paul jordan, november 2011 developing writing at sentence level and marking

Paul Jordan, November 2011

Developing Writing at Sentence Level and Marking


Time Connectives (TSV) (words for ‘then’)

First, we went to the recycling bins.

Other examples:Later, After that, Next, Finally…


Describing words (adjectives)

First, we went to the green, big recycling bins.

Other examples:Smelly, dirty, large, plastic…


Adverbs (‘__ly’ words) – An adverb describes how the verb happens.

We went quickly to the recycling bins.

Other examples:Slowly, nicely, sensibly, politely…


Alternatives for ‘went’

We walked to the recycling bins.

Other examples:Jumped, jogged, ran, hopped, skipped…


Alternatives for ‘said’

Mr Jordan whispered, “line up”.

Other examples:Shouted, asked, cried,…


Connectives

We walked to the recycling bins, because we wanted to recycle our rubbish.

Other examples:Since, as, so, but, if, andalthough, however, therefore


Positional Vocabulary

We walked to the recycling bins on the street corner.

Opposite the park, the old man would sadly stand.

Other examples:By the, across the, next to, against the…


Subject-Specific Vocabulary

The waterproof umbrella.

Other examples:Flyover, plastic, recycle, materials… etc


Clauses

The bin, that was smelly, was full up.

The table, which is strong, is made from food.

The teacher, who was strict, shouted loudly.


Similes (‘noun’ + “as (something) as”)

His ran as quick as a flash.

The room was as hot as an oven.


Adverbial Phrases (‘verb’ + “as (something) as”)We ran as quickly as we could up the stairs.

She sulked for as long as she dared.

He hit him quickly for as long as he could.


Expanded Noun Phrases

The adventurous explorer climbed the beanstalk.The strict head teacher shouted loudly.


Brackets (teach as a “whisper”)

Later, we put the delicious cake into the oven (be careful its hot!)

Amy was on playground duty today, she forgot her coat (isn't she silly!)


Hyphens - an after thought or additional info about the noun or object (demonstrating authorial intent).

His aftershave –smelly – really made the room stink! Cabbage – gross – is full of vitamins and minerals.


Persuasive Phrases – Invitations/persuasive letterOh, please say you’ll come!

Oh please say you will come …………..

You will really enjoy ……….

Other examples:If you come, you’ll have a nice time!


Semi-colonsLink clauses together, in the same way as a connective does.

I went to the shop because I was hungry.

I went to the shop; I was hungry.

ColonShows an example or list is to follow.

The hungry caterpillar ate: 1 apple, 2 cherries, 3 black-berries.


Using 3 __ed words together

Frightened, terrified, exhausted, they ran from the creature. Amused, amazed, excited, he left the school eager to get home.


Double adjective – puts emphasis on the adjectiveShe was a fast runner, fast because she needed to be. It was a foolish animal, foolish in a way that will become obvious as this story unfolds.

She was a kind teacher, kind to everyone she met.


ApostropheShows possession or omission.The book belongs to James > The book is James’s > James’s book It is not > It isn’t


Double Adverbs – emphasis on adverb

She chopped the carrots carefully, carefully so she did not cut her finger.

He ran away quickly, quickly as he feared for his life.


Personification – gives a non-living thing a living qualityThe chair groaned under the weight of the man.

The sun smiled at the children down below.


Alliteration

The cheeky, cheerful chimpanzee swung from the trees.

The slithery, slimy snake slide slowly across the rocks.


Magical Phrases 1 (ad-hoc phrases)

As quick as a flash.There was a chill in the air.Then it ended.He was quite still.What a big mistake!The star filled sky…


Paragraphs – a collection of related sentences

All of these sentences are related, somehow, to an event, topic or part of a story.

(miss a line)

More sentences related to another event, topic or different part of a story.

(miss a line)

More sentences related to another event, topic or different part of a story.

Other examples:Text might start with a brief introduction and end with a conclusion.

paul jordan, november 2011 developing writing at sentence level and marking

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