Dear Robert,

My topic is literacy in auto racing and the steps I took to improve and expand my knowl-

edge. My planning of this paper was minimal. I brainstormed a couple of experiences I had in

racing that were big influences on me during my progression as well as some sponsors of my lit-

eracy. I began writing the introduction and wrote throughout the conclusion, basing each para-

graph from my brainstormed ideas and from previous paragraphs. In my writings, I struggle with

building a nice flow, which I try to fix by constructing new paragraphs based off previous ones

instead of creating an outline beforehand. While constructing the first draft, I briefly explain my

ideas and attempt to be concise without being wordy, but this also tends to be a flaw in my writ-

ings.

The peer review was helpful because I was given two separate perspectives on my writ-

ing. Since I know my story, I can easily piece my ideas together, but others who only learn my

story through my writing, they can assist me with filling in the gaps. A couple of things recom-

mended to me was to further explain an experience, further explain how sponsors and other in-

fluences inspired me, and adjust paragraphs and sentences to enhance the flow. The readers were

able to point out flaws in my writing I have come accustom to, which seem normal to me when I

write.

In this paper, I revised several things my peers pointed out. I further explained some of

my personal experiences so the reader could understand more about what I was feeling and

thinking during these times. This also allows the reader to see a change in my literacy as they

compare one experience to another. Secondly, I revised details about my sponsors and influ-

ences. I added additional information establishing their credibility and what influence they had

on me during situations I mentioned in the paper. The last major revision I made was adding a

new paragraph explaining my improvement of literacy from when I began racing until now.

Also, within the paragraph is an experience explaining a new literacy that I discovered through

my racing. This paragraph sums up skills I learned, which are mentioned earlier in the paper, and

how these improved me as a a driver and a person.