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What needs fixing?Another quote is “My Brother’s Keeper, an initiative designed to determine what works to help young people stay on track to reach their full potential. (“Fact Sheet & Report”)”

Mrs. Dipert’s Doctoring“Fact Sheet & Report” states: “My Brother’s Keeper [is] an initiative designed to determine what works to help young people stay on track to reach their full potential.”

What needs fixing?In one article, it says that the law will “Increase focus on transforming the school and districts that is producing the majority of the country’s dropouts” (Tuller) to reduce dropouts and it also says that it will “promote different discipline practices for teachers” (Tuller) to keep them in school.

Mrs. Dipert’s DoctoringAccording to Tuller, the law will do the following to keep students in schools: “increase focus on transforming the school and districts that are producing the majority of the country’s dropouts [as well as] promote different discipline practices for teachers.”

ORTuller states that the law will “increase focus on transforming the school and districts that are producing the majority of the country’s dropouts.” The goal of transforming the schools is to retain students and decrease the dropout rate. One of the ways in which this will be accomplished is to “promote different discipline practices for teachers” (Tuller).

What needs fixing?Obama specifically says (About My Brother’s Keeper) “To help young boys at risk of dropping out of school” without a single care to the young girls who are suffering the same.

Mrs. Dipert’s DoctoringIn About My Brothers Keeper, Obama specifically caters to boys without a single care to the young girls who are suffering in similar ways when he states: “to help young boys at risk of dropping out of school.”

What needs fixing?“The President says, boys should pursue leading and building businesses.” says Darren Rosenblum from the article “My Brother’s Keeper and Harmful Ideals of Masculinity.”

Mrs. Dipert’s DoctoringIn the article “My Brother’s Keeper and Harmful Ideals of Masculinity”, Darren Rosenblum states that “the President says, boys should pursue leading and building businesses.”