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Sentence Level Revisions. BA 6. Essay Check. Thesis Organizational Sentence (if you need one) Topic Sentence 1 Topic Sentence 2 Topic Sentence 3 Conclusion. ✔ Thesis. Does the thesis clearly state the purpose of your literature review? - PowerPoint PPT PresentationTRANSCRIPT
Sentence Level Revisions
BA 6
Essay Check
Thesis Organizational Sentence (if you need one) Topic Sentence 1 Topic Sentence 2 Topic Sentence 3 Conclusion
✔ Thesis
Does the thesis clearly state the purpose of your literature review?
Make sure you are not setting up an argument or an informative essay. However, you will want the topic you are
reviewing to be something you can argue about for draft 2.1
Is the thesis focused on a narrow topic?
✔ Organizational Sentence/Introduction
A statement telling the reader what major points you are going to cover
Do your topic sentences CLEARLY relate to your organizational statement and/or the thesis? Are they built off of it?
Do you set a clear structure for your paper? Do you set a clear scope (focus) for your paper? Do you follow the order of the topics you set up?
✔ Topic Sentences 1-3
Each topic is a mini thesis Each paragraph is a mini essay
Contains Opening Main idea Support Closing
ASK: does each sentence in the paragraph directly support this topic sentence? The thesis?
Body Sentences…
All of the information in each sentence needs to be relevant
Cut fluff Check that all your sentences answer the
question “so what?”
Body Sentences…
Find your pronouns: “it,” “they, “these,” “them”; can you fill that space with a better word or phrase?
Make stronger sentences by removing “to be” verbs
Still stuck? Try removing as many articles (a, an, the) as possible (and reasonable)
Sentence Level Revision
5 R’s { Restructure sentences or p.graph
Reword concepts Reorder sentences or
comp’s Remove sentences and
fluff Readdress thesis/topic
Try this!
Make sure you have a thesis that is Sets up a Literature
Review Strong Clear Focused
Take a paragraph, at least 6-8 sentences, and revise it using 3-5 of the 5 R’s
You have 10-15 minutes
Now Trade!
1. Evaluate their thesis: Does the thesis set
up a Literature review? (If not, what is it doing?)
Is the thesis strong?
Is the thesis clear? Is the thesis
focused?
2. Look at their revision compared to their original:
What R’s did they use? Is the revision stronger?
Why? Why not?
Would you change anything?
Give their revision a grade: A: no change required B: some change required C: much change required
5-10 minutes
BA6
Revise a substantial body paragraph from 1.1 (at least 6-8 sentences)
Write a short summary and evaluation of your revisions. Explain the revisions you have made and their impact on the
audience, purpose, and meaning of your draft as a whole.
No length requirement, but make sure you have at least 6-8 sentences to revise
Provide your thesis statement before your revised paragraph.
BA Deliverables
Statement of thesis Original paragraph Revised paragraph Summary of Revisions
DUE 2/20/2011
Before The Clock
Strikes 12
Helpful Readings
Chapter 42-45 in the E-handbook