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What makes a good IB Exam essay?
Russell QuinlanIB History, TOK Teacher & IB ModeratorMAIS Conference, Tunisia, 7 November 2010, 12:50 – 13:[email protected]
IB Exam Essays
Expected to be 1st year university level writing
Assessments by teachers & many new assistant examiners tend to be too lenient
Require concise, yet, cogent response
IB Exam Essay: The Question
Paper 2 Questions tend to be broad questions
Need to be unpacked: What is it asking the student to do? What is it not asking the student to do?
Does not ask for a comment or reference to current situation—stay in history
IB Exam Essay
Demonstration of historical understanding is the foundation of the essay—not rhetoric, not style, not imagination
Structure alone will not achieve upper markbands Structure not more important than historical
understanding
Not a historiographical essay Does not necessarily demonstrate historical
understanding
IB Exam Essay
Inaccurate information is a concern Does not subtract points Does limit the attainment of markband levels
Historical understanding v. historical information Not marked on basis of facts However, how can historical understanding
be demonstrated with flawed or without historical knowledge?
IB Exam Essay: 2 Regions
Integrated compare/contrast is best structure
Region by region response is fine: Reference subject from other region, i.e.
“Stalin implemented a program of industrialization, as did Mao, called the Five Year Plans.”
Response should balance material from each region Avoid 5 paragraphs on Hitler & 2 on Castro
Writing a Good IB History Exam Essay
Things to Do Things to Avoid
Critique the question to understand what is being asked of you Answer based on a few key words, i.e. WW I or Hitler
Make analysis claims Sweeping generalizations
Use relevant HK to support claims One-off pieces of evidence, i.e 1 HK to support a thematic factor, or no
evidence to support claim
Be specific with evidence, i.e. use ‘petty bourgeoisie’ instead of ‘people,’ be careful with use of pronouns (too much use brings confusion)
Assume the reader has prior knowledge, i.e don’t simply state ‘5-Year Plan’ identify it as industrialization
Consider multiple interpretations, i.e. responsibility for causing WW I (need not be historiography)
Metaphors, i.e. ‘put on the map’
Identify & use relevant HK, evidence that addresses what the question wants you to do
Long introductions; go right to the answer unlike in a formal essay that requires a good intro
Be comprehensive, i.e. effects of WW I include more than Germany and/or Europe
Information beyond the chronological parameters of a question, i.e. info on rise of leader when questions asks for rule
Identify cause/effect, themes, significant factors Rely on historiographical terms as substitute for demonstrated
understanding, i.e. revisionist
Use thematic structure & integrate HK in thematic manner New information in last paragraph
What to Do?
Answer the Question Asked, not the one hoped for
Assume the reader/examiner has no prior knowledge
Explain the story: chroniclers tell the story; historians tell the story & explain why it happened the way it did
What to Do? Write a structured essay
Thematic approach preferable… but not necessary to reach higher markbands (mark 13-15 level descriptor: “Answers are structured (either chronologically or thematically) using relevant evidence to support historical arguments.”
Support knowledge claims & analytical assertions w/reference to specific historical knowledge
What to Do?
Be comprehensive: i.e., effects of world wars more than Germany & more than Europe
Give multiple interpretations—need not be historiography: e.g. Korean War as both civil war & limited war
Advise students w/ less developed skills to answer more specific questions & avoid more general questions
What to Do?
Assume No Prior Knowledge:
“Russia was expected to take six weeks to mobilize according to the Schelliffen [sic] Plan masterminded by Germany to win a two-front war. It banked on a quick defeat of France by concentrating German forces on France, and after defeating them within six weeks, moving the majority of forces to the Eastern Front to fight off the Russians who supposedly would have just mobilized.”
What to Do?
Thematic Approach:
“Mussolini was able to ascend to his dictatorship due to the support of the people and traditional elite, the weakness of his opposition, his presidential position and the crisis of Matteotis’s [sic] murder.”
What to Do?
Support w/Specific HK:
“The containment policy was made as a result of George Kennan’s Long Telegram, in which Kennan claimed that the Soviet Union was an aggressive expansionist…
The Long Telegram was written by the United States Ambassador to the Soviet Union, George Kennan. In his telegram Kennan described the Soviet Union as aggressive, oppressive and would take advantage of any weak links and turmoil in the democratic world to expand communism. Kennan concluded that though the Soviet Union seemed strong, in reality America was more powerful and should actively stand up to the Soviets. These thoughts developed into the Containment Policy. “
What to Do?
Explain the Story:
“The German Blockade was set up by Britain to stop Germany from importing raw materials and war supplies. Germany depended heavily on raw materials imported from its colonies. Thus the blockade was one of the deciding factors of Germany’s defeat in WWI. However, Germany also depended on imports to feed its population. The British enforced blockade disregarded the survival requirements of the Germany population and vicariously targeted civilians, it is estimated that around 750,000 Germans died of starvation caused by the blockade. It is unlikely that Britain did not anticipate the devastating results the blockade would have on German civilians so another viable explanation of the blockade was enforced intentionally to wreck Germany’s power to continue resistance. This means that World War I was a total war in which Britain did not differentiate between civilian and military targets in order to totally destroy Germany.”
What to Avoid?
Writing an essay based only on key words from a question, i.e. Hitler
Waste time on historical information outside the boundaries of the question, especially chronologically
Long introductions—exam essays do not use same format as formal essays
What to Avoid?
Assume reader/examiner knows what is meant—students responsibility to demonstrate his/her understanding
Sweeping generalizations
Stand alone historical knowledge: i.e. Austria’s ultimatum to Serbia
What to Avoid?
Using metaphors—obscures understanding for this type of essay
Using historiographical terms without demonstrating understanding
New information in the last paragraph
What to Avoid?
Sweeping Generalization:
“He [Mao] controlled propaganda and proscribed what was allowed to be said and what wasn’t. He therefore also manipulated the Chinese people into supporting him, since he made everything sound and look nicer than what it really was in reality.”
What to Avoid?
Stand Alone HK:
“Mao’s ideology was Maoism, also referred to as Marxist-Leninists. It focused on peasantry and industrial development.”
Difficult Questions for Students: based on experience as IB Examiner
Social & Cultural Questions Guerilla Warfare Nature of Warfare (air, naval,
technology) Role & Status of Women Ideology Economic Questions Propaganda Questions Less Directed Questions (quagmires for
weaker students)
Teaching Strategies
How to unpack a question Demand specificity when students
speak Teach thematic approach to writing
(no later than second year of IB) What is a relevant response Focus on explaining, analyzing,
identify cause/effect
Teaching Strategy