READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will continue to interpret The Crucible and examine our last persuasive essay to determine ways to improve it.

Warm up: 1. Get a folder from the back of the room to create your writing folder.2. Put your name and class period on it.3. Once you receive your essay, examine the rubric to see where you need to improve. Make sure you take note of these things, so your next essay is better!

September 24, 2012

Grammar issues in papers

• Run on sentences• Comma splices• Homophones

their, there, they’re two, to, too your, you’re, yore

Other issues in papers

• Weak thesis statements• Wordiness in thesis statements• Poor support, lack of evidence• Weak Introductions and conclusions

Homonyms Grammar Activities

• http://a4esl.org/q/h/dt/ho41.html • http://a4esl.org/q/h/dt/ho40.html• http://a4esl.org/q/h/dt/ho39.html

Essay Planning continued…Text

evidence

Persuasive plan:• Abigail: Victim or Perpetrator?

2. Evidence of this can be found in Act____

Plan out your arguments based on the information in the boxes list above. Each box should contain only ONE sentence.

3. On the other hand some may think that Abigail is …

4. One could wonder if…

5. We must make sure that we don’t feed this kind of hysteria because

1. ThesisAbigail is a perpetrator because…

OR Abigail is a victim because

2. 3. 4. 5. 1.

Run on and Comma Splice Activity

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/quizzes/runons_quiz.htm

http://wps.prenhall.com/chet_smith_english_10/108/27805/7118326.cw/content/index.html

Abigail – a victim or a perpetrator?

Locate a planning partner who shares similar views on the subject. Together search the textbook for

textual evidence to support your arguments.

Abigail – Victim? Abigail – Perpetrator?

Recall those who sat aroundyou during the debate…

Sample QuoteThesis statement

Abigail is a victim because she’s an orphan who has not been protected, a victim of statutory rape, and her name is being slandered in the town.

Quote to support thesis:Abigail even has to defend her honor with her uncle, who is supposed to be her protector, because he too accuses her of being dishonorable when he says, “I have given you a home, child, I have put clothes upon your back – now give me upright answer. Your name in the town – it is entirely white, is it not?” (p. 1131-32)Remember your OER strategies!

Abigail – Victim or Perpetrator?With a partner who agrees with you on the issue, do the following:1. Find textual evidence from the book where Abigail

says or does something that reveals whether she is a victim or a perpetrator.

2. Find textual evidence from the book where other characters say something to or about Abigail that reveals whether she is a victim or a perpetrator.

3. Find textual evidence from the book where Abigail’s thoughts or actions reveal insights to her motives or values.Be sure to write down all quotes that support your claim, why it’s important, and the page numbers. You can paraphrase as needed.

READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will continue to interpret The Crucible and plan our persuasive essay.

Warm up: 1. Get a folder from the back of the room to create your writing folder.2. Put your name and class period on it.3. Write a 60 Second Recap (summary) on

what’s occurred in The Crucible thus far. Summarize Act 1 & 2.

4. What is a rhetorical device?

September 25, 2012

READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will continue to interpret The Crucible and plan our persuasive essay.

Warm up: 1. Write a 60 Second Recap (summary)

on what’s occurred in The Crucible thus far. Summarize Act 1 & 2.

2. What is a persuasive appeal?

September 25, 2012

Crucible Summary – Act 1 & 2•Abigail is accused of dancing in the woods•Abigail starts accusing others of witchcraft•Abigail is accused of having an affair with John Proctor•Elizabeth Proctor has been arrested for witchcraft and taken to jail

Somebody wanted but so then

Abigail wanted avoid being accused of witchcraft but the evidence led back to her so she accused Tituba then all the girls start to accused innocent people in the town.

Persuasive appealsWhat types of arguments will you use?

• Ethos – credibility/celebrity

• Pathos – emotional appeal

• Logos – logical/reasonable

Persuasive Appeals in the media

•Allstate – Safe Drivers•Dorito’s – Little Boy •McDonald’s - LeBron

Name that appeal!

What type of persuasive appeal is this?

What type of persuasive appeal is this?

What type of persuasive appeal is this?

FULL VERSION McDonald's Commercial with LeBron James and Dwight Howard - YouTube2_WMV V9.wmv

Planning Guide Set up

Text evidence

Persuasive plan:• Abigail: Victim or Perpetrator?

2. Evidence of this can be found in Act____

Plan out your arguments based on the information in the boxes list above. Each box should contain only ONE sentence.

3. On the other hand some may think that Abigail is …

4. One could wonder if…

5. We must make sure that we don’t feed this kind of hysteria because

1. ThesisAbigail is a perpetrator because…

OR Abigail is a victim because

2. 3. 4. 5. 1.

Essay Planning continued…Text

evidence

READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will write a persuasive essay about Abigail using textual evidence from The Crucible.

Warm up:

Examine your neighbor’s essay plan. Does the kernel essay portion make sense? Do they have textual evidence to support their reasons?

September 26, 2012

Use your plan to write/type your essay. Upon completion, get

with a peer to revise and edit

your essay draft.Text

evidence

READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will complete our persuasive essay and begin Act 3 of The Crucible.

Warm up:

Exam neighbor’s your thesis statement. Does the thesis statement have strong reasons that can be supported? Does the text evidence they chose support their thesis statement?

September 27, 2012

Use your plan to write/type your essay. Upon completion, get

with a peer to revise and edit your essay draft

READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will interpret and analyze Act 3-4 of The Crucible.

Warm up: • Hysteria, extreme fear plays an important role in The Crucible.

Create a two-column chart of events that have occurred thus far illustrating the villagers acting on fears that are justified vs. fears that are irrational. Be prepared to share.

• How does McCarthyism relate to The Crucible? See page 1132 if you need help.

September 27, 2012

The Context - The Crucible

Use your plan to write/type your essay. Upon completion, get

with a peer to revise and edit

your essay draft. Then type your final draft and place it into the

drop box on LMS.

Persuasive Paper Peer RevisingWORD CHOICE GREEN - CIRCLEHow can the introduction be improved?

Should they open with a pertinent question?Should they open with an interesting fact?Should they open with an interesting quote?Would it be a good idea to start the essay with a descriptive segment (describing the issue)?

Transitions?Where should transitions be added?What transition words at the beginning or end of paragraphs should be changed to improve the paper?

What is the Tone/attitude of the paper? What words contribute to the overall tone/attitude of the piece? Is it consistent throughout? What words should be changed or added to contribute to a consistent tone?

Thesis StatementIs the thesis simple, clear, and to the point? Is the thesis too wordy or confusing?

ORGANIZATION RED - SQUAREHow is the paper organized? Are the reasons in the thesis supported with facts, textual evidence or quotes?Was the paper written from the planning guide?

Place a red square around items in the planning guide that are not in the paper. Did the writer address the points in the thesis statement and stay on topic throughout the paper? Place a square around items that are off topic.

Transitions? Do the transition words contribute to the organization of the paper (first, second, third – or, initially, on the other hand, lastly – etc.)?

Place a red square around transition words that do not fit the structure and organization of the paper.

SENTENCE FLUENCY BLACK - UNDERLINERepeating words

Underline the first word in each sentence. Verify that the same word has not been used more than 2 times to begin a sentence within a paragraph. Suggest a way to revise the sentences (combine sentences, delete words, etc.)

Sentence Variety Underline 2 places where the author could combine sentencesUnderline places where the author has fragments or run on sentences.Underline places where the author uses too many simple sentences, and tell them to combine sentences in these areas.

Persuasive Paper Peer EditingCAPITALIZATION ORANGEPlace an orange triangle around words that should NOT be capitalized.

USAGE BLACKCircle all the words that are used improperly (homonyms, symbols that should be words

written out, unclear pronouns, etc.). Most common errors: to, two, too; they’re, their, there; where, were; and, &; its, it’s; choose, chose; effect, affect)

PUNCTUATION GREENCircle every punctuation mark at the end of the sentence. If there is no punctuation in a

place where its needed, place a circle where it is supposed to be.

SPELLING REDPlace a square around misspelled words. Also place a square around text message words

and abbreviations.

SENTENCE STRUCTURE YELLOWHighlight sentence fragments and run on sentences.

Read Act 3 – p. 1187

READ the objective/student expectation for today. Re-write it in your own words in your spiral notebook.We will conclude our study of The Crucible and complete an exam review.

Warm up: 1. Turn in your persuasive essay if you’ve written your

draft, completed the peer revising and editing process, and written your final copy.

2. What is a tragic hero? (p. 1216)Do you believe John Proctor is a tragic hero? Why? Why not?

September 28, 2012

Continue peer revising and editing as needed. Upon completion, type your final draft and

place it into the drop box on LMS.

Persuasive Paper Peer RevisingWORD CHOICE GREEN - CIRCLEHow can the introduction be improved?

Should they open with a pertinent question?Should they open with an interesting fact?Should they open with an interesting quote?Would it be a good idea to start the essay with a descriptive segment (describing the issue)?

Transitions?Where should transitions be added?What transition words at the beginning or end of paragraphs should be changed to improve the paper?

What is the Tone/attitude of the paper? What words contribute to the overall tone/attitude of the piece? Is it consistent throughout? What words should be changed or added to contribute to a consistent tone?

Thesis StatementIs the thesis simple, clear, and to the point? Is the thesis too wordy or confusing?

ORGANIZATION RED - SQUAREHow is the paper organized? Are the reasons in the thesis supported with facts, textual evidence or quotes?Was the paper written from the planning guide?

Place a red square around items in the planning guide that are not in the paper. Did the writer address the points in the thesis statement and stay on topic throughout the paper? Place a square around items that are off topic.

Transitions? Do the transition words contribute to the organization of the paper (first, second, third – or, initially, on the other hand, lastly – etc.)?

Place a red square around transition words that do not fit the structure and organization of the paper.

SENTENCE FLUENCY BLACK - UNDERLINERepeating words

Underline the first word in each sentence. Verify that the same word has not been used more than 2 times to begin a sentence within a paragraph. Suggest a way to revise the sentences (combine sentences, delete words, etc.)

Sentence Variety Underline 2 places where the author could combine sentencesUnderline places where the author has fragments or run on sentences.Underline places where the author uses too many simple sentences, and tell them to combine sentences in these areas.

Persuasive Paper Peer EditingCAPITALIZATION ORANGEPlace an orange triangle around words that should NOT be capitalized.

USAGE BLACKCircle all the words that are used improperly (homonyms, symbols that should be words

written out, unclear pronouns, etc.). Most common errors: to, two, too; they’re, their, there; where, were; and, &; its, it’s; choose, chose; effect, affect)

PUNCTUATION GREENCircle every punctuation mark at the end of the sentence. If there is no punctuation in a

place where its needed, place a circle where it is supposed to be.

SPELLING REDPlace a square around misspelled words. Also place a square around text message words

and abbreviations.

SENTENCE STRUCTURE YELLOWHighlight sentence fragments and run on sentences.

Read Act 4 – p. 1217

Homework – Online Literature Discussion

• Respond to the question, do you believe John Proctor is a tragic hero? Explain your answer.

• Formulate your initial answer to the question as a thesis statement. John Proctor is/isn’t a tragic hero because __________, __________, and ____________.

• Respond to at least two other people. Make sure everyone one has a response. Points will be lost if everyone is not brought into the discussion.

• DUE by Tuesday, October 2nd.