Feedback, Essay 1Peer Response

Essay 1, Summary / Analysis

Feedback, Essay 1Intro to Descriptive vs. Prescriptive Linguistics…

Idea versus Mechanics… Etymology of the word essay (Fr., essaier, to attempt)

Sentence Errors – Basic VocabularyRun-on sentence = 2 or more independent

clauses linked together with a comma, or with no punctuation at all.

The party last night was fun, I arrived late to class this morning. (run-on sentence)

Independent clause = a group of words that contains a subject and a verb, makes sense together, and can stand alone as a complete sentence

Independent clause the party last night was fun

Sentence ErrorsIndependent clause I arrived late to classReading is fundamental. (“Reading” = gerund)Gerund = verb used as a noun (subject) Playing in the park was fun as a kid. (“Playing in the

park” = gerund phrase)Dependent clause = a group of words that contains a

subject and a verb, makes sense together, but cannot stand alone as a complete sentence (usually because it contains a subordinating word)

A dependent clause needs to be attached to an independent clause (or add more words, or eliminate the subordinating word).

Sentence ErrorsI ran an independent clauseBecause I ran a dependent clause (not a

complete sentence)Because it is fun a dependent clauseI enjoy playing the French horn, because it is fun.

(We’ve attached the dependent clause to the independent clause.)

Because = a subordinating conjunction

Sentence Errors - ExamplesR.O. – Why?Reading is fundamental, personally I would

prefer to turn a page than scroll a kindle.Fragment – Why?For example, when people thought television

would banish the radio, and movies the live theater.

Sentence Errors - Examples

He then explains how the history of literacy, how thousands of years ago men would make meaningful marks and how they would record the most important events in the past and because of it that led to more advanced writing.

Sentence Error? Why?

Format, and Peer EditingSee p. 46 for Formatting essays

Peer EditingHighlight your thesis sentence, both copies…Begin with first essay (Peer Editing, 1st one)Groups of 5Pass essay to your left (4 times)Please write 3 positives and 3 areas to work

onEdit what you can on the essay itself

(emphasis on writing complete sentences)