Let’s begin with revision

• Star your topic sentence• Underline your three examples• Highlight your explanation• Put a # next to your conclusion

Topic Sentence

Does it have in it:• “The No-Guitar Blues”• Gary Soto• Fausto• The character trait you came up with

Three examples

• Ask yourself….Do these support my character trait?

Do you have transition words? If not, add one in to show you are moving from example to example:

For example FirstFor instance NextIn addition Finally

Explanation

• Does your explanation follow each example?• Is it longer than your example?• This should only be your thinking….!• Does it connect back to your example? • Does it explain why your example helps to

show the character trait?

Concluding Sentence

• Does it restate your character trait?

• Does it explain why Fausto having this character trait was important to the overall story?

Find your weakest explanation…

• Reword or revise it to make it clearer.

• Add a thought. You can say something like:This shows Fausto was (character trait) because………

Now edit

• Is each word in the title of the short story capitalized?

• Do you have a period at the end of each sentence?

• Look for spelling, capitalization, and punctuation.

Take out…

• The words:• You• Me• I

• For example: “I am writing about Fausto” or “I think..” or “You can see”

Edit

• Is it double spaced, Times New Roman Font?

• Does the heading look like this, double spaced?Name

English 7

Period

October 1, 2014

Character Analysis Paragraph

Peer review

• Now, pass on to a partner….

Your Plan

Revision: Look at your partner’s comments and write down how you will revise your work

Editing: Choose one of these two additional editing methods:

• Read the work aloud to find missing words, incomplete sentences, and other unclear wording.

• Have a parent or other adult read your work and comment.