November 8-9November 8-9

BellworkBellwork

►Write a paragraph describing your day Write a paragraph describing your day yesterday. USE only Active voice and yesterday. USE only Active voice and Literary present.Literary present.

Common core StandardCommon core Standard

►W.11-12.4. Produce clear and coherent W.11-12.4. Produce clear and coherent writing in which the development, writing in which the development, organization, and style are appropriate organization, and style are appropriate to task, purpose, and audience. to task, purpose, and audience.

Active voiceActive voice

►Active voice-when the subject of the Active voice-when the subject of the sentence is performing the actionsentence is performing the action

► IT SHOULD NOT BE A VERB PHRASE!IT SHOULD NOT BE A VERB PHRASE!►Correct: The dog bit the mail man.Correct: The dog bit the mail man.► Incorrect: The dog is biting the mailman.Incorrect: The dog is biting the mailman.►Active voice and Literary present: The Active voice and Literary present: The

dog bites the mailman.dog bites the mailman.

Active voiceActive voice► Directions: Change the sentences below to the active voice and literary Directions: Change the sentences below to the active voice and literary

presentpresent► The statue is being visited by hundreds of tourists every year. The statue is being visited by hundreds of tourists every year.

► My books were stolen by someone yesterday. My books were stolen by someone yesterday.

► These books had been left in the classroom by a careless student. These books had been left in the classroom by a careless student.

► Coffee is raised in many parts of Hawaii by plantation workers. Coffee is raised in many parts of Hawaii by plantation workers.

► The house had been broken into by someone while the owners were on vacation. The house had been broken into by someone while the owners were on vacation.

► A woman was being carried downstairs by a very strong firefighter. A woman was being carried downstairs by a very strong firefighter.

► The streets around the fire had been blocked off by the police. The streets around the fire had been blocked off by the police.

► Have you seen the new movie that was directed by Ron Howard? Have you seen the new movie that was directed by Ron Howard?

► My car is in the garage being fixed by a dubious mechanic. My car is in the garage being fixed by a dubious mechanic.

► A great deal of our oil will have been exported to other countries by our government. A great deal of our oil will have been exported to other countries by our government.

► Change to Active voice and literary present tense:Change to Active voice and literary present tense:► MistakesMistakes

1. Technological civilization has reached its1. Technological civilization has reached its► 2. present "advanced" state by the trial-and-error behavior of 2. present "advanced" state by the trial-and-error behavior of

3. those who lived before us. Many of the most useful 3. those who lived before us. Many of the most useful 4. discoveries and inventions were the result of mistakes 4. discoveries and inventions were the result of mistakes when when 5. people were looking for something else. The New World 5. people were looking for something else. The New World was was 6. found by Columbus, who was really looking for India. The 6. found by Columbus, who was really looking for India. The 7. discovery of penicillin was speeded by somebody who left a 7. discovery of penicillin was speeded by somebody who left a

8. loaf of bread out to get moldy. Think how far behind 8. loaf of bread out to get moldy. Think how far behind 9. ourselves we’d be now if mistakes were impossible for us to 9. ourselves we’d be now if mistakes were impossible for us to

10. make. 10. make.

► 11. Our knowledge is also increased by our mistakes, if 11. Our knowledge is also increased by our mistakes, if 12. only because once a mistake has been made, a way of 12. only because once a mistake has been made, a way of 13. correcting it must be found. If the mistake had not been 13. correcting it must be found. If the mistake had not been 14. made by us in the first place, we might have had no 14. made by us in the first place, we might have had no reason reason 15. to learn how things are done. As I wrote the first version 15. to learn how things are done. As I wrote the first version 16. of this essay, I made a few minor errors. As a result of my 16. of this essay, I made a few minor errors. As a result of my 17. mistakes, since I did discover them, I learned the 17. mistakes, since I did discover them, I learned the 18. difference between continuous and continual; I learned 18. difference between continuous and continual; I learned that that 19. useful has only one l (and that the rule goes for hundreds 19. useful has only one l (and that the rule goes for hundreds 20. of other words, like wasteful, harmful, spoonful); and I 20. of other words, like wasteful, harmful, spoonful); and I 21. learned how to use a semicolon when a comma won’t do. 21. learned how to use a semicolon when a comma won’t do.

► 22. Had I made no mistakes in the first place, I might 22. Had I made no mistakes in the first place, I might 23. have had a pretty good essay, but I would still not have 23. have had a pretty good essay, but I would still not have 24. known why. 24. known why. 25. Of course, mistakes have to be recognized for what they 25. Of course, mistakes have to be recognized for what they 26. are. If Columbus had thought San Salvador was India and 26. are. If Columbus had thought San Salvador was India and let let 27. things go at that, the world would be smaller today. Had 27. things go at that, the world would be smaller today. Had 28. the moldy bread been tossed to the birds, the birds might 28. the moldy bread been tossed to the birds, the birds might 29. have become healthy while human life went on suffering 29. have become healthy while human life went on suffering from from 30. raging diseases. (I realize these statements are somewhat 30. raging diseases. (I realize these statements are somewhat

31. doubtful, but now I’m so curious about Columbus and 31. doubtful, but now I’m so curious about Columbus and 32. penicillin that I’m going to learn the real facts 32. penicillin that I’m going to learn the real facts 33. tomorrow.) 33. tomorrow.)

► 22. Had I made no mistakes in the first place, I might 22. Had I made no mistakes in the first place, I might 23. have had a pretty good essay, but I would still not have 23. have had a pretty good essay, but I would still not have 24. known why. 24. known why. 25. Of course, mistakes have to be recognized for what they 25. Of course, mistakes have to be recognized for what they 26. are. If Columbus had thought San Salvador was India and 26. are. If Columbus had thought San Salvador was India and let let 27. things go at that, the world would be smaller today. Had 27. things go at that, the world would be smaller today. Had 28. the moldy bread been tossed to the birds, the birds might 28. the moldy bread been tossed to the birds, the birds might 29. have become healthy while human life went on suffering 29. have become healthy while human life went on suffering from from 30. raging diseases. (I realize these statements are somewhat 30. raging diseases. (I realize these statements are somewhat

31. doubtful, but now I’m so curious about Columbus and 31. doubtful, but now I’m so curious about Columbus and 32. penicillin that I’m going to learn the real facts 32. penicillin that I’m going to learn the real facts 33. tomorrow.) 33. tomorrow.)