Wednesday, Oct. 101. Review Vocab #3 (test Mon.)2. QW #8 (Show, Don't Tell)3. Essay openers

I CAN:* learn new vocabulary & use it correctly* choose a topic & identify & select the most significant & relevant information to develop & share with my audience* develop interesting leads for personal narrative* showing not telling in our writing

Show, Don't Tell - making your essay engaging

Lot's of us write "and then" stories...

College admissions officers get as frustrated as Ashton Kutcher does in this video!

What are some other ways I can make my writing more interesting, you ask?

IMAGERY and FIGURATIVE LANGUAGEto the rescue!Imagery

words & phrases that paint a picture in your mindmake you feel like you are actually thereappeal to the 5 senses  *sight *sound *taste *touch *smell

Figurative Languagesimile - comparison of 2 unlike things using "LIKE" or "AS"metaphor - comparison of 2 unlike things WITHOUT "like" or "as"paradox - statement that seems false, but is truehyperbole - exaggeration

NO AND THEN!

Amateur writes: Bill was nervous.

Professional: Bill sat in a dentist’s waiting room, peeling the skin at the edge of his thumb, until the raw, red flesh began to show. Biting the torn cuticle, he ripped it away, and sucked at the warm sweetness of his own blood.

Using Imagery and Sensory Details

Amateur: “Mary was tired.”

Professional: “Mary shuffled into the kitchen, yawning and blinking. Collapsing into a chair, she closed her eyes, crossed her arms for a pillow, and slowly tucked her head onto the fold.”

Using Imagery and Sensory Details

Amateur: J was nervous.

Professional: “So now my mouth gets dry and my hands start to shake..."

Using Imagery and Sensory Details

QW #8 - Show, Don't Tell

1. Pick a friend2. Think of an adjective to describe that friend3. Without using the adjective or any synonyms, write a paragraph that shows why the adjective describes your friend (use anecdotes/stories)

Essay Openers

Positive Influence EssaysI can say with certainty that there is nothing that has more of a positive effect on my life than Latin. Of course other things have grabbed my interest over the years, like poetry, math, singing, and women, but my true passion is for the Classics.

Activities/Interests EssaysMy coach always tells me that there is some reason why we, as debaters, can take four weeks out of our summer vacation, away from our friends and our families, to enclose ourselves in lecture halls and cramped dorm rooms to learn the depths and intricacies of debate. He has never told me what this reason is, but now that I'm beginning my senior year, I think I finally understand why.

Beginning with an Anecdote"We have to get to this turtle!" Mike yelled through the roaring wind and fierce rain that was pummeling our faces, when suddenly an ATV hit a bump and started pulling wildly to the left.

anecdoteszingersstraightforward statementsquotes