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THE LOST TOOLS OF WRITING STUDENT’S WORKBOOK: DEMO

David Kern

 The CiRCE Institute  

Concord, NC    

www.circeinstitute.org

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The Lost Tools of Writing™, Level 1 4th Edition © 2011

4190 Brownwood Lane, Concord, NC, 28027 704-786-9684

www.circeinstitute.org

All rights reserved. No part of this program may be reproduced in any form, by any

Means, without written permission from the publisher.

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Permissions

 TEACHERS who purchase or for whom schools purchase the complete The Lost Tools of Writing™ package are granted permission to duplicate pages from the Teacher’s Guide for their personal use. They are also granted permission to copy pages from the Teacher Guide’s as reference pages for their students, including, but not limited to, the assessment guides provided in this Teacher’s Guide.

One Student Workbook should be purchased for each student who is taught The Lost Tools of Writing™. Some Invention worksheets will be imitated more than once. If the teacher or student wishes to copy these pages, they may do so, but only for the individual student who possesses the Student Workbook. Students are also encouraged to imitate the pattern of the worksheet on their own paper. Permission is not granted to copy worksheets or exercise forms or any other material from one student’s workbook for other students.

Permission is granted for quotations and short excerpts to be used in published materials with the condition that the source of those quotations and excerpts is included in the published materials.

For longer excerpts, please contact us at www.circeinstitute.org.    

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Acknowledgements  

THE LOST TOOLS OF WRITING™ is the product of a vast team effort. Hundreds of teachers and students have experienced The Lost Tools of Writing™ training and many have been generous with their suggestions and feedback. This fourth edition is our enthusiastic “Thank You!!” to everyone who contributed ideas to help us make The Lost Tools of Writing™ the best composition program in the world. The authors of this Fourth Edition are Andrew Kern, Michael “Buck” Holler, Camille Goldston, David Wright, Leah Lutz, and Renee Mathis. Special acknowledgement goes to the members and alumni of the CiRCE Institute Apprenticeship who have taught, practiced, reviewed, and developed The Lost Tools of Writing™ in their various contexts. Arlene Roemer de Feltre helped revise and modify parts of this Teacher’s Guide as well as many of the worksheets in the Student’s Workbook. Alexandra Houck also developed many of worksheets in the Student’s Workbook. Furthermore, thank you to all who have participated in a Lost Tools Of Writing™ Workshop, to teachers who have been part of an in-house Lost Tools Of Writing™ Teacher Training, to parents who stole a Saturday from their busy schedules, and to heads of school who demonstrated their commitment to classical education when they supported their teachers’ efforts to achieve excellence in both classical composition and classical teaching. The CiRCE Institute is a not-for-profit Corporation, dependent upon, and grateful for, the generosity of benefactors who share her vision for classical education. If not for the tremendous support of so many fellow believers, The Lost Tools of Writing™ would never have seen the light of day. You have sustained us, and it would be wrong to fail to acknowledge and thank you.                                      

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Table of Contents  

Student’s Workbook  

 

Lesson One: Rudimentary Persuasive Essay  Invention The “ANI” Chart .......................................................................................... 3

Arrangement From “ANI” to Outline ………………………………………………………….4 Template: Rudimentary Persuasive Essay .............................................. 6

Lesson Two: Introductory Persuasive Essay  Invention Introduction to the 5 Common Topics ..................................................... 11

 Arrangement Worksheet A: A Guide To Sorting ……………………………..…………….13 Worksheet B: The Introductory Persuasive Essay ……………………….16 Template: The Introductory Persuasive Essay ....................................... 18 Elocution Scheme 1: Parallellism .............................................................................. 19

Lesson Three: Basic Persuasive Essay I  Invention Definition Worksheet I ............................................................................... 27

 Arrangement Worksheet A: Stasis: Guide to Exordium …………………………………...29 Worksheet B: Basic Persuasive Essay with Exordium ……....................30 Template: Basic Persuasive Essay with Exordium………………………..32

           Elocution

Basic Editing: Verbs .................................................................................. .33    

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Lesson Four: Basic Persuasive Essay II  Invention Definition Worksheet II ………………………………….…………………...…43  Arrangement Worksheet A: Guide to Amplification ………………………………...…..…45 Worksheet B: Basic Persuasive Essay with Amplification ……………...47 Template: Basic Persuasive Essay with Amplification …………………..49  Elocution Basic Editing: Subjects ……………..……………………………………….…50 Scheme 2: Antithesis ……………………………………..…………………….59

 Lesson Five: Basic Persuasive Essay III  Invention Comparison: Similarities & Differences …………………………………..…67

 Arrangement Worksheet A: Guide to Division ……………..…………………………….....68 Worksheet B: Basic Persuasive Essay with Division & Distribution…...70 Template: Basic Persuasive Essay with Division & Distribution …….…73 Elocution Nominalization Pattern I: “There is…” …..…………………………………..74 Trope I: Simile …………………………………………………………………....81

 Lesson Six: Basic Persuasive Essay IV  Invention Comparison: Degree & Kind. ………… ................................................... ....89  Arrangement Worksheet A: Guide to Refutation .......................................................... ....90 Worksheet B: Basic Persuasive Essay with Refutation ………………….91 Template: Basic Persuasive Essay with Refutation ……………………...95  Elocution Nominalization Pattern II: Object of a Vacuous Verb ........................... ....97 Nominalization Pattern III: Subject of a Vacuous Verb ………...…..….. 103

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Lesson Seven: Complete Persuasive Essay  Invention Circumstance Worksheet …………………………………………………….113

 Arrangement Worksheet A: Guide to Narratio …………………….………………………115 Worksheet B: Complete Persuasive Essay with Narratio ……………...117 Template: Complete Persuasive Essay with Narratio……………….…..121 Elocution Trope 2: Metaphor …………………………………..…………………………123 Nominalization Pattern IV: A series of nouns joined by prepositions..127

 Lesson Eight: Complete Persuasive Essay Review  Invention Relation Worksheet: Antecedent & Consequent……………………..…..137

 Arrangement Complete Persuasive Essay Review & Practice…………………………..138 Template: Complete Persuasive Essay Review….…………………...…..142 Elocution Scheme 3: Alliteration………………………………………………………....144 Scheme 4: Assonance…………………………………………………………148

 Lesson Nine: Comparison Essay – Themes & Sub-ideas  Invention Relation Worksheet: Cause & Effect………………………........................155

 Arrangement Simple Comparison Essay: Themes & Sub-ideas………………………..156 Template: Simple Comparison Essay……….….…………………………..158  Elocution Trope 3: Personification ……………………………………..……………….159 Trope 4: Apostrophe………………………………...…………………………163      

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Lesson Ten: Comparison Essay – Introduction & Conclusion  Invention Authority Worksheet: Witness……………………………………………….171

 Arrangement Complete Comparison Essay with Introduction & Conclusion………...174 Template: Complete Comparison Essay …………………………………..178 Elocution Scheme 5: Anaphora….…………………………………………………….…180 Scheme 6: Epistrophe…………………………………………………………184

 Lesson Eleven: Comparison Essay Review  Invention Authority Worksheet: Experts…………………………………………...…...191

 Arrangement Complete Comparison Essay: Review & Practice………………………..195 Template: Complete Comparison Essay ………….…………………….... 199 Elocution Trope 5: Hyperbole……………………………………………………………..201 Trope 6: Litotes………………………………………………………………....205 Self-Edit Checklists 209 Glossary 223

Lesson Summaries 231

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::LESSON ONE

{The Rudimentary Persuasive Essay}

                               In this Lesson  - The “ANI” Chart - From “ANI” to Outline - Arrangement for The Rudimentary Persuasive Essay  

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Lesson One Invention THE “ANI” CHART

1. State the issue with which your essay is concerned:        2. Fill out the form below:

Affirmative: Negative: Interesting:                                                                

   

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Lesson One Arrangement From “ANI” to Outline

 Write your issue: ______________________________________________________________________

Thesis and Proof (Note: Only the thesis statement can be a complete sentence.) Using your invention, decide whether you will support the affirmative or negative. Rewrite the issue as a thesis statement: ______________________________________________________________________

Write the first main reason (Proof 1) for your thesis. ______________________________________________________________________

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Write the second main reason (Proof 2) for your thesis. ______________________________________________________________________

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Write the third main reason (Proof 3) for your thesis. ______________________________________________________________________

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Conclusion (Summarize your essay)

Repeat the thesis:

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Repeat the main proofs:

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Introduction (Introduce your essay) Write your thesis: ______________________________________________________________________

Write the enumeration (simply the number of proofs). ______________________________________________________________________

List your three proofs. ______________________________________________________________________

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Arrangement Template 1 Rudimentary Persuasive Outline

 Replace lines that have an asterisk with your information from the Arrangement Worksheet on the previous pages. I. Introduction A. Thesis*

B. Enumeration* C. Exposition 1. Proof 1* 2. Proof 2* 3. Proof 3* II. Proof in three sentences A. Proof I* B. Proof II* C. Proof III* III. Conclusion in one sentence A. Thesis* B. Summary 1. Proof 1* 2. Proof 2* 3. Proof 3*                          

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 Sample: Rudimentary Persuasive Essay Note: The following essay does not include schemes or tropes.  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  for  three  reasons.  Edmund’s  sister  Lucy  warned  him  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil,  he  should  have  seen  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil,  and  he  acted  in  secret.      The  first  reason  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  was  that  his  sister  Lucy  warned  him  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil.  The  second  reason  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  was  that  he  should  have  seen  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil.  The  third  reason  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  was  that  he  acted  in  secret.      Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  because  his  sister  Lucy  warned  him  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil,  he  should  have  seen  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil,  and  he  acted  in  secret.                                                              

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::LESSON TWO

{The Introductory Persuasive Essay}                                      In this Lesson  - Introduction to the Five Common Topics - A Guide to Sorting - Arrangement for The Introductory Persuasive Essay - Scheme 1: Parallelism    

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Lesson Two Invention

Introduction to the Five Common Topics

 

Definition (basic questions) Who or what is X?

What kind of thing is X?

What are the parts of X?

Comparison (basic questions) How is X similar to Y?

How is X different from Y?

Circumstances (basic questions) What was happening in the place with which the question is concerned?

What was happening at the time with which the question is concerned?

Is the affirmative answer to the issue possible?

Why or why not?

If not, should the affirmative answer be attempted?

Is the affirmative answer to the issue probable?

Why or why not?

If not, should the affirmative answer be attempted?

Relationships (basic questions) What happened immediately before the time with which the issue is concerned?

What happened immediately afterward?

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What caused the circumstances of the issue? (i.e., How did things come to be as they

are/were?)

What caused the terms of the issue?

What effects did the circumstances have? (i.e., What resulted from things being the way they

were?)

What effects did the terms have?

What was the purpose of each of the terms?

What was the purpose of the circumstances?

Authority (basic questions) What do witnesses say about the issue?

What do experts say about the issue?

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Lesson Two Arrangement A A Guide To Sorting

Step One: Complete your ANI columns in Invention, ensuring that anything that can be moved from the “I” column to the “A” or “N” column has been moved and that you have used all the assigned topics. Step Two: Sort the items in the A column as follows: Sort into Group 1

Place a symbol by the first item in the list (the symbol works best if it is a sign, such as @ or $).

Look at each following item in the list to determine whether it can be placed in the same group as the first item. Place the symbol you used for the first item beside each succeeding item that can be included in the same group as the first item. You are asking whether each item is the same kind of thing as the leading item, and marking those that are with the same symbol.

Sort into Group 2 Return to the second item in the list and place a different symbol by it. If the second item

was put in a group with the first item, you should place a different symbol beside it. Look at each remaining item in the list to determine whether it can be placed in the same

group as the second item. Place the symbol you used for the second item beside each succeeding item that can be included in the same group as the second item.

Sort into the rest of the groups Move through the entire list, placing a symbol by any item that could be the first member

of a new group. When you are finished, select five groups that you consider most persuasive or significant. Label each of these five groups with a fitting heading or summary statement. This “label”

is a main proof for your thesis. List these five labels below:

1.

2.

3.

4.

5.

Step Three: Sort the items in the N column in the same manner as you did the A column. It is important not to skip this step. Even if you believe that you know what side of the issue you will argue, developing the habit of sorting both columns will prepare you for writing the refutation in Lesson 6 later in the year. 1.

2.

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3.

4.

5.

Step Four: Reflect on the five reasons given for each side of the argument and decide which side you will defend in your essay by selecting A or N. Write the thesis you will defend:

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From the five reasons above, select the three most compelling reasons (we call these compelling reasons “proofs”) for your selection and write them below. Place the least compelling reason second and the most emotionally effective last. 1. _______________________________________________________________

2. ________________________________________________________________

3. ________________________________________________________________

From the sorting you completed above, list three sub-proofs for each proof: 1A. ______________________________________________________________

1B. ______________________________________________________________

1C. ______________________________________________________________

2A. ______________________________________________________________

2B. ______________________________________________________________

2C. ______________________________________________________________

3A. ______________________________________________________________

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3B. ______________________________________________________________

3C. ______________________________________________________________

Use the materials you have reorganized in this sorting exercise to complete Arrangement Worksheet 2B: Introductory Persuasive Essay—Outline.

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Lesson Two Arrangement B The Introductory Persuasive Essay Worksheet

Write the Issue: ______________________________________________________________________

Thesis and Proof (Note: Only the thesis statement needs to be a complete sentence.) Using your invention, decide whether you will support the affirmative or negative case. Rewrite the issue as a thesis statement: ______________________________________________________________________

Write the first main reason (Proof 1) for your thesis. ______________________________________________________________________

List three supporting ideas that defend your first proof. ______________________________________________________________________

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Write the second main reason (Proof 2) for your thesis.

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List three supporting ideas that defend your second proof. ______________________________________________________________________

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Write out the third main reason (Proof 3) for your proof. ______________________________________________________________________

List three supporting ideas that defend your third reason. ______________________________________________________________________

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Conclusion (Write a summary of your essay) Repeat the thesis: ______________________________________________________________________

Repeat the main proofs: ______________________________________________________________________

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Introduction (Introduce your essay) Write your thesis: ______________________________________________________________________

Write the enumeration (simply the number of proofs). ______________________________________________________________________

List your three main proofs. ______________________________________________________________________

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Lesson Two Arrangement Template The Introductory Persuasive Essay

To fill out the introductory persuasive essay template replace the lines that have an asterisk in the template below with your information from the Arrangement Worksheet. I. Introduction

A. Thesis* B. Enumeration* C. Exposition

1. Proof 1* 2. Proof 2* 3. Proof 3*

II. Proof A. Proof I *

1. Support A * 2. Support B * 3. Support C *

B. Proof II * 1. Support A * 2. Support B * 3. Support C *

C. Proof III * 1. Support A * 2. Support B * 3. Support C *

III. Conclusion A. Thesis * B. Summary

1. Proof 1 * 2. Proof 2 * 3. Proof 3 *

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Lesson Two Elocution Scheme 1: Parallelism

 1. Forethought What do we mean when we say two geometric lines are parallel?

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What is a clause?

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What is a phrase?

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What is a subject?

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What is a predicate?

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List and define the parts of speech.

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2. Sentences to contemplate The following sentences, drawn from literary masterpieces, include a clear structure and form.

1. Two things are equally unaccountable to reason… the Wisdom of God, and the

Madness of Man. Alexander Pope

2. What happy centuries gave birth to you? What splendid parents brought you into being?

Virgil, Aeneid, Bk. 1 3. The labour of the righteous tendeth to life: the fruit of the wicked to sin. Proverbs 10:16

The following sentences each contain an awkward construction. Underline the words, clauses, or phrases in each sentence that do not match the others in the same sentence. 1. John swims in the summer, skis in the winter, and John also enjoys it when he gets to play

with Legos. 2. Mrs. Smith told her students they should write in their sleep, that they should not eat too

much, and she was very angry that they forgot to do their homework. 3. Ronald Reagan was an actor, a governor, and then he presided over the country. 4. If you have a nickel, you can buy a piece of gum; people with fifty cents probably could

afford a whole pack of gum. 5. Trees in the springtime—with their buds and fresh leaves—are beautiful, but you’ll find bare-

branched winter trees look spooky. 6. For my birthday, he gave me a necklace, a bracelet, and I liked the new ring too. Notice how each sentence improves, when we change the form. In these sentences, underline the words, phrases, or clauses that are “parallel”. 1. John swims in the summer, skis in the winter, and plays with Legos in the fall. 2. Mrs. Smith told her students that they should write in their sleep, that they should not eat too

much, and that they should remember to do their homework. 3. Ronald Reagan was an actor, a governor, and a president. 4. If you have a nickel, you can buy a piece of gum; if you have fifty cents, you could probably

buy a whole pack of gum. 5. Trees in the springtime—with their buds and fresh leaves—are beautiful, but trees in the

wintertime—with their bare branches and gray bark—are spooky. 6. For my birthday, he gave me a necklace, a bracelet, and a new ring.

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Each sentence above contains a series of items that are words, phrases, or clauses. In the series that contain awkward constructions, the parts of speech in each item are not in the same order as the parts of speech in the other items. In the improved sentences, the parts of speech now line up with each other. (Note that the phrases and clauses do not have to be perfectly parallel as in number 6 above where one item contains an extra word.)

3. Comparison

Compare all the sentences that include parallelism.

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What do all the parallel words, phrases, and clauses have in common?

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How do these parallel words, phrases, and clauses differ from each other?

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We  can  improve  the  form  of  our  sentences  by  taking  the  following  steps:    

1. Find  two  or  more  words,  phrases,  or  clauses  that  make  a  list  and  underline  them.  

 Example:  Basil  of  Caesarea  built  hospitals,  monasteries,  and  he  also  helped  the  children  with  a  place  to  live.    

2. If  one  or  more  parts  do  not  match  the  others,  change  the  unmatching  parts  to  make  all  the  parts  parallel  in  structure.  For  example,  if  the  series  consists  of  nouns,  convert  the  unmatched  part  into  a  noun.  If  the  series  consists  of  verbs,  convert  the  unmatched  part  into  a  verb.  If  the  series  consists  of  phrases  that  each  contain  a  noun  plus  a  preposition,  change  the  unmatched  part  to  a  noun  plus  a  preposition.    

 Example:  Basil  of  Caesarea  built  hospitals,  monasteries,  and  orphanages.      

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4. Explanation Describe parallelism in your own words.

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Explain how to apply it to your own sentences. Review the shaded box above and restate the steps in your own words. ______________________________________________________________________

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5. Practice Find examples of parallelism in the following passages. In each passage, underline at least three parts that exemplify true parallelism.

1. Bow Thy heavens O Lord, and come down; Touch the mountains, that they may smoke. Flash forth lightning and scatter them; Send out Thine arrows and confuse them. Stretch forth Thy hand from on high; Rescue me and deliver me out of great waters, Out of the hand of aliens. —Psalm 144 2. Scrambling, out-facing, fashion-monging boys, That lie and cog and flout, deprave and slander, Go anticly, show outward hideousness, And speak off half a dozen dangerous words, How they might hurt their enemies, if they durst; —Shakespeare, Much Ado About Nothing

The following passages fail to use parallelism correctly. Rewrite the five passages using

parallelism correctly. 1. David likes reading, writing, and debating. Matthew likes football, to swim, and playing

PlayStation. ______________________________________________________________________

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2. The piano student was unsuccessful because she was not attentive during her lesson, did not

practice daily, and her scales were pathetic.

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3. The little boy was told to wash his face, brush his teeth, and he needed to tuck in his shirt.

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4. In order to be healthy one should eat the right foods, he should exercise regularly, and sleep 8

hours per night.

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______________________________________________________________________ 5. Babies are delightful because they smell good some of the time, most of the time they are

happy, and are really cute.

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Three of the six passages below contain correct examples of parallelism, and three do not. Underline the parallel parts in sentences that use parallelism correctly. Explain what is wrong with those that do not.

1. Bill likes hiking, swimming, and to ride a bicycle. ______________________________________________________________________ 2. Jane likes hiking, swimming, and riding a bicycle. ______________________________________________________________________ 3. The student was asked to write his essay thoughtfully, purposefully, and to turn it in on time. ______________________________________________________________________ 4. The student was asked to write her essay thoughtfully, purposefully, and logically. ______________________________________________________________________

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5. As a trade, George Washington surveyed the land. As a general, George Washington surveyed the troops. George Washington also surveyed the country, when he was the first president of the United States of America. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ 6. Jane Austen’s novels relate the following ideas: money and manners, sense and sensibility, and pride and prejudice. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

6. Application Add one instance of parallelism to your essay(s). Sample Essay: Introductory Persuasive Essay

 

With Parallelism   Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  for  three  reasons.  Edmund  purposely  ignored  a  warning,  carelessly  overlooked  the  White  Witch,  and  secretly  followed  Lucy  into  Narnia.       The  first  reason  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  was  that  he  purposely  ignored  a  warning.  The  White  Witch  introduced  herself  to  Edmund  as  “The  Queen  of  Narnia,”  but  Lucy,  who  had  already  met  with  real  creatures  in  Narnia,  called  her  the  “White  Witch.”  We  know  from  fairy  tales  and  literature  that  witches  are  evil.  Therefore  he  should  not  have  followed  evil.     The  second  reason  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  was  that  he  carelessly  overlooked  the  White  Witch.  Initially,  the  White  Witch  was  very  cruel  to  Edmund,  and  his  first  instinct  was  to  be  scared  of  her.  She  fed  him  Turkish  Delights  only  when  she  wanted  to  get  something  from  him.  Edmund,  with  his  own  eyes,  should  have  seen  from  this  interaction  that  the  White  Witch  was  evil.     The  third  reason  Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  was  that  he  secretly  followed  Lucy  into  Narnia.  From  his  very  core,  Edmund  knew  that  he  was  doing  wrong  because  he  secretly  left  Lucy  and  the  Beavers  and  did  not  discuss  his  plan  with  them.  Instead  of  acting  openly,  he  snuck  away,  probably  because  they  would  not  have  gone  along  with  his  plan.  Edmund  knew  that  he  was  betraying  his  family  and  innocent  creatures.       Edmund  should  not  have  followed  the  White  Witch  because  he  purposely  ignored  a  warning,  carelessly  overlooked  the  White  Witch,  and  secretly  followed  Lucy  into  Narnia.  

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Lesson 1 Checklist Rudimentary Persuasive Essay: Outline to Text

  Essay follows Template 1

Introduction has a thesis with enumeration.

The first proof begins as, “The first reason…” followed by the thesis and reason.

The second proof begins as, “The second reason…” followed by the thesis and

reason.

The third proof begins as, “The third reason…” followed by the thesis and reason.

Conclusion restates the thesis and summarizes the reasons in a single sentence without the enumeration.

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation

o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

                             

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Lesson 2 Checklist Introductory Persuasive Essay: Sorting

  Essay follows Template 2

Exposition is written in parallel form Main proofs are written in parallel form Conclusion is written in parallel form Marked and labeled scheme 1—Parallelism Each main proof is supported by three sub-proofs. Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary. Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation

o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

                                 

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Lesson 3 Checklist Basic Persuasive Essay I: Exordium

  Essay follows Template 3

Exordium is added to the beginning of the essay Proofs are parallel Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Marked and labeled scheme 1—Parallelism

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary. Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation

o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

                             

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Lesson 4 Basic Persuasive Essay II: Amplification

  Essay follows Template 4

Amplification is added to the end of the essay

Proofs are parallel

Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects

o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Marked and labeled each scheme

o Parallelism o Antithesis

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation

o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

                 

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Lesson 5 Basic Persuasive Essay III: Division and Distribution

  Essay follows Template 6

Division is added to the essay

Proofs are parallel

Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects

o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired “There is” / “There are” nominalization

Marked and labeled each scheme

o Parallelism o Antithesis

Marked and labeled trope 1—Simile

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation

o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

         

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Lesson 6 Basic Persuasive Essay IV: Refutation

  Essay follows Template 6

Refutation is added to the essay

Proofs are parallel

Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired all nominalizations o “There is” / “There are” o Subject of a vacuous verb o Object of a vacuous verb

Marked and labeled each scheme o Parallelism o Antithesis

Marked and labeled each trope o Simile

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

   

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Lesson 7 Complete Persuasive Essay: Narrative

  Essay follows Template 7

Narratio is added to the essay

Proofs are parallel

Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired all nominalizations o “There is” / “There are” o Subject of a vacuous verb o Object of a vacuous verb o “Of” prepositional phrases

Marked and labeled each scheme o Parallelism o Antithesis

Marked and labeled each trope o Simile o Metaphor

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

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Lesson 8 Complete Persuasive Essay: Review and Practice

  Essay follows Template 8 Proofs are parallel Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired all nominalizations o “There is” / “There are” o Subject of a vacuous verb o Object of a vacuous verb o “Of” prepositional phrases

Marked and labeled each scheme o Parallelism o Antithesis o Alliteration o Assonance

Marked and labeled each trope o Simile o Metaphor

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary. Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

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Lesson 9 Basic Comparison Essay: Themes and Sub-ideas

  Essay follows Template 9

A Topic sentence is written for each Theme

Details for Terms A and B follow each topic sentence

Each paragraph ends with a summary sentence

Repaired weak verbs o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired all nominalizations o “There is” / “There are” o Subject of a vacuous verb o Object of a vacuous verb o “Of” prepositional phrases

Marked and labeled each scheme o Parallelism o Antithesis o Alliteration o Assonance

Marked and labeled each trope o Simile o Metaphor o Personification o Apostrophe

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary. Checked grammar

o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

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Lesson 10 Complete Comparison Essay: Introduction and Conclusion

  Essay follows Template 10

Introduction and Conclusion are added to the essay

Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired all nominalizations o “There is” / “There are” o Subject of a vacuous verb o Object of a vacuous verb o “Of” prepositional phrases

Marked and labeled each scheme o Parallelism o Antithesis o Alliteration o Assonance o Anaphora o Epistrophe

Marked and labeled each trope o Simile o Metaphor o Personification o Apostrophe

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly

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Lesson 11 Complete Comparison Essay: Review and Practice

Essay follows Template 11

Repaired weak verbs

o Vague o Passive o Cliché

Repaired weak subjects o Non-particular o Hidden o Missing

Repaired all nominalizations o “There is” / “There are” o Subject of a vacuous verb o Object of a vacuous verb o “Of” prepositional phrases

Marked and labeled each scheme o Parallelism o Antithesis o Alliteration o Assonance o Anaphora o Epistrophe

Marked and labeled each trope o Simile o Metaphor o Personification o Apostrophe o Hyperbole o Litotes

Checked spelling of uncertain words from a dictionary.

Checked grammar o Verb tense is consistent o Subjects and verbs agree o Repaired fragments and run-ons

Checked punctuation o Capitol letters are used correctly o Commas, colons, semi-colons, and hyphens are used correctly o Correct end punctuation is used. o Quotation marks are used correctly