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RW5 Fall 2-2013

Unit 1: Mickeys Team Date: Novembe 20

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2013Wok Ty"e: #ssay Mec!anics 1

Witin$ Woks!o" 1

%t&'ents Name: ((((((((((((((((((

Final Total: (()25

Before you start, please check the rubric and understand clearly what you are

doing and where marks are allotted. Also, note well, that there is a mark for your

overall use of grammar, punctuation, spelling, sentence structure, etc.

Rubric

*nto'&ction

Title )2

+ook )2

,eneal %tatements )2

T!esis %tatement )2

oncl&sion )5

To"ic %entences

.'e )3

To"ic sent/ 1 )2

To"ic sent/ 2 )2

T!esis %tatements

T!% 1 )2/5

T!/% 2 )2/5

Final Total )25


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A. INTR!"#TIN

The following essay needs an introduction paragraph, with a title, hook, topic

sentence, general sentencesand thesis statement. The essay is appro$. %&' words,

and your paragraph should be minimum 40 words.

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Fist o all many o t!e tec!nolo$ies e take o $ante' to'ay ee oi$inate'

t!anks to s"ace eseac!/ Take satellite tec!nolo$y o eam"le !ic! e 'e"en' ono boa'castin$ an' eat!e oecastin$/ Wit!o&t satellites e o&l' not be able to

ollo $lobal events as t!ey !a""en no $ive "o"&lations any anin$ o a""oac!in$

stoms/ %"ace eseac! !as also le' to t!e 'evelo"ment o ne li$!tei$!t mateials

t!at oe &s !eat "otection an' enable oo' "esevation/ T!eeoe t!e c!allen$e o

sen'in$ !&man bein$s into s"ace !as oten 'iven t!e 'evelo"ment o ne tec!nolo$ies

t!at beneit o& evey'ay lives/

%econ' e cannot oesee t!e 'istant &t&e so e o&$!t to 'evelo" t!e ca"ability to

esca"e om t!e eat!/ ,a'&ally e ae leanin$ !o !&mans can s&vive o lon$"eio's in s"ace an' even tavel to ot!e "lanets in t!e &t&e/ * s"ace e"loation is

!alte' t!is val&able knole'$e ill neve be ac4&ie'/ *t is t&e t!at envionmental

'est&ction is also a seio&s iss&e b&t it is also t&e t!at e emain 'e"en'ent on o&

envionment i e neve acce"t t!e c!allen$e o e"loin$ ot!e ol's/

*n concl&sion !ile e &n'o&bte'ly ace seio&s "oblems on o& on "lanet it is

im"eative t!at e contin&e to e"loe s"ace/ T!is ill "omote &t!e tec!nolo$ical

a'vances as ell as "ovi'e a "ossible means o esca"e s!o&l' eat! become

&nin!abitable in &t&e/ *'eally all nations s!o&l' coo"eate in t!e a'vancement os"ace eseac!/


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B. #N#(")IN

The essay below has lost its conclusion. Add a final paragraph that wraps it up.

*our paragraph should be at least +' words.

hy -ublic $ams are /ood

by an nonymo&s Teac!e

Many st&'ents !ate "&blic eams in t!ei 6evel 3 co&ses an' on'e

!y t!ey !ave to ite t!em/ lt!o&$! some st&'ents e"eience test aniety

an' in' it !a' to "e"ae * believe "&blic eams ae a $oo' t!in$/ T!ey oce

st&'ents to take t!e co&ses seio&sly t!ey oce teac!es to teac! to a stan'a'

an' t!ey ceate a level "layin$ iel' o all st&'ents/ Fo t!ese easons * t!ink

Neo&n'lan' st&'ents s!o&l' contin&e to ite 6evel 3 "&blic eams/

s a st&'ent * as nevo&s abo&t my "&blic eams 7,a'e 11 in t!ose'ays89 &st as st&'ents to'ay ae/ ;&t * st&'ie' m&c! !a'e o t!ose co&ses

an' "obably leane' t!e mateial bette/ s a teac!e * notice st&'ents ae a

less likely to ski" classes i t!ey ae takin$ a "&blic eam co&se/


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1.The following group of sentences can be rearranged to form a paragraph. 2ake

a note of the order in which they should be placed and circle the number that

corresponds to what you think is the topic sentence.

1/. co&se since most st&'ents aent likely to ea t!ei &nioms ate sc!ool

"aents also !ave to "&c!ase evey'ay clot!es like eans s!its an' skits a''in$

si$niicantly to t!e amo&nt t!ey m&st s"en' on clot!es/

3/ "olicy t!at e4&ies "&blic sc!ool st&'ents to ea &nioms o&l' be a ba' i'ea

o seveal easons.

4/ *n a''ition &nioms ae e"ensive/

%/ +oeve makin$ all st&'ents 'ess t!e same says t!at in'ivi'&ality is less im"otant

t!an conomity

5.%t&'ents o&l' nee' to !ave at least to com"lete sets o &nioms to allo o

la&n'ein$ !ic! co&l' be vey costly o "aents/

&.To concl&'e t!e ol' alea'y !as too many olloes so "&blic sc!ools s!o&l'allo st&'ents t!e ee'om to e"ess t!ei &ni4&e "esonalities t!o&$! t!ei clot!in$/

+/F&t!emoe '&in$ t!e sc!ool yea st&'ents may o&t$o t!ei &nioms o ot!e

clot!in$ inceasin$ t!e cost o some amilies/

6/ Finally a &niom "olicy i$noes amilies i$!ts an' ee'om to make clot!in$

'ecisions t!at ae best o t!em/

7/ etainly sc!ools s!o&l' be able to estict clot!in$ t!at eat&es obscene o

obectionable slo$ans o t!at e"oses too m&c! skin /

1'/Fist o all no style o clot!in$ looks $oo' on eveyone/


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11.*n t!ei "e-teen an' teen yeas st&'ents ae es"ecially sensitive abo&t t!ei

a""eaance an' !avin$ to ea clot!in$ t!at 'oesnt it t!em ell ill 'o little to !el"

t!ei a$ile sel-esteems/

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3. Now write two topic sentences for N of the following topics9 circle the letter

of your topic choice. *ou must choose two different controlling ideas for the same

topic.

a. T!e lie o t!e ty"ical colle$e st&'ent is c!aacteiAe' by time s"ent st&'yin$

atten'in$ class an' socialiAin$ it! "ees/

b. +i$! sc!ool $a'&ates s!o&l' be e4&ie' to take a yea o to "&s&e comm&nity

sevice "oects beoe entein$ colle$e in o'e to incease t!ei mat&ity an' $lobal

aaeness/

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/ T!e meican my ocks8

;/ My at!e 'ie' in T!e ,&l Wa/

/ T!ee ae ot!e "eace&l altenatives to a/

D/ %!o&l' ei$!teen yea ol's be oce' to e$iste o t!e 'at?

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/ Teac!es s!o&l' be bette "e"ae' to 'eal it! all "oblems t!at mi$!t aise/

;/ %!o&l' teac!es be ocibly etie' at 50?

/ Teac!es ok !a'/

D/ W!at is a teac!e=

3. rite a thesis statement for each of the following topics0


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W!ile st&'ents ill "obably alays eel eams ae &nai an' too !a' as a teac!e *

!ave to say *>m totally inavo& o t!em/ * like t!e act t!at t!ey make st&'ents st&'y

!a'e teac!es teac! bette an' $ive eveyone a c!ance to be &'$e' in a ai an'

&nbiase' ay/ * !ave ta&$!t in ot!e "ovinces it!o&t "&blic eams an' * !o"e

"&blic eams contin&e to be "at o o& e'&cation system !ee in Neo&n'lan'/

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"olicy t!at e4&ies "&blic sc!ool st&'ents to ea &nioms o&l' be a ba' i'ea o

seveal easons/ Fist o all no style o clot!in$ looks $oo' on eveyone/ *n t!ei "e-

teen an' teen yeas st&'ents ae es"ecially sensitive abo&t t!ei a""eaance an' !avin$

to ea clot!in$ t!at 'oesnt it t!em ell ill 'o little to !el" t!ei a$ile sel-

esteems/ *n a''ition &nioms ae e"ensive/ %t&'ents o&l' nee' to !ave at least to

com"lete sets o &nioms to allo o la&n'ein$ !ic! co&l' be vey costly o

"aents/ . co&se since most st&'ents aent likely to ea t!ei &nioms ate sc!ool

"aents also !ave to "&c!ase evey'ay clot!es like eans s!its an' skits a''in$

si$niicantly to t!e amo&nt t!ey m&st s"en' on clot!es/ F&t!emoe '&in$ t!e sc!ool

yea st&'ents may o&t$o t!ei &nioms o ot!e clot!in$ inceasin$ t!e cost o

some amilies/ Finally a &niom "olicy i$noes amilies i$!ts an' ee'om to make

clot!in$ 'ecisions t!at ae best o t!em/ etainly sc!ools s!o&l' be able to estict

clot!in$ t!at eat&es obscene o obectionable slo$ans o t!at e"oses too m&c! skin/

+oeve makin$ all st&'ents 'ess t!e same says t!at in'ivi'&ality is less im"otant

t!an conomity/ To concl&'e t!e ol' alea'y !as too many olloes so "&blic

sc!ools s!o&l' allo st&'ents t!e ee'om to e"ess t!ei &ni4&e "esonalities t!o&$!

t!ei clot!in$/

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