentedadifferentwaythough,itjustseemedfartoostrangetohaveherparentssuddenlylosetheirmindswhentheywereboththebrainchildrenofsomethingsointricatelywoven,andretainedsomesortofstrangesuperpowers.Thenthere’sMorpheusandLockasbrothers?Theirmother,theOracle?Ouch,thatseemedlikeareachforasurprisetwist,butmerelyaddedtoomuchseasoningtothemeatofstory.Ialsobelieveifthisscriptwererevised,itmighthaveabitlessjumping.Hollywooddoesntliketocomplicatefilmsanymoretokeeptheminterestingtopeoplewhoenjoycomplication.Icouldseethemusingthisscript,andsimplycombiningmorescenesintolargersectionssoasnotconfusetheaudience.Excludingallthiscritiquethough,andtobeperfectlyfrank,Iwouldpaymoneytoseeit,(probablytwice)andIwouldbuytheDVD.Imgladsomeoneoutthereisdoingeverythingtheycantoseeanothermoviecomeoutandevolvethestory.Theideaof

NeowakingupintoyetanotherrealworldfromthemachineworldisanimportantelementImyselfhavethoughtaboutsincethemakingofthelastfilm.Youdidwritethisbeautifully.Ienjoyedhowyoudescribedtheaction,thedreams,itwasafantasticread.Wonderfuljob!Iapplaudyou!P.S.ThesettleyetcreepyapparitionbehindNeowhilehewasshavingthatdidn'tmoveinthemirror,whatwasthat?Whydidyouincludethis?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/28/20091:43:25AMBenfromArizona,Ah,Ilovewhenpeoplereadrightthroughitintothenight...andalsocomeoutontheotherendwithapositiveglow.Thanksforthestrongpraise.Andnowforthosepartsthatinvariablytweakeventhemostavidfans.Heregoes.1)JustrememberthatthebackstoryoftheMatrixTrilogyisalwaysreferencingtheMatrixandZionworlds;asfarasthoseworldsareconcerned,thebackstoryremainsintact.ThestoryI'vecreated,ontheotherhand,isoutsideoftheTrilogystoryandtherefore,hasit'sownbackstorythatdoesn'tconflictwiththeTrilogy.ItwouldbesimilartothebackstoryofNeoinandoutsideoftheMatrix.InsidetheMatrixhisbackstorywasrelativelynormal.Hehadajob,hobbies,aplacetolive,etc.Butthatwasn'thistruebackstory.Histruebackstorywasthathewastrappedinapod,enslavedinavirtualworldintheMatrix.Atleastthat'showIlookatit.2)TheworldoftheSuperMatrix,CortexandtheSourceissupposedtobeself-containedandself-sustaining.Havingfamiliesasthecorepeopleinvolved,andsettingupkeyplayersliketheArchitectandtheOracletoallowtheirchildrentoplaycrucialrolesseemedlikeanaturalprogression.Itissortofequivalenttofamiliestravelingtoadistantplanettocolonizeanewworld;they'dwanttobeinittogether.IlovethethreegenerationsofArchitect,Merovingian(Victor),andTrinityallplayingkeyroles.Iadmit,it'saspicydish,maybeabitoverthetop;still,alotoffunifyoucanswallowit.3)Iagreethatthestorybouncesaroundalot;Hollywoodwouldprobablybalkatit.I'mguessingthatinvisualform,though,thestorywillbeeasiertofollow.Therewouldalsoprobablybesomesortofdevice(say,acolorglow)thatwoulddifferentiateflashbacksfromthepresent.4)Thecreepyapparitioninthemirrorattheendmighthavebeenunnecessary.IwastryingtomakeareferencebacktowhenNeohastakentheredpillandissitting,waitingforittotakeeffect.Hepusheshisfingerintothemirroranditbends,liquifiesunderhistouch.Thatishisfirsttruetasteoftheworldbeyond.InmymirrorsceneIsuggestthata

worldevenbeyondthatoftheSuperMatrixexistsandNeoistheonlyoneintouchwithit.Again,maybeunnecessary.Nicecomments,nicecompliments.Allveryappreciated.ThanksBen.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BenfromArizonaDATE:5/28/20096:37:27PMThankyou,thoseexplanationsdefinitelyexplainalotforme.Verywellsaid,andImustagree.NowIhaveaquestionforanyonewhoreadsthis:Youknowwhyyourheredon'tyou?You'rehere,readingthesecomments,andreadingthisscriptbecauseyoufeelasenseofconnectionwiththestoryoftheMatrix,don'tyou?It'snotjustafascinatingstory,noit'sdeeperthanthat.I'vefeltsinceIwasachildthatsomethingisn'tquiteright.Admittedly,andasfoolishlyasitsounds,I'vefeltasenseofsurrealismsincesixyearsoldthatthisworldweliveinissorealthatisinfactunreal.Haven'tyou?Ascrazyaswemightbelabeled,IknowyouunderstandwhatImean.Nowsimplyadmitittoyourself,andyou'rehalfwaytothetruth.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/28/20098:57:14PMBen,I'mgladmyexplanationspulledittogetherforyouabitmore.Asfortherestofthiscomment,I'llthrowitouttothoseofyouwhohavethatsamesenseofunreality.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:jackDATE:6/3/20097:26:08PMSomeofthepartsarecrapandsomeareokCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/3/20098:04:53PMWhichparts,Jack?COMMENT:AUTHOR:aaronsimpsonDATE:6/5/20091:09:05PMGooddaysiriwasdoingsomeresearchasIhadanideaforamatrixscreenplaymyselfwhenIcameacrossyours.Iamdisheartenedtohearthatyouhavetroublegettinganywherewiththebigcheeses.haveyouhadanyjoy?myideawasalittledifferentfocussingondifferentaspectsbutIamnotsureitisworth

developingwithwhatIhaveread.dotheynotrealisehowmanypeoplearebeggingformorematrix,especiallywithallthecrapIseegettingreleased.Ihavereadabout16pagesandIthinkyouhavesometalent,Idothinkyouhavetolookatthe80/20rule.Idontknowifyouhaveheardofit,butifyouspent80%ofyoutimepossiblychanging20%ofityoumaybeontoawinner.IhavewrittenabitasahobbyandIknowitishardgoingbackandchanging,butlittlechangeshereandtherecouldleadtoyourbiggestchanceofsuccess.yourontherightlines.IthinksomeofthecommentsordoapollorsomethingcouldhelpyougetthistowhereyouneedtoCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/5/20091:32:42PMaaron,Youcaughtmeatanopportunetime.I'mstuckonthedetailsofanotherscreenplayanduppoppedyourcomment.Perfectreasontoprocrastinate.Thanks.IassumeatsomepointtherewillbesomecontinuationoftheMatrixstory;there'saraptaudienceandhugemoneymakingpotential.It'sjustamatteroftime,inmyopinion.Whethermystorycomesintoplay,Ijustdon'tknow.Sofar,I'vehadonlyasmallnibblefromHollywoodandithasnotpannedoutanyfurther...yet.We'llsee.Iprobablywon'treworkthescriptunlessIgetsomegenuineinquiriesfromseriousparties.Ifeelthatthestoryandideas,astheyare,arestrongenoughtoattractinterest.Ifigetsome,IthinkIhavemorethanenoughfeedbackinallthecommentsI'vereceivedtopopthescriptupafewnotchesinquality.So,untilthen,I'llbeworkingonmyownoriginalscreenplaythathasmuchmoreofachanceofbeingproducedthanonethatpiggybacksonsomeoneelse'swork.We'llseewhathappens.Thanksforthemusings.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:curiousDATE:6/5/20092:50:39PMDearfriendIknowitiseasiertodestroythantocreate,tohatethentocreate,butthisscreenplayhassomanyfloorsfromwhatIhaveread.yourideasaregoodanditisclearyouhaveimaginationandsometalentandcouldbeasuccessfulwriterbutyouhavehadyoursugarnowhereisyourmedicine.thereisnorealstructuretothisscreenplay.thereisnorealtensionoranythingtokeepyouattheedgeofyourseat,thereisverylittleemotionalconnection.ifyoulookatasimilarscifiliketerminator2judgmentday

thewaythetensionisbuiltwithantagonistsandprotagonistmakesyouwanttowatchit.aspreviouscommentshavesuggesteditmayworkascomic/booktypethingbutasahollywoodmovieyoustandnochance.IdontknowhowhardyouhaveworkedonitbutifIwenttoseethatatthepicturesIwouldwantmymoneybackandwouldbeseriouslyannoyed.ithinksometimesifyoucantimprovesomethingyoushouldleaveitalonejusthowthosebrothersshouldnthavemadeasequelandthenthetriology.Youcantpossiblythinkitisworthbringingsmithbackagain,heisboringasavillain,theMerovingianmakesamuchbettervillain.ithinkitiseasilytoloseperspectivewhenitisyourownworkbutthislacksanysubtletyandisjustreinventingthewheel,itishardnottohateyourscreenplaybecauseitislackingthatsomethingthatmakeamoviespecial,findthatandyoumightstandachancefromaconcernedMATRIXFANCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/5/20099:56:13PMcurious,Whenyousaid"thisscreenplayhassomanyfloors"Ithoughtyouwerereferringtoitsmanysubtlelevelsornuancedlayers.ImaginemysurprisewhenIrealizedthatyoureallymeant"flaws"insteadof"floors".I'msorryyoufindmyscreenplayso"hardnottohate".Givenyourcommentsaboutitlackingsubtletyortension,Istrivetounderstandwhythemajorityofothercommentersfinditso"hardnottolove".Iadmitthatitdoesn'trigidlyfollowthreeactstructure,conformstrictlytotheantagonist/protagonistmodelorendwithabang.ButIstillthinkithasadoseoftension/resolutionandatleastasmatteringofsubtlety.Iappreciatethatyouthinkmy"ideasaregood"andthatIhave"someimaginationandsometalentandcouldbeasuccessfulwriter".I'lltakethatasapositivereasontocontinueonmymostrecentscreenplay.AndasfarasTerminator2goes,Iagree,itwasagreatmovie.Lovedit.Hopefully,mynextscreenplaywilltrackmorecloselytosuchasubtleandemotionaloeuvre.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RichardEwingDATE:6/14/20097:08:05AMIfSilverPictureswouldreleasetheSecondRenassance.TolivefilmthiswouldultimatelybringMatrixFansbacktothebigscreen,andItwouldproducerevenueforSilverPicturesInc.Imeanaskyourself,howmanypeopleactuallysaw"TheSecondRenaissance."Thiswouldclearupalotofquestionsfromviewerswhocametoknow

theMatrixbutdidn'tactuallygraspitsbeginning.Ihavebeenaskingforthisforthelast2years.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/14/20092:02:53PMIagree.Anexpansionoftheserieswouldbeveryenjoyable.TakingpartsoftheAnimatrixanddevelopingthemintowholemovieswouldbeagreatplacetostart.Ionlyhopethat,iftheMatrixconceptdoesgetexpanded,thatitdoesn'tgotoofar,suchasTerminatordidwiththeSarahConnorChronicles.NotthattheChroniclesarebad,butIthinktheoriginalconceptgetstowatereddown.Here'stoatleastonemoreexpansionoftheMatrixstory.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/24/20097:45:57AMBah,nowyouhavemewantingthenextchapter...COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/24/20092:51:48PMI'lltakethatasacompliment.Bah,IwishIhadanotherchaptertogiveyou.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:aaronDATE:6/24/20097:20:51PMitsfunnyhowonlythegoodcommentsgetpublishedCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/24/20098:01:08PMUntrue.I'veonlyrejectedthreecommentorssofar,andonlybecausetheyhadnothingtoofferexceptobscene,personalattackslacedwithprofanities.Andifyoulookcarefullythroughthehundredsofcomments,you'llseethattherearemanythatareeitherunflattering,highlycritical,orsomewhatrude.Onlythemostegregiouscommentshavebeenremoved.Sothen,asfarasyourcommentgoes,I'lltakeitasthehighestofcompliments.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ashleyDATE:7/3/20096:18:20PMIloveit.Youwroteitperfectly.

TobehonestIdontgetwhysomepeopledontlikeit.Whenifinishedreadingitleftmewantingmore.pleasetrytoturnthisintoamovieorjustwritea5thonesoiknowwhathappens.Thelastbitofthewritingwithneobeingaboywasperfect.nowmye-mailsarefilledwiththingsaboutthe4thmatrix.Igiveita5starrating!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/6/20092:56:03PMashely,Aw,shucks.I'mblushing.Stopit.You'retoomuch...toomuch.Allkiddingaside,I'mgladitbroughtyouthatmuchjoy.Yourcomment,"Idon'tgetwhysomepeopledon'tlikeit",well,Ithinktherearenumerousreasonsforthat.Somepeoplejustplainflat-outdon'tlikeit.Nothingyoucandoaboutthatone.Somepeopledon'tlikeitbecausetheyhadanideaofwhatafourthMatrixwouldbeandmystorydidn'tcomeanywhereclosetowhattheywereexpecting.Nothingyoucandoaboutthat,either.Thentherearethemajorityofpeoplewholikeitalot,butstillfeelitcouldbeimproved.Heck,evenI'minthatcategory.So,thosewhohavelotsofideasonhowtoimproveitarereallynotdislikingit;they'rejusttryingtomakeitperfect.And,finally,thereisthesmallbutso-much-appreciatedcategoryofpeoplelikeyourselfwhodon'tthinkonewordshouldbechanged.Blessyou.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/14/200912:33:48PMMr.Wood,youhavedoneitbrilliantly.IthelpstoclearupsomegapingholesandquestionsfromtheMatrixTrilogy.Ienjoyedeverybitofit.Ithasprovidedsomegroundforinterestingspeculationforfanslikeme.Withascreenplaythisgood,haveyoutriedtopersuadetheWarnerBros.tomakethismovie?Foroncetheysetaboutit,theycanputitevenmoreimpeccably.I'llbekeepingmyfingerscrossedforit.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/14/200912:51:30PMJaques,Ah,"brilliantly"...ithassuchaniceringtoit.I'vetriedtogetittothepeopleinHollywoodwhomatter,butsofar,noluck;it'satoughdoortocrackopen.

I'dlovetoseeitturnedintoamovie,too,butifnot,commentssuchasyoursmakethecreationofthestoryworthwhile.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/16/20098:17:28AMThanksforreplying,Mr.Wood.Ihavereadthroughthestory5timesbynow,andIhavetwocomplaints.ThesmalloneisthattherearefeweractionscenesthantheTrilogy,fromwhichIhopeyouwillfindawayout.Buttheothercomplaintisabigone--youhavegotmesoexcitedthatIcan'twaittoreadmoreandmoreabouttheSuperMatrix.Igettheimpressionthatyoustillhavealottosay.Andonemorething,Iamreadytowaitforyearsifnecessarytoseeyourscreenplaymadeintoamovie,evenmorethrillingthanthepreviousthree.Thanksagainandmayyouhavealltheluckyouneed!COMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/16/20099:58:59AMMr.Wood,haveyouconsideredwritingabookonthewholestoryoftheMatrix?Ofcourse,thereisabighurdleintheformofcopyright.ButIthinkifyoucanfindagoodpublisher,theycanhelpyousortthisout,fortheyarethepeoplewhoknowhowtogettherightthingsfromthepeoplewhomatter(Wachowskibrothersforone,WarnerBros.foranother).Iwishyouallthesuccessinyourquest.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/16/20092:56:55PMJaques,Wow.Readit5times.That'simpressive.Andafter5readings,only2complaints?Yeah!!That'sgood.Yes,mystorydefinitelyveersfromtheaction-heavystoryofRevolutions.Iknewthatwasgoingtobeastickingpointformanypeople,buttostayinthe120pagescreenplaylimitANDtofitinallthebackstory,Ihadtosacrificesomeaction.AndIfiguredthesuspenseandtensionoftherevelationsandplottwistswouldaddenoughexcitementandintriguethatthelesseningofactionandfightsceneswouldbeacceptable.Itwasahardbalance.And,yes,manypeoplewantmore,more,more.AtthemomentI'mworkingonoriginalmaterial,butmaybesomedaytheurgewilljustbetoostrongandI'lllaunchbackintoit.Asalways,notowningtherightstotheworkispersonallyadragand,ofcourse,Iain'tmakin'nomullafromit.So,we'llsee.Ihaven'tstoppedtryingtogetthisthingmadeintoamovie,butitgetsharderandharderastimegoesby.Allfingersarecrossed,though.

Thanksforyourmusingsandsupport,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/16/20092:59:28PMJaques,I'veactuallybeenworkingonthebookangleabitrecently.Iwasmorethinkingofagraphicnovel,though,soitstaysmorelikeamovie.Ifthatpansout,I'llpostthenewsforsure.It'sprobablythemostlikelyangleongettingitoutinsomeform.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TrigDATE:7/16/20096:45:17PMMakethisMovieNow!!Iwillsimplydieifthisfilmdoesn'tgetmade.Thisfilmwouldpushtheboundariestoawholenewlevelagain,evenfurtherthanthefirstthreedid!Ifeelmorestronglyaboutthisthanthebig,mosthardcore/diehardfansofmichaeljacksondoabouthisdeath!!!Andthethingis,hemaynotbedeadatall;)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/16/20097:12:59PMTrig,Nothingwouldmakemehappierthantomakethismovienow.Ifyou'vegotthemoneyorthecontacts,I'mready.Withoutthem,though,it'sgoingtobetough.I'vetried.But,asalways,it'sreallyhardtomakepredictions...especiallyaboutthefuture.Thanksfortheenthusiasm,PDWoodR.I.P.MichaelJacksonCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/17/20091:27:51PMIthinkyourideaisperfectlyplausible.WritingabookisthebestthingyoucoulddoatthemomenttoattractattentionfromtheWarnerBros.Therearealotofprerequisitestomakethismovie,(copyright,samefilmcrew,sameproducers...younameit)whichisasortofMissionImpossiblewithoutexcellentcontactswithinHollywood.Iwouldbevisitingthissiteeveryweektolearnaboutfurtherdevelopments.Thanksonceagain.Wishyouallthesuccess!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/17/20098:07:24PMJaques,Yourenthusiasmandpersistenceareencouraging.Butevengettingabookmadeisastretch.

IfImakeanyheadwaywithit,I'lldefinitelypostsomethingonthemainpageofthesite.ThanksPDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:7/18/20092:18:42AMTheMatrixOnlineendsonJuly31st,aftermorethanafouryearrun.SanctionedbytheWachowskiBrothersandoverseenbyMatrixComicsandConcretewriterPaulChadwick,itcomprisedafourthchapteroftheMatrixstorythatallowedforactualinvolvementfromitsfans.I'mafraidanyfutureMatrixchapterthatdoesnotincludesomereferencetotheeventsofMatrixOnlinewillnotbemuchofahitwithme.Also,evenifyouweretogetthisgreenlit,whichI'msureyoualreadyknowishighlyunlikely,wouldyourecastalltheroles?Theoriginalactorswouldbemucholder,anditwouldn'tseemplausiblethatnotimehadpassedbetweenyourstoryandRevolutions.Recastingalloftheroleswouldjuststrikemeastacky.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/18/20091:33:04PMiFiction,AlthoughsomeofmystorywouldundoubtedlybeinfluencedbytheMatrixOnline,oneofitsmostinterestingaspectsisalsohowwellitcanstandapartfromthewholestoryastheWachowskibrothershaveenvisionedit.Idon'tsuggestthatmystoryisareplacementforanythingtheydid;it'smoreofanalternateextensionandonethatIthinkmostMatrixfanscanappreciate.Ofthe250,000visitorstothissitesofar,thepopularityratingofmystoryisinthe75%range.Mustbehittinganervesomewhere.Isuggestyoureadit,ifnotasanauthenticextensionoftheMatrixstory,thenatleastasanalternateconcept,afurtherthought-provokingvision.You'reprobablyright,thelikelihoodofthisbeingmadeintoamovieisslim.Theoriginalactorsareolderandthethoughtofrecastingitwouldunderminethebeautyofthewholeseries.Thewaymystoryisdesigned,however,couldgivesomejustificationfortheuseofthesameactorseventhoughtheyareolder.Still,alongshot.Ihopeyoureadmystoryeventhoughyouhavereservationsaboutwhetheryouthinkitwouldbeahitasamovie;IthinkyoumightappreciatethethreadofWachowskianplottwistingthatIhavetriedtobefaithfulto.Thanksforyourthoughts,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/18/20092:23:02PMVerywell,Ishallwaittillthebookreallycomesout.Aboutthemoviethough,ItendtoagreewithiFiction.Still,Ihavetheconsolationofknowingthatyouaretryingyourverybest,andexpressingmysupportforyourworkistheleastIcandoatthemoment.Thanksamilliontimesandgoodluckinyourquest!

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/18/20096:22:47PMJaques,Thanksamillionforthesupport.Abookwouldbenice,amoviebetter,butI'mprettysureiFictionisright,too.Buty'neverknowwhatthefutureholds.Seeya,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:7/18/20098:17:11PMIhavereadit,andIlikeitasascript,butnotasaMatrixscript,ifthatmakesanysense.Goodpacing,goodplotstructure,interestingideas,butitdoesnotfeelliketheMatrix,tome.MyhopefortheMatrixseriesisthateithertheWachowskiBrotherswriteanotherinstallmentinsomeform,orthattheyspecificallycommissionanotherwritertodoso.EvenifthisscriptcouldworkasaMatrixsequel,Ithinkyou'vekindofshotyourselfinthefootbypostingitonline,astheWachowskiBrothersandWarnerBrothersalikewilllikelywanttokeeptheplotdetailsofanynewMatrixfilmunderlockandkeyuntilthefilmactuallycomesout.Anyway,duetotheageoftheactors,andtheeventsthathavetranspiredinMatrixOnline,IthinkanewMatrixfilmwouldhavetotakeplaceseveralyearsaftertheotherthreefilms,andpossiblybethebeginningofitsownuniqueTrilogy.Thiskindofthingmightactuallyhaveagoodchanceofhappening,asTerminator:Salvationdidthesamething,andmetwithreasonablemonetarysuccess,thoughIdidn'tparticularlylikethefilm,myself.I'msureIwouldfeelmuchdifferently,though,aboutanotherMatrixfilm,iftheWachowskiBrotherswerebehindit.Whateverhappens,I'mhopefulthattheMatrixwillliveon.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/18/20099:17:19PMiFiction,Thanksforthefollow-up;I'malwaysmoreopentopeople'sopinionswhenthey'vereadthescript.AndI'minclinedtoagreewithmostofyourcomments.Iprobablydidshootmyselfinthefootbypostingitonline;but,atthesametime,mostofthepeoplewho'vereadithavesaidthattheywouldstillgoseethemovie.Ithinkfewfanswouldpassuponthechancetoseeafourthepisodeeveniftheyknewthebasicplot.Hardtosay.AnewuniqueTrilogysetmanyyearsaftertheoriginalcouldbeacoolidea;itwouldhaveitsownroomtobreath.Nicethought.TheonecommentIwassurprisedtohearwasthatyoudidn'tthinkmystoryfeltlikethe

Matrix.I'llconcedethatgettingitmadewiththeactorsbeingolderisalongshot,butIthoughttheplottwistingandcharacterexpansionwasWachowskiworthy.Yes,theactionsequencesarelessepicandtherearefewerofthem,butIstillthoughtthestoryasawholekeptwiththeMatrixthread.But,ofcourse,everyonehastheiropinionandseesitfromadifferentangle.I'mgladyouatleastlikeditasascript,separatefromitsassociationwiththeMatrixTrilogy.ThanksPDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:iFictionDATE:7/20/20093:53:56AMThereasonthatyourscriptdoesn'tquitefeelliketheMatrixtomeisthatyouarebitloosewiththeseries'establishedmetaphors.IntheMatrixTrilogy,therearesomehugetwiststhrownourway,butallofthemchallengeustoreinterpretwhatwe'veseen,ratherthaninvokingretroactivecontinuitytosay"well,no,thiswasreallythis".Idon'tthinktheMatrix-within-a-Matrixideacouldeverworkwithwideraudiences.Ithinktheywouldfeelabitcheated:"IthoughtthatwastheRealworld..."Ithinkit'susuallybesttochallengeexpectationswithinasatisfyingstoryframework,withenoughtraditionalplotstructurenottoalienateallthefolkswhogotomoviesjusttobeentertained.Inessence,Ithinkthat'swhattheMatrixfilmshavebeenallabout.They'resomeoftheonlydeep-thinkingfilmsinhistorywithamassiveaudience.AnewMatrixfilmwouldhavetoappealtomorethanjustthehardcorefansoftheoriginalTrilogy.COMMENT:AUTHOR:JaquesDATE:7/20/200911:33:18AMIwouldlovetoseethemovieoutinayear,butyouwouldbebetteroffwritingabooknow.Itmighttakeplentyofyearstosecurelegalrightsforyourworks.YourbestbetistomakeyourversionofMatrixwithfourfilmsintheseriesatalatertime.Mayyouhavealltheluckyouneed!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/21/20091:38:20PMiFiction,IthinkIgetyourpointaboutMatrixfansmaybefeeling"cheated",becausetheworldthattheycametoseeas"real"(i.e.theZionworld),wouldnowalsoturnouttobe"virtual"or"false".Itriedtodispelthatnotionbysuggestingthatallworldsarereal,whethersimulated,virtual,infinitesimallysmall,cosmicallylarge,whatever.Itriedtoconveytheideathatexperienceisreality.Whetheryouexperiencesomethinginavirtualworldora"real"world,thoseexperienceseffectandmoldwhoyouare.Despitethis,though,perhapsmanyfanswouldstillfeelasenseofbeingletdown.Icanseethat.WhatIdothinkpeopleappreciateaboutmystoryistheintensityandcomplexityoftheeventsandthehugeleapsinstoryandcharacterdevelopment.ThisiswhatattractedpeopletotheTrilogyinthefirstplace,inmyopinion,andit'swhatmakesmanypeoplelikethestoryasI'vecontinuedit.ButitisadrasticleapfromhowtheTrilogyended.Noteveryone'scupoftea.

Yourthoughtsandspeculationsarerefreshing.Thanksforwritingback.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/21/20091:42:26PMJaques,Istillseethegraphicnovelbeingtheperfectvehiclefortellingthisstoryifthemovieisnotpossible.I'lltrythatrouteprobably.Andasforafourpartseriesbasedonmystory,Iguessthat'spossible.Lotofwork,though.I'llhavetogivethatsomerealthought.

Thanks,PDWood COMMENT:AUTHOR:MercerDATE:7/23/20095:33:34PMJustfinishedreadingyourmatrixstorylineandamblownawaybyit.IfeltquiteletdownbytheendoftheMatrixtrioligy.Itdidn'tfeellikeaproperending.ThedeathofNeoandtrinity,thesentinalsjustceasingtheirattack,Neo'sbodybeingwhiskedaway.Nothingfeltright,Iwantedmore.Ineededtoknowmore.Yourinstallmentfinishesitoffperfectly.Ilovethetwistofthematrixinalargermatrix.Thebeefingupofsomeoftheminorcharactersfromthe3films.GivingusmoreinsightintohowtheMatrixbeganandthe36'sareareallygoodaddition.Ifthehigherpowersdonotseriouslyconsidermakingafilmoutofyourstorythentheyaretrulymad,becausethisisfarsupiourtoMatrixRevolutionsandIthinkwouldbewelcomedandwatchedbymillions.Ifworstcomestoworseandtheydon'tmakethisafilmthenicanonlythankyouforatleastgivingmeanendinginmymindthattheMatrixtrulydeserved.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/23/20096:01:26PMMercer,IequateyourcommenttohowCypherdescribesNeo'spurposeintheMatrix:Amindjob!AndI'lltakeit.Obviouslyasamoviemystorywouldhavemoreimpactthanjustascript,butthispointIdoubtthemoviewillevergetmade;butyou'veshownmethattheimpactofmystorycanbegoodenoughinscriptform.I'mgladyoulikeditthatmuch.Reallymademyday.Thankssomuch,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AbhishekDATE:8/1/20093:41:20PM

whenthismovieisgoingtobereleased?iamdyingtowatchit.plztellme.........COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/1/20094:00:54PMAbhishek,Gladyoulikeditbut,it'sonlyascreenplayatthispoint,notevenwrittenbytheWachowskibrothers.Myattemptstogetitmadehavenotsucceededatthispoint.Asmoretimepasses,thelikelihoodofitbeingmadeintoamoviediminishgreatly.Perhapsagraphicnovelisapossibility.Onlytimewilltell.Thanks.Peace,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DaleDATE:8/4/20098:46:04AMHeyPDWood.obviouslyiamalittlelatetothepartysorryboutthat;)iamonly22butihaveseenthetrilogymoretimesthenicanrememberthereareonlyacoupleofmoviesthaticanwatchoverandoveragainandthetrilogyisasetthatisitdownandrevisitatleasteveryothermonth.Yourepisode/screenplay/novelistrulyamazing!grantedatthebeginningigotalittlelostbetweenallthedifferentmatricesbutonceireallygotintoititallstartedcomingtogetherandtomeyourstorygoesalmosthandinhadwiththemovie.iwouldliketogiveasemi-comparisonnowpleasebeforeidopleasepleasedonottakethisthewrongwayonlygoodintentionsaremeantbutihavea2yroldsonwholovesthelionkingmoviesandalsothelk11/2andjustasthatmovieshowthesamestorythroughadifferentsetofeyessodoesyourstorywithrespecttothetrilogyithinkmorepeoplewouldbeabletograspthisbetteriftheyweretothinkofitasnotafourthmovieAFTERthetrilogypersaybutifyouinterweaveyourstorywiththetrilogyitallreallymakessenseithinkyoudidatrulyamazingjobonthisprojectandihonestlythinkthatithelpsexplainthetrilogyonadeeperlevelandhelpstiethewholethingtogether.grantedasyouhavesaidcountlesstimesomepeoplealmostseethetrilogyasreligionandcannotevenbegintofathomthepossibilityofabiggersystematwork.Howeveribelievethatthisstorylikeisaidtieseverythingtogetheriamreallyimpressedandveryhonoredthatiwasabletoreadsuchagreatstory.ireallyhopethatmaybesomedayyouwillbeabletocontinueoratleastgetachancetopublishthisinamoreworldwideeffortithinkalotofpeoplewouldtrulylovetobeabletoreadthisiwillpassthisontoallmymatrixcompanionsitrulywishyouthebestandGOODLUCK!LOVETHEWORKpleasekeepitup!alsoijustwishtopartonalittlenoteihavewebsiteandhosting/serverexperienceifthereisanythingyoueverneedhelpwithpleasedonothesitatetoemailmeandiwillhelpinanywayican.alwaysfreeofchargethankyouforyourhardworkandawesomeimagination!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/4/20097:58:50PMDale,Toolate?Never.Nevertolatetomakemefeelgoodaboutthescript!Ithinkyourideaofwedgingthestoryinasakindof2&1/2isnotbad,butI'llbetit

wouldirritatealotofpeople.Bywedgingitin,itmightseemlikeI'msuggestthattheTrilogyneedstobeopenedupandtweaked.I'drathernotdothat.I'vebeenverycarefultotryandmaintaintheintegrityoftheTrilogyandonlyaddsomethingthatcanstandalmostonitsown,asanafterthoughtorcontinuation.IsawtherecentmovieversionofBeowolfandthoughtmaybethatlevelofalmostrealisticcomputeranimationcouldworkformystory.Thatallowsthesameactorstodovoicingsandsidestepstheproblemoftheagegap.Notsurehowitwouldgoover.Iappreciateallyourthoughts,reflections,accolades,andrecommendations.ShouldIfindmyselfinneedofyourservices,letushopethatbigmoneyisrollinginsoyouwouldnothavetoworkforfree.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/5/20091:23:55PMThisisjustunbelievablygood.IhadheardafewrumorsfromafriendthataMatrix4wasonthecards,soIwentonthelookoutonthenet,andbumpedheadfirstintoyourstory.IwasexceedinglydisappointedwiththewayMatrixRevolutionshadended.AfteralltheWachowskishaddoneinthefirsttwo,IjustcouldnotacceptthedeathsofNeoandTrinity.However,IturnedtoMatrixOnline,butgotevenmorefrustatedandenraged.FragmentsofNeo?Trinityonlyaprogram?Ridiculousandutterrubbish.YourstoryshouldhavebeenTHEperfectendingasthefinalmovieintheTrilogy(MatrixReloadedandRevolutionswereactuallytwopartsofthesamefilm).Anyway,youhavedoneasuperbjob,somethingIhadbeenhopingforquitesometime,butthen,beingastudentandgettinganInternetconnectiononly2monthsago,Ibegyouwouldexcusemeforfindingyourstorysolate.Thanksforcomingupwithastorywhichhasleftmecompletelysatisfied.IhopethatyourstoryisacceptedbytheWachowskis,butifnot,Iwon'tmind,becauseIhavealreadyacceptedinmymindthatyourstory,andnotthatofMatrixOnline,istheactualendingoftheMatrixseries.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/5/20093:24:12PMRaymond,Ican'ttellyouhowmuchIappreciateyourenthusiasm.Commentslikethismakemerealizehowmuchwritingthestorywaswortheveryminuteofstruggle.AndalthoughIcanunderstandyourfrustrationwiththecontinuationintheMatrixOnline,it'simportanttoneverforgetthemassiveachievementoftheWachowskibrothers.Despitesomepartsofthefranchisethatmaydisappoint,theendeavoroverallhasmadetruebelieversoutofmillions.Forme,fewmovieshavebeensocompelling,exciting,stunning,etcthattheywouldpushmetoinvestasmuchtimeandenergyasIhaveonmyscript.IcanonlyimaginewhattheWachowskibrothershadtogothroughtobuildsuchagreatideawithgreatcharactersdoingincrediblethings.Massivelydifficult.Theydidalltheheavyliftingandlegwork:definingtheworldanditsrules,buildingunique,strongcharacters,visualizingvital,originalactionsequences,etc.DespitethefactthatIjustpiggybackedontopofallthisincrediblework,I'mamazedat

howmuchofastruggleitwasformetocomeupwithmylittlestory.So,hatsofftotheWachowskibrothersandatipofthehattomylittlebutfunadditiontotheirbrilliantvision.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/8/20094:04:34AMAh,IamnotunderestimatinganythingtheWachowskisdid,butIcouldnothelpthinkingthattheylosttheplotintheclosingstages.IhavealwaysregardedTheMatrixasthebestmovieever.Neverbeforehadamovieknockedmyheadoffmelikethisonedid.IhavereadallthescreenplaysofthefilmsintheTrilogy.Therewerejusttoolessanswers,whilethequestionswerepilingupinmyhead.Andasforyourversion,Ihadbettersayaslessaspossible,asanyadjectivesIcanthinkoffailtodescribehowmuchjoyithasbroughtme.Ihavealwaysfeltthatthiskindofstorycangoonforever,ithassimplytoomuchpotential.Ihavebeenreadingthecommentssectionlately,andithasansweredalmostanythingIwantedtoaskyoutoclarify.ButIwillasktwoquestions.Firstly,haveyouhadanylucksofarformakingthemovie(thoughIadmitchancesofitaredecreasingbythedays)?Secondly,ifnot,howfarhaveyougoneinyourideaofwritingabook?Butthen,evenifbothanswersarenegative,Iwon'tmind,Ihavealreadytoldyouwhy.Thanksamillionforsuchabrilliantscreenplayandmayyouhaveallthesuccessyouneed!COMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/8/20097:54:42AMHaveyoutriedapproachinganyoftheactorsintheTrilogytoseewhattheythinkofyourstory?KeanuReevesorCarrieAnnMossforinstance?Theyaretheprincipalactorsinyourstory.PerhapstheywouldmanagetoconvincetheWachowskisthatafourthMatrixfilmshouldbemade.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/8/20094:38:41PMRaymond,Icanseewe'reonthesamepagewithrespectfortheWachowskibrothersandtheirvision.I'vetriedquitealottogetthistotheattentionofthepeoplewhomatter.EvengotittoaprettywellknownactorinHollywood.Nothinghascomeofit.CarrieAnnandKeanuwouldbemuchhardertoreach,Iwouldassume.NottosaythatI'vegivenup,butI'mworkingagainstthetide.Imaypursuethebookangleabitmore.AndIwillstillworkonthemoviepossibility,althoughmyvigorhaswanedabit.Thanksagainforallyourencouragement.Keepthefaith.PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/11/200911:38:07AMThankyou,Iwouldneverloseanyfaithinyou,nomatterwhathappens.Ihavereadthestorythricebynow,andIhaveonlyonesmallcomplaint--therearefeweractionscenesthanintheTrilogy.Iknowyouwouldpointatthepagelimit,butanother5/6pagescan'thurt,couldit?Iameagerlylookingforwardtoreadingalotmoreofyourwork.Andincidentally,areyouplanningtopublishthebookanytimesoon,sayinacoupleofyears?Youseemtobeinabattlefield,yourgoalshieldedby3linesofdefence.Firstcomethefans,whowillthinktwiceaboutlookingatacontinuationoftheMatrixstorylinewrittenbysomeoneelse.ButgladIamtosay,youhavepenetrateditsubstantiallyandstillgoingstrong.Nextcomesthemedia,whoholdallthekeystounlockalltherightdoors.Hereiswhereyoustandtogainplentyoflongrangeweapons.NextcomesaseaofdefenceintheformoftheWarnerBrothers,butifyoucangetthebackingofatleastoneprincipalactorfromtheTrilogy,youcansailthroughitsgateswithease.Thenyoureachyourgoal--TheWachowskis.Adauntingandmonumentaltask,butIamsureyouwilltriumphintheend.LiketheKeymakersaid,allsystemshavetheirweakpoints.Keepupthegoodworkandrememberthatthefansarealwayswithyouinyourquest.COMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/13/20098:21:56AMThankyousir,Iwon'tbelosinganyfaithinyounomatterwhat.IthassortofreignitedmypassionfortheMatrix.ThethrillofreadingthestoryhasbeenmatchedonlybytheshockandaweofTheMatrix.Incidentally,Ihavealittlepointtomake--couldn'tyouincorporateabitmoreactioninyourstory?Ireallylikedyourworkonthe36's.Youwould,ofcourse,pointatthedarnedpagelimit,butanother5/6pagescan'thurt,canit?COMMENT:AUTHOR:Mallos31DATE:8/16/20091:22:00AMIhaven'tquitefinishedreadingyet,butIlikeitsofar.Onlyafewproblemsthough.Ifindattheveryleast,thebeginningismoderatelycliched,usingthesameplotastherestofthemovies.IsupposeI'mnotonetotalkyetbecauseIhaven'tfinishedreadingyetbutIstillsayit'sgood.COMMENT:AUTHOR:AndyDATE:8/16/200911:27:28PMHiPDWoodFirstofall,welldoneonsuchagreatworkwhichmusthavetakensometimetocomplete.IreallylovethescriptandIreaditinaboutanhourandahalf.IhaveafewquestionshoweverregardingtheSourcewhichisthepresenttimeofhistoryaccordingtoyourscript,Ireallyfeelyoushoulddescribethisworldmoreandletthereaderortheviewermakeapictureoftheworldthatyouaredescribing,sorrythat´snotaquestionbutthisisIreallydon´tgetallthenumbersthatyouhaveduringthescriptcouldyouexplainthemalittle?ThenextquestioniswherewilltherebornSmithfitin?Ireallyliketheanimatrixandthisstorydoesnotmakeanylargeconectionstothatstory.WellasIsaidatthestartIreallyloveditandIsincerlyhopethatitcouldbedevelopedonthesilverscreen,Iwouldonlyliketoseetheanimatrixsidedevelopedmore..........GREATWORKANDTIMEWELLSPENT!THANKYOU

COMMENT:AUTHOR:ChristinaDATE:8/17/20092:20:17PMGiveplease.Ihavelostfriends,somebydeath.othersthroughsheerinabilitytocrossthestreet.Helpme!Icannotfindsitesonthe:Benefitcosmeticsbenetint.Ifoundonlythis-Benefitcosmeticsanimaltesting.Diggisaplaceforpeopletodiscoverandsharecontentfromanywhereontheweb.Dknysignaturebrowntotehobohandbagbagpurse.Thanks:eek:.ChristinafromVatican.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/17/20094:03:10PMRaymond,Iloveyourenthusiasm.Ifthereisanydefinitemovementtowardsamovieorabook,I'llpostitimmediatelyonthewebsite.Asformajorchangesoradditions,Iprobablywon'tdothemnow.Ihopethatdoesn'tdisappointtoomuch.Keepthefaith.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/17/20094:05:04PMMallos31,Whatareyoureferringtoowhenyousaythebeginningiscliched,usesthesameplotastheothermovies?Yes,definitelyfinishreadingitandcomebackhereformorediscussion.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/17/20094:24:13PMAndy,Yes,theSourcewouldbenefitfrommoredescription;perhapsthatwillhappenaspartoftheproductionofamovieorbook(i.e.inthevisualpart).IwantedtocoveralotofgroundinthemovieandfeltthattoomuchtimedescribingoftheSourcewouldtakeaway.I'llreassessthat,though.Goodpoint.Idon'tunderstandyourquestionaboutallthenumbersduringthescript.Couldyoubemorespecific?I'mnotsurehowtherebornSmithfitsin,butIfeltthatifNeoweregoingtoberesurrected,itseemedalmostnecessarytoresurrectSmith(asapossiblenemesisinthefuture).Again,notsurewhattodowithitexactly.Sorryifthat'svague;itisformetoo.Frommyscript'sperspectivetheAnimatrixstoriesareaboutthingsthathappenedin

theMatrix/Zionworld(i.e.avirtualworld).TheyhavenothingtodowiththeworldoftheSource/Cortex/Supermatrixofmyscript(i.e.therealworld).InmyscripttheAnimatrixstoriesaresimplymorebackstoryofthevirtualworldcreatedbytheArchitectandusedtocontrolthemachines.AbitconvolutedbutIhopeitholdsup.Thankssomuchfortheappreciationofmywork.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:QuintinDATE:8/19/20091:56:58PMHieveryone.Sometimesyoucan'tseeyourselfclearlyuntilyouseeyourselfthroughtheeyesofothers.IamfromRepublicandnowstudyEnglish,givepleasetrueIwrotethefollowingsentence:"Justfyi,Ilovemacpaintpotinpainterly."Withlove:(,Quintin.COMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/20/200912:23:45PMSorryaboutthedoublecomment.Ididn'tfindthefirstafterthedayIpostedit,soIthoughtmybrowsermighthavesentitastray,andsentasecondone.Ihavereadthescreenplay5timesbynow,anditsimplygetsallthebetter.ThemoreIread,themoreIfindinitandmoredelightedIam.Fantasticjob!IhadtriedtothinkuphowtheendshouldhavebeenafterthedisappointmentoftheTrilogy(orpseudo-Trilogy,rather),anditwasincrediblyhard.Itwasn'tlongbeforeIgaveupindespair.Hatsofftoyouandyourwork!Iamsureyouwillsucceedsomeday.Ihopeithappenssoonerthanlater.Iwillbewatchingthisspacealmostdaily.Goodluck!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/20/20099:02:19PMSorry.Iwasoutoftown.Ithinkyou'rethefirstpersontohavereaditfivetimes(otherthanmeofcourse).Therearedefinitelylayersandnuancesthatgetuncoveredthemoretimesyoureadit.Irecommendtworeadsattheleast.Thefirstreadorientsyoutothestoryasawholeandisspentmostlykeepingthecharactersandtimelinesstraight.Thesecondreadletsyoumovethroughthestoryquicklywhileatthesametimeallowingyoutoconcentratemoreonthehiddenlayers.Nicetoknowthatafifthreadstillholdsyourinterest.Thanksagainforallthepraise.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RaymondDATE:8/22/20093:24:49PM

Mr.Wood,haveyoutriedsendingthescreenplaystraighttoWarnerBros.?Ifyouhave,whathascomeofit?PardonmeifIamsoundingtoonaive,buthowaboutpublishinganopenlettertotheWachowskisinanewspaper?Perhapsitcouldmakethemsitupandtakenotice.Andonequestion:IfSmithstartscloninghimselfintoeveryoneintheMatrixasbefore,howisthejuniorNeogoingtostophim?IshegoingtobefreedfromtheMatrixbyMorpheusashefreedhisfather?OrwouldNeoseniorgoforalimitedtimemissionbackintheMatrixtoteachhissonhowtohandleallthat?Anyway,thanksforsucharefreshinglyentertainingstory.Iwillbecomingheredaily(unlessofcoursemyserverhangsup).Goodluck!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/22/20093:45:27PMRaymond,SendingitdirectlytoWarnerBrothersisthesameasthrowingitinthetrash;withoutaninsiderorapersonofcloutrecommendingit,noonewillreadit.Andasfarasanopenletterinanewspaper,that'salittletooforward.Iprefersomethingmorediscreetandlessconfrontational.Thisisafterallnotmystory.Ifit'sgoingtohappen,itwillhappeninthebackcorridors(nopunintended).Asforwherethestorycouldgo,Ireallyhaven'tgiventhatmuchthought.Therearemanyoptionsobviously.Ifmyoriginalstorygarnersinterestfromtheindustry,I'dbegladtoextendit.Butuntilthen,I'mcontenttoleaveitasitis.Isenseyouwouldlikeanongoingdialogue,butIdon'treallythinkthere'sthatmuchmoreIcantellyouthatisn'talreadyinthecommentssectionsomewhere.I'llbesuretopostanydevelopmentsdirectlyonthehomepageofthewebsite,sorestassuredthatyouwillbekeptinformedifanythingneworexcitingtranspires.Thanksagainforyourinterestandenthusiasm.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:OlaDATE:8/24/20098:42:26AMGoodevening.Ifyourefusetobemadestraightwhenyouaregreen,youwillnotbemadestraightwhenyouaredry.Helpme!Ithastofindsitesonthe:Soldcoachresortopartmadisoncosmeticcase..Ifoundonlythis-[URL=http://www.hockenheim-classics.de/Members/Benefit/benefit-cosmeticsbonus]benefitcosmeticsbonus[/URL].Viewdealbodycollectionsmallcroceff.Buynowamazonmarketplace,starsseealltimeratings,new.;-)Thanksinadvance.OlafromJamaica.COMMENT:AUTHOR:DrewDATE:8/25/200910:03:53AMOk,admittedly,Ionlyreadthefirst6or7pagesbutthat'sreallyallIcouldtake.Sorry.IdonotmeantodiscourageordisrespectbutIjustcan'treadmore.Thesecharactersmayhavethesamenamesbutthesejustarenotthesamepeople.You'vedonea180oneverybody'spersonalityandthat'sjustdownrightunbelievable.LockandMarovingiansuddenlyfriendly?Humansnaivelytrustingthetyrannical,destructivemachineswithout

ashredofdoubt?ThemachinesNOTbetrayingmankindthoughthatwouldseemthelogicalthingtodo?Plusonesidenotesinceyouseemtobeaskingforconstructivecriticism:Moredialogue;everythingistoobrief.Goodluck.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/25/200910:19:03AMDrew,Iadmitthestoryhassomeproblems,butIreallythinkyoushouldreadtherest.Alothappensandsomeofthethingsyoudon'tunderstandgetexplained.Andthedialoguepicksupquiteabitjustafewpagesfurtheron.Ihopeyoucomebackandgivemefeedbackonthewholescript,positiveornegative.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DupreeWestDATE:8/27/20097:28:59AMOMG!!!!ilovediteveryfreakinpage.itexplainsdamnneareverythingthattheycouldn'tfitintothefirst3films,plusitopensseveralnewdoorsformoremovies.pageturner!!!!Onesuggestion,leaveoutthe"supermatrix"name.findanotherphrase.pleasewhoeverhasthepowertomakethisintofilm....DOITNOW!!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/28/20093:03:52AMDupree,Thanksfortheglowingendorsement.IdidchangethetitleofthescripteventhoughIstillcallthebiggerMatrixthe"SuperMatrix".Youdon'tthinkthat'senough?Anyway,lovetheenthusiasticresponse.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:softwaredevelopmentlondonDATE:8/28/20093:04:47PMVerynicestory!Iquiteenjoyeditandfeelsomecomfortoutofthestoryandwhereitleftoff.Interestingcharacterstabilitywithlockneoandmorpheus.Whenthe'supermatrix'ideawassubmitteditseemedprettyfar-fetchedandiwasgoingtoclosethis.Ihaveitafewmorescenesandwascapturedbythestory-line.Goodreadfortheopenminded!ThanksforbringingthisupCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:8/28/20094:32:51PMLies.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/28/20096:22:31PM

Anonymous,Notsurewhatyou'rereferringto.Partsofthescript?Surprises,yes,deceptions,sure,illusions,okay...butlies?AtanyrateIprefertheterm"falsehoods",butIstilldon'tseehowitpertainstomyscript.Perhapsyouarereferringtothesupineposition,no?Ilikeagoodnap,too.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/28/20097:05:30PMI'mgladyougotpasttheSuperMatrixname.That'snolongerthetitleofthescript;gottoomuchbadpress.Letmeknowwhatyouthinkinmoredetailwhenyoufinishthescript(ifyouaresoinclined).Thanksforthethumbsup.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:adrianDATE:8/29/20098:13:40PMdudeitsgoodbutitsgottamakesense.trywritingabouttheelderonesandhowtheyallfailedthesameway.uknowlikethewaytheyshotvantagepointmovie.thiscouldbebrilliantlyshot.itsgonnabeimpressiveifuwritethatstory.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/29/20099:01:00PMadrian,Idon'tquitefollowyoursuggestion.TheelderonesinZion?Howdidtheyallfailthesameway?Letmeknow.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RicardoDATE:9/1/20098:50:09AMCouldyouhelpme.WhenIcamebacktoDublinIwascourtmartialedinmyabsenceandsentencedtodeathinmyabsence,soIsaidtheycouldshootmeinmyabsence.IamfromMaltaandlearningtospeakEnglish,pleasetellmerightIwrotethefollowingsentence:"Kadient,passedin1994,benefitsaleadscompanybusinessthatrefersthevarietyofexpensessales,airforcebdusales."Thanks8-).Ricardo.COMMENT:AUTHOR:AdenaDATE:9/3/20099:41:33PMGoodDay.Nothingcontributessomuchtotranquilizingthemindasasteadypurpose-apointonwhichthesoulmayfixitsintellectualeye.Helpme!Cannotfindsitesonthe:Forworkplaceproducts,thedistributionfileisonewheretworoutesarearrivingeachinfluential,butarefoundedbyorder,drug,orday,astellessalesforce..Ifoundonlythis-[URL=http://www.ebc.com.br/Members/Sales]Salesforcesupport[/URL].Williams,

smithbarneyandcommercialcredit.Themarketingperpartydistributedby33interestandtheforceperimplicationbeganbyalsohumanas55inventory.Thanks:o.AdenafromIreland.COMMENT:AUTHOR:DonaldDATE:9/6/20095:27:27AMIthinkyoushouldsticktowritinghorrorfilmsandpornflicks.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PabloDATE:9/19/200912:03:36AMthereshouldbeanothermatrixmovieCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/19/20092:14:50AM

You'renotgoingtogetanyargumentfromme COMMENT:AUTHOR:AaronHastingsDATE:9/22/20097:31:02PMBRILLIANT!P.D.Woodhascreatedacompellingsequel,acontinuumofincreasingperspectivethatbridgestheoriginalMatrixTrilogywhileadroitlyelevatingthestoryinamannerthatisatoncesurprisingandutterlynatural.Wearerelievedbysufficient,yetappropriatelyincomplete,resolutionofmanydanglingplotlines,andthedialogueandcharacterdevelopmentare,inmyopinion,superb.Mostofthecriticism(inthecommentsabove)lacksunderstandingoftheunderlyingmetaphoroftheMatrix,orelseconflatestheelementsofthescreenplaywithothergenres.Thescreenplayobviouslyforgoesthedegreeofdetailnecessaryinthenovel,sinceunlikethenovel,whereintheentirenarrativemustbefullycontainedintext,thescreenplayinsteadmustleavelatitudeandlicensetothedirector,editor,actors,andcinematographertoadddetail,aswellastoshapethestorywithnuance,inflection,expression,andothersemioticmarkersthatconveymeaning.COMMENT:AUTHOR:AaronHastingsDATE:9/22/20097:32:15PMTheapparentpremiseoftheMatrixisclassicallyexistential:Theaimistoquestionreality,tolookbehindthemirrors,andtoprojectmeaningontoanotherwisemeaninglessworldthroughmasteryoftheselfachievedthroughtheauthenticexerciseoffreewill.Morpheus:"Doyoubelieveinfate,Neo?"Neo:"No."Morpheus:"Whynot?"Neo:"BecauseIdon'tliketheideathatI'mnotincontrolofmylife."MorpheusthendescribestheexistentialangstthathasdrivenNeotosearchforhim:"Letmetellyouwhyyou'rehere.You'reherebecauseyouknowsomething.Whatyouknowyoucan'texplain,butyoufeelit.You'vefeltityourentirelife,thatthere'ssomethingwrongwiththeworld.Youdon'tknowwhatitis,butit'sthere,likeasplinterinyourmind,drivingyoumad.Itisthisfeelingthathasbroughtyoutome."Oncefreed,NeoischallengedbyaPostmodernMorpheus,whoquestionstheverypreceptsofrealism:"Whatisreal?Howdoyoudefinereal?Ifyou'retalkingaboutyoursenses,whatyoufeel,taste,smell,orsee,thenallyou'retalkingaboutareelectricalsignalsinterpreted

byyourbrain."Atlast,Neoisconfrontedwiththestarkhorrorandmeaninglessnessoftherealworldthroughdirectperception:"Welcometothedesertofthereal,"saysMorpheus,inaphraseliftedverbatimfromJeanBaudrillard,"Simulations."Previously,MorpheussaidtoNeothathehasthelookofamanwhoacceptswhatheseesbecauseheisexpectingtowakeup,butnowawake,Neo'sfirstimpulseistofleeandtodenythetruthofwhatheseesratherthansuccumbtotheexistentialdespairsuchtruthsurelyentails.Ofcourse,Neograduallyacceptsthehideousreality,andthroughtheremainderoftheTrilogyendeavorstodiscoverhisownauthenticexistence.Thisoutlinegenerallyfollowstheessentialcontoursofmuchoftheanalysisonefindsintheliterature.TheMatrix,thoughapparentlyreal,isillusoryandtemporary,andthisconstructthusevincesamuchdeepermetaphor.Morpheus:"[TheMatrix]...istheworldthathasbeenpulledoveryoureyestoblindyoufromthetruth."Neo:"Whattruth?"Morpheus:"Thatyouareaslave,Neo.Thatyou,likeeveryoneelse,wasbornintobondage...keptinsideaprisonthatyoucannotsmell,taste,ortouch.Aprisonforyourmind."InVedantaphilosophy,theatma,ortrueself,isdescribedasindestructibleandeternal,thoughfiniteandthuspronetoillusion.Thedefiningsymptomoftheatmaisconsciousness.Thematerialworldiscalledmaya(illusion,thatwhichisnot),andisdescribedasaprisonfortheconditionedatma,whichbecomesincreasinglybewilderedandentangledthroughperpetualcontactwithmaterialnature.Suchbewildermentcausestheatma,orlivingentity,tomisidentifythebodyasself,thisworldasreality,andthislifeasall.Morpheus:"TheMatrixisasystem,Neo.Thatsystemisourenemy.Butwhenyou'reinside,youlookaround,whatdoyousee?Businessmen,teachers,lawyers,carpenters.Theverymindsofthepeoplewearetryingtosave.Butuntilwedo,thesepeoplearestillapartofthatsystem,andthatmakesthemourenemy.Youhavetounderstand,mostofthesepeoplearenotreadytobeunplugged.Andmanyofthemaresoinured,sohopelesslydependentonthesystem,thattheywillfighttoprotectit."BhagavadGita:"Bewilderedbythemodesofmaterialnature,theignorantfullyengagethemselvesinmaterialactivitiesandbecomeattached.Butthewiseshouldnotunsettlethem,althoughthesedutiesareinferiorduetotheperformers'lackofknowledge."Morpheus:"IfeelthatIoweyouanapology.Thereisarulethatwedonotfreeamindonceitreachesacertainage.Itisdangerous.Theyhavetroublelettinggo.Theirmindturnsagainstthem.I'veseenithappen.IbroketherulebecauseIhadto."IntheBhagavadGita,theatmaislikenedtoabirdsittingonthetreeofthebody,partakingofitspoisonousfruits,andtherebycausingitsowntransmigrationfromtree

totree:"Asapersonputsonnewgarments,givingupoldones,similarly,thesoulacceptsnewbodies,givingupoldanduselessones...Thelivingentityinthematerialworldcarrieshisdifferentconceptionsoflifefromonebodytoanother,astheaircarriesaromas...[A]lllivingentitiesarebornintodelusion,overcomebythedualitiesofdesireandhate."Beyondthetemporaryandmiserableworldofmaya,however,existsanotherworld:"Yetthereisanothernature,whichiseternalandistranscendentaltothismanifestedandunmanifestedmatter.Itissupremeandisneverannihilated.Whenallinthisworldisannihilated,thatworldremainsasitis."IntheoriginalTrilogyandparticularlyinMatrixResurrected,weareallowedtotraversenotmerelythebarriersoftimeandspacebutthosethatseparateentireworldsandrealities.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/23/20091:00:32AMAaron,Thanksforsuchaneloquentandupliftingreviewofmywork.Thepointsyoumake,"atoncesurprisingandutterlynatural"and"sufficient,yetappropriatelyincomplete,resolution"and"superbdialogueandcharacterdevelopment"couldnotbeanymoreinlinewithmyintentionsordesiredreactionsforwritingthestory.Cheers!Yes,thedifferencesbetweennovelsandscreenplaysaremanyandyou'veclarifiedthosedifferencesnicely.Ithinkit'shardformanypeopletotransitionfromnovelreadingtoscreenplayreadingandnotfeellikemuchhasbeenleftout.But,asyousay,thosedetailsaremeanttobelefttothedirector,actors,editors,etc.Forthescreenwritertoputthosedetailsinascreenplayisconsideredaninsulttothoseverypeoplewhoseresponsibilityitistoimplementthem.Besides,screenplaysareshort,relatively.Maximumeffectthroughminimumwordsisthekey,sobettertoleavethoseotheraspectsofthemovietootherprofessionalsanyway.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/23/20091:31:19AMAaron,AnicemeditationonthephilosophiesthattouchupontheMatrix.I'vestatedthisbefore,butI'llreiterateitagain,asIthinkitbearskeepinginmind(and,ofcourse,thisisjustmyhumbleopinion).

Truthandrealityareaconsequenceofexperiencealone.Whateveryouexperience,affectsyou;whateveraffectsyou,isreal.TheillusoryMatrixworldthatNeogrewupin,formedhim:hispersonality,hisbeliefs,likesanddislikes.Certainlylessinfluentialonhischaracterdevelopmentforthemajorityofhislifewashisexistenceinamachinepod,andyet,thatisconsideredtherealworld.So,whichwasmoreexperiential,orshouldIsay,morereal.TheMatrix,Iwouldsubmit.Dreams,hallucinations,virtualworlds,heaven,hell,lifeonEarth,Horton'sinfinitesimallysmallworldonadustspec-they'reallrealANDallequallydemandingofouracknowledgmentandrespect.Justmytwocents.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MerovingianDATE:9/24/20097:31:01PMFormetheMerovingianwasthefirstONE,nowassumingthatNeoisalive,andIamprettysureheis,bothcanfightthemachines.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/25/20092:23:57AMIfyoureadit.letmeknowyourthoughts.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RajneeshDATE:9/27/20099:39:37PMIlikeyourconcept.Ithinkitmakesabetterbookthanamovie.IwouldhavelikeamoredefiniteendingIamassumingthatyoutooareintheprocessofmakingatrilogy.PersonallyIwouldhavemadethedateinthefuturealotlotlongerthan2249.IthinkonethingmissinginallstoriesoftheOneisthePresenceofGod.TheoneisultimatelychosenbyGodtorestorebalancetothisworld...justastheCreatorbattlestorestoreorderinanotherworld.Scripturally,Godvssatin.IfIcouldwriteIwouldwriteaboutastorywhereNeogoesthroughlayersofrealityattainingpowersinalluntilheachievestheabilitytokillevilitselfandreturntheuniversetoaperfectstateatypeofHeaven.Forthemostpartgoodjob.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/28/200912:12:18AMRajneesh,Yeah,abook,maybeagraphicnovel,wouldbecool.Sorry,Idon'thaveanyplansforatrilogy.Atleastnotyet.

Imighthavetriedputtingmystoryfatherintothefuture,butthenmyfeelingisthathumanitywouldhaveadvancedtoofarformystorytooccurthewayitdid.Then,ofcourse,nobodyknowswhatthefuturewilllooklike;butIhadtomakeanassumptionaboutwhatviewers/readerswouldaccept.Thatwasmyrationaleforhavingmystoryoccurwhenitdid.IreallylikeyourideaofhavingNeocontinuethroughlayersuntilhehasGod'spowerandrestoringtheworldtoastatebeforeevilexisted.It'sacoolideaevenifitisn'tpartoftheMatrixstory.Thanksforthefeedback.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:chrisburdgeDATE:10/21/200912:57:14AMicannotbelivethataremakingamatrix4aferneodiedihopeitisgoodbecauseiwhattoseeitCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/21/20094:06:24PMChris,TheyarenotmakingamovieasfarasIknow.Whatyouhavehereisafan-fiction,specscriptthatwaswrittenforfun(andtheveryoffchanceofbeingproduced).Iwouldliketoseeit,too,butatthispoint,readingthescriptistheclosetyou'regoingtocometoaMatrix4.Hopeyoulikeit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MasonDATE:10/21/20096:21:34PMIdon'tknowifyoulotagree,buttheMatrixTrilogyWasLegendary.butasithinkmanyofyouwillagree,iwouldkillforanotherchapter.Morpheusbased,maybehisbackstory.OrtheRobotsdecidetheyweren'tfinished.Orsomthingallongthoselines.OrTheysaidNeowouldbebornagainandagain,maybemorpheuscouldenterthematrixonemoretimetofindthenewtrinityandneo.Youknow,sotheydontdieintheveryend?Anyway...MATRIXRULES!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/21/20096:59:02PMMason,Fromwhatyou'vewritten,Idoesn'tlooklikeyoureadthescript.Thereis,indeed,anotherchapterinit.Isuggestyougiveitawhirl;youmightbesurprised.

PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:jaysharpeDATE:10/24/200912:36:45AMiamabitconfusedbecausethematrixendedthewayitshouldofendedevenifitwasn'tthestrongestsequelintheworld.butdon'tgetmewrong,yourscriptwasgood,muchbettertheniexpectedanditcouldbeamatrix4.butican'tseeithappening.andifitdoeshappen,itwouldbeastrungoutmovie,ithink.butidohavetosayyoucanwriteonehellofascript.ididenjoyit.youcouldhaveafutureinmoviemaking.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/24/20092:22:55PMJay,IseeyourpointaboutafourthMatrixstringingthingsout,giventhattheWachowskisformallyendedtheserieswiththethirdmovie.Butyouhavetoadmitthatthecharactersandstorylinestheysetupleftsomuchroomformore,interestingdevelopment.Thatwasmymotivationtowritemyscript;Ijustsawsomuchmorecoolstuffhappening.Consideringyourreluctancetoseetheneedforacontinuationofthestory,andinlightofthefactthatyoulikedmystorydespitethatreluctance,onlymakesmefeelagreatersenseofaccomplishment.Itprobablywillremainascriptandnothingmore;butinthisformitstillhashadalastingandappreciatedimpact.I'lltakeyourcomment,"youcanwriteonehellofascript"asanothernodtowardskeepingthemystiquealive.Thanksforthecomments.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:tracyDATE:10/26/20094:15:05AMilovethescriptyoudidofthematrixfour.theonlythingididn'tlikewasyouhadneohaveagirlfriendfromhispastanditlookslikethekidshehasishis.iwouldlikeitbetterifsomehowtrinityandneohadakid.itwouldmakethestorybetter.greatworkthough.itmustoftookyoudaystowritethis.doyouknowifthere'sanynewsonamatrix4comingout?alliheararerumors.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:10/26/20098:04:30PMTracy,Itcertainlywouldbeamorecleanandpalatablescenario,NeoamdTrintiyhavingthechild.It'sdefinitelymoreedgy-feelingthathe'shadachildwithaformergirlfriend.Butkeepsthetensionhigher,though.I'mgladyoulikedtherestofit.And,yes,ittookmany,many,manydaystowrite.AsfarasIknow,thereisnoMatrix4intheworks.Butit'shardtopredictthefuture;you

neverknow.Thanksforthethumbsup.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JeremyDATE:11/5/20099:58:20AMCoolstorybutnegligibleonphilosophy.Everythingthathasabeginninghasanend.-TheOracleWhatisthepointofTheMatrixtrilogy.Thepointisthis.Zionhasbeendestroyed6times.TheMatrixhasbeendestroyed6times.Andsowheredoesthisleadtoo.Endlessdestructionandrebirth.WhenNeofellinlovewithTrinitythiscyclewasbroken.ThetruthofTheMatrixwasreveledtoeveryoneinsideofit.ConcurrentlyTheSource"Theanomaly"thathadonlybeenembeddedinTheOnehasspreedtoallhumansinTheMatrix.AndyettheMachinesandtheArchitectstilldonotknowthemeaningofchoice.WhyMr.Anderson,Whydoyoupersist.-Smith.BecauseIchoosetoo.-NeoNeochosetodieinplaceofMorpheusinEnterTheMatrix.HeChoseTrinityoverHumanityinTheMatrixReloaded.HechoseHumanityoverHimselfinMatrixRevolutions.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/6/20092:50:57AMJeremy,I'mgladyouthoughtitwascool,butIwasalsosurprisedthatyouthoughtitwasnegligibleonphilosophy.Iwouldsaythatthephilosophicalpunctuationofmystoryisintheyet-even-deeperlayerofmeaningandrealitythatNeoencounters.Heistestedyetagain,andinasense,findsinnerpeaceinthenewworld.Anditissuggestedbutnotoutwardlystatedthatthisnewworldinwhichhefindshimselfisjustanotherlayerofreality,perhapsavirtualoneoryetjustanother,deeperlayerofreality.ButtherealphilosophicalawakeningisthatNeoacceptsitwhole-heartedly.Asortofnirvana,Iguess.But,ofcourse,thisisjustmyauthorialjustification,mypointofview.Gladyoulikethestoryotherwise;andthanksforthediscussion.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:sergeyDATE:11/7/20097:57:00PM

YouwroteaREALLYniceandinterestingscript.ThereareaboutthreewaystomakethisscriptbeTheMatrix4movie:1)YoutrytosellthescripttooneoftheWarnerbrothersscriptwriters.(Alittleillegal).TheywillpresentittoWarnerbrothersastheirsandWarnerbrothersmightmakeamovieoutofit.IllegalbecauseyouarenotallowedtosellthatscriptwiththenameMatrixandwiththecharacternamesbecauseitsthepropertyofWarnerbrothers.Butbythischoiceyougetmoneyandenjoythemovie.2)YoucontactWarnerbrothersdirectlyandgivethemyourscriptasanexampleforMatrix4(forfree).Theymightmakesomechangesandmakeamovieoutofit.Bythischoiceyoudon'tgetanythingandyoucanjustenjoythemovie.3)(THEHARDEST)YougetajobthroughWarnerbrothersasascriptwriter.ThenbringupyourscriptandshowittoyourbossatWarnerbrothers.Ifheaccepts,hewillhanditovertotheexecutivesandtheywillmakethemovie.Bythischoiceyougetmoney,yournameinthescriptasawriterattheendofthemovieandajobatwithWarnerbrothers.4)THEREISALSOAREALLYHUGE4CHOICE.MakemillionsofpeoplewriteorcometoWarnerbrothersofficesandgiveorsendthemtheexactsamescript.(Thescriptyouwrote).Theywillseethattherearereallymanypeopleinterestedinthatscriptandthat,iftheymakethemovie,theywillgettonsofmoney.Notlongafter,theywillstartmakingthemovie.(Icouldhelpyouwiththischoice).Thanksforreading.HopeIhelpedyouandthemovieisgoingtobeoutsoon.=DSorryformybadEnglish.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/10/200912:10:26AMSergey,Iloveyourideasaboutgettingthescriptturnedintoamovie.Thefirsttwooptions,I'vetried(i.e.gettingittoWarnerbrothersortheWachowskibrothers).Mucheasiersaidthandone.Andnolucksofar.Thethirdoptionisnotreallyanoptionformeatthistime.And,asyousay,it'salsothehardest.Thefourthoptionisthemostpractical.Byallmeans,anyonewhosegametotry,I'mreadytogiveathumbsup.ButIdon'thaveacontactpersontosenditto.IfsomeoneknowssomeoneontheinsideofWarnerbrotherstosenditto,pleaseletmeknow.Thanks,PDWood

P.S.Gladyouenjoyedthestory.COMMENT:AUTHOR:georgeDATE:11/12/20091:45:55AMIjustreadthescriptandimustsayitwasagreat2hourwalkbacktotherootsofthematrix...Iwon'ttellyouhowamazingthiswas,causehonestlyithinkthisstorylinesucksballs...butyouhavesomegreatlinesinthereandsomeprettyawesomeideas...hadasimilarideatotheonewherehumanityisactuallytheoneresponsibleforthecreationofthematrix,butforthesakeofit'sownsurvivalfromthemselvesandwantedtoputthatintoacomicbookstoryofsomesortcoupleyearsago.Didn'twork:)butiamstillupforworkingonitifanygoodstorylikethisonecomesonthehorizon...doyouhaveanythingelsewritten?I'dlovetocheckitout!Cheers!!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:MainahDATE:11/12/20092:31:24PMIwaswonderingifthisscriptwouldbeavailabletobeusedbysomemiddleschoolandhighschoolstudentshereinMaine.WewillnotbemakinganymoneyonsuchaprojectthatIforesee,Ifwedecidetosellcopiesorsaidmovieorsuch,ofcoursewewillshareanyprofits(50/50)?Butthecostofsuchdiskswouldbeminimalifatall.Wemightalsojustusescenes.Wouldthisbeokaywithyou?Weareasmallruraltownwithverylimitedbudget,sowewillnotbeabletodojusticetothemovie,butwewilldojusticetothecharacters,plot,andstoryline.Pleaseletmeknowyourthoughts.Thanks!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/13/20092:51:26AMgeorge,Thanksforreadingthescript.I'mguessingyoulikeditfromyourcomment,"imustsayitwasagreat2hourwalkbacktotherootsofthematrix",butthenyousay,"Iwon'ttellyouhowamazingthiswas,causehonestlyithinkthisstorylinesucksballs".Kindofamixedreview,butI'lltakeitasoverallpositive.AtthemomentIdon'thaveanythingelsesignificanttopresenttopeopleforreading,butwhenIdo,I'llbesuretopostit.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/13/20092:53:03AMMainah,Notsureexactlywhatyouhaveinmind;couldyoubemorespecificintermsofwhatyou'dliketodowiththescript?Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JaredDDATE:11/15/20097:01:45PM

WhileIappreciatetheeffort,IhavetosayIdidnotenjoythescript.TheideasIliked:Asystemofcontrolwithinasystemofcontrol.IlikedthismainlybecauseitcouldexplainhowNeohadsupernaturalabilitiesevenwhennotJackedintotheMatrix.AgentSmithgainingcontrolofmachinesinthe"realworld".Yourabilitytodescribeactionsequencesinawaythatmadethemeasytovisualize.Iwasabletocreatethesescenesinmyheadquiteeasilythankstoyourdetails.Unfortunatelythelistendshere.ThingsIdidn'tlike:Thedialog.75%ofitsoundedasifthecharacterwouldnotsaysuchthings.Thisreallyputadamperonthebelievabilityofthescript.Thosemodel36androids.Theirexistencegenerallybotheredme.Andtheirstoryseemedquitevague.Allofthefamily-tiesyoucreated.Thisideajustmademecringe.SuddenlycharactersintheMatrixwererelatedtoeachotherinwaysthatdidnotmakeanyrealsensebasedonthewaythey'veactedtowardseachotherinthescopeofthemovies.InRevolutionsTrinitywasgoingtoshoottheMerovingianintheheadatpoint-blankrange.Despiteyouraddedexplanationaboveofhernotretainingmemoryoftheirfamilyties,wouldthearchitectbeokwithallowinghisgranddaughtertokillhissonandherfather?BringingoneofNeo'sex-girlfriendsintothepictureseemsentirelyunnecessary.Idon'tcareifshehasapurposeinthesequeltothisscript,ashintedatinthelastfewsentences.WhybringinapastloveofMrAnderson?Toomanyflashbacks.Amoviewiththismanyflashbacksfailsatbeingthenextstepofanystory.You'vebasicallywrittenaprequeltotheMatrixtrilogy.ButnooneneedstoknowanythingaboutthatwhenwealreadyknowthatZionhasbeendestroyedandrebuiltmultipletimes.Therehasbeennumerousincarnationsof"TheOne".Therewasawarofhumanityagainstthemachines.ThisknowledgeshouldclosethebooksonMatrixprequels.Theanimatrixdidanicetwoparterabouttheaforementionedwaritself.PersonallyIbelieveitshouldbeleftatthat.TheonlythingthatmakesthisgenerationoftheMatrixanydifferentisthatthistimeZionwasn'tdestroyed.ThisIbelieveshouldbeexpandedupon.NotthepastoftheMatrix.I'mreallythinkingNeoshouldstaydead.HemergedhimselfwithAgentSmith,andwasdestroyed.Theend.AgentsexisttodeleteprogramsthatareathreattotheMatrix,andtokillrebels.Thatinitselfhashugepotential.Again,Iappreciatetheeffort.ButIfeeltheMatrixmythosshouldhaveevolvedina

differentdirectionthanwhatyouhavebroughttolighthere.Asuggestion:Moreupsidedownfighting.HadthecreatorsextendedthatfightsceneattheentrancetoclubHelbetweenSeraph,therebels,andtheclub-goers(whichIcanonlyassumewererogueprogramsduetotheirgravitybendingabilities),themoviewouldhavedonebetter.Thankyouforallowingmetobecritical.COMMENT:AUTHOR:XenithDATE:11/15/20099:58:04PMAnyupdateonthis?Enjoyedtheread!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/16/20091:31:00AMHiXenith,Lucrative,no.Appreciated,yes.I'vehadover250,000visitsandthevoteshavebeen75%positive,10%neutraland15%negative.I'mprettyhappyoverallfromthatresponse.AttemptstogetthescripttopowerfuldecisionmakersinHollywoodhaveprovedineffectivesofar.Butgoodnewscanpopupanytime,Isuppose.Ikeepmyfingerscrossed.Ifyouhaveanygoodcontacts,pleaseletmeknow.Andthanksforcheckingin.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/16/20091:51:42AMJaredD,Yourcritiqueishonestandbalanced;Itakenoumbrage.Thedialoghashadsomenegativereviews,butoverallpeopleseemtothinkithasfitwiththecharacters.Ican'tsaywhysomelikeitandsomedon't;it'saverypersonalassessment,Iguess.Sorryitdidn'tgelforyou.Itwouldputadamperonthecontinuationofastoryforme,too.The36storyisabitvague,buttherewasonlysomuchroominthisscript.Itwasmeanttogiveatasteoftheirexistenceanddilemma.Thereaders,Iwashoping,wouldusetheirimaginationfortherest.PerhapsIfellshorthere.Yeah,thefamily-tiesidea,Ithinkthat'sjustahitormissidea.Eitheryoulikeitoryouhateit.ItchangessomuchabouttheMatrixstory,eitheryouembraceitasanotherhuge,profound,mind-numbingrealizationoryoufeelitcheapensthecharactersthewaytheywereintheTrilogy.Again,anothermissforyou.Thegirlfriendthingcouldbedispensedwith.Itputspeopleoff.TheideathatNeohas

hadarelationshipwithanotherwomanotherthanTrinityandthattherelationshipcreatedhischild,that'sjustapossibilitymanypeopledon'tlike.I'vethoughtaboutremovingit.Notsureyet.TheAnimatrixisdescriptiveofwhathappenedbeforetheMatrix,butformystory,it'sjustanotherfabricationoftheSupermatrixandthereforehasnobearingontherealwarasIdescribeitinmystory.IthinkmaybeIbitoffmorethanIcouldchewwithmyscript.Itreallytriestotackleaprequelandsequelinonemovieandbydoingso(withalltheflashbacksandsuch)itlosessomeclarityandlinearity.Hardtoknowwhatmighthavebeenabetterapproach.Ididlimittheamountoffightinginthisscript,mostlybecauseofallthegroundIwastryingtocover.Forsomethat'sadrag.Moreupside-downfightingiswhatit'sallabout.ButIalsofeltthattheMatrixstoryrevolvedaroundmyth,discovery,surprise,introspection,etc.Forthatreason,Ithinkthelackofmorefightingisn'ttotallyincongruous.Thanksforthein-depthanalysisandfrankopinions.Itakethemmoretoheartwhentheirdeliveredinathoughtfulandhonestway,eveniftheoverallreviewisunfavorable.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BenfromArizonaDATE:11/20/200912:48:39PMMr.Wood,Gosh,youknowIfoundthissiteandscriptyoucreatedbackinAprilandwroteacoupleofcomments,(onewasquiteforwardandstrangetomost)butI'vereadmorecommentssincethen.IrealizedsomethingasIreadthemandlaughedoutloud-therearesomanywithsuchconfusingjuxtapositionswithinthecomment,Idon'tknowhowyoustaypatient.There'snoneedtoevenbegininexplainingthegrammaticalerrorsandsloppyfragmentedsentences.Idon'tknowhowyoudoit.ItmustbenicetocomeacrossacommenteverynowandagainfromaneducatedreaderIsuppose.Abreathoffreshair,sotospeak.Ah!ShallItellyouandthefanssomethingthatdidoccurtomethough?Ican'tbelieveIdidn'tthinkofthisbefore.AsIreadthecomments,Inoticedthatyou'reinfactinneedofanyhelpatall.ItjustsohappensIwaspartofamulti-milliondollarworldtourproductionoftheSoldierShowin2006.Thiswasamilitaryfundedevent,andIbecamereallygoodfriendswiththecivilianDirector.Wellhe'ssinceleftArmyEntertainmentatFortLewis,andwentbacktoproducing.He'scurrentlyfinishingthecontractswithstartingarealitybasedshowforsoldiersintheArmy,(he'sbeensettingitupforacoupleofyearsnow,butthePentagonhashadaproblemwiththeArmybeingmisrepresentedinanywaybyanoutsidemediation).Turnsouthe'safriendofSimonCowell'sandjudgedafewtimesonAmericanIdol,America'sGotTalent,andothers.Hetravelsalot,butIhavehisnumberandhephonedmetheotherweeksayinghewantstostopbyPhoenixonhisnexttriptoLAforlunch.He'dliketobemyagentapparently,

afterImoveouttoCaliforniaandgetofftheground.IcoulddropyourscriptforhimtotakeovertoacoupleofproducersheknowsatWarnerBrothersifyou'dlike.Ijustwantedtocheckwithyoufirsttoensurethatyoutooktheproperstepstogainrightstothechangesyou'vemadetotheMatrixstorycharacterprogression.Inotherwords,Iknowthescriptiscopywritten,butistheideaofthestoryaswell?Idon'tknowhowslysomeslickwriterscanbe,orifIshoulddothiswithoutyourblessing.Ifit'salrightwithyou,Ithoughtyoucouldusemorepublicityaswell.ThethoughtoccurredtomethatASUisoneofthelargestUniversitiesinthecountry;Icouldpostsomelocalfliersforyourwebsiteusingthelogoatthetopofthesite.Afterall,IamafulltimestudenttheremajoringinActing.LetmeknowMr.Wood,Iloveyourideas!Takecare.Cordially,BenfromArizona(Iapologizeforanygrammaticalerrorsmyself,everyonelovesahypocriteright?*laughs*ItISlate...orearly...whew.)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/20/200910:30:55PMBenfromArizona,Irememberyouwell.Youwhippedrightthroughthescript,asIrecall.Youwrite,"IrealizedsomethingasIreadthemandlaughedoutloud-therearesomanywithsuchconfusingjuxtapositionswithinthecommentIdon'tknowhowyoustaypatient.There'snoneedtoevenbegininexplainingthegrammaticalerrorsandsloppyfragmentedsentences.Idon'tknowhowyoudoit.ItmustbenicetocomeacrossacommenteverynowandagainfromaneducatedreaderIsuppose.Abreathoffreshair,sotospeak."Ithinkthedigitalinformationageistransformingthelanguageandcommunicationingeneral.Textmessaging,twittering,andemailinghascausedpeopletoreduce,simplifyandhurryup.Consequently,punctuation,capitalization,spellingandsentencestructurehaveevolved,partlyduetotheneed/desireforbrevitybutmoremoreoftenduetosimplelaziness.Asawriter.I'mcompelledtomaintainahighstandardwiththewrittenword,butIdofindmyselfoccasionallyfallingpreytothelethargyofpopularcommunication.But,alas,itisnaturalthatlanguageswillevolve,andnotnecessarilyabadthing;itispartlywhytheEnglishlanguageissovastandcolorful.So,althoughwemaysometimessquirmatthechangesnowtakingplace,weshouldbeequallyopentothepossibilitythatthesechangesmayexpandthelanguageandcreateamoreinterestingformofcommunication.But,asyousaid,itisnicetoreceivecommentsthatarestillinthelanguageandformwithwhichI'mmostfamiliar.Also,thatIgetcommentsatallisgoodenoughforme.Imaginedoingallthisworktowritethescriptandhavenoonerespond.So,Itrynottolookagifthorseinthemouth.And,ingeneral,thecontentofthecommentsisinvigorating,challenging,andfun.I

alwaysenjoyreceivingthem.Well,youcertainlydoseemtobewellconnectedintheentertainmentbusiness.IwouldbetrulygratefulifyouwouldshowthescripttoSimonCowell,andevenmoregratefulifhecouldgetittotherightpeopleoveratWarnerBrothers.Really,nothingcouldbemoreexcitingtome.Youwrite,"Ijustwantedtocheckwithyoufirsttoensurethatyoutooktheproperstepstogainrightstothechangesyou'vemadetotheMatrixstorycharacterprogression.Inotherwords,Iknowthescriptiscopywritten,butistheideaofthestoryaswell?Idon'tknowhowslysomeslickwriterscanbe,orifIshoulddothiswithoutyourblessing."ThestepsI'vetakentogainrightstomyworkhavebeentoregisterthescriptwiththeLibraryofCongressandwiththeWriter'sGuild.Theplotofmyscriptiscompletelyoriginal;however,thecharactersandthemilieuoftheMatrixTrilogyareobviouslywhatI'mbuildingon.I'mnotsurewhatelseIwouldneedtodotomakesurethescriptisreadyfordistributiontoagentsorHollywoodingeneral.Iassumethat,becauseI'mbuildingoncopywrittenmaterial,myscriptisnotwhollyownedbyme.Howthatwillplayout,Idon'tknow.Ifyouhaveanythoughtsonthematter,pleaseletmeknow.Youmadeittothefrontpageofmywebsiteasafeaturedcommentorwithyourcomment,"Findapublisher,gainlegaladviceonretainingadaptiverightstotheoriginalmaterial,andmoveforward".I'mguessingyoumusthavesomeideaofhowtodothat.And,yes,anypublicityIcangetforthescriptisjustanotherladleofgravy.Yes,byallmeanspublicizeaway.Fliers,anything.Ifthisthingeverreallygetsoffthegroundthroughyourefforts,I'mnotsurehowIcouldthankyouproperly.WouldthattherecouldbeanactingroleforyouintheMatrix4!Dreamingisgood.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:BrianDATE:11/24/20099:56:02AMGreatread!Ireadthewholestoryinonesitting.Ireallylikedtheconceptofasupermatrixandhowtheoldercharactersfitintotherealworldaswellasthematrix.Youdidhavealotofdialogsbutitwasallneeded.Ilikedthe3.0agentsandtheideathatthe"cortex"wasorganicandthatthe36shadahumandefianceaboutthem.Thebattleswithinthematrixwereepicbutnotoverthetop,itwouldhavebeencooltopushtheenvelopealittlebitmorewithateamupoftheoldplayerslikethe"marvandserifandagentblacktokicksomesmithassbeforehebuildshismassivearmy.Itwouldhaveaddedalittlefalsehopeinthemiddleofthestorytocarrythereaderfurther.Iwouldhaveliketoseemoreonthe36'sandanexpansionofhowmuchtheyknewaboutthealternaterealities.Thatcouldbeanotherscriptinitselfprobably.Youreallyhavedoneanexcellentjobonexpandingonanalreadymassivemultidimensionalcomplexstoryline.Pleasecontinuetokeepwriting,notjustthematrix

storylinebutingeneralyougreatwritingskills.ThanksfortakingthetimetocreateagreatstoryforthemanyMatrixfans!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/26/200912:25:58AMBrian,ManyoftheaspectsofthestorythatyousiteascoolpartsarethesamepartsthatIlovedcreating-thesupermatrix,thefamilialcharacterrelationships,theandroid36s,theorganiccortexentity-allthesewerethought-provokingandwild.IwishIhadhadmoreroomandmoresituationswherebattle/fightscenescouldbemoreglorious/longer,butitwasalwaysanissueoftryingtoincorporatealltheelementsofthestorythatIfeltwerenecessary.Besides,IwasreactingabittothethirdMatrixmovie,whichIthoughtwasabitheavyonbattlescenes(well,maybenotheavyonbattlescenessomuchaslightoncharacter/plotdevelopment).The36scoulddefinitelydevelopintotheirownstory;there'sthatmuchmeatthere.We'llseewhathappenswiththat.I'mveryhappytohearthatitbroughtyousomuchenjoyment.ShouldIwritemore,I'llbesuretopostithere.Thanksforyourscintillatingreview.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JefreyGDATE:11/28/20095:56:15AMIreadonlyasmallbitofitbutatfirstglanceitappearstoomuchofafantasythewachowskibrothershadavisionwhentheycreatedthismoviealmosteverybitofthematrixwassymbolicinsomereligionorothereverycharacter,nearlyeveryscene,therolesthateachcharacterplayed,everythingdowntowhatwassaidandwhy,hadameaningidontseemuchmeaninginthisversionofthematrixorsupermatrixthereasontherewillbenosequeltothematrixtrilogyisbecauseitiscompleteithasallbeenexplainedifyoudontunderstandwhatimeanwhenisaythisreadpageandyouwillknowhttp://www.wylfing.net/essays/matrix_revolutions.htmlasyouhadstatedonyourwebsitetoreadthewholethingiwillmerelyaskyoutoreadtheentirepagethisliterallyexplainstheentirevisionofthewachowskibrothersandwhytherewillbenoorshouldbenosequelthebrothershadavisionforthemoviethatvisionwasbroughttolifeinitsentiretyandnowitstimetoletgothepagesucksyouinsothereisnorealtoaskyoutoreadthepagebutjustdoitCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/28/20092:22:48PMJefreyGI'dbegladtoreadthepagesyou'velinkedinyourcommentintheirentiretyifyouwillgrantmethesamecourtesyandreadmyscriptinitsentirety.Wewillthenbothbeina

positiontocommentmoreaccuratelyandinsightfully,don'tyouagree?Ilookforwardtoit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ClintXCVDATE:11/30/20091:25:19AMWow,lotsofworkwentintothisIcantell.You'veaddedandansweredalotofquestions.TheonlybigdifferencebetweentheMatrixtrilogyandthisistheadditionofwaymoreemotionconveyed.Forexample,theArchitecthugsNeointhe'realworld',veryemotional.Idon'tthinkthiswillbeconvertedtoafulllengthmovie...however,acomicorvisualbookseriescouldbewelladapted.Goodluckyoudefinatlyhaveatalentinwriting.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/30/20091:41:34AMClintXCV,I'mgladyoucanseetheamountofworkthatwentintothis;itwassubstantial.Acomicorgraphicnovelisthemostlikelyavenue,Iagree;butI'malwayshopefulthatamoviewilltranspire.Thatwoulddefinitelyhavethemostimpact.Thanksfortheshotinthearm.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TheWizardofBODDATE:12/17/20097:04:01PMIhaveaconceptthatIknowwhichiscalledSoulSplitting.Idonotunderstandwhyitexists,butitdoes.SoulSplittingallowsyoudirectaccessintotheVortexofTheMatrix.TheVortexdoesexist,andIdonotunderstandwhy,butitdoes.IhavetheknowingofSoulSplittingandnottheunderstanding.Thisistheconceptormissingpieceof"TheMatrix4"COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/18/200912:48:18PMWizard,Intriguingbutkindofcryptic.Canyouelaborateanyfurtheronyourcomment?Anddidyoureadthescript?

Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TheWizardofBODDATE:12/18/20098:22:25PMIwillbereadingthecompletescriptthisweekendandasforelaborating,Iwillshareingoodtime.Plus,TheMatrixisalwayscryptic.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/18/20098:49:14PMWizard,Indeed,alwayscryptic.Iawaityourthoughts.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:johnDATE:12/27/200910:57:06AMIhaveseenthematrixtrilogyverywellandIthinkifthisstoryisreleaseditwouldundoubtedlydestroythenamethemoviedevelopedCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/27/20096:07:37PMjohn,Certainlythe"Trilogy"namewouldundergosomescrutinyifafourthepisodewerereleased;butIthinkthatthatissuewouldbenegligibleconsideringthefunofseeingthestorygoonelayerdeeper.Myopinion,ofcourse.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:dimebagDATE:12/27/20096:20:12PMheyman,ireadthestory,wasreallycool..actuallyidintknowitwaswrittenbyyoutillnow..lol..ithoughtthewachowskishadjustpennedalittlesomethingforusfans,justforfun..thisstuffisreallygood..hopetheymakeitintoamoviewhichfranklywillbeamonumentaltask..isawinconceptart.orgthatuwerelookingforalternatetitles..thisisthetitleihadinmind..MATRIX:UNPLUGGED...anywayskeepupthegoodworkandletmeknowifudoanyfurtherrevisions..bestofluckdude..COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/27/20097:19:05PMdimebag,IlikethatyouthoughttheWachowski'spennedit;that'saniceego-booster.And,yes,itwoulddefinitelybeabigproductionifitevergotmadeintoamovie.Matrix:Unpluggedisagoodtitle,butatthispointthenewestoneI'vesettledon,Matrix:Resurrected,seemstoappealtopeople.I'llprobablybestickingwiththat.Thanksforyourthoughtsandpositivefeedback.PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:RonDATE:12/30/20091:40:16AMIamabigfanofthematrix.ThescreenplayhadmomentsequivalenttowhenNEOwasflyingattheendofthefirstmatrix.Veryimaginative.Thiscouldbewonderfullyadaptedtoamovie.IwouldliketoseetheMachineworldinadiseasedchaoticstatewithvirtualcharactersmeetinglikeaunitednations.TheSmithagentshouldhavetherementsofthehumanexperience,perhapsfallinginlovewithpersephone.Thesupermatrixshouldbeaworldofgodswherethedigitalselfismonstrousorangelic.Deathofavirtualshouldbetheequivalentofaperpetualexistenceinahellishstate.Thiswouldbethemotivationtopurpose.Aglimpseofthevirtualmachineworldkingwouldbeveryexciting.COMMENT:AUTHOR:E-75DATE:12/30/20099:45:29AMIreallyenjoyreadingthescript.Itgivesusthe'reality'ofourworld'where'(and'when')weliveintoday...IgrowupwithlotsofchancestoreadaboutBuddhism.Inthiscomment,IhavetosaythatyourstoryiscloselyconnectedtotheconceptoflifethatisdescribedbyBuddhism.Anyway,itwouldbeexcitingtoseeyourscriptbeingfilmedontoarealwide-screenversion.Thanks.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/30/20094:29:47PMRon,I'mgladyouenjoyedmyvisionofafourthMatrix.Fromyourfurthercomments,itsoundslikeyouhavealotofideasofyourownaboutwherethestoryshouldgo.Perhapsyou'lltakemyleadandwriteyourownversionofafourthMatrix.Perhapseventoppingmine.There'snomoneyinit,butitsureisfunandagreatscreenplaywritingexercise.Goodluck.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/30/20094:34:59PME-75,IlikethereferencetoBuddhism,ofrebirthandreachingNirvanathroughtheacceptanceofone'splaceintheuniverse.Gladyouenjoyedit.Wide-screenversion,please!PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DavidStephenDATE:1/12/20104:49:22PMWow,Igotsuckedinbecauseofgreatcharactersandagreatpremisebutthosewerenotyours.PoorlywrittenfromLockandMorphiousbecomingbuddies,toNeolosinghis

secondworldwithashuckydarnattitude.Notonlydidyougrabideasfromadozenothermovies,butyouhadnofinishtoanyoftheplotsyouintroduced,ANYofthem.Bytheway,sincethehumanswereincontrolofthemachinesthankstothe"E-Mags",whythehelldidtheyneedtocreatethe"SuperMatrix".Dohumansnowneedpowerfromthemachinesnow????LikeIsaidpoorlywritten.Realwritersgiveyouthebackgroundtothestoryproperly,theydon'thavecharacterssay"Howareyoufeelingafteryourlastmedicalprocedure?"or"They’redesignedtodisableonlymachinesorentitieswithaspecificoperatingsignatureorwavepattern.Theyshootwideandtheyshootdeep.Shouldtakecareofthemall."Buytheway,whatpurposewouldthatweaponbeusedforindeepspace?????Ifyoucan'ttellastorywithoutsoundinglikea12yearoldwritingforaschoolcontest,don'twrite.Whatawaste!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/12/20105:55:04PMDavid,AsyouseemtobeafanoftheMatrixTrilogy,I'msorrymyextensionofthestoryhitallthewrongnotesforyou.Youasked,"Sincethehumanswereincontrolofthemachinesthankstothe"E-Mags",whythehelldidtheyneedtocreatethe"SuperMatrix"?.Myansweris,e-magswereemployedtosimpleneutralizeallthemachinestoendtheGreatWar;theydidn'twipethemachinesoutorgivethehumanscontroloverthem.Asmachinesweregoingtobeapartofthehumanworldafterthewar,asystemhadtobedevisedtocontrolthem.TheSupermatrixisacontrolnetworkthatallmachinesareconnectedto.The36sweretheonlymachinenotaffectedbythee-magsandsotheyfightmuchasZion'speopledotoregaincontrolandfreedomfortheirkind.And,no,thehumansdon'tusethemachineslikebatteriesforpower.Youalsoasked,"Buytheway,whatpurposewouldthatweaponbeusedforindeepspace?????"Myansweris,Isensethatspaceexplorationwillhavebecomemuchmoresophisticatedinthisfutureworldandthatwiththepossibilityofdiscoveringhostilealiensoranimalsorperhapsevenalienmachinesonotherplanets,auniqueweaponwouldneedtobeinventedtoconfrontthosepossibilities.Idoesn'tseemthatfar-fetchedtome.Irespectyourrighttoyourownopinions,butit'salwayshardtoviewpeople'scriticismasvalidwhenit'ssoone-sided.I'malwaysmoreopentopeople'scriticismwhentheycanacknowledgesomeoftheaspectsoftheworkthatdeservemerit.Attheveryleastanacknowledgmentoftheimmenseamountoftimeputintothisprobablywouldhavesufficed.I'msorryitwassuchadisappointmentforyou.PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:LexieNeevelDATE:1/15/201011:59:07PMithinktheyshouldmakeanotherMatrixmovieCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/16/201012:49:20PMLexie,Ditto.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:vittorioDATE:1/18/201010:17:12PMI'mreadingit..I'mimpressedthiswouldbeanamazingsequel.thismoviecouldbedonein3dnotnecessarilywithactors....atthemomentithinkthisideashouldbedevelopedbysomeonei'mcontinuingmyreading.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/19/201012:09:25AMvittorio,IappreciateyourenthusiasmandIawaityourfinalcomments.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:VittorioDATE:1/23/20101:45:48PMMyopiniondidn'tchange.Ithinkyouworkedreallyhardonthat,theresultisreallygood.Onlyonething:it'sverydifferentfromtheothermatrixmovies.Thisisbecausethemanyflashbacks.AlthoughIstillthinkthisideashouldbedeveloped.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/23/201011:06:10PMVittorio,I'mgladitliveduptoyourenjoymentrighttiltheend.ItisdifferentfromtheTrilogy(especiallywiththeflashbacks)butIstillthinkitstayswithinthespiritoftheMatrixidea.Cheers,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:HarryDsouzaDATE:1/26/20107:20:43AMHi,ThatmakesenseandIlikeitmost!theideayoupresentedissoimpressiveandwillgetattractionofpeoplewholikesMatrixasmuchilikeit!COMMENT:PDWoodDATE:1/27/20102:19:30AMHarry,Sogladtohearthatyouenjoyed.Thanksfordroppingby.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DavidJacksonIIIDATE:2/1/20104:20:48AM

CheckthisoutifneorestoredpeacetothedemolishedpresentdayMatrix(cough)thenallthepeopleinthepresentdayMatrix.....wouldwakeupfromthosecryotubethingstheywereallsleepinginandifneowaswokeupfromthepastMatrixcouldtherehavebeenpeoplethatwereawokenfromafutureMatrix.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:2/1/201012:07:35PMDavidJacksonIII,Nicesarcasm(cough).COMMENT:AUTHOR:metinDATE:3/7/20108:51:09AMIaminpage110,andallIcansayisIwastotallyblownaway.UsingmirrorisverycleverandIamwonderingwhythedirectorsneverusemirrorsafterthefirstmovie.IwishHollywoodrealizesyourgreattalent.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/7/20101:51:15PMmetin,Iappreciateyourupliftingcomment.Leavingpeople"totallyblownaway"isalwaysthedesiredeffect.Themirrorisdefinitelyaneffectivemetaphorinaworldwhererealityandunrealityclash.Iassumetheysimplymovedontoothermetaphorsthatwereequallyaseffective.Theydidhavesomany.Andcoolonesatthat!Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MarkOfClarkDATE:3/27/20103:19:38PMGreatworkPD,IcameacrossyourworkveryrandomlybutonceIstartedreading,Igotsuckedin!Ireadalotofyourcomments(fromover3years,wow)andIcanagreeonmostofthepositiveandsomeoftheconstructivecriticism.ThecharacterdialoguewasdefinitelyveryfittingandIlikedhowwefinallygetanexplanationastowhoMerovingianandPersephoneareandlovedhowmanyholesleftoverfromthepreviousmovieswerefinallypluggedinbyyou.But,Idothinkatleastinthispotentialmovietherearesomemorethingsthatshouldbeelaboratedthatcanlaterkeepeveryoneelse'sattentiongoingforatleastthe2moremoviesforthe"PDWood"trilogyforwhatI'msuretheWachowskiswouldgiveyoutheirblessingsfor.One,IthinkjustlikeinMatrix1,thereshouldbemoreofanexplanationforthepurposeoftheCortexandtheSuperMatrixthatwouldparallelmorewiththefirstmovie.Ijustdon'tthinkthestoryisclearenoughonwhatexactlyhappenedinthe"realworld"thatledtotheSuperMatrix'screation.Wegetanunderstandingofwhathappenedinthe"realworld"thatledtotheothermatrix'screation.AlsomaybealittleelaborationonNeo's"predocessors"mentionedbyMerovingianfromMatrixReloaded?Also,whydoesTrinitypretendnottoknowthatherparentsareMerovingianandPersephoneinthepriorMatrixmovies?WhywouldagirllethermomkissherboyfriendlikePersephonedidinReloaded?Whywouldsomeone'sMomkisstheirboyfriend?Iwouldsupposeyouranswerwouldbefor"power"?Allinall,thisisreallygoodwork,justneedstobesmoothedoutalittlebit.WithCGIand

othertechnologicaladvances,Idon'tseewhythismoviecan'tbepossible.Keanuisn'tthatoldyet,butwecanalwaysairbrushoutthewrinkles!hahaPleasekeepatthis,Ithinkthishaslotsofpotential.-MarkOfClarkCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/28/20102:34:29AMMarkofClark,Ah...werethatitweretrue,theWachoskisgivingmetheirblessingonaPDWoodtrilogy!IdoubtitwilleverhappenbutI'mflatteredthatyouthinkIcouldtakeitthatfar.Iagree,theSupermatrixandCortexcouldandshouldbeelaboratedon.Thiswoulddefinitelybeapartofanysecondorthirdscriptinthe(PDWood?)trilogy.Asfarasthisscriptgoes,though,itwouldmakeittoolong.IthinkIgavepeopleenoughtopeektheircuriositybutnotenoughtocompletelyquenchtheirthirst.Partofthemystique,Iguess.AndNeo'spredecessors,thattoo,couldandshouldbeworkedinlater.AsforTrinityoranyoneelse,oncethey'reinsidetheSupermatrix,theyhavenoawarenessofeventsintherealworld.Trinitydoesn'tknowthatPersephoneandtheMerovingianareherparentsinthesamemannerthatPersephoneandtheMerovingianhavenoideathatTrinityistheirdaughter.ThisisaruleoftheSupermatrixthatisneverbroken.AndIthinkyou'reright.CGIcouldmakethisworkinthefuture.Thatmayendupbeingtheonlywaytopullitoff!It'sbeenabitquietasofrecently(withcomments)sothanksforthegreatcommentsandcritique.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DSmarttDATE:4/1/20107:36:36AMP.D.WoodIreallyenjoyedyourtakeonafourthinstallment.Itoo,amhopefulforafourthmovie.Ihavestartedamovementofsortsbywayofafanpageonfb.Acensusifyouwill.InameditGiveus"TheMatrix4"!!!!!!MyhopeistobuildafanbaselargeenoughthattheWachowskibrotherscannotignore.Thisstorylinebegsforanothersequel!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/1/20101:26:07PMDSmartt,Gladyoulikedit.LetmeknowwhatyourfanpagenameisonFacebook.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:merondDATE:4/7/20103:06:18AM

Iwasskepticalatfirst,andasIbeganreadingIwasunsure,butbytheendIwasastotallyenthralledinthestoryasifitwereanactualsequel.It'sstillalittlerough,butithastrulycapturedthespiritoftheMatrix.WithalittleworkandsomewaytogettheWachowskiBrotherstoacceptit,Icouldeasilyseethisbecomingareality.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/7/20104:11:17PMmerond,Itsaysalottomethatyoustuckwithiteventhoughyouhadyourapprehensions.Andit'snicetohearthatitpaidoffforyou.Definitelyabitrough.Anotherrewriteortwowouldhelp.Perhaps...someday...theBrotherswillcall,andanewepisodewillbegin.Untilthen,it'sjustanalternaterealityonanotherplaneofexistence.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:steveDATE:5/3/20102:09:49PMireallyenjoyedthestoryandididn'tputitdownassoonasistartedreadingit,butmyfeelingstowardsmakinganothermatrixmoviearemixed.itwasgreathowyouansweredtheunresolvedquestions.alotofthemesthatcameupinthescriptmadealotofsense.maybethereweretoomany"iamyourfather,LukeSkywalkerscenes"butilikehowtheArchitectwasarealhumanbeingetcandthescriptexplainsandshowseverythingwhichyouwouldlovetosee,butifeelifididseeallofthat,themysteryoftheMatrixwouldbegoneandleftuninteresting.butnonethelessitstillwouldbeanawesomemovie,greatjob.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/3/20103:07:22PMsteve,EvenmyfeelingstowardsanotherMatrixmoviearemixed...especiallysincethelastonecameoutsolongago.IagreethatsomeofthemysteryoftheTrilogyislostwithtoomuchexplanation,butIthoughtIalsoopenedupawholenewterritoryofmystery...abouttheandroid36s,theCortex,theSource,thepossibilityofevenmorerealitiesevenbeyondtheoneinmystory.Yes,thehumanelement,oftheArchitect,andthefamilialrelationshipofmanyofthemaincharacters,thatwasfuntocreate.I'mgladyouroverallimpressionwasfavorable.Andthanksforthefeedback.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ScriptwriterDATE:5/5/20108:57:04AMIhavewritten8screenplays,soImighthavealittlemoreinputthanyouraverageMatrixfan.

Havingthestorybeingtoldinthreedifferenteras,IdidnotfeellikeIwasapartofthestory.Ithinkyou'vereallygotsomethinghere,butIwouldsuggestwritingeverythingasaprequelorasanothersequel...butIwouldn'ttrycombiningthemtogetherasyouhave.Whilereading,Icouldn'tfindtheAct1break...ifthereisone,itwastoosubtle.Sofar,youhaven'ttolduswhotheHerois,I'massumingit'sNeo,butwithoutgivingustheSet-up.I'msorry,butIhadtostopreadingafterpage40...Ijustcouldn'treadanymore.Beingeducatedincomputers,Ialsofoundithardtobelievethethe"program"forAgentSmithwasback.HewasdestroyedbytheheadMachine,throughNeo.Howisitpossiblethathe'saliveandrunningagain?Maybethatshouldbeexplained.Sorry,ifmywordssoundharsh.Idowishyouthebestofluck.Sincerely,scriptwriterCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/5/20101:31:52PMScriptwriter,IappreciateyourcandidcommentsandItakenooffense.Sincethiswasmyfirstattemptatascreenplay,Ihaveprobablyfallenshortinnumerousareas,nodoubt.Myattemptwastowriteadeepstorythatbothtiedupsomelooseendsandalsoestablishedsomenewterritory;itwaslessofanattempttofollowtheguidelinesofstorystructureandHollywooddigestibility.Iviewedmystoryasthefinal(third)actofthewholestorythatfollowedthroughfromtheTrilogy.InthatsenseitdidnothaveanAct1break.IknowthiswouldprobablynotflywithHollywoodexpectations,but,asIsaid,thiswasmoreofapersonalexercisethanagenuineattempttofitthemold.Idobelievenow,inretrospect,thatthiswouldbebetterbrokenupintoeitherasequeloraprequel.Thetimeandplaceshiftsaredifficulttofollowandtheydistractfromfocusandcontinuity.Jumpingaroundsomuchpreventstheaudiencefrombeingabletoreallyconnectemotionallywiththecharacters.I'llkeepthatinmind.Thelackofaclearandactiveheroicfigure,Iagree,isaproblem.Yes,Neoisultimatelythatfigureinthisstory,buthisrelativepassiveness(comparedtohisroleintheTrilogy)tendstodissipatethefocusandenergyofaheroicfigurethatpropelsastoryforward.Theattempttocombineelementsofaprequelandasequelmadeitdifficulttohavea

centralheroicfigure.Ithinkyourobservationiscorrectandifarewriteforthisstoryisaddressed,Iwillcertainlyworktowardsremedyingthisproblem.Givenyourreservations,Iunderstandwhyyoustoppedatpage40,butIurgeyoutoreadtherestanyway.Therearesomeveryjuicybitsjustabouttohappenandsomepartsthatmighthelpaddresssomeofyourconcerns.MyideafortheresurrectionofAgentSmithwasbasedonthefactthatintheMatrixReloaded,Bane(aZiondweller)waspossessedbyaSmithcloneoutsideoftheMatrix.IfaSmithclonecanexistoutsideoftheMatrix,then,inmyopinion,hewouldbeindependentofandunaffectedbyimmediateeventsintheMatrix,solongasheremainedoutsideoftheMatrix.Ifyouacceptthisidea,thenit'slogicaltoassumethatwhentheoriginalSmithandallhisclonesweredestroyedintheMatrix,thecloneSmithintheBanecharacterwouldhavesurvived.IsimplyextendedthenotionthatSmithsentoutmorethanonecloneintoZion.ThefirstclonewasinBaneandBanewaseventuallykilled;inmystoryIsuggestasecondclonewasalsosentout(attheasametimeastheBanecloneperhaps),andthissecondclonelaidlowlongeranddidn'tmakeamoveuntilafterNeowasdead.SincekillingNeowasthemainreasonfortheclone'sinfiltrationintoZioninthefirstplace,onceNeowasdead,theSmithclone'snewdirectivewouldprobablybetogetbackintotheMatrixandreestablishhimself.Thatwasmylogic,anyway.Nosureitholdsup.Again,Ihopeyou'lltakemysuggestionandreadtotheendofthestory.Itmaynotbetextbookscreenwriting,butthere'ssomefunstuffinthere.Ifyou'reaMatrixfan,Isuggestit'sworththeread.Thanksforyourtimeandthoughtful(accurate)comments.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:TinyDATE:5/5/20101:55:10PMThisisaverycoolstoryline-itshouldtotallybereleasedasanothermatrixmovie.Theendingevensuggestsapotentialforafifthmovie.Ithoughtitwasgreat,youshoudcontacttheWachowskibrothersandgettheballrolling.MyfinalrequestwouldjustbetogetkeanureevesbackasNEO!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/5/20102:51:16PMTiny,Yourenthusiasmisintoxicating.Unfortunately,it'sveryhardtocontacttheWachowskibrothers(I'vetried).And,asgoodasmystorymightbe,it'streadingonsomeoneelse'sstory.Thiscanbeanenormoushurdletoovercome.TheWachowski'swouldhavetobeveryopen-mindedandhumbletoacceptsomeoneelse'scontinuationoftheirstory.Nonetheless,theymightbeopentoit.ButcontactingTHEMdirectlyhasprovedimpossible.Maybemystoryhasbeenforwardedtothemandthey'vedismissedit

outright,simplyonprinciple.Ormaybetheyhavenoideathatmystoryexists.It'shardtoknow.Ifyou(oranyoneoutthere)hasacontactoralinein,justletmeknow.I'dbemorethanhappytopursueit.InthemeantimethisisonefortheMatrixfans,which,ifthat'sallthatcomesofit,willstillmakemyday.ButIalwaysholdouthopeforsomethingbigger.Thanksagainfortheego-inflatingpraise.Idosoappreciateit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:scriptwriterDATE:5/5/20108:36:28PMIunderstandyourpassionfortheMatrixseries,theywereterrific.Iwouldjustliketorecommendtwobooks,"SavetheCat"bythelateBlakeSnyder,ascreenwriterwhohassoldmorescriptsthananybodyinHollywoodpurelybasedonhissctructure...thesecondbookis"Story"byRobertMckee,oneofthegreats.IunderstandthatthiswasyourfirstscreenplayanditwasdonemoreoutofyourpassionfortheSeries,butitwouldn'thurttomakethebestoutofwhatyou'vegot.Inordertodothat,andifyouseriouslywanttobeconsideredbyanybodyinHollywood(whereIlive)Iwouldsuggestlearningstructure.ALLmovieshavea"setup"amain"here"or"protagonist"andamain"badguy"or"antagonist".ThereisandAct1break,aMidpoint,andanAct2break(3Actstotal,nomore,noless).Thereisdramaandmajorconflict.Yourmaincharacterallgothrougha"CharacterArc"meaning,ifyourHeroisjadedbachelorwhosmokesinthebeginningofthemovie,bytheendofthemovie,he'squitsmoking,andthinkingaboutloveagain.IhavetwoscreenplaysthatarebeinglookedatbyLionsgatecurrently.Oneofthemwe'reinnegotiationswithmoney.Beingascreenwritercanbeveryfun,anditcanmakeyouagoodliving.Now,onmy9thscreenplay,IlookbackatmyfirstscreenplayIeverwroteandlaughatmyselfforeverthinkingIcouldsellit(it'sabsolutelyhorrible)...:)ButIgotacoupleofbooksandreadthem,I'vetakenacoupleofworkshops,andnowIhavetwoscreenplaysinthehandsoftheprofessionals.It'sOKifyoujustwanttowriteforfun,butifyoucanwriteforfunANDmakealivingdoingit,thenallthebetter.So,learnstructure,storyline,plotpoints,Actbreaks,charactersandcharacterarcs....andthencomebackandrewritethis.Byevenfinishingascreenplay,mayIsay"congratulations".Andagain,bestofluck.sincerely,

ScripwriterCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/6/201012:11:07AMScriptwriter,Ilikeallofyouradvice.SinceI'vewrittentheMatrixscreenplay,Ihavedonemuchofwhatyousuggest.SavetheCat,greatbook(mayherestinpeace).Story,amust.IalsoparticularlylikeScreenandTelevisionWriting(Vale),YourScreenplaySucks,(Akers),andtheScreenwriter'sBible(Trottier).I'vewrittenasecondscreenplaythathasnothingtodowiththeMatrixandamworkingonathirdonenow.Iagreewitheverythingyou'vesaid.UnderstandingthebasicsofscreenwritingandthentailoringscreenplaysforHollywoodareindispensablegoals,ifmakingmoneyandalivingaregoingtobepartofthescreenwritingexperience.WhenI'mmoreseasoned,IassumeI'lllookbackonmyearliestscreenplaysandseealltheirflawsinaninstant.It'sthenatureofthebeast,Iguess.Doyouthinkmystoryelements,ifconfiguredproperly,woulddrawtheattentionofthe"powersthatbe"withregardtoafourthMatrixepisode?I'vekindofputmyMatrixstorybehindme,butifyou,beingsomewhatontheinside,feelithasgreatpotential,Imightbemoreinclinedtoreworkit.Doyouhaveconnectionsthatmightbewillingtolookitover?AndcongratulationsontheLionsgatesuccesses.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ScriptwriterDATE:5/6/20101:49:30AMIt'sgreatthatyou'recontinuingtowriteotherscreenplays.yes,itisthenatureofthebeast,whichisgoodandbad,meaning,weaswritersknowwhat"Hollywood"expectsfromussotheformulaisthereandsetinstone,onthebadside,wearen'tallowedtonegotiatethatformulaandsay,"look,I'vegotsomethinggreathere,andeventhoughitdoesn'tfitintoyourformula,itreallyhaspotential."So,aswriters,we'renotabletoexperimentbeyondwhatisalreadythere,becausenobodywillacceptit(unlessofcourseyouhavemillionsofdollarsandcanProduceyourownwrittenwork).Mybestfriendisaworkingactor.He'ssupportedDenzel,CubaGooding,TerranceHoward,andothers,andIdon'tevenfeelrightaboutbringingmyownmaterialtohimletalonesomeoneelses...youknowwhatImean.But,whatIwoulddo,ifyoureallywantedtogobackandtuneMatrixResurrectedupabit,isIwouldfindoutwheretheWachowskiBrotherslive(youcouldprobablyfindthatoutthroughStarTours)andmailthemyourscript.Maybeyougetareply,maybeyoudon't.Butyouneverknowuntilyoutry.

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/6/20102:10:23AMScriptwriter,Yes,formularules.Sucks!But"whaddyagonnado,huh"?Ihearyouaboutthescriptreaderapprehensionthing.Hardenoughtobringyourownworktohimwhenthere'sprobablyabucketloadofothersaskinghimthesamefavor.IgoogledStarToursanddidn'tcomeupwithanythingthatlookedlikeasitethatmighthavealeadtotheWachowski'saddress.Isthattherightspelling?Perhapsyoucouldforwardmealink?I'llcheckitout.Certainlyworthatry.Muchappreciated.Ifyourmoviesgetmadeintoreleasedproductions,comebackandletmeknowwhattheyare.Lovetocheckthemout.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/3/20109:38:43PMFirstoff,IjustwanttostatethateventhoughsomemaythinkthattheMatrixtrilogyhadaninconclusiveending,Ithinkthattheendingwasunexpectedyetinevitable,andeverytimeIthinkabouttheplotofthethreemoviesalltogether,Iseemoreandmorehiddenmeaninginit.SoIdon'tthinkthereneedstobeasequel...butifyouwanttowriteone,I'mnotgoingtostopyou.Ithinkyourplotwasdefinitelylacking.Youhadsomegreatandcreativeideas,butnothingHAPPENED.Youwerejustsettingupanotherscene.Ifeellikethiscouldbeaprologuetoanothermovie.Also,someofyourideas,whilecreativeandtotallynew,didn'tquitefitwiththeMatrixtrilogy.Forexample,theMerovingianandPersephoneknewwhotheOraclewasintheMatrix,andknewthattheylivedinafictionalworld.Theyalsodidn'thaveasmuch'power'asNeoorSmith.Also,youintroducedalotofnewthreadswithouttyingthemupconclusively.WhatisthesignificanceofNeo'sreflections?WhathappenstotheyoungerNeo?Howdidhegetsuchpowers?EvenifhewasNeo'sson,hewouldhardlybeageneticclone...AndIthinkthoughyourstyleisgenerallyconsistent,insomeplacesitisnotquitethesameasthemovietrilogy.Idon'tmeantosoundnegative,butIthinkifyoureallywanttomakethisamovie,youhavealotofrevising-andaddingactualactionandplot-todo.COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/3/201010:45:31PMCommentsonyourreply:(Itseemstobeaweebitinconsistent...)Why'neutralize'?'Neutralize'asinhow?Andwhywouldthemachineshaveto"beapartofthehumanworldafterthewar"?Whywouldn'tthe36snotbeaffectedbytheE-Mags?Also,the

storysaidthattheE-Magswouldonlyworkonartificialintelligences...sowhatusewouldtheybeagainstaliens?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/4/20101:49:09PMAnonymous,Ithinktherearemainlytwoapproachestohowpeopleviewmystory.ThefirstapproachistolookatitasanexplanationformuchofwhathappendintheTrilogyandasthesetupforacontinuingstoryline.Peopleinthiscampseemtohavebeenveryhappywithmystory;theylikewhatitrevealsofthepastandwhatitportendsforthefuture.Thesecondapproachistolookatitasaself-containedstorythathasaclearthree-actstructureandclearresolutionofallthreads.Peopleinthiscampseemtoenjoymuchofwhatthestoryfocuseson,butaredisappointedwithitslackoffinality.Ithinkyouareinthesecondcamp.IntheMatrixTrilogy,theMerovingianandPersephonedoknowwhotheOracleisanddoknowthattheyliveinafictionalworld.Butifyoufollowmystorylinecarefully(andIadmitthat'shard,givenhowconvoluteditis),you'llseethatmysceneswithPersephoneandtheMerovingianhappenprevioustoeventsintheTrilogy,beforetheyknewtheOracleandbeforetheyknewtheylivedinafictionalworld(andevenbeforetheyhadpowers).Neo'sreflectionssuggestthatthereareaninfinitenumberofuniversesorrealities,whethervirtualorconcrete.Anditfurtherstheideathatallworldsarereal,nomatterwhattheyareorwheretheyare.TheyoungNeoisabitofawildcard.MysuggestionisthatheisthefutureoftheMatrixworldandhewillpickupwheretheolderNeoleftoff.Thecyclecontinues.TheyoungNeoinheritinghisfather'spowersmaybeabitweak,butIdidn'tthinkitwastotallyimplausible.Ididn'tfindyourcommentstobenegative,justinsightful.Everyonehastheiropinion.Thatyoutookthetimetoreadthewholestoryandcomehereandgivemereal,thoughtfulcommentsisofimmensevaluetome.Isincerelyappreciateanyonewhowilldothat.I'mgladthatyouthoughtthereweresomegood,creativepartstothestory,evenif,asacompleteproject,youfeltitfellsomewhatshortofthemark.IfIdorevise,I'llbesuretotakeyourcommentstoheart.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/4/20102:00:13PMAnonymous,I'mnotsurewhichreplyyouarereferringto;Ithinkyoumayhavereadoneofmyrepliesdirectedtowardssomeoneelsesince,upuntilnow,Ihaven'tleftyouareply.I

did,however,justnowleaveyouareplyifyouwouldliketoreadit.AsfortheE'mags,Idon'tbelieveIsaidtheywouldonlyworkonmachineswithartificialintelligence.IbelieveIsaid"Theyâ€redesignedtodisableonlymachinesorentitieswithaspecificoperatingsignatureorwavepattern".PresumablytheE-magswouldbeprogrammedtomatchanddisabletheirintendedtargets.Inthiscasethe36swereimmunetotheE-magseffectsbecausethe36swerethemostadvancedand(againpresumably)themostresilientmachines.Hopethishelpsabit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/4/20104:58:45PMOnyourclarificationabouttheMerovingianandPersephone:somecomments.1)YousaythatthesceneswiththeOracletakeplacebeforethetrilogy.ButinthetrilogyitisimpliedthattheyarebothprogramscreatedbythemechanicalSourceinthe'realworld'-andthattheyknowthisandalwayshaveknownthis.2)PerhapsyoucouldclarifyhowtheMerovingiancametotakethatnameifhisoriginalnamewasVictor?COMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/4/20105:23:13PMOnyourclarificationabouttheMerovingianandPersephone:somecomments.1)YousaythatthesceneswiththeOracletakeplacebeforethetrilogy.ButinthetrilogyitisimpliedthattheyarebothprogramscreatedbythemechanicalSourceinthe'realworld'-andthattheyknowthisandalwayshaveknownthis.2)PerhapsyoucouldclarifyhowtheMerovingiancametotakethatnameifhisoriginalnamewasVictor?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/5/20101:39:33AMAnonymous,ItisassumedintheTrilogythatthemachinesfabricatedalltheeventsandcircumstancesoftheMatrix.Butinactuality(atleastaccordingtomystory)thehumansfabricatealltheeventsandcircumstancesoftheSuperMatrixwhichalsoincludestheMatrix.Itisallahumanfabrication.TheimportantpointtorememberisthatnooneinsidetheMatrixortheSuperMatrixisawareoftheworldbeyond(wheretheCortexexists).TheMerovingianandPersephone,onceinsidetheSuperMatrix,haveabsolutelynoknowledgeoftheirrealpast.TheyfallintotherolesoftheirMatrixvirtuals.ThatPersephoneandtheMerovingian"arebothprogramscreatedbythemechanicalSourceinthe'realworld'-andthattheyknowthisandalwayshaveknownthis"isperfectlyinkeepingwiththeworldoftheMatrixinmyopinion.Sinceitisallafabrication,anythingisopentopossibility.MylogicforhimchanginghisnamefromVictortotheMerovingianistohighlighthisgrandiosityandarrogance.Ashetapsintoandstartsusinghispowers,he,beingofFrenchdescent,wouldquitenaturallywanttoassociatehimselfwithroyalFrenchlineage,thatoftheMerovingiankingsbeingperfectlysuitedtohischaracter.

Ihopetheseexplanationsseemsomewhatplausibleandappealing.Itisveryhardtostringtogethersomanythreadsandkeeptheminteresting,logical,thought-provokingandexciting.IhopeIhaveatleastattainedamodicumofsuccess.Thanksagainforyourthoughts.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AnonymousDATE:6/5/20101:50:49PMYes,howeverinyourscriptitseemslikewhentheyentertheworldtheythinktheyarepeopleintheworldratherthanprograms.Butthenlatertheythinktheyareprograms?Andyousaythattheycouldhavealways"known"thattheywereprograms,butintheirinteractionwiththeOracle,theydon'tknowanythingabouttheoutsideworld.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/5/20102:06:02PMAnonymous,TheOracleinformsthemoftheirstatusasprogramsoftheMatrix,likesheis.Yes,thatimpliesthattheydidn'tknowtheywereprogramsupuntilthen;butoncetheyareinformedofthisfact,theyassumetheyalwayswereprograms.Iguessthat'swhereIseeitkindoffittinginwiththeTrilogy.Abitsketchy,butnoteverythingcanlineupperfectly.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ARACELISnyder27DATE:6/6/20105:50:02PMIproposenottowaituntilyougetenoughamountofmoneytobuyallyouneed!YoushouldgetthemortgageloansorjusttermloanandfeelcomfortableCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AgentChavezDATE:6/27/20102:03:43AMTheMatrixandTheTerminatorarethesamestoryandwherestolenfromSofiaStewart.TheMotherofTheMatrix.Themovieswhereinspiredbyherbook,"TheThirdEye".SnopesandTheLATimesarebothcontrolled.Mediamindmanipulationanddoublespeakiswhatcontrolsourworld!GoergeOrwellwarnedusaboutthis.SofiaStewart'sstoryisveryREALandVeryTrue!YoucanlistentoherliveonParallel'swithmyselfAgentChavezexclusivelyonLATalkLive.com!WeAreMoreThanJustTalk!SofiagaveusasneakpeaktothenewdevelopmentofTheMatrix4!Iamnottypingwronghere,shehasWONthelawsuitagainstthethiefCameronandtheWachowskiBrothersforover$2BillionDollars!!Nowsheisinpre-productionofTheMatrix4!Listentotheinterviewhere:http://www.latalklive.com/medianmusic/parallels/parallels062310.mp3

COMMENT:AUTHOR:DannoDATE:6/30/20102:03:16PMThisjustsoundslikeStephanhasacaseoftheoldgreenmonster'Envy'.Well,thisistheinternetafterall.Thebetteryoudoatsomething,thehardertheidoitsretaliate.COMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:7/3/20106:55:43PMMatrixtrilogywasamasterpiece...Iwatchthesemoviesoverandoveragain...Inthefinalpart,whenthelittlegirlasksOracleiftheywillbeseeingNeo,shegivestheanswer"Isuspectso"...Thatleftmecuriousalltheseyears...IwashopingthatbythistimetherewouldbeanewMatrixmovie,butitdidn'thappen.Thentwodaysback,Iwassurfingthroughthenetlookingfornewreleasesscheduledforthisyear.WheniwastypingMatrix,inGoogle,itshowedMatrix4...Icheckeditout,andstumbleduponyoursite...Ididn'tfindanymovie,butifoundthisp.d.ffile...Iwentthroughit,andtomyamazement,itwasflawlessandperfect...Itwastheperfectsequelanybodycouldeverimagine...Youdefinitelydidagreatjob...Youshouldseriouslyconsiderconvertingthisstorylineintomovie...NowI'meagerlywaitingforthenextMatrixinline...Matrix5...IwanttoknowwhatSmithwilldo,Morpheus,NaobiandCommanderLockwilldo...WillMorpheusandLockfindoutthatOracle/Serenaistheirmother...WillNeoreturntoZion...Willthewarend...Willthemachineskeeptheirwordandfreethehumanslavesfromtheirpods...WillVictorandPersephonerealizetheirfates...Somanyquestionsunanswered...WillyoubeansweringthesequestionsinthenextpartwhichIhopewillbecominginsoon...Hopetohearfromyouverysoon...Shakir...COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/3/201010:57:37PMShakir,I'mveryhappytohearhowmuchyouenjoyedthestoryandIacceptyourhighpraisewithduehumility.I,too,wouldlovetohavethisscreenplayturnedintoareal,liveHollywoodproduction,butthat'seasiersaidthandone.I'vetried...believeme.ThelikelihoodthatIwillwritea5thMatrixscreenplayisslim.Althoughthereismuchthatcouldbecontinued,Isortofliketheopen-endedqualityofthe4thepisode.Shouldthe4thepisodeevermakeittothescreenandshouldpeopleTHENclamorformore...well...thenImightbepersuaded.Butfornow,Ihopeyoucanenjoythestoryasitis,acontinuationwithoutfinality,astorytomakeyouthinkandinterpretyourownending.Thanksforyourthoughtsandtime.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:7/4/20106:00:30AMHiSir,Thankyouforrespondingtomycomment...YesterdayiwasthinkingaboutyourscriptandMatrix4andallthepossibilities...ThenIfoundasmalldoubtthatisstillremaininginmymind...Iwouldliketoshareitwithyouingreathopeofgettingthismistoutofthe

air...Inall3Matrixmovies,therehasbeenindicationsofancestorsofTheOne,i.e.Neo...TheArchitect,TheOracle,AgentSmith,Merovingianallspecificallymentionabouttheancestors...Tobespecific,theArchitectmentionedthattherewas5ancestorspriortoNeo...Butinyourscript,Alex/SerenaandTrinityallnoticeaunfamiliaranomalythatwasunexplained...LateryoumentionedthattheyfoundasimilarvirtualpersonintheSuperMatrixshowingresemblancetothecharacteristicsoftheunexplainedanomaly...TrinitysaysthatshestudiedNeocloselysothatshecouldkillhim...Butthenfellinlovewithhim...Soifmyconclusionisright,theanomalyjusthappenedonce,becausetheCortexwantedtofindawaytogetcontroloftheartificialintelligenceitlacked...SoNeowastheCortexinliving...Ifthat'strue...Thenitdoesn'tsinkwiththeancestorsstorythatwastoldinthetrilogy...AnotherthingIwouldliketoaskisthat,inthebeginningofthestoryafterNeoisresurrected,heseesPersephonenakedandthenMerovingianalsoentersthesceneandthentheyhaveaconversationandthen...Theyfadeaway...Theyarenotseenanywhereinthepresentbutonlyintheflashbackofthestory...WhenNeoasksTrinityaboutthem,shesaysitscomplicated...Sotheniftheywerenotshowninthepresent...Thenwhyweretheyshowninthestory...I'mcurioustoknow...Pleasereply...COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/4/201011:55:00PMShakir,Asregardsmystory,itisveryimportanttorememberthatthehistory,events,placesandpeople(i.e.theentireworld)oftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrixareacompletefabricationwithintheCortex,andthatentireworldhasbeenmanufacturedbythe"real"peoplewhooccupytheSource.InthissensethehistoryoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrixcouldjustaswellbeinformationsimplyimplantedinthevirtualmindsoftheinhabitantsoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix.Buteveniftheseeventstookplacevirtual(asopposedbebeingjustimplantedmemoriesofhistory),sucheventshavenobearingontheworldoutsideoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix.Thatbeingsaid,thereisnoreasontosuggestthattherewerenotfiveancestorsorprevious"Ones"beforeNeo.Isuggestthatthecycleofthehumanstryingtoconquerthemachinesbyfindingandtrainingaspecial"One"wouldhavecontinuedindefinitelywereitnotfortheextraordinaryandunanticipatedpowersandvisionofthenewest"One"(i.e.Neo).Neo'sgiftandpowerssurpassedthatoftheprevious"Ones"insuchawayastomakehimathreattothewholeCortexconstructandthereforeoftherealworld'scontrolofthemachines.Aspecial"One"wasananomalyintheworldoftheMatrixandtheSuperMatrix,butNeo'sdangerouspowersasa"One"wentbeyondwhatthenormalanomalywouldhavebeencapableofandhethereforebecamearealanomaly(notjustavirtualanomaly)andathreattotherealworld.ThedesignersoftheCortex(andtheMatrixandSuperMatrixworldswithintheCortex)deliberatelysetupacyclicalbattlebetweenhumansandmachineswherethemachineswouldultimatelywineverytime.Thiswasanintentionalwayofpreoccupyingthe"real"

machinesandkeepingthemfromrealizingthattheywerereallybeingcontrolled(i.eenslaved)intherealworld.Neo,asthenew"One",shouldhavebeendestroyed,butbecausehispowerswereasuperanomaly,heupsetthebalanceandintendedpurposeoftheCortexworld.Asfarastherealworldisconcered,Neoisanormalvirtualperson,aconstructoftheCortex,upuntilhesurpassesthenormalpowersofthe"One".Afterthathebecomesanextensionof,andperhapseventheoffspringof,theCortex(insomeweirdway).Heisonthevergeofachievingawarenessofthetruthbeyond,aconditiontherealworldcannotallow.Ihopethisisn'talltooconvoluted.AsforPersephoneandtheMerovingian(whogoesbythenameVictorintheflashbacks),Ifoundithardtodoanythingwiththeminthepresent.Theresimplywasn'tenoughroominthestoryand,also,I'mnotsurewhatIwouldhavethemdoinginaMatrixworldwithnoNeo.WhatwasmostinterestingtomewaswhotheywerebeforetheirlivesunfoldedintheTrilogyandhowtheycamebebewhotheywereattheendoftheTrilogy.ThereiswhereIputallmyeffort.You'veaskedsomeexcellentquestionsandIcanonlyhopeI'vegivenexcellentanswers.Thanksforyourenthusiasmandinquiringthoughts.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:7/5/20107:07:04AMHiSir...Thankyouforclarifyingmydoubts...IseeyouhavementionedsomethingaboutMatrixRememory...IsthisanotherscriptbeforetheResurrected....Pleaseexplain...Ifyes,thenwherecanIfindit...COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/6/20101:25:57PMShakir,Thisisastory(notintruescreenplayformat)thatwasmerelyatoolformetoexploretheideasthatleaduptoMatrixResurrectedstory.Itissortoflikeasketch,notafinishedwork.Besttoreaditinthatlight.Youcandownloaditatmatrixrememory.comPDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:WarrenDATE:8/19/20103:16:32AMInteresting...Ithasbagsofpotentialitjustseemsalittleunfinished.OverallalthoughgrippedfrombeginningtofinishIdidn'tfeellikesomeeventswererelevantortiedtogetherwellenoughandwasultimatelyleftfeelinglikethemovieendedhalfwaythrough.Generallythescriptisfullofinterestingrevealswhileitdoesexplaintheoriginsandfamilytreesofsomeofthemorecolourfulcharactersfromthematrixuniverse.ThestoryissofullofrevealsthatbythetimeIlearntheOracleisreallycalledSerenaandisinfactthemotherofMorpheusandCommanderLockeI'dalreadyhadmyfill.Basically

ratherthanrelyingoncharacterrevealsIthinkyouneedtogeneratesomefreshnewinterestingcharactersandgivethemafreshsenseofpurposewhatsthedilemmainthisfilmwhyamIcompelledtoreadonIfindmyselfsearching.Whatisthemeaningoflife,whyamIhere?(JOKE)Don'tgetmewronghavingrevealsisfineanddandyandcompellingbutitdoesn'treallyaddtothestoryof''theone''andIdon'treallythinklearningtheMatrixfamilytreemakesforagoodmovie.Neo'sandTrinitiesparticipationalthoughcentraltothescriptturnsouttobealargelymundanemeettheparentsaffairwithinteractionstypicallyreducedtomomentarylovescensandsoapoperaconversationlines.SmithsrebirthintheMatrixworkswellandrevengeonthemachinesisniceIcanseesomemajorcarnagehappeningoncinemascreensbutIthinkyoushouldrethinkabouthowtheseeventstieintothestoryoftheoneandcommunicatehowtheseeventsaregoingtoleadNeobackintotheheartofthestoryifatall.TheideaofNeobeingrebornagaininarealworldisinterestingbutthescriptdoesn'tmakeanythingofit.Weknowwhyhewaspulledintothe'real'worldbutwhatishispurposethereotherthantomakebabieswithTrinity?...Iwanttoknowwhenheplugsbackinandstartskickingassagain!?!?Idon'tcareaboutaFrenchMerovingianandaSigmundFraudwannabelookalikewhocallshimselfTheArchitectorisitDoctorStrong.Butthatsjustmyopinion.Ipersonallydon'tseeithappeningasamoviebutperhapsItmightbebetterasabook?Itwasacompellingread!!!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/20/201012:32:27AMWarren,IhavetosaythatIagreewithmostofyourcomments.IwasreluctanttohaveNeoresurrectedasthesamecharacterheplayedintheTrilogy(fightingSmithateveryturnandbattlingthemachinesadinfinitum).IthinkthatthatpartofhischaracterwaswellheeledintheTrilogyandmighthavegottenabittoopredictableifcarriedon.Thatiswhyheassumesalesserbutstillimportantroleinthisstory.Grantedthat'srisky.ThepeoplewhoareintotheMatrixwantjustthat,Neosmashandbash.Itookachance,though,andbypassedthatapproach.WhatIdidn'tdoenoughof,Iguess,wascreateacentralcharacterorgroupthatcouldbringusthatsuper-chargedenergythatmadeNeoandtheTrilogysoexciting.Ithinkthisispartofyourcriticism.WhatIprobablyshouldhavedonewasspendmoretimeandenergyontheandroid36sandtheirdilemmainfightingthehumans.IthinkthathaslotsofMatrix-stylepotential.Iagreethatasitstandsitmightbebetterjustasabook(orscreenplay).ButifHollywoodnibblesatall,I'msureitcouldbeampedup.

I'mgladitintriguedyou,eventhoughitmighthavefallenshortofyourmark.Thanksforyourthoughtfulandhonestcritique.Suchconstructiveinsightisinvaluable.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:Neo13DATE:8/25/20105:33:56AMExcellentattempt.Youhavethegift,butIthinkyou'rewaitingforsomething.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/31/20103:24:54AMNeo13,Iappreciatethatyoureaditanddroppedmeavoteofconfidence.Yes,waitingforsomething...aren'tweall.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:CatherineFellsDATE:8/31/20108:37:21AMits4:35amandireadthisinitsentiretyandihavetosaythisisincrediblework...uhaveanamazingtalentandihopeyougettherecognitionudeserve...wellthoughtoutandedgeofyourseatmaterial..goodluckCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/31/20109:54:44PMCatherine,Lovewhenitkeepspeoplereadingintotheweehoursofthenight.That'sasuresignI'vecapturedsomeone'simagination.Sohappytohearthatyoulikeditsomuch.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PacoFranciscoDATE:9/4/20105:31:37AMUnfortunately,mycommentisn'tgoingtobeadeepplotanalysisinthescriptsentirety,butratherasummaryofmyopinionsonvariouskeyplotdevices.Theworldabovethe"supermatrix":Aslongasyoupromisethatthere'snosupersupermatrix...fine,thisideaisverygood,especiallythewayyouportrayitasalmostlikeanantithesistoZion,butifyoutrytoaddonanotherlevelinanotherinstallment...itwouldbecomeveryoffputting.Istartedtogetqueasyattheendwhenneo'sreflectionsdidn'tmoveinthemirror...Victor=Merovingian-Ilovethisidea.Victor=ArchitectsSon...Trinity=Victor'sdaughter,etc.etc.Ifeelliketherearealotoftheserandomcoincidentalrelationstoallthemajorplotcharacters.Butitworksoutfine.TheOraclebeingMorpheus'motherisjustfunny.

IsaidIlikedtheideathatVictorwastheMerovingian...HOWEVER.ThescenewhereVictorenterstheMatrixanddropshissuitcasemakesabsolutelynosensetomewhatsoever...Idon'tunderstandwhatit'stryingtoportray.DoesthesuitcaseholdsomekindofimportantinformationabouttheworldoutsidetheMatrix?Also...intheMatrixreloaded...hedefinitelydidn'tseemtohavetheamountofpoweryou'reportrayinghimtohave.Smithisback:I'mkindof50-50onthisone...andI'mlessthan50-50onthefactthathecannowmanipulateallofthemachineswithinthesupermatrix...ButthenostalgiaofSmith'slinesmademesmile,hiscoldandcalculatingphilosophies.CharacteroftheArchitect-MakehimmorelikehewasintheMatrix:Reloaded...butnotassinister...ifyouknowwhatImean?It'snotsomuchhowyouusehimintheplotasitisthathiswordchoiceseemsslightlyoff.Butthat'snotabigdeal.Neo'sson-Ireallyhatethisidea...Ican'treallyexplainwhy...Maybeitwasjustthewayyouportrayedtheendingandhisintroduction...itwasverylacklusterandseemedchildishespeciallycomparedtotherestofthetext.TheCortex/Source...Howitmagicallycapturedandtrickedallrobotswasneverreallyexplained...Overall...Iwouldpaymoneytoseethisinthetheaters...andthenbuytheDVD.Asis.Soyousucceededinmyopinion.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/4/20102:34:07PMPaco,Ireadyourcommentsbutwon'tbeabletoreplyforafewdays.Theyareinsightfuland,tome,affirmingofmywork.Iwilladdressallofyourcommentsinmoredetailwhentimepermits.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/8/20102:19:18AMPaco,Sorryforthedelayedresponse.Ireadallyourcommentsandverymuchappreciatethetimeyouputintothem.Iunderstandyourqueasinessatsensinga"supersupermatrix".Yes,IdoimplythatthereareworldsbeyondtheoneIpaintedbutIdon'tsuggest(norwouldIpursue)asupersupermatrix(i.e.afabricatedworldthat'smaskingthetruthfromonegroupsotheothercandominateit).Thatwouldcertainlybecometiresome.WhatIdopostulate(andsuggestthatNeocanpotentiallytapinto)arerealitiesbeyondhisown.Isuggestthatreality(foreveryone)isjustaninfinitenumberofparallelplanesofexistenceand

it'stherefortheviewingorexperiencing,ifonlywecanaccessit.AndIsuggestthatNeomaybeabletotapintoit,butthatisallIsuggest.Idon'tsuggestthathewillorevenhasthedesiretogobeyondtheworldhehasfinalendedupin.AsIsayinmystory,Neocomestotermswiththeillusoryqualityofhisreality(andofallpotentialrealities)andrealizesthatenjoyingthehereandnowiswhat'smostimportant.ThankyouforlovingtheVictor=MerovingianideaasmuchasIdid.AlsotheVictor=Architect'sson.Trinity=Victor'sdaughter,etc.Thisconceptoffamilywassocentraltomystoryand,tome,oneofthemostintriguingandfunideas.I'msorrythescenewhereVictor(theMerovingian)dropshissuitcasewasconfusingtoyou(orpoorlywrittenbyme).ThesuitcasehadnothingtodowiththepowerthatVictoracquired.Hejusthappenedtobeholdingit(anddroppingit)whenhispowersbecameapparenttohim.Thegreencodeswirlingaboutthathewasabletoseejustcoincidentallyconvenedaroundhissuitcase.Sorryfortheconfusion.AsforhisnothavingthesamepowersintheearlierMatrixTrilogythatIseemtoimplyhehasnow,letmegiveyoumytake.IalwayssawtheMerovingianintheTrilogyashavingimmensepowerbutneverusingit.Hehadhenchmentodohisdirtywork.Todisplaythebruteaggressivenessofsuchpowerwouldbeconsideredgauche.Butasyouwillrecall,whenallhishenchmenhadbeendisabledandhewasleftalonewithNeo,hewasforcedtousehispowertoescapeNeoandsimultaneouslytransporthimthousandsofmilesaway(whenhehadNeofollowhimthroughthatdoor).ThatwasapowerthatnotevenNeocouldreplicate.So,thatismylineofreasoning.Hopeitmakessenseforyou.ThereturnofSmithsomehowseemednecessarytome.IfmyideaoftheMatrixasaworldwherethemachinesmustalwaysbedistractedistomakesense,thenthemorethemachineshavetofightagainst,thebetter.Iadmit,though,itcangetabitold.Butlikeyousaid,hisdeliciousevilnessishardtoputdown.TheArchitectbecomesaverycomplexcharacterinmystory.Heisnowshownasbothsavioranddestroyer,Godanddevil.Andwordchoiceseemstobeahitormisswithhim.Somepeoplelikeit,somepeopledon't.TheNeo'ssonthing,morenegativethanpositivereviews.Itmayhavetogo.Yep.AndIbelieveyouareonlythesecondpersontocommentonhowthe"Cortex/Source...Howitmagicallycapturedandtrickedallrobotswasneverreallyexplained..."IdidthinkthatconceptthroughandIdidhaveanexplanationandIwouldhaveincorporateditifIhadhadmorespace,butitwassimplytoocomplextoaddressinthisstory.ShouldthisscreenplayevergetpickedupandproducedinsomeformatbythepublishingworldorWarnerBrothers,Ihopetobringthatexplanationtolight.Butfornow,Ileaveitamystery.Afterall,Idon'twanttoleavenothingfortheimagination.Thanksforyourtimeandattention.Ifeltonlyaffirmationafterreadingyourcomments

PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DominguezBertieDATE:9/24/201010:38:21PMIhadadreamtomakemycompany,howeverIdidnothavegotenoughamountofmoneytodothis.Thankgoodnessmyclosefellowproposedtoutilizethemortgageloans.SoIusedthestudentloanandmaderealmyolddream.COMMENT:AUTHOR:MicroConsoleDATE:10/19/20106:35:17PMIcanseethatyouareanexpertinthisfield!Iamlaunchingawebsitesoon,andthisinformationisveryusefulforme.Thanksforallyourhelpandwishingyouallthesuccessinyourbusiness.COMMENT:AUTHOR:researchpaperhelpDATE:10/20/20101:35:40PMgreatonetheOracleimpliestheabilitytoseethefutureCOMMENT:AUTHOR:johnbDATE:12/1/20104:29:31PMYourpositivecommentsareallveryimpressive!Notonlydothese'fans'havesimilar(ifnotidenticallypraiseworthy)commentsandopinions,theyposttheirpraiseinthesameexactstyleandprose!Now,Iknowastand-upauthorlikeyourselfwouldNEVERgivehimselffakepressonafakewebsitepraisingafakescriptinanadmittedlyfakedupfranchisethathasalreadybeendeflowered,draggedthroughdirt,anddippedindogshit...wouldyou?IamaprofessionalwriterwhohasactuallysoldawordortwoandIjustwokeupwithanastyhangover,Iamwearingsoiledclothing,andIamoutofcigarettes,andthispostburningyouisbetterthananythingyouhaveeverwritten.Studythispostlongandhard,andyoujustmightsomedaybeabletosqueezeoutasemi-softslanderoussoliloquy.Iknowyouaredyingtojustquotemethereandsay'that'swhatshesaid'.Sodoit.Goodwritersspeaktheirmindsatalltimes=)COMMENT:AUTHOR:AmandaDATE:12/16/20105:06:07PMThisscriptwasbeautifullycraftedandverywellconstructed.Haveyoutriedsendingthisto"TheBrothers"togetthismadeintothenextMatrix?Itcertainellyfillsgapsandbroadenshorizons.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/16/201010:50:15PMAmanda,Thankyoufortheupliftingpraise.IhavetriedtogetittotheWachowskibrothers,butthatisnoeasytask.Ifyouhaveanyideasonhowtoaccomplishthatorknowsomeonewhoknowsthem,pleaseletmeknow.I'mallears.Thanksagain,PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:NT2HLBLYDATE:12/18/20105:50:16AMThiswasagreatread!Iwouldlovetoseethisonthebigscreen.Greatjob!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/18/20103:36:43PMNT2HLBLY,Thanks.Appreciatethethumbsup.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JordanMadereDATE:12/30/20106:06:15PMToWhomitMayConcern....IfeelcompelledtowritetowhomeverisresponsiblefortheMatrixResurrectedscreenplay.Firstofall,holyshit.Iamfloored.AsasupremeAll-Things-Matrixdevotee,Iamimpressedbeyondbeliefwiththismaterials,somuchsothatIammorethansurethattherealcreativebrilliancebehinditarethewritersoftheoriginalMatrixtrilogy.FormanyyearsI'vefeltthephilosophicalweightofthisstory,asI'msuremanyfanshave,andthatRevolutionswasnottherightfulconclusion.Thankyousomuchforputtingthepropereffortintolayingoutapremisethatgoesaboveandbeyondtrulyexpandingontheoriginalwork.Thelayersofsyntheticrealitythatyouhavecreated,whileeachexistingasbothsimulationandmicrocosmofthecosmosandthehumanmind,reallydoestheoriginaltrilogyjustice,downtothefinestdetails,includeelementsofcharacterandsettingthatcompletelysync.IcannotexpresshowimpressedandgratefulIamforyourefforts.Itmayevenseemludicroushowmuchthismeanstome,butIconnectwiththeMatrixmaterialonalevelthatIhavenotyetfoundinanother.Thanksagainforyourefforts,theyaretrulyappreciated.JordanMadereCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/30/20106:12:12PMJordan,Iamequallyflooredbyyourgenerouscommentsandadmiration.TheeffortandtimeputintomystoryseemallthemorerelevantandworthwhilewhenIreceivefeedbacksuchasyours.Whatagreatday.Thanks.

PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:yusufDATE:1/15/20115:52:49PMistartedreadingthisscreenplaytodayandthebeginingwasgood,butireached"MorpheusaddressestheCouncilELDERS"andithinkhesoundskindacoldinthis,itwouldbebetterithinkifsomeoneelsereportsthenewsinthemeeting,anditwouldbelikeprivate:Themachineshavesentamessage,morpheuslooksexitedbutwithcoution,private:AnditsaddensmetoreportthatTrinityandNeoarebothdead,thenmorpheusseemesshokedforamomentleensalittlebitforewordbutthengetsagriponhisselfandsqueezeshiseyes,looksdown,andhesitsstraightagain,-orsomethinglikethat-,andyougivemorpheusthelinethatsays"17hours..."thenthesoldieranswershim"Theysaytheirbodies..."afterthatDILLARDseeshimandhowhegoteffectedthenheaskshimifhewantstobetheonetobringhim,thenhesays:"Itwouldbemyhonor."imsorryifyoumightthinkthatyourwayisbetterbutithinkthattherearesomepeoplelike"neo,morpheus..."whopeoplewillbeeagertoseethemafteralltheseyearsandifaproducerisreadingthisandhasaearlybadcoldimpressionfromoneofthemainpartsthenhewillbarelyhavetheinterestinreadingtherest,imeanthepersonwatchingthemovieforexamplewillmostlikelywanttoknowwhatsgoingtohappenatthesurfaceifmorpheusseemsaffected,andtheywilllookforwardonseeingthethemanwhobelievedreunitewiththeone,thereforeyousetthegroundsforanemotionalmoment,andthatsitfornowimightbecorrectorincorrectbecausethispartiswereireachedsofar,imeanyouprobablywanthimtosoundcoldforsomereasonidon'tknowright?COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/16/20114:15:27PMyusuf,Iappreciatethetimeyou'vetakentocommentonthescreenplayandIwillconsideryourconcerns.However,Iwillalwaysbemoreopentocommentsifthestoryisreadfromstarttofinish.Ihopeyoureadthewholethingandcomebackwithfreshinsights.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:AlanDATE:1/24/20114:31:51PMLookslikea4thmovieishappening.Andthe5thoneaswell.Notsureifit'ssomethingrelatetoyourscript?http://movies.ign.com/articles/114/1145599p1.htmlCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/24/20119:18:40PMAlan,Thanksfortheheadsup.Ikindofknewsomethingwasupthough;there'saspikeinvisitortrafficwheneveranynewsabouttheMatrixhitstheairwaves.Yes,therumoristhattheWachowskishaverampedupforMatrix4and5.Igottasay,

I'mprettyintriguedwithwhateverthey'vecomeupwith.Can'twaittosee'em.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:hollyDATE:1/28/20115:42:44PMiabsolutelylovethematrixandithinkyouguysareexcellentwritersandiwasjustwonderingifyouguysweregoingtomakethisoutbeamovie??butyouguysshouldkeepwritingnomatterwhatanyonesayscauseisawsomeofthenastycommentsonadifferentwebsitereferringtoyalbutthereisalwaysgoingtobeenemysinthisworldandijustwantedtosaykeepwritingcauseimsureitmeansalottoyouguysanddontletanyoneputuguysdown.andthefourthmatrixsoundsreallygoodandikeptthinkingdamnthewritersofthisarereallysmartandimaginativelol..pleaseemailmeifyoucancauseireallywanttoknowifthisisgoingtobeamovieCOMMENT:AUTHOR:WeirdDATE:1/29/20111:28:55AMHi,SadlyfoundouttheMatrix4&5rumourswereahoax.Butthat'showIfoundyourscript!Readitallinonesitting,readalargenumberofthefeedbackcommentshere.Iabsolutelylovedyourscript,andwouldlovetoseeitasafilm/comic/bookwhatever!Whetherornotthishappens,I'mtakingthistobethe4thpartoftheMatrix,Ifeltthetrilogyhadalotthatcould'vebeendevelopedoraddedonto,andIloveyourideasandwhatyou'vedone.PleasekeepmepostedonyourprogresstryingtogetintocontactwiththeBrothers.I'mmorethanhappytohelpinanyway-mostlikelyonlinegroupstobehonest,butanythingtobeofuse,letmeknow!Reallylovedit.I'dwritemorebutit'slatehere,sodon'tbetoosurprisedifIaddrandomcommentsatalaterdate!Andit'sgoodtoseefrom2007you'vebeensteadilyreplyingtoallthepostshere!Goodjob!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/29/20113:07:56PMWeird,Yep.Ahoax.Toobad.Butthere'sboundtobeafourthatsomepoint.Probablyacomputer-generated,super-realistic,3DversionsoKeanuwon'thavetokillhimself.Gladyoulikeditsomuchandconsideritworthytobeatruefourthepisode.Anyfuturecommentswouldcertainlybewelcome.Alwayslovethebanter.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:DjshotokanDATE:3/3/20111:01:26PM

Absolutelybrilliant.Withallreads,peoplecanalwaysaddorsubtract.ThisoneIhopedoesreachtherighteyes.andwithKeanuandtheWachowskibrotherstalkingagain..idosincerelyhopeyoupushthisalittleharder.IFyouneedanyassistance,youhaveALOOTTofpeoplewillingtohelp!COMMENT:AUTHOR:lifesettlementDATE:3/3/20119:20:49PMtryingtoreadyourpicture.YourlayoutisnotviewingrightwithIE5webbrowseronipad.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/3/20119:29:08PMDjshotokan,Thanksforthepositivewords.IheardtherumorthatKeanuandtheWachowskiswereworkingonaMatrix4,butIbelieveitturnedouttobeahoax.Doyouhaveothernews?Byallmeanssendthescripttowhomeveryouthinkmightbeabletoputitintotherighthands.I'vetriedandhadnoluck.Perhapsyouhaveconnections?Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:SarinaDATE:3/5/20113:02:01AMIjustreadthisforthefirsttimenow,andIthinkit'sBRILLIANT.IabsolutelylovetheMatrixtrilogy,andthisscreenplayisatleastasgood/ifnotbetterthanthefirstthreemovies.I'masuckerforintricatestories/mindscrews,anditdoesn'tgetmorecomplexthanafreakingSupermatrix.Theonlyquibblethatanyonecouldpossiblyhavewithit(andwhatcouldpreventitfromeverbeingmadeintoamovie)isthatwhileit'safantasticexplanation/extensionoftheoriginalstoryoftheMatrix,there'snotaspecific,identifiable"struggle"inthisinstallment.Everythingistoldintheformofflashbacks,etc.ThestakesgetraisedneartheendwithSmith'sreappearance,butitendsonacliffhangernotejustwhenthingsaregettinggood!(AndIreallywanttoknowwhattheheckisupwiththefreakyreflectionsinthemirrors).TheMatrixmoviesweresosuccessfulbecausetheywerestoriesofepicstruggleagainstimpossibleodds(everyonelovesanunderdog),withtherequisiteheavydosesofkick-assactionthrownin.Therewasalsoamuchmorereadilyidentifiableantagonistinthefirstthree(themachines).Thisscreenplayobfuscatesthatdistinctionbetweengoodandevil,whichIlike,butyouraveragemovietheater-goerdoesn't.AndIcansee"Hollywoodpeople"notwantingtoinvestinthisscreenplaybecauseunlikethefirstthreethere'smoreplotexplicationthanthereisactualaction.Butohmygod,forallmycriticism,IwasjustabsolutelyBLOWNAWAYbythescreenplay,andithaschangedthewayIseetheMatrixtrilogy.I'mgoingtomakeeveryoneIknowreadit,whethertheywan'ttoornot!Kudostotheauthoronaterrificpieceofscreenplay:DOh,andIhavetothrowthisin:scratchwhatIsaidearlier,theonlyproblemwiththisstoryisthatitDOESN'TINCLUDETHETWINS.IlovedtheminReloaded!!Theyarethe

bestvillainseverwhowerekilledofftoosoon:(COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:3/5/20115:28:50PMSarina,Todayhashadalotoflowpoints,sowhenIcheckedthecommentssection,Iwasreallyhopingforanice,upliftingreview.Yourscouldn'thavebeenmuchnicer.Thankssomuch.Iespeciallylovetheterm"brilliant";itreallywarmsthesoulofanywriter.Idohavetorefuteyourcomment,though,thatthereisn'tasingle,identifiable"struggle"inthisinstallment.WhereIseethemostprofoundandongoingstruggleiswiththehumansandtheandroid36s.Whileit'struethatmuchofmystorytalksabouttheirstruggleinflashbacks,it'simpliedthatthatstruggleisstillgoingoninthepresentandwillcontinueindefinitely.TheheartofthisconflictandwhatmakesitsoironicisthatitistheoppositeofwhatishappeningintheMatrixworld.Nowallofthesudden,wesympathizewiththe36swhoaretryingtoregainthefreedomoftheirkindandwhoaretryingtobeeradicatedbythehumans.ThishastremendouspossibilitiesandsetsupthepotentialthatNeomayhavetostepinatsomepointandusehis(implied)powersinthisnewworldhehasjustentered.Theother,lesserstrugglesare:...theoriginalmachinesagainstthehumanswhich,althoughthereseemstobeatemporarytruce,couldrecommenceatanytime.Thetensionisintheimpliedfuturere-engagementofhostilities....theresurrectionofSmithandhisnewarmy,thatsetsupthepotentialstrugglebetweenSmithandthemachines(whoheseemsbentondestroying)andbetweenSmithandperhapstheyoungNeo,whoappearsattheendofmystory.Andthentherearenumerouslittlepotentialstrugglesbetweenindividualcharactersthatcouldflairupatanytime;MorpheusandLock,LockandNiobe,theArchitectandtheOracle,PersephoneandtheMerovingian.Grantedthesearejustimplied,butthey'rethereandtheygivethestorytensionandelbowroomtoexpandlater(ifindeedthereisaMatrix5ormore).{{{NotthatI'mwritingaMatrix5.Letmebeclear.Icurrentlyhavenointentionofdoingthat...unlessofcoursetheMatrix4ideaisbroughttothescreenandissuccessful.THEN,IwouldcertainlydoaMatrix5.}}}ButIagreewithyourunderlyingpremisethatthisstorylacksaclear,singleantagonistandthatHollywoodandmostmoviegoerswouldbedisappointedwiththestoryasitisnow.Butboydoesitsetupsomegreatthreadstoexpandupon.And,ifHollywoodknocked,I'msureIcouldpickoneortwogoodthreadsfromthisscreenplayanddevelopthemintothekindofstorythatmoviegoerswouldlove.And,yes,itwouldneedmoreaction.Lotsmore.

Andthetwins.Deliciouslysinisterandatthesametimeunderstated.Iagree.I'mflatteredthatyouaregoingtotellallyourfriendsaboutit.Ihopetheyenjoyitjustasmuch.Sothankfulforyourin-depthandinsightfulcomments.Andyourcelebratorypraise.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:A.JaradDATE:4/8/20116:28:05AMWOOWIhavetobeHonestamInshock,YoualmostrepliedToeverycommentfrom2007to2011WOW,Bravo,veryHonorable:)!I'vstoppedatpage50andwillcontinuetomorrow,Ihavetogo2sleep,butIhavetosaythatyoubroughttomesomuchmemory,itwaslikewatchingTheMatrixalloveragain,Lovethefactthatithaveflashback,weneededthat,andtheopeningscenewas"ClassicMatrix".NeverthoughtoftheideaofwatchingaNewMatrixbutYouopenedmymindforitandIhopeIwill.anywayIhavealittlepointIwouldlovetoadd,I'vereadacommentatthe1stpageaboutsomeonesayingthatthename"theSuperMatrix"isnotMarketable,youreplied,heneverdid.IthinkthattheguyhaveapointImean"Supermatrix"foratittlenameisacheesyname(withallrespect),morelikea80's/90'stittle,youcanfindmanymanymoreattractivenamethatCouldHelpyouSpreadTheScreenplayfaster,aftarallmyfriendmarketingisEVERYTHING!IhaveaQuestion,nowamnotverywellknownwithhowmovieswork,butifaDirectorsawthiscanhemakeittothebigscreen?ifyesdidyoutrytosendtotheTheWachowskis?Nextyearamgannastudy"ProductionandDirection"andifnoonewilladoptthis,IpromiseyouthatthiswillbeMy1stAdoption,ifIcandosuchathing:)THEMATRIX.......AFourthEpisodeWRITTEN/SCREENPLAYBY:P.D.WoodDIRECTEDBY:A.JARAD:)goodluckwithyourlifemyfriend,HopeyoureplytomeASAPCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/8/20118:01:21PMajarad,Gladyoulikethescript.Manyofyourquestionswillbeansweredifyoureadmoreof

thecomments.And,yes,ifyoubecomeadirectorandwanttomakemyscriptintoamovie,justletmeknow.Goodluck!PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JamesTaylorDATE:4/27/20118:20:58AMIsthisajoke?Ibarelygotpastthefirstpage,it'ssomeofthemoststilteddialogueI'veeverread.Unfilmablerubbish.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:4/27/201111:42:16PMJamesTaylor,ThankyouforseeingthatIcapturedthespiritoftheoriginalssowell:stilteddialoguewasdefinitelyoneofthehallmarksoftheTrilogy...andoneofthequalitiesthatmadeitsodistinctive(andcampyattimes)..."youknowwho".Thankyou,MonkofKnowledge..."Who?...Youknowwho".COMMENT:AUTHOR:DominickWrightDATE:5/20/201112:46:45AMVerygood.IlovetheMatrixandalwaysfollowedit.IactuallyjustsatdownwithapenandpaperandwasabletointerperatetheMatrixinaspiritualsensewhichactuallymakesitrealandIhavesomanyideals.Feelfreetogetincontactwithme,Ialsocanbeaverygoodassettothefilm.-DominickWrightCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:5/21/20113:17:13PMDominick,I'mgladyoulikedthescriptanditgaveyoua"spiritualconnection"withmanyideasbeinggenerated.Hopefully,theywillleadtomoregreatideas.Isenseinyourlastsentencethatyouthinkthisisgoingtobe(oralreadyis)afilm.Thatisnotthecase.AtthemomentitisjustatreatforMatrixfanswhowantedthestorytogoonemorelevel.However,ifyouhaveconnectionsorcanmovethisscripttoHollywood,Iwouldbeveryhappy.Ifyoucandothat,pleaseletmeknow.Otherwise,thanksforstoppingbyandreading(andcommenting).Italwaysmakesmyday.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:mrwaltersDATE:6/13/201112:15:49PMIhavesomedoubtsaboutthisscript/screenplay!Ilikealotofwhatyouhavedonebutimosmithshouldstaygone,neoshouldhaveflashbacksofsmith.andithinkneoshouldbelinkedtothemachinesgivingtheminformationonactivitiesatZionandship

movements.anunknowingspyifyoulike.Imustadmitihaventreadallyourscreenplaysoyoumayhavethisinthere.ihavesomeotherideasforitaswellandwaseventemptedtowritesomethingofmyown!butyouhavedoneanicejobfromwhatihaveseen,dropmeanemailifyouwantsomemoreofmyideas?!?RegardsSean.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/13/20113:42:43PMSean,Thankyouforyourresponse.Yes,it'shardtopleaseeveryone;IwishIcould.I'mgladtherearesomepartsthatyoulikeandIencourageyoutofinishthescript.It'sprettymeatyallthewaythrough(andnodoubtsomepartswillpleaseandsomewilldisappoint).Nonetheless,Ithinkyouwillappreciatethelevelofdetailanddepth,eveniftheplotdirectionisnottoyourtaste.Alwaysliketohearotherpeople'sideas,butasformakingchangestomyscriptatthispoint,Iprobablywon'tunlesstheideawas"superboss"orthepaywas"megamega".Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:6/20/201110:19:32AMWhowouldhavethoughtI'dchangeuponanintriguingpieceofwritingwhilewhittlingawaythehoursatwork?OneofthefirstthingsInoticedaboutyourscriptwasthatitlackedtheoverthetopactionscenesthatbecamethehallmarkofthetwosequels,yetasIcontinuedreadingIrealizedthatyourtakeontheMatrixmythoswasoneofphilosophicaldiscoursetingedwithreligiousovertones,butnotnearlyenoughtobeanythingmorethansubtle,thankfully.Ididhaveproblemswithsomeofthedialogue,inparticulartheveryjarringpresentationoftheArchitectcharacterHowever,afterreadingmore,IconcludedthathisdropinverbosityislargelyduetohimnotbeingaconstructintheMatrix,butarealandbelievableperson(NoonewouldspeakastheArchitectdidanyway,notunlesshewantstolivepast20haha).Theflashbackswerealittledisorientingbutmanageableafterawhile.Themachinecharactersinyourscripthowever,failedtoelicitanyemotion.Infact,otherthanrelievewhentheyweredestroyed,Ididn'tcareforthatplot.Perhapsyouwereintendingforthat,I'mnotsure.AllIknowisforastorythatwasalreadyconvoluted,themachineswereaweak,albeitnecessaryadditiontoillustratetheschoolsofthoughtsthatwerespunontheirheadsinthescript.ThereisnowayI'llknowifyou'llreadthis,somanyyearssincethelastcomment...butifyoudo,Isupposeyou'dbehappytoknowinthewakeofWBannouncingtwomore

Matrixsequels,thatIwilldevouranyscrapofinformationtheythrowatuswithyourexceptionallywellwrittenandwellthoughtofstorylayingthebrickworkofwhatIwillacceptintheiriteration.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/20/20119:54:39PMChris,Verythoughtfulandhelpfulcomments.Yes,morecerebralthantheoriginalTrilogy;Iwouldlovemoreactionthough,justnotsomuchthatthephilosophicalelementisblunted.Maybesomeday.GladyouwereabletoassimilatetheArchitect'sdemeanorandtheflashbacksasthestoryprogressed.Theydotakeabitofworkingthrough.Iwassurprisedthatthemachinecharactersleftyoucold;thatwasnotmyintention.AlthoughIfeltitwasnecessarytomakethemabitwoodenandcalculating(theyaremachinesafterall),Idid,nonetheless,wanttheaudiencetofeelsympathyandhopeforthem.Ifyouwouldn'tmind,pleasetellmewhatfellshortforyouorwhatyouthinkwouldengendermoresympathyforthem.Thiswouldbeveryimportantforthestory.Thankyouagainforyourappreciationformywork.Hopefullysomedaythescriptwillbemorethanjustwordsonapage.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:6/21/20111:47:28AMActionsequencesarealwaysapickletowrite,whichmakessensesinceitsbettertowatchsomeonepunchsomeoneelseratherthanreadaboutit.AndtheMatrixthrivesonphilosophicaldiscourse,notaction.Ablendofthetwowouldbegreat,butasshownbythesecondmovie,itseasytogetoverwhelmed.Isupposethereasonwhythemachinesdidn'tappealtomecouldhavebeenhowtheywereintroduced.NowinitiallytherewereabitofamysterysurroundingthemandIwaswonderingifthescenestheywereintookplaceinthepastornot.Eventuallyitallbegantomakesenseandthebigrevealthattheyweremachineswaswelldone.Itwasshockingandslightlyterrifying.Still,mostofthereasonsbehindtheirpurposelaywithinthehumandialogueandthemachinesmerely,tomeanyway,tooktheplaceoftherebelsofZion.Perhapsifmoretimewerespentdevelopingthemandtheirstoryweretoldbytheirpeopleratherthanitjuxtaposingandleaningheavilyonthehuman/supermatrixside,itmighthaveappealedtomemore.Ilovebrokenandanti-heroiccharacterssoIhadreallywantedtolikethemachinesbutotherthantheinitialshockofthemturningouttobesuch,IwassatisfiedwhentheyblewupBECAUSEtheyweretryingtosabotagethehumans.Itshardtosympathizewithaspeciesthat'sseentryingtofightforfreedomfromaspeciesyoubelongto.Evenmore

so,thehumanswereseenasdoingtherightthing.YourcharactersoftheArchitect,TheOracleandallofthemcameofasgenerallyverynice,caringpeoplewhoonlywantthegoodformankind.Itshardtofaultpeoplelikethat,especiallysincetheyputthemselvesatdangerfortheonestheylove.Ifthiswasatreatmentsplitupintotwoorthreeparts,itmayhavebeenpossibletogivetheMachinesmorefacetime,butasthiswasmeanttobeastand-alone,Icanunderstandwrappinguptheplots.Ialsounderstandthatmyviewmaybeuniqueasothersmayfinditfine.Asafellowwriter,Iknowitsimpossibletopleaseeveryone.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/23/20111:49:02AMChris,Yes,theperfectblendofactionandconcept.Hardtoachieve.ThefirstMatrixwasagreatexampleofsuccess.WishIwrotethat!IthinkyouareprobablyrightthatIdidnotgivethemachinecharactersenoughdepthordevelopment.IwillkeepthatinmindifIdoarewrite.Actually,Ialwayscouldseemorethatcouldbedonewiththem,butwiththegroundIwastryingtocover,itjustdidn'tfitin.Damnedshoehorn!And,yes,beingahumanmakesithardtorootforthemachines,especiallysincethehumansarenotreallybehavingwithevilintent.Toughtoavoidthatdilemma.But,again,withtherightrewrite,itcouldbeimproved.Iappreciatewhenotherwritersgivemecritiques;Iknowthey'recomingfromthesameplaceandknowwhatitmeanstohavetheirworkdissected.There'shonestywithdelicacy.Necessaryforboththesuccessesandshortcomings.Ifigureif75%likeit,that'sascloseto%100percentageasI(ormostwriters)arelikelytocome.Thatusuallyleaves%10whoareindifferentand15%whodislikeit.Respectful,that.Thanksagainforyourcomments.Goodluckwiththewriting!PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:6/23/20113:05:52AMLikewise,goodluck.You'veshownamazingresiliencetosomeofthemoreunfoundednastycommentsonhereandI'msuitablyimpressed!IdoubtI'llbeabletofindthegoodineverythingasyouhavehaha!Ilookforwardtoreadingarewriteorasequelwhenyoueverdoone!COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/26/20112:11:00AM

Chris,AlthoughIlovetheideasIcameupwithforthisMatrixcontinuation,Iwasalwaysuneasyaboutbuildingonsomeoneelse'swork.(Truthis,Ineverthoughtmyideaswouldgothisfar,thestoryhavingbeenaresponsetoadarebyafriendwhowastiredofhearingmetalkaboutwhatwouldhappeniftherewereanotherMatrix).Kindofjustsnowballedfromafewideasintoawholescript.Ithinkafairnumberofcommentsthataren'tsofavorablearefrompeoplewhodidn'tlikemefiddlingwithwhatmanythoughtwasacompleteandawesomestory.SoItakemylicksbecausesomeofthemmaywellbedeserved.(Besides,allwritershavetohaveathickskin;criticscanbeverytough.)Nonetheless,IlovethestoryandamveryappreciativeofallthoseMatrixfanswholoveit,too(andletmeknowthroughttheircomments).Goodluck...andhopefullyseeyouinthemovies.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ShakirDATE:6/26/20118:59:14PMHiChris,Idon'tknowifyourememberme,butIreadyourstoryayearbackandwehadsomeconversationsregardingit....Justwantedtocatchupwithyou:(1)Iftherehasbeenanyprogressaboutmakingthisamovie,itsreallyworthit(2)Ireallyappreciatethewayyouhandlecriticismsandreplytoeveryonealike...Hatsofftoyou...--ShakirCOMMENT:AUTHOR:ChrisDATE:6/27/20114:43:31PMYes,Itotallyagree.Somepeopledogetpassionateaboutthingsanditsgood.IknowI'llgetreallypassionateaboutthingslikeTheTerminatorandSalvationreallymademewanttokillmyselfhah!Metaphoricallyofcourse.Andallwritersdohavetohavethickskin.Thatistrue.Imcurrentlyattemptingtomanagemyegoaswell.Butitsallgood.Ifyoueverdoworkonextendingitandwantsomehelp,I'llgladlylendsomeassistance,eventhoughitmaynotbeasprofoundassomeoftheotherexpertshere.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/27/20114:45:48PMHiShakir,

Ithinkyouareconfusingmewiththepreviouscommenter.Yes,Irememberyouwell.AsIrecall,wehadnumerousdiscussions.Noprogressonmakingthemovie.Ifitweretohappen,atthispointitwouldprobablyhavetobecompletelydigital;theactorsarenotasspryastheyusedtobe.Butthatmightactuallybeverycool.Thetechnologyiscloseenough,Ithink,topullitoffandhavepeoplestillgetintothecharacters.Naturally,thevoicesshouldbebytheoriginalactors.Asforcriticism,toacknowledgeonlythenicecommentsistodistanceyourselffromthetruth.Itakethecriticismtoheartandtrytofindthevalueinthem.Thereisalwayssomekernelworthconsidering.Thankyouforyourfollowupcommentandtojustsayhello.Andifanythingsubstantialhappens,believeme,Iwillpostit!takecare,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:6/27/20114:49:58PMChris,Passion.It'slife.Gottahaveit!Goodideascancomefromanyone.Idiscountnoone.Ifthisscriptmovestoanotherstage,Iwillbesuretosolicitassistancefromthosewhohavebeensokindastorespondwiththoughtfulcomments.Goodluckonyourendeavors.COMMENT:AUTHOR:KyleDATE:7/19/20114:31:18AMIwilladmitthatIdidnotreadallofthescreenplay,somaybeImissedsomething.ImainlyreadthescenesinwhichNeoappeared,becauseitseemedlikethosescenesgavethemostinformationaboutyourunderlyingplot.ForgivemeifIamwrong,buttome,thisscreenplayreallyseemedalotlikeacopyoftheoriginalstoryofthefirstthreemovies,withaslightrolereversalthrownintothemix.Ialsofeltlikethedirectionyouchosetotakewiththeendingmadetheentirecreationofa4thpartsomewhatpointless.Yousetupalotofscenariosthatcouldhavebeeninteresting,butthenleftthemdanglingtherelikeachristmasstockingwithnopresentsinside.SomeofthethingsthatIthoughtneededclosure:SmithsreturntotheMatrixTrinity'sparentsbeingstuckintheSuperMatrix

MorpheusthinkingthatTrinityandNeoweredeadAgain,forgivemeifIbroughtsomethingupthatyoudidaddress.FromwhatIread,IthinkIhaveitrightthough.Justmyopinion.Itwasverywellwrittenthough.Ididenjoyyourvividdescriptionsofthingsthroughout.Youdoagreatjobofpaintingamentalpictureofhowtheimageryshouldlook.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:7/19/201112:10:05PMKyle,Yourobservationsaremostlycorrect.Yes,thisstoryisdefinitelysimilartothefirst.Theideawastocomefullcircle,withanewrevelationinanewworld.WhatIthoughtmadethisparticularlycompelling,though,werethecharacterreversalsandsurprises-theArchitectasgood,fatherfigure,PersephoneandtheMerovingianasbeneficentcreatorsoftheworldthatultimatelyconsumesanddistortsthem,TrinityastheirdaughterandsaviorofNeo.Also,thedevelopmentofthe36charactersandtheirfightforsurvival.Plotwasimportant,butcharactermoreso,Ithink.And,yes,Ididsetupalotandnotcompletelytieupthestorylines;somefeltthiswasacceptable,othersfounditdownrightappalling.Ifallrightinbetween.Itdoessetupalotoffuturestorytellingpossibilities,though.IapologizetoanyonewhofeelsthatIletthemdownorwishesformore;but25%disappointmentlevelisalmostinescapableforanystoryorcreation.Natureofthebeast.Iamhappytohearthatyouthoughtitwaswell-writtenandthatIcreatedvividdescriptions;thisisenoughformetofeellikeIsucceeded(atoneonelevelatleast).Thankyouagainfortakingthetimetorespondandtogivebothapositiveandconstructivereview.Ionlyhopeyougobackandreadanypartsthatyoumayhaveskipped,asnothinginthescreenplayissuperfluous,anditmayfillinsomegapsthatleftthestoryfeelingincomplete.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JeremiChaneyDATE:8/24/20114:36:32PMIwasgrippedbythismasterfulreworkingofthematrixcontinuity.Idobelievethatitshouldbeanofficialpiece,asitmaintainsconsistencyinplot,charactersandsettingwhileopeningthedoortoacompletelydifferentandmoreinterestinguniverse.You'rerightaboutitbeingabletogoonperpetually.Theonlywaytocompletelyendthestoryisbyhavingacoupleofdoctorsstareinatascruffylookingneoinastraightjacket,mumblingonaboutagentsinterferringintheprogramming.Ibelievethatyoushouldputforthseriouseffortineitherbuyingthemovierightsorsellingthescreenplaytobemadeintoamoviebythebrothers.Pleaseavoidgettingsued.Somepeoplecanbecrueltootherswhoareonlytryingtohelpperfecttheircreations.Onamoreseriousnote

aboutgainingclosure,youcouldwritesomethingabouttheandroidsontheotherendofthespectrumwheretheyshowloveandcompassion.Then,smithcouldsomehowbecomeawareofthesupermatrix,havingusedhisarmytoalmostobliteratethevirtualsandlevel4'sandfacingoffwithneoonefinaltimeandhavingNeojrdealthefinalblow.Thecortexbecomesawareandturnsouttobebenevolentisthekeytoendingallenslavementandwar.Theythenbringallthevirtualsandlevel4'sthatsurvivetotherealworldandwiththecortex'shelpachievesortofahigherlevelofconciousnessandallhavepowersthatwerethoughttoonlyexistinthedoublematrix.Everyoneisablefromthenontoliveouttheirlivesinpeace.OryoucouldgowiththeotherideaandhaveNeoflingexcrementatthewindowandmakeoneofthedoctorsbustoutlaughing.I'mjustsaying.Toendthisdrawnoutpost,Ijustwantyoutoknowthatthisentirethingwasinspiringtome.:pCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/26/201110:39:48PMJeremi,I'mgladithadsuchaprofoundeffectonyou.Thatisalwaysmyhope.I'vetriedquiteabittogetitintotherighthandsbutthat'shardersaidthandone,asyoucanprobablyimagine.Neverknowwhenitmightfindtherightperson,though.Justkeepyourfingerscrossed.Adigitalversionwiththeoriginalactorsforthevoicesmightbeagoodpossibility(sincebythispointtheoriginalactorswillprobablylookabitoldandhaggard).BTW,Ilikedyourideasforwaystoextenditevenfurther.Lotstothinkabout.Thanksforthefeedbackandinsights.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:RonDATE:8/30/201111:02:10PMDearSir,Pleasekeepinmindwilereadingthisresponse,I'mDutchandthereforemyEnglishvocabularyisratherlimited.Afterstumblinguponthiswebsite'byaccident',I'vereadyourscreenplayinonego.Sincethewordbrilliantwasalreadyusedinanothercomment,Iwillstickwithprofoundindescribingmyfirstresponse,whichcametomeafterthefirstfewpagesandneverleft.WhenfirstIsawTheMatrix(part1)Ithought"Niceactionmoviewithsomedepthtoit".Afterasecondviewingthough,Irealizedthemeaningofthephilosofical/spiritualbackdroptothestory.WhenthetrilogywascompleteIwassatisfiedwiththewholetripfromstarttoend.

ThoughperhapsIshouldnotethat,inmyexperiencethefirstmovietoldthecompletestoryandthetwosequelsmerelyaddeddetails.Whatyouhaveallowedmetoexperiencethroughyourwritinghashoweveractualycompletedtothestory.Inshort,Ilikedeverythingaboutitfromstarttofinish.Andregardlessofsomeinsinificanthickups,Iwouldnotwanttochangeanything.RonP.S.It'ssortofamazingtomehowyoukeeprepondingtocommentsafterallthoseyearsinthefleetingworldwecallinternet:)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:8/30/201111:56:18PMRon,YourEnglishisactuallyratherwelldevelopedandfluent.Ilike"profound"justasmuchas"brilliant";I'lltakeithumblybutwithrelish.Manythanks.IdoagreethatthefirstMatrixwasacompletestoryandthatthetwofollowingepisodesweremoreaboutdetails.Butsomeofthosedetailsweredeliciousand,inmyopinion,indispensabletoarichertale.IlovedthecharactersofPersephone,theMerovingianandtheArchitect,theyaddedsomuchinterest,somuchsothatIfeltliketheyneededtobefleshedoutmoreandgivendeeperroles.Hencemystory.Iamparticularlypleasedwhensomeonelikesthestoryfromstarttofinish(despitetheinsignificanthiccups).Reallyprimesmywriter'sfingersfornewstories.Thankyou.IrespondtocommentsevennowbecauseIthinkitisthedutyofallwriterstoreadandrespondtoanyonewhoreadsandrespondstothewriter'swork.Youtookthetimeouttosaysomethinganditshouldberespondedto.Besides,evenwhenthecommentsareharsh,IampleasedwithmyabilitytostaycalmandfocusedandIalmostalwaysgainsomenewinsightintothestory.Also,ittookahugeamountofstorydevelopment,plotplanningandsensitivitytocharacterconsistencytocreatemystoryandI'mveryproudofit,evenwithitsflaws.Igenuinelyliketalkingaboutit.ThankyouagainRonforyourthoughtfulandbolsteringwords.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MarvinDATE:9/30/20118:26:59PM

You'reanexcellentwriter,myfriend.IpraythisversionoftheMatrixisused,becauseitkeepsthestory,sciencefiction,andmysticismalive.Yourversionisapioneeringstory,inthesameveinasTheMatrix;becausethescriptisspecialeffect,insteadofthecgi.Oneofmyfavoritereadsofalltime.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:9/30/20118:32:48PMMarvin,That'ssomehighpraise...andI'lltakeitwiththegreatestofpleasure.I,too,hopeitmakesittothescreensomeday.Seeyouinthefrontrow!PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:teendonettDATE:10/19/201110:49:58PMtimeformatrixtheDarkknightistoprivateofasect.Letghostgetamajorpart.LeteveryonediedandcomebacklikeNeo.Neo,morpheousandtrinityonthronesandthereisameetingofallthesuperpowersoftheuniverse.Theyhavetogotootheruniversestofighttosetthemfree.Superhumanintelligenceistakingoverotherplanets.Orgobackintohistoryandstoptheholocaustorafricanslavetradebeforemorpheusiscapturedinhispast.Howhewastakenfromslaveryandhiddenfromthematrix.TheyfindoutthatSmithwasinchargeofsomeofthehorriblecrimesofhumanityandtrytogobackandchangehistorybeforeitstartsagain.Thematrixstartedtheholocaustandslavetrade.Theyreversethegreatcrimesofhumanitybeforetheyresurface.prequel,neogoesbacktosavetrinity,morpheustostartthematrix.COMMENT:AUTHOR:DamienJayDATE:11/13/20116:59:00AMForallthosefansouttherehopingforafourthmovecouldbeinluck.WehaveactuallybeenworkingonaM4script.Thenextmoviewillbeanamazing,spiritualjourneythroughmetaphysicsandrealitywithlotsofneverseenbeforevisuals.ImustsaythatIdidenjoyyourscriptverymuch.Youcouldgointomoredescriptivedetailwithyourvisuals.http://truthaboutmatrix.com/COMMENT:AUTHOR:EarlDATE:11/15/20115:40:32AMThisisabsolutelyamazing.I'veneverreadascreenplaybeforebutthisiscrispinmyopinion.I'mashookedasIwouldbewithaStephenKingnovel.Thisislikea"reverse-Inception"typeconceptandI'mlovingit.Kudostoyouandmoresuccess!IlookforwardtothisbeingconsideredanofficialMatrixplot.

COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/16/201111:25:35PMDamien,ThankyouforreadingmyscriptandIamverycurioustoseewhatyourscriptislike.ProbablyI'llhavetowaitforthemoviesinceyouwouldn'twantthestorytogetoutprematurely.Ifyoudecide,however,thatyouwouldliketoshowittome,Iwouldbemorethanwillingtosignanon-disclosureform.ItwouldbequiteathrilltoseewhatwillactuallybecomeaHollywoodproduction.Goodluck.Ican'twaittohandovermy$10toseeit.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/16/201111:33:10PMEarl,Screenplaysarefast-pacedandvisual;Ienjoyreadingthem,too.Ilikethedescriptiveterm"crisp".I'mguessinganywriterwouldbeflatteredbythat,asIam.Thankyou.AndI'mgladyougotsomuchoutofthisscript.Ihadnotthoughtofthe"reverse-inception"connection,butIlikeit.I'malsohappythatyouthinkitshouldbeanofficialMatrixplot.IfonlyHollywoodwoulddothesame.Onlytimewilltell.Thankyouagainforthehighpraise.MakeseverywordIwrotefeellikeitwasworthwriting.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:11/26/20118:32:02AMI'monlyalittlewayintoitsofar,butnooffence,thedialoguesofarisfallingprettyflatforme.It'salljustwaytooexpositionary,peoplesayingalittletooclearlypreciselywhatitisthey'rethinking,there'sverylittlesubtletytoitall.Notallthetime,thoughenoughforittobenoticeable.TaketheearlyscenewithLock,NiobeandMorpheusforinstance-itseemsunlikelytomethatinthemidstofthischaos,whereafterhundredsofpeoplejustdieddefendingthedock,whereNeomoreorlessfulfilledtheprophecyandbroughtacenturiesoldwartoanend,wheretheutterextinctionofthefreehumanracewasjustimminent,thattheywouldhavethisseeminglycalmexchangewhereLockapologisesforbeingacynical@ssandtheybrieflyruminateonwhattodonext.There'snoneedtoestablishthatthis"peace"maybefragile,becausethiswasalreadyestablishedattheendofRevolutions.Itfelttomeasthoughtherewasverylittle"thrust"tothisparticularscene,aswithseveralothers.

I'llgladlyreadtherestthough,andhappilypostmyopinionsafterwards.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:11/26/20114:02:59PMMerillion,It'struethatmuchisexpository.Idon'tloveiteither,buttoacertainextentitwasunavoidable.There'sjustatonofbackstorytoreveal.Andit'sfunnyhowthesamedialoguecanelicitsuchdifferentreactions.Manyreadersthinkit'srightonthemark;othersjustthinkitfallsshort.It'ssosubjective.Iactuallythinkthatthedialogue,whileabitflatandexpositoryasyousay,isinkeepingwiththeWachowskiscriptswhichareinmyopinionverysimilar.Partofmystylisticapproachwastomimictheirs,whichisoftenonthenoseandoverlyexplanatory.Whatmakesallthatstiltedandoverlydescriptivedialogueacceptableorbalancedis(inmyopinion)thatthestoryconceptisrichandsurprisingandtheactionsequencesareriveting.Thisiscomicbooksensibilitywrappedinscifidramaseriousness.Toacertaindegreeitallworkseventhoughthereseemtobemanyareastopickapart.Icompletelyrespectyouropinionandwouldlovetohearmore.Ihopeyoudofinishreadingthescriptandcomebackwithfreshcomments.Halfofthefunofhavingwrittenthescriptisbeingabletoengageingooddebateaboutitsmeritsandshortcomings.Thescriptcoulddefinitelybenefitfromarewrite,wheretheexpositionisreducedandtheactionisincreased.NotsurewhenorifI'lldoit,butthehugeamountoffeedbackI'vereceivedonthisbloghasgivenmeaclearpictureofwhatthescriptcouldbeifcertainareasarereworked.Thankyouforyourcandidcommentsandwillingnesstoreadfurther.Ilookforwardtoreadingyournewcomments.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:NeilDATE:12/3/20114:00:08PMHi,greattoreadsomethingofthecontinuationofthematrixworld-itshouldneverhavebeenleftwithoutaseriesorsequel.Iamhowevernotsureaboutthematrixwithinamatrix,thesupermatrixidea.TheparalellswithaChristandthehumanillusionswentsofarwiththematrix,Ifeelthattheyshouldbeexploredtothenextlevel.Readingyourstoryhasinspiredmetothinkofmyownsequelandmaybeevenwriteitdownasyouhave.Itwasnicetorevisitandreaquaintmyselfwiththematrixandit'scharacters.ThankYou.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/3/20115:34:28PMHiNeal,The"MatrixwithinaMatrix"ideaisusuallyahitormissformostpeople.Obviously,itcouldgoinmanydirections.Ifyouchosetowriteyourownnewdirection,please

forwardittome.I'dlovetoseeanothertrajectory.I'mnotsureifyourmentionofChristwasonethatencouragedordiscourageditinaMatrix4story.Ifitencouragesit,thenIthinkyoumissedtheparallelsthatIhavecreatedanddeliberatelytriedtoincorporate.Herearesomeofmyresponsestootherpeople'scommentsontheChristanglethatyoumightfindinteresting:CommentResponse1:"ThedualArchitectconceptIthoughtwaskindofcoolandcouldbeinterpretedasaheaven/hellorGod/Devilparadigm.TherearemanyreferencestoChristianityintheoriginalTrilogyandIthoughtthiswasaniceextension.ThegoodArchitectislikeGod,creatorofandoverseeroftheSourceandsaviorofthehumanworld.ThebadArchitectislikeSatan,thefallenangel,theoppositeimageofthelordabove.ThisbadArchitectisthecreatorofandoverseeroftheSourceintheMatrixandsaviorofthemachineworld.InadditionthechoicebythegoodArchitecttocasthimselfasthebadorflawedArchitectintheMatrixsomehowlendsmorehumanitytothegoodArchitect.ItsuggeststhatdespitehisbrillianceandalmostGodlikestatusintherealworld,heiswillingtoacknowledgehisflawsandweaknessbytakingonthepersonaofthebadArchitectintheMatrix.It'sawayforhimtobehumble,Isuppose."CommentResponse2:IactuallythinkmystoryreinforcestheChristianidea.IntheMatrixTrilogy,Neo,thesavior,sacrificeshislifetosavehumanity;inmystoryhelivesonthroughakindofresurrectionandafterlifeinaworldthatexistsbeyond/outsidetheworldhewasborninto.ThenewworldispresidedoverbytheArchitect,whoisthedesignerandoverseer.Neo,Trinity,andtheArchitectformasortoftrinityoftheirown.AndNeoPage265of27994207_86967_1–2–20121/2/124:57PMfinallyarrivesatanunderstandingandacceptanceofhisplaceinexistence,akindofNirvanaorheaven.CommentResponse3:Ithinkinmyscriptthesuggestionisthatthewarwillbeginagain.Butthat'sjustasuggestion.It'sleftuptotheimaginationoftheaudience.ThereasonIliketheopen-endednatureofmyconclusionisthathappyendingsrarelyhappen.Lifeisopen-endedandalwaysabitscary.TometheworldoftheMatrixseemslikeitbelongsmoreinthatcategory.Idon'tthinkthisstripsNeoofthesaviortag.Christgavehislifetosavehumanity'ssoul,and,despitethehorrorsthatcontinueinourworld,westillthinkofChristasasaviorbecausehegavehislifetosaveothers.InthatrespectNeoisstillasavior.CommentResponse4:IfyouacceptmystoryasanextensionoftheTrilogy,thenNeodoesn'tdie.Infact,inmystory(ifyouwanttocarrytheChristianparallelonward)NeoisalmostlikeaChristfigureinthathedoesn'treallyeverdie.Hehasbeenresurrectedyetagain,andwouldbeindefinitely.Essentially,heexistsinallrealities,allatthesametime.IfyouthoughtthattheChristianangleshouldn'tbeexploredinafurtherscript,then

ignoremyquotesabove.InanycaseIappreciateyourcommentsandwouldlovetohearanyotherthoughtsyoumighthave.Thanksagain,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:santoshDATE:12/9/20116:58:16AMSimplysuperbthoughttocontinuematrixseriesCOMMENT:AUTHOR:muzzammilDATE:12/22/20116:22:56PMwow!!!agreattwisttotrilogy.stillspinninginmyheadthatZionisinthematrix.Combining3differentworldinastorywouldbeafascinatingandgivesanewstorylinesuchasNeo's"real"capabilitiesinrealworld(superstrengthtoo).ItwouldbeablasttoseeKeanuReevesagainandalloriginalcast"resurrect"theirroles.Forme,TheMatrixandthenewone(ifthestorylineareaswritten)willbetheall-timebestmovies.Greatworkandyousuchagenius...COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/22/20118:40:25PMSantosh,Thankyoufortakingthetimetodropmeaquickupbeatcomment.Theshortresponsesarejustasappreciatedasthelongones.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/22/20118:53:35PMmuzzammil,I'mveryhappythatthestorybroughtyousuchenjoyment.IfitdoesindeedmakeittothebigscreenandbecometheofficialfourthMatrixmovie,Iwouldalsohavetoputinthecategoryofthetop-five,all-timegreatestmoviesagas.Withthewaythatvirtualdigitizationisgoing,inthenextfewyears,themoviecouldbereplicatedinalmostperfectdigitalrealism.Thiscouldhelpdramaticallytomaintaintheoriginalagesoftheactorssothemoviedoesfeellikejusttheoriginalactorscomingtogetherwhentheyaretoooldtobeconvincing.Thevoiceswouldbefromtheoriginalactors,butthevisualswouldallbevirtual.IthinkWarnerBrotherswouldbacksomethinglikethat.Itcouldfly.Anyway,thanksfortheawesomefeedback.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/23/20112:47:06PMOk,I'venowreadyourscripttwice,andIfeltlikeexpressingsomethoughts.Toelaboratequickly,I'mfirmlyoftheopinionthatwhilstthematrixsequelsweren't

perfect,theywerecertainlyadequate,enoughsothatthereisn'tanyneedforanothersequel.ThestorywaswrappedupinRevolutions,inmyhumbleopinion,ratherneatly.Iftherehastobeanothersequel,I'moftheopinionthatinnowayshoulditfeatureNeo,Trinity,Smith,oranyattemptstobringthembacktolife,ordrasticallychangewhat'salreadybeenestablishedthroughoutthecourseofthe3previousfilms,whichis,Iknow,ineffectexactlywhatyourscriptisattemptingtodo.Ican'tfaultyourintent,butIcanadmitthatthedirectioninwhichyourscriptgoesdidn'tappealtomestraightoffthebat.Thatsaidthough,asaaspiringwritermyself,Iapproacheditwithmorethananopenmind,andamgoingtobecompletelyupfrontandhonestinmyappraisal.Ireadthroughyourscriptthefirsttimejusttoabsorbitallin,andthesecondtimemoresowithafine-toothedcomb,sotospeak.Ihopeyoudon'tmindlong-windedresponses.Wheretobegin..allinall,Ithinkyouhaveagreattalentforwriting,anditobviouslyshows.Yourstyleisdescriptivewithoutbeingarduouslylong,andthevarioussettingsandimagespresentedareeasytoimagine.Myfaultsliemoresowiththestoryitself.PerhapsI'moveranalysing,butalotofitwassimplytooconfusing.You'veobviouslyspentagreatdealmoretimewiththisstorythanIhave,soperhapsImissedsomeexplanationshereandthere,butspecifically:-TheSuperMatrixitself;whatisit'srealpurpose?Sothehumanswinthewar,right?Sowhydotheyneedtocontrolthemachines?Arethemachineshookeduptothissupermatrix,andifso,how?Isitinthesameorsimilarmannerasthepeopleinthefieldsthatweseeinthefirstmatrixfilm,onlywithmachinesinpods?Andwhydothemachinesneedtobecontrolled,andforwhatpurpose?Aretheyprovidingtheremaininghumanracewithsomevitalresource?Iftheprevailinghumansareinultimatecontrolofthemachinesinthesupermatrix,andifthosemachineseverdostarttopresentanysortofproblem,can'tthehumansjust,yaknow,turnthemOFF??WhatisthepointofthegivingthesemachinestheillusionofbeingincontroloftheoriginalMatrix?-Toomanyflashbacks;oneortwoisfine,butherewe'rebeingpresentedwithalmostadozen(ormore)mostofwhichonlyservetodoleoutsomeexposition.Therearetoomanytokeeptrackof,dealingwithtoomanynewandrandomcharacters.Imean,theArchitecthasflashbacks,Neohasflashbacks,Trinityhasflashbacksthatlinkstory-wisetotheArchitectsflashbacks,thenthereareflashbackstotherobotsandtheirback-story,flashbackstothewarandhowitwaswon,flashbackstotheMerovingianandhiswifeandtheirtimeintheMatrix,flashbackstoSmithmeetingwiththeMerovingian.-WhyistheOracletheonlyonewhocanexitthesupermatrix?AndhowdoesTrinitydyinginRevolutionsgetherbackintotherealworld?-Thecortexitself;youestablishthatNeoisthefirstvirtualtoawakenandexistintheactualrealworld,sowhatishemadeof?Washechurnedoutfromsomehumanskin-organ-boneprinter??Furthermore,youestablishtherarityofhistransitionintotherealworldasaneverbeforeseenphenomena,andthenpresentwithinthestoryasecondCortex-relatedphenomena,whatwiththeadventofthesuper-beingsandthepotentialforofthemachinestofindoutthattheyareactuallyinsideaMatrix.Ontopofeverything,thisCortexmanagestoproducetwoamazingphenomenaintherealmof

thestory…prettyincredible,butthen,yourevealitbecameTrinity'splantohaveNeocomeintotheactualrealworld,sothatreallycan'tbethatmuchofaphenomenaafter-all..?IfNeowasthesuper-beingthatTrinity'sparentsenteredtheSuperMatrixtokill,thenhowdoesthattakeaccountthepreviousversionsoftheOnethatexistedbeforeNeo,oraretheybeingdisregarded?Again,confusing.-Theandroids;thoroughlyundevelopedinmyopinion.Thisentiresubplotcanbeeliminatedcompletelyandthestorywillstillbemoreorlessthesame.Theyserved2ultimatepurposesfromwhatIread-1)Togivethearchitectanemotionalmotivation,bykillingiswife,tobuildtheCortex,and2)Toconveytheideathathumanscanbejustasaggressive/oppressiveasthemachines,whichinitselfwasthoroughlydetailedintheAnimatrix,althoughgranted,Idon'texpectallbuthardcoreMatrixfanstohavewatchedit.Butthen,sincea36killshiswife,andtheyadmitthatthe36'sexistbeyondthecontroloftheCortex,howandwhydoesthepersonalinvolvementofa36motivatehimatall,sincetheverythingthatkilledhiswifewon'tactuallybeaffected/controlledbytheCortexthathe'lleventuallybuildorthesupermatrix?Iguesshejusthasageneraldislikeformachines?Again,kindaconfusing.Itwouldhavebeenfarmoreinterestinginmyopinionforthemtohavecapturedthatoneandroidtheyimplantthebombin,andthentohavetheArchitectsay,"No,Idon'twantthemtoallbekilled,"asanactofforgiveness,orsomethinglikethat.Kindacheesy,I'lladmit,butmoredramaticallyinterestingthenintroducingthem,andthenjustblowingthemallupandnevermentioningthemagain.Idon'twriteallthistobeneedlesslyhurtful,I'mmerelyanalyzingitfromafan'sandwannabewritersperspective.Asanaspiringwritermyself,Iapproacheditwithanopenmindandsoughttopresentyouwithsomeoftheconundrumsthatyourstoryleftmewith.Ifullyencourageyoutocontinuewritinghowever,andI'dliketoreadmorescriptslikethisonline.COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/23/20112:48:38PM–TheSuperMatrixitself;whatisit'srealpurpose?Sothehumanswinthewar,right?Sowhydotheyneedtocontrolthemachines?Arethemachineshookeduptothissupermatrix,andifso,how?Isitinthesameorsimilarmannerasthepeopleinthefieldsthatweseeinthefirstmatrixfilm,onlywithmachinesinpods?Andwhydothemachinesneedtobecontrolled,andforwhatpurpose?Aretheyprovidingtheremaininghumanracewithsomevitalresource?Iftheprevailinghumansareinultimatecontrolofthemachinesinthesupermatrix,andifthosemachineseverdostarttopresentanysortofproblem,can'tthehumansjust,yaknow,turnthemOFF??WhatisthepointofthegivingthesemachinestheillusionofbeingincontroloftheoriginalMatrix?-Toomanyflashbacks;oneortwoisfine,butherewe'rebeingpresentedwithalmostadozen(ormore)mostofwhichonlyservetodoleoutsomeexposition.Therearetoomanytokeeptrackof,dealingwithtoomanynewandrandomcharacters.Imean,theArchitecthasflashbacks,Neohasflashbacks,Trinityhasflashbacksthatlinkstory-wisetotheArchitectsflashbacks,thenthereareflashbackstotherobotsandtheirback-story,flashbackstothewarandhowitwaswon,flashbackstotheMerovingianandhiswifeandtheirtimeintheMatrix,flashbackstoSmithmeetingwiththeMerovingian..

COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/23/20112:50:19PM–WhyistheOracletheonlyonewhocanexitthesupermatrix?AndhowdoesTrinitydyinginRevolutionsgetherbackintotherealworld?-Thecortexitself;youestablishthatNeoisthefirstvirtualtoawakenandexistintheactualrealworld,sowhatishemadeof?Washechurnedoutfromsomehumanskinorganboneprinter??Furthermore,youestablishtherarityofhistransitionintotherealworldasaneverbeforeseenphenomena,andthenpresentwithinthestoryasecondCortex-relatedphenomena,whatwiththeadventofthesuper-beingsandthepotentialforofthemachinestofindoutthattheyareactuallyinsideaMatrix.Ontopofeverything,thisCortexmanagestoproducetwoamazingphenomenaintherealmofthestory…prettyincredible,butthen,yourevealitbecameTrinity'splantohaveNeocomeintotheactualrealworld,sothatreallycan'tbethatmuchofaphenomenaafter-all..?IfNeowasthesuper-beingthatTrinity'sparentsenteredtheSuperMatrixtokill,thenhowdoesthattakeaccountthepreviousversionsoftheOnethatexistedbeforeNeo,oraretheybeingdisregarded?Again,confusing.-Theandroids;thoroughlyundevelopedinmyopinion.Thisentiresubplotcanbeeliminatedcompletelyandthestorywillstillbemoreorlessthesame.Theyserved2ultimatepurposesfromwhatIread-1)Togivethearchitectanemotionalmotivation,bykillingiswife,tobuildtheCortex,and2)Toconveytheideathathumanscanbejustasaggressive/oppressiveasthemachines,whichinitselfwasthoroughlydetailedintheAnimatrix,althoughgranted,Idon'texpectallbuthardcoreMatrixfanstohavewatchedit.Butthen,sincea36killshiswife,andtheyadmitthatthe36'sexistbeyondthecontroloftheCortex,howandwhydoesthepersonalinvolvementofa36motivatehimatall,sincetheverythingthatkilledhiswifewon'tactuallybeaffected/controlledbytheCortexthathe'lleventuallybuildorthesupermatrix?Iguesshejusthasageneraldislikeformachines?Again,kindaconfusing.Itwouldhavebeenfarmoreinterestinginmyopinionforthemtohavecapturedthatoneandroidtheyimplantthebombin,andthentohavetheArchitectsay,"No,Idon'twantthemtoallbekilled,"asanactofforgiveness,orsomethinglikethat.Kindacheesy,I'lladmit,butmoredramaticallyinterestingthenintroducingthem,andthenjustblowingthemallupandnevermentioningthemagain.Idon'twriteallthistobeneedlesslyhurtful,I'mmerelyanalysingitfromafan'sandwannabewritersperspective.Asanaspiringwritermyself,Iapproacheditwithanopenmindandsoughttopresentyouwithsomeoftheconundrumsthatyourstoryleftmewith.Ifullyencourageyoutocontinuewritinghowever,andI'dliketoreadmorescriptslikethisonline.COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/25/20115:25:56AMOk,I'venowreadyourscriptathirdandfourthtime,andratherthanclearupmanyofthequestionsIposedearlier,I'vesadlyonlybecomemoreconfused.Formyownsake,Itriedtolistthevariousstoryelements,blowbyblow,frombeginningtoend..okay(correctmeifI'mwrong):

-Neo,afteraseriesofstrangevisions(inoneofwhichwe'reintroducedtosomechickwhohadarelationshipwithNeoatsomepointbackbeforehewastheOne)awakenstodiscoverthatTheMatrix,andthepreviouslyassumed"real"worldofZion,areactuallyinsideanotherbigger,SuperMatrix,intheACTUALrealworld,andhe'sintroducedtothe---Architect,thesame(butnotthesame)guywhohemetintheTVroomattheendofReloaded,butnowhe'sagenialoldguywhoturnsoutwantstohelpandexplainthingstoNeo,namely---ThatTrinity,hisgranddaughter,isstillaliveandalsointhisrealworld,andsheexplains,orlaments,tohimherlostrelationshipwithherparents---TheMerovingianandPersephone,whowerealsorealpeopleandbrilliantscientists,andhowtheyenteredtheMatrixtokillNeobeforehisawarenessofbeingtheOnecouldpossiblydestabilisethewholeSuperMatrix,butinadvertentlybecameintegratedintotheprogramasvirtualbeingswithsuperpowersbutwithnomemoryofwhotheypreviouslywere(butmysteriously,stillrememberthattheyknoweachother,aremarriedtoeachother,andloveeachother)whereuponNeolearnsabout---TheCortex,asuper-organic-computer-brainthing,whichhousestheSuperMatrix,anditsunpredictablenatureasitthreatenstogrow,learnandsupersedeitsprogrammingorpurpose,whichis---Tocontrolthemachines,becauseinthisrealworld,thehumansarethevictorsofthewarandareusingtheSuperMatrixtocontrolallmachinekind,exceptfor---The36's,aparticular"breed"ofrobotthatsurvivedthewarandarestrivingtounderminethehumanstofreetheiroppressedmachinebrothers.Butthey'renottheonlyoneswhocanpotentiallyf#$kthingsupforeveryone,because---Smithisstillalive,survivedthroughasinisterdudecalledMarouk(inthesamewayasSmithpossessedBane)throughwhichhemanagestore-entertheMatrix(thefirstone)forthepurposeofwreakingsomehavoctotryandbringdownthemachinesfromwithin,whohebelievesareincontrol,andheencounters---TheOracle,whoisonlyinafewscenesbutdoeswhatshealwaysdoes:beneedlesslymysterious,andshealsotalksto---MorpheusandNiobe,wheresheliterallyrepeatsthesamemoralconflict/scenariotoMorpheusastheArchitectdidtoNeoattheendofReloaded,because---TherecouldbeanotherattackonZionfromthemachinesdespitetheapparentpeacethatNeo'ssuccessfullywroughtwithhisdefeatofSmith,andMorpheus(andseveralothers,whoarealsorealpeoplewhoarepluggedintotheSuperMatrixforlifeandwithnoawarenessofthemselvesbeinginafakeworldCOMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/25/20115:27:26AM

tostopthisandprotectZion,allto,secretly---Again,maintaintheillusionthatthemachinesareincontrolofthehumanracesotheyremainsubservientintheactualrealworld,anillusionthatcouldbeundone---Becausethecortex,asImentionedearlier,asittriestolearnoradaptitself,could..like..linkitselfsomehowtoNeo,oranothervirtual,andbecomemoreselfawareand,coupledwiththenewthreatofthenowre-emergedSmith,could,again,toppletheworldoftheMatrix's---Butthere'shope,becausethatrandomchickfrombefore,yeah,Neoknockedherup(cozapparentlybeingtheOne,likehavingmydad'sbrowneyes,canandispasseddowngenetically)andhasasonwithOne-likepowersovertheworldoftheMatrix,whowecanonlypresume,willriseupandthecyclewillcontinueanew...Phew.DoIhavetheoverallgistofit?I'mprettysurethatencompasseseverything.Theironyofitis,themorereadandthemoreIunderstandofyourscript,themoreconfusedIgetandthelessthingsmakesense.Itreallyfeelslikethere'sisn'tanyone,centralnarrativetothestory.Alltheflashbacksandalltherelationshipsonlyservetodilutethedrama.Whichleadsmetoosomemorespecificstoryelements---SoifNeobeingtheOneandpossessingextraordinarypowerscouldthreatentotoppletheworldoftheSuperMatrix,bymakingtheCortexself-aware,thenwhyisn'teveryonefreakingoutoverNeo'sson,whohasthesamepowers?ItseemedthatmuchoftheaimofthescientistswastopreventtheCortexfrombecomingaselfawareA.Irobot/being,presumably,topreventanotherpotentialwarwithmachinesoccurring,tothepointthattheMerovingianandhiswifeevenentertheSuperMatrixwiththeintentofkillingNeotopreserveandprotecteverything..soyeah,surelyNeo'ssonwillpresentasimilarsortofproblem?Issomethingsimilarboundtohappen,thatpeoplewillhavetoentertheSuperMatrixtotryandkillNeo'sson,orwilltheytryanddowhattheydidwithNeoandbringhimintotheactualrealworldtoo?Butiftheydothat,howwillhedefeatSmith?-Whatarehowaretherobotsbeingcontrolledbythesupermatrix,connectedtoit?Ifthemachinesaren'tasortofpowersourceforthehumanrace,thenwhatactualpurposedotheyserve?Thisisn'taddressedinyourstory.COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/25/20115:29:32AM–Thedramaitself;it'salottoasktheaudiencetotakein.You'reprettymuchsaying,"Hey,youknowalltheemotionalhigh'sandlow'sthatyousufferedthroughwiththeprevious3movies,thelast2inparticular..turnsoutthatwasallhappeninginafakeworld!"You'reprettymuchpushingagiant"reset"button.PeoplemightaswelljustwatchthefirstMatrixfilmandthenskipthenexttwo,andjustjumpstraighttoyours.What'smore,it'salreadyalottopresenttotheaudiencethatNeoisalive,butthentoreallyhavesolittleofthestoryreallyconcernhim,justfeelswrong.Hejustbecomesaminorplayerinallthis,constantlybeingservedwithinformationasavassalforthe

audience,muchlikehedidinthefirstfilm,butinthisoneitultimatelygoesnowhere.Inessence,NeoisthecharacterthatpeoplewillwatchanotherMatrixsequeltosee,notsomeotherrandomperson.Hetakesabackseattoeverythinghere,literallysitting/standingaroundwhileothercharactersexplainthingstohim.Hehasnoactualinvolvementinthestory,reducedtobeingnomorethan,again,atoolthroughwhichtheaudiencecangaininformation,andboy,asIalludedtoearlier,there'salotofinfobeingpresented.Inthefirstfilm,keymomentsofexpositionweredeliveredinperhaps3-4keyscenes,acrossmuchofthefirstandsecondacts.Here,it'sallovertheplace.It'sjustabarrageofnewinformation.Ireadthatinapreviouscommentyou'reoftheopinionthatyouclearedupalotoftheholes/inconsistenciespresentedintheMatrix2&3,butpersonally,IfoundyourstorytobeMUCHmoreconvolutedandonlyservestoraiseaslewofnewquestions.Inestablishingyournewrulesfortheworldyou'vecreatedinyourstory,you'reobviouslygoingtoneedtoprovidealotofexpositioninorderforpeopletoacceptit,butforme,itgottothepointwhereitjusttookmeoutofthestory.Byaround60-70pagesintoit,Iwasfeelingahugedisconnectfromeverythingthatwashappening.IbecamedisengagedbecauseIwastryingtoohardtokeepupwithallthecharactersandthemyriadofrelationshipspresented.Evenaround85-90pageintoit,righttowardtheveryendofthefilm,variousquestionsandexplanationswerestillbeingpresentedasentirenewplotdevelopments,rightaroundthetimewhenthatthirdandfinalactshouldreallybekickingin,whentheexpositionsimplyHAStoendsothestorycouldbegintoresolveitself.Asidefrombrieflyatthebeginning,Smithdoesn'tmakeanappearanceuntilthelastquarterofthescript.Thissimplydoesn'twork.Hecan'tbepresentedasavillainrightasthestoryisabouttoconcludeitself.There'sjusttoomuchgoingon,toomanycharacters,toomanyrelationships,toomanysubplots,toomuchexpositionandtechno-babble.Thestorylacksanyrealandresoundingclimax.COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/25/20115:31:22AM–LookatthepathofMorpheusandNiobeinyourstory.They'retryingtoprotectZionfromanotherpossibleattack,butasIsaid,whatmotivationdoestheaudiencehavetocareaboutthepeopleinZionwhenwe'vejustbeentoldthatallthosepeopledon'tactuallyexist,cozthey'rejustvirtuals??What'stheriskhere?EvenifallthevirtualsinZiondie,whocares?Theexplanationthatyoumentioninapreviouscommenttoanotherposter,abouteveryworldbeingrealinitsownsignificantway,justseemswishy-washytome,andfrankly,contradictstheentirenotionofpeoplefightingtobefreeandtoexistunencumberedasindividualsintherealworld.Youcan'tsuddenlyexpectpeopletowanttocareaboutthevirtualrealitybeingpresentedwhenthewholeMatrixtrilogyisdevotedtopeopleunderminingit.Andifallthepeopleinthefarmsdietoo(intheZion-matrixworld)thenthemachineswon'tactuallyceasetofunction,right,coztheyaren'treallybeingpoweredbyhumanbodybatteries,cozit'sallfake,cozitsallinthesupermatrix..?Right?LikeIsaid,tooconvoluted.-TheMerovingianandhiswife;howandwhydotheybecome"superbeings"?IftheMerovingianhasallthesecrazypowers,whydoesn'thejustfightandkillNeoinReloadedduringthechateaufightscene,ratherthanjustwatchasNeokillsallhishenchmen?OrarehispowerssomehowdifferentorlessertoNeo's?*Edit*Ok,Ijust

read"whenallhishenchmenhadbeendisabledandhewasleftalonewithNeo,hewasforcedtousehispowertoescapeNeoandsimultaneouslytransporthimthousandsofmilesaway(whenhehadNeofollowhimthroughthatdoor).ThatwasapowerthatnotevenNeocouldreplicate.So,thatismylineofreasoning."Butit'stheback-doorkeythatallowedthemtopassthroughdoorwaysmilesapart.Thathadnothingtodowithany"super-powers."Seraphandthekeymakerbothalsodothis.Butanyway,howdotheycorrectthemalfunctionthatinadvertentlymadetheMerovingianandPersephonevirtuals,sowhenTrinityenterstheSuperMatrixthesamedoesn'thappentoher?COMMENT:AUTHOR:MerillionDATE:12/25/20115:33:55AM–Andthefactthatthey'reallrelated..arewe,astheaudience,nowsupposedtoacceptthatTrinityjuststoodthereandwatchedasNeomadeoutwiththevirtual,superversionofHEROWNMOMduringthebathroomkissscene??Really..??Andontopofthat,notonlyareMorpheusandLockbrothers..buttheOracleistheirmom..!!That'sstreeeeetchingit.Theelementyoupresentofsomeofthevirtualshavingrealworldcounterpartsalsojustseemstooconvenient.Igetthesensethatthisisonlythecasebecausepeoplewouldn't..andImeanWOULDN'T,acceptthatacharacterlikeMorpheus,whowe'vecometoloveandcareaboutacross3movies,isanothervirtual.Soconveniently,HE'Sreal,buteveryoneelseisfake.Idunno,it'sjustdoesn'tworkmefor.Icommendyourability,butthisscreenplayishardlytheawesome,ground-breaking,story-equaltothefirstMatrixfilmthatothercommentersherehavesaid.Ifthisscriptwastobemadeasitstands,rightnow,justlikeIjusthave,peoplewouldtearitapartandpointouteveryinconsistency,justliketheydidtheMatrix2and3.Iprobablysoundlikeanoverzealousgeek,but,ifnothingelse,readingyourscriptandanalysingitwascertainlyaninterestingandthoughtprovokingexercisethatIenjoyedquiteabit.It'sevengotmethinkingaboutwhereanotherMatrixsequelcouldpotentiallygo.Asfarasmycommentsgo,IthinkI'vesaidenough(probablytoomuch.)COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/25/20116:43:55PMMerillion,Itakenoumbrageatalltoyourcomments.OnthecontraryIamenergizedandflattered,boththatyouwouldreadthescriptsomanytimeswithsuchinterestandthatyouwouldrespondinsuchdepth,withsuchhonestyandwithsuchexcellentquestions.Astheholidaysareparticularlyintenserightnowandbecauseyourcommentswillrequiresomeforethoughtandamplereplytime,Iwillhavetorespondabitlateron.Idolookforwardtoitandwilldomybesttoaddressallyourconcernsandinsights.Untilthen,enjoythewinterseason.Thanks,PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/26/20116:21:30PM

Merillion,Istartedtorespondtoyourinitialcomments(seeSectionAbelow),butthenevenmorecommentscameinfromyouandIsensedthataddressingeverythreadofyourdiscussionwouldnotnecessarilybethemostproductiveapproachconsideringthattherearesomanythreads.SoIhavegivenyouabroad,overviewresponse(seeSectionBbelow).SectionA:Merillion,Yes,theresurrectionoftheoldcharactershasthepotentialtobecometedious(inmystoryaswellasanyoneelse's),butIhadhopetoavoidthatbygivingtheoldcharactersverydynamictwistsofpersonalityinatopsy-turvyworld.Mostpeopleeitherlikeitorhateit.Veryfewinbetweens.Thankyouforrecognizingmywritingtalent.Ihavebeenworkingonitforquiteawhile.AndIcontinuetowriteregularly.Yes,thestorywastwisty,convolutedandwithmanyunexpectedturns.Tomanypeople,thisisexactlywhataforthMatrixshouldprovide;toothers,itisjusttoomuchinformationinadisorientingformat.Mostlyamatteroftaste,Iwouldventuretosay.I,too,wouldprobablyhavesometroublewiththestorylineifIdidn'thavetheperspectiveofhavingwrittenitandthepatienceofadie-hardfan.Ido,however,believethatinavisualformat,withvisualcluesandcues,thetimeshiftsandflashbackscouldbelessdifficulttofollow.Hardtoknow,though,unlessit'smadeintoamovie.It'struethatmuchofthestorywaslacedwithexposition.Inretrospect,Icouldprobablyhavedoneabetterjobofembellishingitordiminishingittothepointwhereitwasn'tsoobvious;therewas,however,aneedtohavemostofitintheretocreatethestoryIenvisioned.PerhapsIshouldhavezeroedinonasmallerchunkofmyscriptandspentmoretimefleshingoutnewcharacters(suchasthe36s,whichIthinkcouldhaveareallycoolandlessundevelopedpresence)andnotjumpingaroundquitesomuch.WhentheboysinHollywoodfinallycomeknocking(??),I'llbesuretoedit/condense/refinetheofficialscriptwithyourthoughtsinmind.Toanswersomeofyourquestionsaboutthereasoning/logic,thefollowingisintendedtogivesomeinsightanditisallaccordingtomyscript'svisionoftherealworldwhichexistsintheyear2249:1)Havingachievedindependentthinkingandmotivation,smartmachinesattackedandcameclosetodecimatinghumanity.2)Tocoexist,humanshadtodevelopasystem(theSupermatrix)thatwouldsubjugatesmartmachinesandpreventthemfromeverbeingabletothreatenhumanitywhileatthesametimecontrollingthemforhumanneeds.

3)TheSupermatrixisnecessarybecausehumansarenotwillingtoexistwithouttheuseofsmart(A.I.)machines.Toomuchofthefutureworldhasbuiltitselfaroundthem,becomedependentonthemandisunwillingtolivewithoutthem.(Eveninourworld,manypeoplewouldfinditintolerabletolivewithoutmachines;evenmoreso,Ithink,inthefuture).4)Yes,themachinesarehookeduptotheSupermatrix.Ienvisionawirelessinternetworkedsystemthat,ifbrokenoralteredbythemachines(orhumans),rendersthosemachinesinoperableand/ortaggeduntiltheyarereintegratedintothenetwork,thuspreventingthemfromworking/operatingoutsidetheSupermatrix'ssystemofcontrol.5)"WhatisthepointofthegivingthesemachinestheillusionofbeingincontroloftheoriginalMatrix?"ThisquestionofyoursisonethatIdon'treallydiscussorelaborateoninthescript.Ido,however,haveareasoning.Ididn'tgetintoitinthestory,though,becauseit'sanothergiantbitofexposition,demandingpreciouspagerealestate.Besides,Iwasn'tsurehowpeoplewouldtaketoit.It'skindofchewyandperhapsdifficulttoswallow(althoughIpersonallythinkit'sprettyingenious).Okay,hereitgoes:Smartmachines,itturnsout,needsleepjustlikehumans.Theyalsoneedtodream,justlikehumans.TheArchitecttakesadvantageofthisextraordinaryconditiontodeceiveandharnessthemachines.Here'sthebigpicture:Allsmartmachinesdream.Withintheinter-networkedsystem(theSupermatrix),theArchitectalterstheirperceptionoftheirrealitysotheirdreamstatesareperceivedbythemaswakingstateswhiletheirwakingstatesseemlikedreams.InthisdeceptiontheirrealworldisperceivedastheMatrixandtheirdreamstateisperceivedastheirmundanetasksthattheyconductinthehumanworld.Iknowthisconceptofmineisoutthereandradical,butitcouldwork.Lookatitthisway:Letssaythatourcurrenthumanreality(yoursandmine)isthatweexistinaworldwhererobotsandmachinesareunderourcontrol(astheyare,moreorless)andwegoaboutournormalliveswithinthisframework.Andthenlet'ssaythatoursleeping/dreamingworldiswherewebelievewearecontrolledandpersecutedbyrobotsandmachinesandwemustfreehumanitytoalertthemtothisdisturbingfact.Ifwetoldpeoplethatwethoughtmachinescontrolledusandusedusaspowercellsfortheirexistence,whoisgoingtobelieveusorthinkwearesane?Probablynotmany.Okaynow,flipitaround.Thesmartmachines,inwhatthey'vebeendeceivedtobelieveistheirrealworldinwhichtheycontrolhumansintheMatrix,andwhatthey'vebeendeceivedtobelieveistheirsleepingworld,wheretheyperformmundanetasksforhumans.SupposeoneofthemachinestriedtopursuedothermachinesthattheirdreamsofthemundaneworldwererealityandtheirreallivesintheMatrixworldwerejustadeception.Whatmachineisgoingtothinkthatisatrueorsaneconclusion?Probablynotmany.Okay,Iknow,prettyoutthere….butthinkaboutitforawhile.Anyway,that'smytakeonit.Ultimately,thesmartmachinesintherealworldhavetobedeceivedintodoingtheirmundanetaskswithoutknowingthattheyareactuallydoingthemintherealworld,otherwisetheywillberesentful,oppositionandultimatelyaggressivetowardshumans.SectionB:

Merillion,Yousaythatthestorybecomesmoreconfusingasyoureaditmultipletimes,butyoursynopsisofthestoryisspoton.IcansaythatyouprobablydidabetterjobofbreakingitdownandexplainingitthanIcould.Myrespectstoyouforbeingsoattentiveandpatient.Myguessisthateventhoughyoubrokeitdownpreciselyandcanunderstanditwell,youfoundthatthestory,asitstands,isnottoyourliking.Irespectyouropinionandunderstandyourposition.Youalsosaythatthestoryseemstogarneralotofpraiseonmysite,andyousuggestthatitmaynotbewarrantedorjustified.Myresponseisthatitdependsonwhatyouarelookingforfromthestoryandonyourcriteriaforsuccessinthatstory.Asitstands,Iagreewithyouthatthestoryisnotreadyforprime-time;itisdisparate,unresolvedandover-reaching.Nonetheless,Ithinkthereismuchtolikeinthestory,ifthosepartsaretoyourtaste.TheonesthatseemtolikethescriptthemostdonotmindthatthestorydoesnotfollowalinearprogressionandpredicableHollywoodformat.Theydon'tseemtomindthatthestorymovesinmany(oftendisparatedirections)andwithlittlefinalityorresolutionattheend.Theonesthatlikeitfindgreatpleasureinastorythattriestoexploremanynewandunexpectedpossibilitiesevenifitinvolvestoleratingalotofexposition.Theonesthatlikeitseemtoseeitmoreasthegroundworkformanyideastocontinueon,eitherinfuturemovies,episodesorjustintheirimaginations.Somekeypointstoansweryourquestions:IagreethatinmyscriptNeobeingapassivefiguredeflateshispresenceagreatdeal(althoughhedoeshavesomeactionscenes).ButIfeltthathischaracterwasplayedouttoacertainextentintheTrilogy,andIwantedtoletnewcharactersaswellassomeolderones,whosepresenceinpreviousmovieshadonlybeentouchedupon,havemoreroomtobreath.Idoleaveopenthepotential,however,forNeotobeactiveinanyfuturescriptsbothasaplayerinthereal(Cortex)worldandasaplayerintheMatrix(wherehissonexists).TheCortexisdifferentfromacomputerwhichcanbeprogrammedandreprogrammedatwill.TheCortexismorelikeanorganismthat,onceit'sgeneticcodeandprogrammingareinitiated,canonlybealteredorcontrolledindirectly.ThinkoftheOracleasmedicinethatisinjectedintotheCortexwiththeintentoftryingtoalterorcorrectspecificparts.And,likemedicine,thereissometrialanderrorandtheresultsarenotalwaysperfectorpredictable.TheOracleisnottheonlyonewhocanenterandexittheSupermatrix,buteveryattemptismadetolimithertotheonethatentersandexitsregularly.Byrestrictingvariables(i.e.peopleenteringandexitingintheSupermatrix),potentialproblemsarereduced.IfsomeonediesintheMatrixorSupermatrix,theydieintherealworld(although

PersephoneandVictorareunexpectedexceptionstothisrule).JustbeforeTrinitydiesinRevolutions,sheisextractedfromtheSupermatrix(Onpage3ofthescripttheArchitectsays-"Nataani,Iapologizefornottellingyouearlier,but,yourtimingwasimpeccable.Theextractionwasacompletesuccess.")ThetrickherewastoextractTrinityjustaftershefinishesher(overlylong?)dyingspeechtoNeobutalsobeforesheactuallydies(otherwiseshecanneverbeextracted,becausesheisdead).Theandroid36swereprettyundeveloped.Iagree.Iwouldlovetofleshoutthataspectofthestory.Ithinkithaslotsofpotential.Myscriptintroduceslotsofideas,charactersandstorylines.IntheprocessIthinkitexplainsalotofloosestufffromtheoriginalmovieswhileatthesametimegeneratingalotofnewloosestuff,leavingopenthepotentialformoreinthefuture.Somelikethat,somedon't.Hitormiss.Icouldgoonpointforpoint(andIfeelthatallyourpointshavegreatdebatepotential)butIwishnotsomuchtorefutewhatyouhavesaidsomuchastoacceptyourpositionwithoutoffense.Youhavegreatanalyticalskillandyouhavefoundjustabouteveryflaworunansweredaspectofthestory(which,inkeepingwiththeoriginalMatrixideasandconcepts,Ithink,hasasimilardegreeofvagaryandthereforemakesforacompatiblestory).Everythingyouhavesaidhasmademerethinkmyoriginalintentionsand/ordevisebetterwaystorewritethestoryifIevergetaroundtoit.ThemainthingsIwoulddoareprobably:-BreakthestorydownintotwostoriessoIcanfleshoutcharactersandsituationsthatarethin.-Reduceexpositionwhereverpossible-FindwaystohaveNeobeamoreintegral/animatedplayer(evenifhe'snotthecentralfigure)-Expandthestoryofthe36s-MaybeeliminateSmith-Maybeusethe36sasthemainthreateningagents(perhapshavingtheminfiltratetheSource,Cortex&Supermatrixsystemssomehow)Anyway,Merillion,IwouldencourageyoutocreateyourownversionofaFourthMatrix.Iwouldimaginethatanystorycontinuationyoumightcomeupwithwouldbesomethingworthy,asyouhaveincredibleknowledgeoftheTrilogyandareverygoodatlogicalconceptualizationandareveryattunedtothecriticalanalysisofpotentialpitfalls.Ifyoudoevercomeupwithafourthstory(orevenanoutlineforone),ifyoufeelinclined,senditmyway;Iwouldbeexcitedandflatteredtotakealookatit.Thankyouforallyourthoughts.Ithashelpedmeunderstandmystorybetterandwillgiveotherreads(ofcomments)muchtochewonandthinkabout.Allthebest,PDWood

COMMENT:AUTHOR:HdoggaDATE:12/30/201111:59:04AMIamexcitedforthenextmatrix,IreadthescriptandIamsolookingforwardtothis:):):):):):):P:P:P:P:P:P:):P:):PCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/31/20113:56:51AMHodogga,Thisisnotanofficialscript,butgladyoulikedit.KeepyourfingerscrossedforaMatrix4,nomatterwhowritestheofficialversion.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:JoeybDATE:12/31/201111:25:40PMThisscriptsuckssobad.Itmakesnosense.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:12/31/201111:38:24PMJoeyb,Iadmitithasitsproblems.Ifyoucouldbemorespecific,itwouldbemorehelpfultomeasawriterandmoreinterestingasacommenttoread.Howexactlydoesit"suck"anditwhatwaysdoesit"makenosenseatall"?HopetheMatrix4thatactuallygetsmadeislesssuckyandmakesmoresensetoyou.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:richardlaughterDATE:1/2/201212:21:05AMilladmityouhaveplentyoftalentman,andtheplotconnectswellwiththepriorfilm,buttomeitcameoffasmoreofafanficthananactualpossibilityforasequel.ithinkigotthisfeelingfromyoumakingtheARCHITECTtrinity'sgrandfather.itjustdidn'tfeelrighttoome.asforthewholesupermatrixconcept,ilikedit,andthinkthatitwouldwork,buthighlydoubtthatitwouldbewellreceived.sooomanyinceptionjokes,itsnotfunnyalsoifeelthattheflashbackscometooftenandtoawkwardly.iwouldtrytogobackandcondenseitasmuchaspossible.lookatitthisway.ifthiswasactuallygonnabecomeamovie,alotofitwouldhavetobeeithercutorcondensedanyway.COMMENT:AUTHOR:SunnyPDATE:1/2/201212:25:32PMFirstofallPDWood,nicework.Ilikedthescriptenoughtoreaditallinonesetting.However,herearemycomments/concerns:Yousaythesupermatrixandmatrixarelikeatwowaymirrorandthatthecharactersdonotknowwhattheyaredoingineachreality.Althoughyourscriptsaysotherwise.TheOracleknowsexactlywhatsheisdoingwhenshecrossesthroughthesupermatrixandentersthematrix.ShewarnstheMerov.andPerso.aboutSmith.ShealsopurposefullytellsMorph.tounplugTrinitysoshecangettoNeo.

InyourscriptTrinityalsomentionsthatshewantedtokillNEObutthenshefellinlovewithhimandthenconstruedaplantobringNEOtoreality.Thishappendbeforesheenteredthematrixandsheknowinglycarriedoutthesameplanaftershecrossedover.YourscriptalsoshowstheOracletellingMerov.andPerso.thattheyareprogramsandtheyaresurprisedandgetmad.Fromthetrilogytheyalreadyknowtheyareprograms,thatshowtheMerov.gotallofhispowerandmoney,frombeingprograms.InReloadedtheMerov.evenrightsaprogramhimself,inthesliceofcake,whichisgiventothegirlhegetsaBJfrom,whichgetsPerso.mad.Iunderstoodyourendingformatrix4andIdidn'tneedanyclarification,howeverIprefertheendingformatrix3thanyourmatrix4ending.OnthepositivesideIwasstillentertainedtheentiretimeIreadyourscript,onlyhadsomeminorissues.COMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/2/20123:54:26PMrichardlaughter,I'mgladyoulikedthescript,theSupermatrixconceptandthatyoufeltitallconnectedwellwiththeTrilogy.Thatinitselfispraiseenough.Iagreewithallyourothercomments:morefanficthanbonefidescript,probablytoomanyinceptionparallels,flashbacksaretricky.Ithinkthewhole"intertwinedfamilialrelationships"conceptisahitormissformostpeople.Missedwithyou.IfthereisanyinterestatallfromtheHollywoodfolks,Ihavenodoubtthatmuchwouldgetcut,alteredand/orcondensedinarewrite.ThatisachallengeIwouldwelcomeimmediately.Ithinkmyscriptsetsthestageformanyextensionideasbutonlyafewwouldprobablygetdevelopedinasinglenewmovieconcept.Let'shopethere'senoughinterest.Thanksfortheconstructivecriticismandpraise.Alwayswelcomed.PDWoodCOMMENT:AUTHOR:PDWoodDATE:1/2/20124:47:19PMSunnyP,Readingitinonesittingisdefinitelythewaytogetthemostoutofthescript.Packsmoreofawallopandkeepsthethreadofthestorymoreclear.Imaynothaveexplaineditdeeplyenoughinthescript,buttheideaisthatpeopleintherealworldwhoare

slatedtogointotheMatrix/Supermatrixhavecertainspecificmemoriesturnedofftemporarilywhileotherspecific(purposelydesignedorimplanted)memoriesremainintact.(NEO:So,theirmemoriesareerased?ARCHITECT/ALEX:No,noterased.Specificmemoriesareshutdown.)So,forinstance,theOracleknowsthathermissionistotellMorpheustofreeTrinitytothenhelpunplugNeo(becauseitisamemorythathasnotbeenshutdown),buttheknowledgethatshelearnedthatinformationintherealworldisshutdown.SointheMatrix/SupermatrixworldsheassumesthatanyknowledgeorvisionsthatshehasaboutthefuturearesimplypartofherabilitiesasanOracle.Thisselectivityofinformation/knowledgewouldbetrueofTrinityalso.ShemaybeawareoftherealworldandtheplantoextractNeowhilesheremainsintherealworld,butshehasnoknowledgeofthiswhensheenterstheMatrix/Supermatrixworldbecauseallthosememorieshavebeenshutdown.HerdestinyintheMatrix/SupermatrixisdeterminedsolelybyMorpheusandtheOracle.(AndasfarasherloveforNeogoes,itisalogicaloutcomeofherbasicpersonalitywhichremainsconsistentinallworlds,i.e.TrinitywouldnaturallycometoloveNeosimplybylearningabouthimandbeingaroundhim.)ThepartofthescriptthatshowstheOracletellingPersephoneandtheMerovingianthattheyareprogramsissupposedtohavehappenedmanyyearsbeforetheeventsinthefirstMatrixmovie,thereforetheywouldnothaveknowntheywereprogramsinthefirstmovie.Hardtofollowallthisandmaybeneedsmoreclarification.Tryingtoreduceanalreadyoverlyabundantamountofexposition.ButI'mgladyoufoundpositiveaspectsthroughoutsomeoftheinconsistenciesandIhopemyexplanationmakesthestorymoreclear/palatable.Letmeknowifyouhaveanymorethoughts.Thanksforreading,SunnyP,andhaveagoodnewyear.