Q1 This candidate scores full marks in the opening sentence.

1 mark for idea of diverse ‘wide variety of fruit’

1 mark for idea of attractive ‘pleasant scent’

(2 marks) 2 marks for

detailed/insightful comment on connotations/alliteration of ‘deeply disturbing’ which the candidate links to unnatural ‘macabre/magnitude of unnatural feeling’

1 mark for more basic comment on repetition of ‘no’ to suggest how much of nature is missing

1 mark for more basic comment on ‘single’ which continues idea of empty ‘devoid’

(4 marks)

1 mark for more basic comment on ‘crammed’ suggesting stifling conditions – ‘squished in together’

1 mark for idea of the list highlighting the repetitive/limiting nature of the cows’ lives, ‘none of which…dull and lifeless’ (Although this answer looks detailed, the first part of it relies too closely on the wording of the passage ‘fed/milked/injected’ to gain 2 marks)

0 marks for comment on ‘grotesquely’ as it is merely assertion

(2 marks)

Q4

2 marks for insightful comment on key point ‘suggesting that they too are doomed’ supported by appropriate quotation and reference

(2 marks)

Q5 – Understanding question – note that the candidate has made one more point than marks available to play safe.

0 marks for lift of ‘local produce’

1 mark for idea of easing pressure on farmers ‘super farms’

1 mark for idea of buying environmentally friendly food

1 mark for idea of consumers’ desire to buy less expensive food

1 mark for idea of unconcerned about the origins of food ‘don’t care

2 marks for detailed/insightful comment on ‘dirty secret’ involving ‘dodgy dealings’ and the ‘truth being kept’ from the public

1 mark for more basic comment on the image of ‘factory farms’.

1 mark for more basic comment on the list emphasising the range of stories by people affected

Q5 – Understanding question – note that the candidate has made one more point than marks available to play safe.

0 marks for lift of ‘local produce’

1 mark for idea of easing pressure on farmers ‘super farms’

1 mark for idea of buying environmentally friendly food

1 mark for idea of consumers’ desire to buy less expensive food

1 mark for idea of unconcerned about the origins of food ‘don’t care

1 mark for idea of waste

1 mark for idea of overpowering smell

1 mark for idea of blight on the landscape

(3 marks)

2 marks for holistic (overall), insightful comments dealing with the last paragraph’s effectiveness in terms of its structure and emotional impact ‘doomed to have intensive farms’, ‘sneaky… into society unnoticed’

(2 marks)

1 mark for intensive farming may have a negative impact on human health

0 marks for factory farming’s growth in the UK as this is not a key area of agreement

1 mark for undue stress and suffering caused to animals

2 marks for detailed/insightful use of supporting evidence

(4 marks)