EditingNotebookExercises35AvUseActiveVoiceWheneverPossible
a. Theevaluationwasperformedbyus.Weperformedtheevaluation.
b. Unlessyoupaymewithinthreedays,mylawyerwillbecontacted.Iwillcontactmylawyerunlessyoupaymewithinthreedays.
c. Hardhatsshouldbewornatalltimes.Constructionworkersshouldwearhardhatsatalltimes.
d. Itwasdecidedtorejectyouroffer.Thebossdecidedtorejectyouroffer.
e. Ourtestresultswillbesenttoyouassoonasverificationiscompleted.Ourlabwillsendyouthetestresultsassoonasweverifyyourcoverage.
PvUsePassiveVoiceSelectively
a. Joe’scompanyfiredhim.Joewasfired.
b. Apowersurgedestroyedmorethantwothousandlinesofnewapplicationsprogram.Morethantwothousandlinesofnewapplicationsweredestroyedinthestorm.
c. Youarepayinginadequateattentiontoworkersafety.Workersafetyisreceivinginadequateattention.
d. Youarecheckingtemperaturestoofrequently.Thetemperatureisbeingcheckedtoofrequently.
e. Youdidapoorjobeditingthisreport.Thisreportwaspoorlyedited.
Asmoke‐filledroomcausesnotonlytearyeyesandrunnynosesbutalsocanalterpeople’shearingandvision,aswellascreatingdangerouslevelsofcarbonmonoxide,especiallyforpeoplewithheartandlungailments,whosehealthisparticularlythreatenedbysecondhandsmoke.Asmoke‐filledroomcausesnotonlytearyeyesandrunnynoses,butitalsoalterspeople’shearingandvision.Itcreatesdangerouslevelsofcarbonmonoxide,especiallyforpeoplewithheartandlungailments.Secondhandsmokethreatenstheseindividuals’healthinparticular.
ExampleofEditingApplicationtoYourOwnTextUseexcerptofyourownwriting—1to2pagesSpacetexttoallowforeditingFix/correctfollowingeditingtechniqueIdentifycorrectusageofediting/writingprinciple
