Pour Me (Draft)

by

Sean Covell

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EXT. LATE EVENING. COUNCIL HOUSE - GARDEN

In a back garden of a council house a rugged eighteen year old boy called Jack is lying down on a sun lounger staring at the sky, he is wearing a pair of torn up jeans, a grey hoodie and a black leather jacket, in one hand he is holding a bottle of alcohol; in the other a formal looking letter. He sits pondering for a while then eventually sits up with the drink and letter in front of him. He notices a light from the top floor of his house come on and figure move past the window. He takes a long deep breath starring at the window, his face drops and he slowly gets up and hides the bottle away in the pocket of his jacket, then walks towards the house with the letter in hand.

INT. LATE EVENING. COUNCIL HOUSE - KITCHEN

He enters the kitchen and watches as his Mum walks past awkwardly, heading towards the living room dressed in her pajamas after just waking up and silent without noticing him. She turns and notices him in the Kitchen.

MUMDid you just get in?

He moves closer to her.

JACKErm, yeah basically

whilst pushing past him and starting to rapidly dig through cupboards.

MUMSo your late then, why?

He pauses with a long sigh.

JACKI was at school still cau...

A loud bang from the last cupboard she looks through interrupts him.

MUMGreat we have none left! 'sigh'.

Then she walks past him towards the living room.

INT. LATE EVENING. COUNCIL HOUSE - LIVING ROOM

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He follows her into the living room where she turns on the TV, sits down on the sofa and picks up a empty bottle of alcohol, she sighs as she realizes their is nothing left and then puts it back on the floor; as he enters the room his mum stays silent. He stands still starring at her waiting for some response but doesn’t get one.

He nervously asks.

JACKYou all right?

With a harsh tone she says.

MUMYeah, obviously you always was a smart one.

He looks at the floor and they both stay silent for a few seconds.

MUMWhat are you doing back so late anyway?

slowly he responds.

JACKOh, erm I was at school with Mr Usher.

Still focused on the TV she smiles and laughs to herself.

MUMHa-ha, I’m sure you were Jack.

JACKNo really I was we were...

She turns to him and Sharply says.

MUMYeah right I'm sure, so where’s my drink then?

The boy sits down on the opposite sofa.

JACKWell I kinda wanted to talk to you about something first.

MUMWhat do you mean first, if you have my drink give it to me.

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JACKNo, when you drink you don't really listen and this is importa...

MUMGive me my drink Jack!

The boy stand up angrily from being interrupted again.

JACKNo!, I didn’t get you any.

His mum stays seated for a moment and then gets up from the sofa turns of the TV walks straight up to him and says.

MUMWhy didn’t you get me any you must of known we were all out!

She begins to become more anxious

MUMI can’t exactly just go out and get it myself! those sales people are always judging me, everyone is! why couldn't you get me some.

JACKMum please, listen, don’t worry about that right now you don't have to get some right now, i just, i got this letter from a Uni and, well i haven't opened it yet but they me off let me in and maybe even be giving me accommodation.

MUMWhat you think they would of actually accepted you?

JACKYeah, i have been working on my personal statement with MR Usher and he thinks I'm gonna get in.

She pauses for a moment and snaps back.

MUMFine! You know what I, I don’t need you.

He tries to get a word in to stop her getting upset

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JACKMum please.

But she continues.

MUMYou know why you don’t care about me! Cause of stupid things like this!

His mum grabs the letter from his hand and rips it into four pieces which fall to the floor, they both look at each other for a moment.

JACKFine then, if you don’t need me, then I’ll go.

He picks up the torn up pieces of the letter and then heads for the door out of the living room, his mum follows behind him silent and watches him leave with a furious yet upset look, then quickly walks into the kitchen and starts digging through the cupboards again.

Ext. Late evening. Park

The boy is walking alone down a path in a park at night and eventually arrives at a bench, he takes a seat and holds out the drink and torn up letter in each hand, he takes a long pause starring at them and eventually decides to lie down and look back up at the sky as he did earlier in his back garden.

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Pour Me Script First Draft - Notes

I have shown the first draft to my teacher so he can suggest changes and see if the script is in the correct format.

Spelling Grammar: Their was a few corrections on spelling and grammar from the transition from synopsis to script.

Removing Directions:In the script explaining how actors say or act is very limited so i had to change certain parts in between dialogue.

More Tense Ending: He wanted the stakes to be raised and the ending more tense so he has changed a small bit of the story and would like the ending were Jack lies down on the bench changed, him lying down would suggest to the audience that he feels relaxed and okay about what just happened which is not what i wanted to get across, so instead i would end it with him sitting on the bench still looking at the bottle and letter, another suggestion from my teacher is to have him open the drink as many people after an argument like that with a loved one would need a drink, but to still keep the question of whether or not he decides to drink i will end it with him still staring at the two items and that audience wouldn't know if he drinks it or pours it away.

The Letter: In order to raise the stakes more My teacher suggested that i could change the story slightly and have him reading through the letter in the garden and:

It gives me a chance to make a formal looking prop in pre-production.

In the letter I can add more depth to my main character by giving him an unconditional offer showing that he is actually very intelligent regardless of his manor or how he dresses.

The letter can contain a parental form regarding his application for accommodation which would need to be signed by his mother and information on how much money she earns would be needed, this would help add to the argument as he would need her to sign the form or he couldn't go and, due to her getting anxious earlier, would not want anyone to know how much money they have.

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Pour Me

by

Sean Covell

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EXT. LATE EVENING. COUNCIL HOUSE - GARDEN

In a back garden of a council house a rugged eighteen year old boy, JACK is lying down on a sun lounger staring at the sky, he is wearing a pair of torn up jeans, a grey hoodie and a black leather jacket. In one hand he is holding a bottle of alcohol; in the other a formal looking letter. He opens the letter and takes out two pieces of paper, the first page states that he has been accepted into the ***** university, and they are giving him an unconditional other due to his grades and the success of his interview, on the bottom of the letter their is a response to Jack’s request for accommodation, it asks him to get his parent/guardian to write on a form describing his current living and financial situation. He sighs and sits up with the drink and letter in front of him. He notices something above him. Jacks POV: He notices a light from the top floor of his house come on and figure move past the window. He takes a long deep breath starring at the window, his face drops and he slowly gets up and hides the bottle away in the pocket of his jacket, then walks towards the house with the letter in hand.

INT. LATE EVENING. COUNCIL HOUSE - KITCHEN

JACK enters the kitchen and watches as his MUM walks past awkwardly, heading towards the living room dressed in her pajamas after just waking up and silent without noticing him. She turns and sees him in the Kitchen.

MUMDid you just get in?

JACKErm, yeah basically

She pushes past and startes to rapidly dig through cupboards.

MUMSo you’re late then, why?

JACKI was at school still cau...

A loud bang from the last cupboard she looks through interrupts him.

MUMGreat! None left! 'sigh'.

She walks past him towards the living room.

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INT. LATE EVENING. COUNCIL HOUSE - LIVING ROOM

He follows her into the living room where she turns on the TV, sits down on the sofa and picks up a empty bottle of alcohol, she sighs as she realizes there is nothing left and then puts it back on the floor. As Jack enters the room his mum stays silent. He stands still starring at her waiting for some response but doesn’t get one.

JACKYou all right?

MUMYeah, obviously you always was a smart one.

He looks at the floor and they both stay silent for a few seconds.

MUMWhat are you doing back so late anyway?

JACKOh, erm I was at school with Mr Usher.

Still focused on the TV she smiles and laughs to herself.

MUMHa-ha, I’m sure you were Jack.

JACKNo really I was we were...

She turns to him Sharply.

MUMYeah right I'm sure, so where’s my drink then?

Jack sits down on the opposite sofa.

JACKWell I kinda wanted to talk to you about something first.

MUMWhat do you mean first, if you have my drink give it to me.

JACK

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No, when you drink you don't really listen and this is importa...

MUMGive me my drink Jack!

Jack stands up angrily from being interrupted again.

JACKNo!, I didn’t get you any.

His mum stays seated for a moment and then gets up from the sofa turns off the TV and walks straight up to him.

MUMWhy didn’t you get me any you must of known we were all out!

She becomes anxious.

MUMI can’t exactly just go out and get it myself! Those sales people are always judging me, everyone is! why couldn't you get me some.

JACKMum please, listen, don’t worry about that, you don't have to get some right now, I just, I got this letter from a Uni.

Jack shows her the letter.

MUMWhat you think they would of actually accepted you?

JACKYeah, I have been working on my personal statement with Mr Usher after school, and i applied for a few places, this was my main choice and they have actually offered me a unconditional offer.

She pauses for a moment and snaps back.

MUMLet me see that.

She snatches the letter out of his hand and starts to read though it.

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JACKOh, well I need you to do something for me, don't worry though its all official and everything, but i need you to sign a form allowing me accommodation, and fill in some details.

She flips the front page of the document to look at the form attached at the back and begins to read through it.

MUM‘Dear Parent/Guar . . . inclosed in th . . . Could you please state your finical information including your monthly revenue from your job(s), if you are on any government pay such as disability pay or benefits:

I shouldn't need to tell them that!

JACKNo mum its for the accommodation, to get them to pay for me living their I thought it would be easier on you knowing everything.

MUMDon't give me that i have always provided for you!

JACKI didn't mean it like that.

MUMAnd what do you mean Easier on me? your just trying to get rid of me.

JACKNo mum that’s not true, I, I just want to get a good job and move somewhere better.

MUMFine! You know what, I don’t need you.

JACKMum please.

MUM

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You know why you don’t care about me! Cause of stupid things like this!

His mum grabs the letter from his hand and rips it into four pieces which fall to the floor, they both look at each other for a moment.

JACKFine then, if you don’t need me, then I’ll go.

He picks up the torn up pieces of the letter and then heads for the door out of the living room, his mum follows behind him silent and watches him leave with a furious yet upset look, then quickly walks into the kitchen and starts digging through the cupboards again.

EXT. Late evening. Park

JACK is walking alone down a path in a park at night and eventually arrives at a bench, he takes a seat and holds out the drink and torn up letter in each hand, eventually he opens the bottle using the side of the bench and takes a long pause starring at them both.

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