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1
June 26, 2012
Karen P. Redding, M.A.
Assistant Professor of English
Gainesville State College
Oconee Campus
302 Oconee Classroom
1202 Bishop Farms Parkway
Watkinsville, Georgia 30677
Dear Mrs. Redding,
When I first came to your class I didn’t know what to expect. Like other students I went
on rate my professor to try and get a feel for the class; little did I know what I was in for and how
this class would affect me. These English 1102 classes help me start the rebuilding of my
endeavor at college. In this class I became a stronger thinker I began to go deeper into topics.
This allowed me not to write in such generic way. They way you taught me to view my
assignments with using what I already know and enhancing it. This helped me to be more
successful with writing my papers. Before coming to this class my grammar skills wasn’t up to
par. I had a problem with being able to write down what I thinking on paper. I also had a
problem with writing period. I started to feel like I couldn’t write a successful paper. At times I
felt that it was not something that could ever happen.
When I did my first paper I was lost I never had to write a paper from reading articles. I
thought that maybe I was out of league once again. When began to write I took the approach of
writing what I knew and taking my time. I didn’t really do as great on my paper but I gain the
feeling that if I just fix what I messed up on the next will be better. With the first paper I didn’t
get help. I spent a lot of time stressing and worrying which took away from paper. On the next
paper I went and got peer review I had a better outline and made my paper run more smoothly.
The paper came out being better than the first but because of grammar my grade was lower. It
made me feel that my skills were forming and I was starting to write better to prove it.
When I first came to this I had trouble writing my thesis and putting it into my paper.
Now after these pass week I know how to make a thesis and put it into my paper. When I
reviewed my first paper and my very last paper of the class I saw how my thesis is stronger. My
paper came together. Even when I wrote it was a lot easier than sitting down allowing my words
to flow out than it was for the first doing. I want to thank you for helping me build my skills of
writing. I know I still a few things that I need to work on but having you as a teacher help me to
start to see writing as what she should want to do and not because you have to do it.
Sincerely ,
Mianna D. Lucas
Mianna Lucas
Professor Karen Redding
English 1102
11June2012
A Change Going to Come
When change is imminent out of the change also comes fear and uncertainty. Which can have a
positive or negative reaction along with it. In their articles Fixing Race: Visual Representations of African
Americans at the World’s Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893 By: Bridget R. Cooks and By Invitation
Only: The American Library Association and the Woman’s Columbian Exposition, Chicago ,1893 Wayne
A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth, they argue that African-Americans and women, as minorities did not
have the opportunity to experience the fair and were not represented fairly. This unfairness shows that
both groups experienced ignorance from other groups, even though both groups were becoming more
visible in society.
Both authors suggest that the displays at the world’s fair didn’t depict/show their groups as they
really were. They were mocked as being less than human as described by Bridget R. Cooks “ Like all
the fictional black character types, the Uncle shares the characteristics of exaggerated facial features
including oversized lips,often tinted right pink or red to contrast with brown of his skin. His eyes are
sometimes shown as large saucer-like circles with the whites visible on the outer edges of the iris. (Cooks
440) For the women they became seen as only a domestic figure with no place in the public. Wiegand
and Wadsworth “While upholding the distinction between women and men, the exhibits and events in
the Woman’s Building sought to extend the range of women’s domestic activities into the public arena”.
(Wiegand and Wadsworth 701)
In the fair there was also not enough examples of the groups and as stated by Wiegand and Wadsworth
that most “ values associated with separate-sphere ideology, which assigned women to the privacy of the
home barred them from participation in public life.” (Wiegand and Wadsworth 701) This was the mindset
of most people at the fair who didn’t want this group to have a exhibit
They argue that neither african-americans nor women had a say in the displays and couldn’t
experience the fair in the same way. As Bridget R. Cooks tells reader about how illustrator Peter Newell
depiction of cartoon about African American family named The Johnson family. Cooks “Newell’s
imagination, the Johnson family is unaware of these struggles for cultural representation. Unengaged
with the political dimension of the event and left behind in the progressive vision that the fair represents,
the family goes through the exposition shocked, surprised and displaced”. (Cooks 453) Both groups
are ignored at the fair and they were separated out and not included. As stated by Wayne A. Wiegand
and Sarah Wadsworth “The Columbian Exposition was relentlessly exclusive even as it conveyed the
image of openness and inclusiveness. In many of the exhibits, visitors would have found little that
documented the contributions of women, the working classes, and other marginalized groups. Prejudice
against these groups was often most conspicuous in their absence. Buildings representing Deep South
states, for example, exhibited displays that celebrated white cultures and sectional heritage but paid little
attention to the cultural contributions and heritage of the millions of African Americans living in their
midst” The groups was being ignored even after helping they were treated like they had nothing to with
the new change taking place as stated by Cook “Ignoring African Americans’ participation as part of
the exposition’s construction team helped to enforce the invisibility of African Americans not only as
contributors to the fair but also, on a larger scale, as contributors to the nation’s progress. (Cooks 462)
For the women and African Americans a positive change came for both of the groups. They both
became seen in public and whether or not it was liked didn’t matter. With these group they didn’t take
no for an answer and realized they had just as much right to be apart of the fair and the world as anybody
else did. They showed not only were they here but they were to stay and become a force to be reckoned
with.
Work Cited
Cooks, Bridget R. "Fixing Race: Visual Representations Of African Americans At The World's
Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Patterns Of Prejudice 41.5 (2007): 435-465. Academic Search
Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Wiegand, Wayne A., and Sarah Wadsworth. "By Invitation Only: The American Library Association And
The Woman's Building Library Of The World's Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Signs: Journal Of
Women In Culture & Society 35.3 (2010): 699-722. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Lucas1
Mianna Lucas
Professor Karen Redding
English 1102
18 June2012
I once read a Japanese proverb that stated, “The silent man is the best to listen to.” This
saying is a testament to say that people who refrain from being overly vocal are often observant
and give much thought to their conversation before producing their words. Therefore, when they
speak, their words speak volumes. Unlike, those who don’t think before they speak and their
loose lips have sunk many ships. In “Brownies” Z.Z. Packer theme, “The loudest person does
not necessarily has the most vocal strength and power” this theme gives validity to the Japanese
proverb.
In “Brownies” the characters Arnett the loudest, and Daphne the quietest, they both have
overpowering positions. The character’s tone of voice are described to establish the difference
in their characteristics. Arnett tone of voice is described as being upholstered with confidence
that’s both regal and vulgar at the same time. Statements like " Snot, you’re not going to be a
bitch and tell Mrs.Margolin, are you” are the type of statements Arnett are known to make at
times which are belittling and overwhelming to others. Daphne voice is described as being
petite and tinkly. Daphne hardly spoke, she is a person who allows her actions to speak for her.
When all the other girls allowed Arnett to dominate them with her words, Daphne ignored
Arnett and her friend Octavia not allowing their words to intimidate her. Showing them that
they couldn't control her with their intimidating tactics. Whenever the loud and obnoxious girls
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were presented with a challenge, they became quiet and appeared weak. Which clearly showed
that they were nothing more than bullies who tried to intimidate others by being loud and out of
control.Showing that being overpowering with loudness meant nothing if you can't stand your
ground from a intellectual prospective. The quiet girls would speak in a respectful manner and
stood their ground when they were challenged to do so. The quiet girls power was within the
articulation of their words and not the loudness of their voices. They were able to speak in such
a way that allowed them to get their point across, unlike that of the noisy crew. Daphne was quiet
until her friend was belittled by another girl that’s when she became vocal and shocked everyone
when she spoke. This situation proved that even though she was quiet, she was not powerless nor
was she a pushover but spoke when she needed to. The people then realized that she had power
to gather everyone’s attention and respected her for that. In the case of the loud and obnoxious
girls they didn’t have the power anymore and now began to listen and talk to their peers with
respect. This occurred after Daphne stood up for her friend showing them that it’s not always
about being the loudest.
The lesson to be learned is, if you don’t stand up for yourself no one else will. This couldn’t
be more true for Daphne, she proved that the quietest individuals are often the ones with the
most vocal strength and power. She displayed to the people in the troop that didn’t have vocal
strength, that it’s not ok to let anyone take your voice away. Which allowed her friend to speak
and not worry about being belittled. It also showed them that the others girls would lose their
power and control over them when they exercised their voice against being controlled and
manipulated.
The David and Goliath theme is a classic example of having the strength to take down
your Goliath no matter who or what it is. It proves that you don’t have to be loudest, but be
Lucas3
courageous enough to speak up for what’s right. Not giving away your power to speak in
representation of your character.
Work Cited
Packer, Z.Z. "Brownies". The Bedford Introduction to Literature. Ed. Michael Meyer.
Connecticut. Bedford/St. Martin's, 2008. 358-372. Print.
WHAT THE DIFFERENCE?
My least successful paper I chose is my Article critique. My reason
for choosing this paper was the lack of review before turning the paper
in. I think if I had some review of the paper it would have been my best
paper. I also should of spent more time thinking out my placement of
quotes. I also needed more explanation of my quotes and I should of
fixed my grammar errors. I really just needed to put more work and
time into this paper. I really think this paper should have been one of
greatest paper in my college career. Instead I drop the ball but I made
sure that I changed what I did on my next paper.
My chose for my most successful paper is my Fiction Analysis.
The reason being is because I took more time to think about what I was
going to write. I also had my peers to review my paper and help see
what I missed. With this paper I tried not to make the same mistake as
the first paper. I had a strong topic and not as much awkward placement
of quote as the first paper. I was able to have more start to the point
sentences and it ran smoother then my previous paper. In this paper I
started to see my self improve in being able to put my thoughts out on
paper. I could see things that I missed on my first paper because of the
feedback I received.
After looking over both of these papers I see how my writing
improved. I also saw that with my grammar I need to carefully review
me work until I know it’s correct. I saw that with the way I write I have
to have an outline. That with a while detail outline my paper would
already be put in order and all I would have to do is expand my points.
Mianna Lucas
Professor Karen Redding
English 1102
11June2012
A Change Going to Come
When change is imminent outimminent, out of the change also comes fear and uncertainty are
associated with it . Which can have a positive or negative reaction along with it. In their articles Fixing
Race: Visual Representations of African Americans at the World’s Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893
By: Bridget R. Cooks and By Invitation Only: The American Library Association and the Woman’s
Columbian Exposition, Chicago ,1893 Wayne A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth, they argue that
African-Americans and women, as minorities did not have the opportunity to experience the fair and were
not represented fairly. This unfairness shows that both groups experienced ignorance from other groups,
even though both groups were becoming more visible in society.
Both authors suggest that the displays at the world’s fair didn’t depict/show their groups as they really
were. They were mocked as being less than human as described by Bridget R. Cooks “ Like“Like all the
fictional black character types, the Uncle shares the characteristics of exaggerated facial features
including oversized lips,often tinted right pink or red to contrast with brown of his skin. His eyes are
sometimes shown as large saucer-like circles with the whites visible on the outer edges of the iris. (Cooks
440) For the women they became seen as only a domestic figure with no place in the public. Wiegand
and Wadsworth “While upholding the distinction between women and men, the exhibits and events in the
Woman’s Building sought to extend the range of women’s domestic activities into the public arena”.
(Wiegand and Wadsworth 701)
In the fair there was also not enough examples of the groups and as stated by Wiegand and Wadsworth
that most “ values associated with separate-sphere ideology, which assigned women to the privacy of the
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home barred them from participation in public life.” (Wiegand and Wadsworth 701) This wstatement
displayed the overallas the mindset of most people at the fair who didn’t want this groupthis group to
have ato be exhibited.
They argue that neither Aafrican-Aamericans nor women had a say in the displays and couldn’t
experience the fair in the same way. As Bridget R. Cooks tells reader about how illustrator Peter Newell
depiction of cartoon about African American family named The Johnson family,who . Cooks
“Newell’sare “Newell’s imagination, the Johnson family is unaware of these struggles for cultural
representation. Unengaged with the political dimension of the event and left behind in the progressive
vision that the fair represents, the family goes through the exposition shocked, surprised and displaced”.
(Cooks 453) Both groups are ignored at the fair and they were separated out and not included. As stated
by Wayne A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth “The Columbian Exposition was relentlessly exclusive even
as it conveyed the image of openness and inclusiveness. In many of the exhibits, visitors would have
found little that documented the contributions of women, the working classes, and other marginalized
groups. Prejudice against these groups was often most conspicuous in their absence. Buildings
representing Deep South states, for example, exhibited displays that celebrated white cultures and
sectional heritage but paid little attention to the cultural contributions and heritage of the millions of
African Americans living in their midst” The groups was being ignored even after helping they were
treated like they had nothing to with the new change taking place as stated by Cook “Ignoring African
Americans’ participation as part of the exposition’s construction team helped to enforce the invisibility of
African Americans not only as contributors to the fair but also, on a larger scale, as contributors to the
nation’s progress. (Cooks 462)
For the women and African Americans a positive change came for both of the groups. They both
became seenbecame seen in public and whether or not it was liked didn’t matter. With these group they
didn’t take no for an answer and realized they had just as much right to be apart of the fair and the world
as anybody else did. They showed not only were they here but they were to stay and become a force to be
reckoned with.
Work Cited
Cooks, Bridget R. "Fixing Race: Visual Representations Of African Americans At The World's
Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Patterns Of Prejudice 41.5 (2007): 435-465. Academic Search
Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Wiegand, Wayne A., and Sarah Wadsworth. "By Invitation Only: The American Library Association And
The Woman's Building Library Of The World's Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Signs: Journal Of
Women In Culture & Society 35.3 (2010): 699-722. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Mianna Lucas Least successful paper
Professor Karen Redding
English 1102
11June2012
A Change Going to Come
When change is imminent, the human emotions fear and uncertainty are associated with it.
In their articles Fixing Race: Visual Representations of African Americans at the World’s
Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893 By: Bridget R. Cooks and By Invitation Only: The
American Library Association and the Woman’s Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893 Wayne
A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth, they argue that African-Americans and women, as minorities
did not have the opportunity to experience the fair and were not represented fairly. This
unfairness shows that both groups experienced ignorance from other groups, even though both
groups were becoming more visible in society.
Both authors suggest that the displays at the world’s fair suggested that both groups
experienced ignorance from other groups. They were mocked as being less than human as
described by Bridget R. Cooks “Like all the fictional black character types, the Uncle shares the
characteristics of exaggerated facial features including oversized lips, often tinted right pink or
red to contrast with brown of his skin. His eyes are sometimes shown as large saucer-like circles
with the whites visible on the outer edges of the iris. (Cooks 440) The women they became seen
as only a domestic figure with no place in the public. Wiegand and Wadsworth “While
upholding the distinction between women and men, the exhibits and events in the Woman’s
Building sought to extend the range of women’s domestic activities into the public arena”.
(Wiegand and Wadsworth 701)
In the fair there was also stated enough examples of the groups and as stated by Wiegand and
Wadsworth that most “values associated with separate-sphere ideology, which assigned women
to the privacy of the home barred them from participation in public life.” (Wiegand and
Wadsworth 701) This statement displayed the overall mindset of most people at the fair who
didn’t want this group to be exhibited.
They argue that neither African-Americans nor women had a say in the displays and couldn’t
experience the fair in the same way. As Bridget R. Cooks tells reader about how illustrator Peter
Newell depiction of cartoon about African American family named The Johnson family, who
were “Newell’s imagination, the Johnson family is unaware of these struggles for cultural
representation. Unengaged with the political dimension of the event and left behind in the
progressive vision that the fair represents, the family goes through the exposition shocked,
surprised and displaced”. (Cooks 453) Both groups are ignored at the fair and they were
separated out and not included. As stated by Wayne A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth “The
Columbian Exposition was relentlessly exclusive even as it conveyed the image of openness and
inclusiveness. In many of the exhibits, visitors would have found little that documented the
contributions of women, the working classes, and other marginalized groups. Prejudice against
these groups was often most conspicuous in their absence. Buildings representing Deep South
states, for example, exhibited displays that celebrated white cultures and sectional heritage but
paid little attention to the cultural contributions and heritage of the millions of African
Americans living in their midst” The groups was being ignored even after helping they were
treated like they had nothing to with the new change taking place as stated by Cook “Ignoring
African Americans’ participation as part of the exposition’s construction team helped to enforce
the invisibility of African Americans not only as contributors to the fair but also, on a larger
scale, as contributors to the nation’s progress. (Cooks 462)
For the women and African Americans a positive change came for both of the groups. They
both became seen in public and whether or not it was liked didn’t matter. With these group they
didn’t take no for an answer and realized they had just as much right to be apart of the fair and
the world as anybody else did. They showed not only were they here but they were to stay and
become a force to be reckoned with.
Work Cited
Cooks, Bridget R. "Fixing Race: Visual Representations Of African Americans At
The World's Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Patterns Of Prejudice 41.5
(2007): 435-465. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Wiegand, Wayne A., and Sarah Wadsworth. "By Invitation Only: The American
Library Association And The Woman's Building Library Of The World's
Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Signs: Journal Of Women In Culture &
Society 35.3 (2010): 699-722. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Lucas1
Mianna Lucas
Professor Karen Redding
English 1102
18 June2012
“Brownies” Fiction Analysis
I once read a Japanese proverb that stated, “The silent man is the best to listen to.” This
saying is a testament to say that a person people who refrains from being overly vocal are often
observant and give much thought to their conversation before producing their words. Therefore,
when they speak, their words speak volumes. Unlike, Tthose who don’t think before they speak
and their have loose lips lipshave sunk many ships. In “Brownies” Z.Z. Packer theme, that vocal
strength and power person doesn’t necessarily come from the loudest person.“The loudest person
does not necessarily has the most vocal strength and power” thisThis theme gives
validationvalidity to the Japanese proverb.
In “Brownies” the characters Arnett the loudest, and Daphne the quietest, they both have
overpowering positions. The character’s tone of voice is describedis described to establish the
difference in their characteristics. Arnett tone of voice is described as being upholstered with
confidence that’s both regal and vulgar at the same time. Statements like " Snot, you’re not going
to be a bitch and tell Mrs.Margolin, are you”(362) are the type of statements Arnett are known to
make at times which are belittling and overwhelming to others. Daphne voice is described as
being petite and tinklytwinkly. Daphne hardly spoke,spoke; she is a person who allows her
actions to speak for her. When all the other girls allowed Arnett to dominate themdominate them
Comment [GSC1]: I didn’t have a title so added one.
Comment [GSC2]: Went over the Picky rules
Comment [GSC3]: I feel that I could do without this sentence
Comment [GSC4]: Added a pg. number that I forgot
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with her words, Daphne ignored Arnett and herand her friend Octavia not allowing their words
to intimidate herintimidate her. Showing them that they couldn't control her with their
intimidating tactics. WheneverWhenever the loud and obnoxious girlsobnoxious girls were
presented with a challenge, they, they became quiet and appeared weak. Which clearly showed
that they were nothing more than bullies who tried to intimidate others by being loud and out of
control. Showing that being overpowering with loudness meant nothing if you can't standcan’t
stand your ground from an intellectual prospective. The quiet girls would speak in a respectful
manner and stood their ground when they were challenged to do so. The quiet girlsgirl’s power
was within the articulation of their words and not the loudness of their voices. They were
ablewere able to speak in such a way that allowed them to get their point across, unlike that of
the noisy crew. Daphne was quiet until her friend was belittled by another girl that’s when she
became vocal and shocked everyone when she spoke. This situation proved that even though she
was quiet, she was not powerless nor was she a pushover but spoke when she needed to. The
people then realized that she had power to gather everyone’s attention and respected her for that.
In the case of the loud and obnoxious girls they didn’t have the power anymore and now began
to listen and talk to their peers with respect. This occurred after Daphneafter Daphne stood up
for her friend showing them that it’s not always about being the loudest.
The lesson to be learned is, if you don’t stand up for yourself no one else will. This couldn’t
be more true for Daphne, she proved thatproved that the quietest individuals areindividuals are
often the ones with the most vocal strength and power. She displayed to the people in the troop
that didn’t have vocal strength, that it’s not ok to let anyone take your voice away. Which
allowed her friend to speak and not worry about being belittled.This allowed her friend to speak
and not worry about being belittled. It also showed them that the others girls would lose their
Comment [GSC5]: I felt this was a filler
Comment [GSC6]: Didn’t need it
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power and control over them when they exercised their voice against beingagainst being
controlled and manipulated.
The David andDavid and Goliath themeGoliath istheme is a classic example of having the
strength to take down your Goliath noGoliath no matter whowhom or what it is. It proves that
you don’t have to be loudest, but, but be courageous enoughcourageous enough to speak up for
what’s right. Not giving away youraway your power to speak in representation of your
character.
Work Cited
Packer, Z.Z. "Brownies". The Bedford Introduction to Literature. Ed. Michael Meyer.
Connecticut. Bedford/St. Martin's, 2008. 358-372. Print.
Mianna Lucas Least successful paper
Professor Karen Redding
English 1102
11June2012
A Change Going to Come
When change is imminent, the human emotions fear and uncertainty are associated with it.
In their articles Fixing Race: Visual Representations of African Americans at the World’s
Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893 By: Bridget R. Cooks and By Invitation Only: The
American Library Association and the Woman’s Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893 Wayne
A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth, they argue that African-Americans and women, as minorities
did not have the opportunity to experience the fair and were not represented fairly. This
unfairness shows that both groups experienced ignorance from other groups, even though both
groups were becoming more visible in society.
Both authors suggest that the displays at the world’s fair suggested that both groups
experienced ignorance from other groups. They were mocked as being less than human as
described by Bridget R. Cooks “Like all the fictional black character types, the Uncle shares the
characteristics of exaggerated facial features including oversized lips, often tinted right pink or
red to contrast with brown of his skin. His eyes are sometimes shown as large saucer-like circles
with the whites visible on the outer edges of the iris. (Cooks 440) The women they became seen
as only a domestic figure with no place in the public. Wiegand and Wadsworth “While
upholding the distinction between women and men, the exhibits and events in the Woman’s
Building sought to extend the range of women’s domestic activities into the public arena”.
(Wiegand and Wadsworth 701)
In the fair there was also stated enough examples of the groups and as stated by Wiegand and
Wadsworth that most “values associated with separate-sphere ideology, which assigned women
to the privacy of the home barred them from participation in public life.” (Wiegand and
Wadsworth 701) This statement displayed the overall mindset of most people at the fair who
didn’t want this group to be exhibited.
They argue that neither African-Americans nor women had a say in the displays and couldn’t
experience the fair in the same way. As Bridget R. Cooks tells reader about how illustrator Peter
Newell depiction of cartoon about African American family named The Johnson family, who
were “Newell’s imagination, the Johnson family is unaware of these struggles for cultural
representation. Unengaged with the political dimension of the event and left behind in the
progressive vision that the fair represents, the family goes through the exposition shocked,
surprised and displaced”. (Cooks 453) Both groups are ignored at the fair and they were
separated out and not included. As stated by Wayne A. Wiegand and Sarah Wadsworth “The
Columbian Exposition was relentlessly exclusive even as it conveyed the image of openness and
inclusiveness. In many of the exhibits, visitors would have found little that documented the
contributions of women, the working classes, and other marginalized groups. Prejudice against
these groups was often most conspicuous in their absence. Buildings representing Deep South
states, for example, exhibited displays that celebrated white cultures and sectional heritage but
paid little attention to the cultural contributions and heritage of the millions of African
Americans living in their midst” The groups was being ignored even after helping they were
treated like they had nothing to with the new change taking place as stated by Cook “Ignoring
African Americans’ participation as part of the exposition’s construction team helped to enforce
the invisibility of African Americans not only as contributors to the fair but also, on a larger
scale, as contributors to the nation’s progress. (Cooks 462)
For the women and African Americans a positive change came for both of the groups. They
both became seen in public and whether or not it was liked didn’t matter. With these group they
didn’t take no for an answer and realized they had just as much right to be apart of the fair and
the world as anybody else did. They showed not only were they here but they were to stay and
become a force to be reckoned with.
Work Cited
Cooks, Bridget R. "Fixing Race: Visual Representations Of African Americans At
The World's Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Patterns Of Prejudice 41.5
(2007): 435-465. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Wiegand, Wayne A., and Sarah Wadsworth. "By Invitation Only: The American
Library Association And The Woman's Building Library Of The World's
Columbian Exposition, Chicago, 1893." Signs: Journal Of Women In Culture &
Society 35.3 (2010): 699-722. Academic Search Complete. Web. 11 June 2012.
Lucas1
Mianna Lucas
Mrs.Federovitch
English 1101
16 November 2010
Theodore E. Lucas
“A father is always making his baby into a little woman. And when she is a woman he
turns her back again” (Enid Bagnold) .Ever since I was a little girl growing up in South Carolina,
my dad has always been in my life and encouraged me to be a successful woman. My dad’s
strong –minded personality comes from his military experience and also his growing up without
a father. As a teenager, my dad began working to provide for himself and his the family.; and
Wwhen he was eighteen years old, he married my mom and Wwith a wife and one- year- old,
his personality and values grew stronger. We finally settled down in Atlanta, but my dad still
worked and traveled. Yet, his values and memorable moments still stayed with me. My favorite
moments of my dad and me were Christmas of 2002 and talks about education.
“Hey you want to put up the Christmas tree?” my dad asked.
“Yes, that will be cool and interesting”, I said, and after that it was nothing but laughter.
As we were going outside to the storage shed to get the Christmas tree, it was so cold I saw my
breath make smoke puffs. Reentering back into the house, we placed the Christmas tree in its
designated area. My dad and I joked and laughed about where to place the branches and why the
top of the branches had colors on it. ThenWhen we finally finished putting the tree together
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when I realized that we didn’t have any decorations; so we took a trip to Wal-Mmart. The car
ride there was amusing, music blasting, talking about silly things, and looking for a place to grab
some food.
My dad asked me, “Do you think these decorations look good?”
“Of course they do”, I answered. With my dad being a guy and me being eleven- years-
old, anything looked good to us. We picked out the goldest tree topper star with multi-colored
lights in the middle, big red and blue ornament balls, silver garland, and multi-colored lights.
With the attitude I had putting the decorations on the tree, I knew that this tree was going to look
lovely. After putting up the tree, with a full belly we noticed that one of the tree legs had broken,
resulting in its leaning, so we put a book under it to make it looked centered. We stepped back
and looked at the tree, as if it were a trophy that we had won and were proud of. That night was
so special because that was our first time decorating a Christmas tree together. Even though the
tree looked tacky, I didn’t care what it looked like because I did it with my dad.
Currently attending college, I really appreciate my dad and the things that he has instilled
in me, like conversations about my education. My dad is
…a worker and provider,
Who learned the simple facts
In life and lived by them, (Salinas 30-32).
T that’s why education is really important forin my dad’s life. Growing up as a child, my dad’s
mother was not strict on education; so at times he felt like if someone pushed education in his
life he would be more successful. Wanting change in his future, he was able to move up on the
corporate ladder and prove people wrong. When my dad became a father he wanted to be active
in his children’s education. had me and his other
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children; he told himself that he was always going to be on top of our education. Ever since I
could remember my dad has always given education talks and encouraged me to do better. The
talks consist of college choices, medical school, GPA averages, honor roll, study habits, doing
my homework early, and what were my long and short term goals. Sometimes the talks were
boring, and at times I felt like they were useless, but I knew that he was speaking from the heart.
The relationship between my dad and I has improved over the years. Our communication
skills are great; I talk to him about anything now like dating, friends, and personal problems. The
wisdom that I gained from my dad is to always do my best and not settle for anything less. I’ve
learned to improve my study skills and how to carry myself as a young lady. I hope Wwhen I get
married that my husband has qualities will likebe like my dadad’s.d: Aa hard worker, provider,
strong-minded, and respectable.
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Work Cited
Bagnold, Enid. “Father Daughter Quotes”.Buzzle. 2011. 16 Feb. 2011.
http://www.buzzle.com/articles/father-daughter-quotes.html.
Salinas, Luis Omar. “My Father Is A Simple Man.” Literature and Ourselves. 6th
ed. Gloria
Mason Henderson, et al., eds. New York: Pearson, 2009. 136-137.
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Mianna Lucas
Mrs.Federovitch
English 1101
16 November 2010
Theodore E. Lucas
“A father is always making his baby into a little woman. And when she is a woman he
turns her back again” (Enid Bagnold) .Ever since I was a little girl growing up in South Carolina,
my dad has always been in my life and encouraged me to be a successful woman. My dad’s
strong –minded personality comes from his military experience and also his growing up without
a father. As a teenager, my dad began working to provide for himself and his family. When he
was eighteen years old he married my mom. With a wife and one- year- old, his personality and
values grew stronger. We finally settled down in Atlanta, but my dad still worked and traveled.
Yet, his values and memorable moments still stayed with me. My favorite moments of my dad
and me were Christmas of 2002 and talks about education.
“Hey you want to put up the Christmas tree?” my dad asked.
“Yes, that will be cool and interesting”, I said, and after that it was nothing but laughter.
As we were going outside to the storage shed to get the Christmas tree, it was so cold I saw my
breath make smoke puffs. Reentering back into the house, we placed the Christmas tree in its
designated area. My dad and I joked and laughed about where to place the branches and why the
top of the branches had colors on it. When we finally finished putting the tree together
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realized that we didn’t have any decorations; so we took a trip to Wal-Mart. The car ride there
was amusing, music blasting, talking about silly things, and looking for a place to grab some
food.
My dad asked me, “Do you think these decorations look good?”
“Of course they do”, I answered. With my dad being a guy and me being eleven- years-
old, anything looked good to us. We picked out the goldest tree topper star with multi-colored
lights in the middle, big red and blue ornament balls, silver garland, and multi-colored lights.
With the attitude I had putting the decorations on the tree, I knew that this tree was going to look
lovely. After putting up the tree, with a full belly we noticed that one of the tree legs had broken,
resulting in its leaning, so we put a book under it to make it looked centered. We stepped back
and looked at the tree, as if it were a trophy that we had won and were proud of. That night was
so special because that was our first time decorating a Christmas tree together. Even though the
tree looked tacky, I didn’t care what it looked like because I did it with my dad.
Currently attending college, I really appreciate my dad and the things that he has instilled
in me, like conversations about my education. My dad is
…a worker and provider,
Who learned the simple facts
In life and lived by them, (Salinas 30-32).
That’s why education is really important in my dad’s life. Growing up as a child, my dad’s
mother was not strict on education; so at times he felt like if someone pushed education in his
life he would be more successful. Wanting change in his future, he was able to move up on the
corporate ladder and prove people wrong. When my dad became a father he wanted to be active
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in his children’s education. Ever since I could remember my dad has always given education
talks and encouraged me to do better. The talks consist of college choices, medical school, GPA
averages, honor roll, study habits, doing my homework early, and what were my long and short
term goals. Sometimes the talks were boring, and at times I felt like they were useless, but I
knew that he was speaking from the heart.
The relationship between my dad and I has improved over the years. Our communication
skills are great; I talk to him about anything now like dating, friends, and personal problems. The
wisdom that I gained from my dad is to always do my best and not settle for anything less. I’ve
learned to improve my study skills and how to carry myself as a young lady. When I get married
my husband qualities will be like my dad’s. Being a worker, provider, strong-minded, and
respectable.
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Work Cited
Bagnold, Enid. “Father Daughter Quotes”.Buzzle. 2011. 16 Feb. 2011.
http://www.buzzle.com/articles/father-daughter-quotes.html.
Salinas, Luis Omar. “My Father Is A Simple Man.” Literature and Ourselves. 6th
ed. Gloria
Mason Henderson, et al., eds. New York: Pearson, 2009. 136-137.