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6th February 2014 Jordan Crichlow

Subject: MediaClass: 12A/Me1Teacher: Mr BeckerScript Draft [3]

LocationVideo (visual action)*AudioSeconds

Outside a semi-detached house in Tadworth.The scene fades up.

The semi-detached house is shown.

FILM NAME fades up: TRUANT, then fades down.

Violin (similar to Dumbledores Farewell)

5 seconds

An urban quiet street in TadworthCOLIN, 16, is walking down a street in Tadworth. He is walking at a normal pace, whilst looking down at the ground with a glum expression.

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He is wearing rough looking clothes, and his hair is not combed. Behind him are terrace houses.


6 seconds

Outside the semi-detached house.CAMERA: Jordan Crichlow

COLIN arrives outside a semi-detached house. He turns his body around directly towards the house, and looks up at it.


6 seconds

Outside the semi-detached house.COLIN lifts his hands up to his mouth and his mouth forms the word Stephen.

COLIN begins to shout his friends STEPHEN s name again, putting more emphasis into his actions, with his jaw moving slower and wider. COLIN s face screws up, and his facial expression haunted; his eyes screwed up, his jaw clenched tightly. His mouth forms the word Damn.

COLIN looks again at his watch; the time now reads: 8:50am.


15 seconds

Outside the woods, on the pathway (the woods which are between Tadworth and Banstead crossroads).STEPHEN, 14, is looking at his watch; the time is also 8:50am. He is stood standing still outside the woods. He is wearing smart clothes, which look a bit all over the place, as if he has been rushing; his hair is half combed, and one of his shoelaces is not tied up.

STEPHEN looks up from his watch and up at the looming trees in front of him.

STEPHEN s left eye twitches, as he looks from left to right, and then behind him, but no one is in sight.


15 seconds

Outside the semi-detached house.COLIN is stood stationary outside STEPHEN s house, and his head is turned towards the right. His right eye twitches.

COLIN looks down at his feet and his mouth forms the word No, three times in succession.

As he says the last no, his head rises to look up at the sky, and he puts both hands over his face.


10 seconds

Outside the woods.STEPHEN looks back up at the trees, and his shoulders fall as he heaves a heavy sigh.

STEPHEN begins to walk forwards, at a slow pace.


8 seconds

Outside the semi-detached house.COLIN s neck, twists to the right suddenly, and his mouth forms the word NO, with his facial expression exemplifying the increased volume he has spoken the word.


7 seconds

In the woods, on the pathway.STEPHEN continues walking forwards in the woods, with another hurried glance at his watch.

STEPHEN begins to pant slightly, and hurries forward.


5 seconds

In the woods, further down the pathwayTRENT, 16, is stood on the outskirts of the pathway. TRENT is wearing a white school shirt, with his tie extremely loose and hanging down from his collar, and he is leaning against a tree with his phone in his hand. TRENT is looking at his phone, reading a text. At the top of the phone screen, it says it is from TYRONE, and the text says: M8, where r u? W8ing for you @ skl.

TRENT replies In a bit. He then sends the message.

TRENT then looks up at his eyes squint as he sees STEPHEN walking along the pathway.


12 seconds

In the woods on the pathway.STEPHEN is walking forwards at a fast pace, looking down at his feet whilst he walks.


5 seconds

In the woods, further down the pathwayTRENT smiles, with his eyes focused directly on the oncoming Stephen.

TRENT then looks at his phone once more.

He types the words: Actually come woods got a surprise.

TRENT sends the message and then looks up at the oncoming STEPHEN.

TRENT steps into the middle of the pathway, and bites his lip.


15 seconds

In the woods, on the pathway.STEPHEN continues walking forwards.

He then looks forward and sees TRENT.

STEPHEN looks up at TRENT s figure, and his eyes widen.

TRENT s fist clenches slowly.


10 seconds

Outside the semi-detached house.COLIN slowly looks down at his watch; the time is now 9:00am.


5 seconds

In the woods, on the pathway.STEPHEN looks down at his watch; the time is now 9:00am. He looks back straight ahead at TRENT, pokerfaced, with his mouth open slightly, and his eyes wide.

STEPHEN lets his arm with his watch on, fall limply by his side.

The scene fades down, as STEPHEN s arm limply stays by his body.Violin (similar to Dumbledores Farewell)

The sound of a school bell ringing.10 seconds

Song Time: 142 secondsScript Time: 144 seconds

Look at GarageBand to compose own music.

Make it other way roundColin looks for Stephen cant find him, looks for signs Stephen is not there anymore. Then acts on it, (e.g. sees bike, goes on it to find Stephen.)Stephen nearly meets TrentColin intercepts him and stops him before he reaches him (Keep audience guessing)Stephen en route, cut to Trent, we guess he is waiting for Stephen, Describe place more where Trent is and where Stephen is4/5 fifths shows there may be intersection of two people4/5 into it, Colin intercepts it.

Establish place more, whats in woodsForeshadows what happens later on via whats in the place

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