volcanic eruption. super sentences - the process start with a boring sentence this sentence should...
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Volcanic eruption
Super Sentences - The Process• Start with a boring sentence This sentence
should be connected to the book/topic you are studying – e.g. newspapers
• Look at different ways of changing sentence (match to the different techniques used)
• Work collaboratively (with a partner) to improve a new sentence
• Share some of your improved sentences• As a class see you can shared write (using a
combination of your ideas) to come up with a super sentence
Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption.
Drop in an embedded clause
Adjectival – where, which, who, that
Adverbial – because, when, in order to
Add some words
(adjectives, adverbs)
Add a fact Add a direct
quote into the sentence
Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption.
Drop in an embedded clause
Adjectival – where, which, whoAdverbial –
because, when, in order to
Add some words
(adjectives, adverbs)
Add a factAdd a direct
quote into the sentence
• Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption “It was a beautiful day but suddenly thick smoke and ash came pouring down the mountainside,” said one eye witness.
• Hikers on Mount Ontake, began to trembling with fear as they were caught out by a terrifying and deadly eruption.
• Hikers on Mount Ontake, which had been dormant for the last few years, were caught out by an eruption.
• Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by an eruption, which killed at least 36 people.
Hikers on Mount Ontake were caught out by a deadly eruption that killed at least 36 people, despite it being dormant for the past few years, “It was a beautiful day but suddenly thick smoke and ash came pouring down the mountainside.” said one terrified eye witness.
Fresh eruptions stopped the rescuers hunt.
Drop in an embedded clause
Adjectival – where, which, who, that
Adverbial – because, when, in order to
Add some words
(adjectives, adverbs)
Add a fact Add a direct
quote into the sentence
Fresh eruptions stopped the rescuers hunt.
Drop in an embedded clause
Adjectival – where, which, who
Adverbial – because, when, in order to
Add some words
(adjectives, adverbs)
Add a factAdd a direct
quote into the sentence
Survivors told reporters that they thought they would die.
Drop in an embedded clause
Adjectival – where, which,
whoAdverbial –
because, when, in order to
Add some words
(adjectives, adverbs)
Add a fact Add a direct
quote into the sentence
Survivors told reporters that they thought they would die.
Drop in an embedded clause
Adjectival – where, which, who, that
Adverbial – because, when, in
order to
Add some words
(adjectives, adverbs)
Add a factAdd a direct
quote into the sentence
What is the purpose and who is the audience for our journalistic
writing ?• What are the main features we would
expect to find in this type of report?
Highlight/underline/circle features
• Facts - highlight
• Direct quotes - underline
• Emotive Language - circle
Task – Shared write
• Work together to write the middle of the report as a shared write.
• What needs to be included ?
• Make sure you use direct and reported speech, facts, emotive language.....
Plenary• How could
we end our report?
• Think, pair, share.