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Reflective Essay

As I consider the experience of making my first audio narrative, I realize that there were

a lot of different elements that helped shape my final essay. In some way or another, the people

who revised my essay or commented on it, had the most significant impact. They helped me

consider new ideas and new perspectives. ith these new ideas I was a!le to give the essay a

logical order and a purpose. Another element that helped shape my essay was the application of

Anne "amott#s techni$ue of writing an essay. %asically, !y starting writing a shitty first draft I

was a!le to free my mind and start writing whatever passed through my mind& making the

writing experience feel much more fluent and real than if I had done otherwise. If I tried to write

a master'piece from the !eginning I would have never even !egun writing this story !ecause at

first I thought it was going to !e terri!le. (owever, as I continued writing, )ust !ecause it was the

exercise we were ordered to do in the classroom, I felt as if the topic was evolving into

something that could have potential.

*es, I wrote a shitty first draft, !ut if I didn#t start writing it as I did, I would have never

had the story I )ust narrated. As I passed to write my second draft, I felt very confident that the

narration was very promising. I felt pleased with the humor in it, and I felt confident that the

story would end up !eing around four minutes long with a solid structure. The day after I wrote

my second draft I went into the room and read the story to two of my classmates for advice. This

helped me even more !ecause they suggested it was !etter if I descri!ed the forest with more

vivid descriptions so that they could actually see how scary it was, and they also suggested that I

descri!e my relationship with Erik a little !etter so that the listener could !etter understand why I

found the event funny. The second suggestion was very important to the overall purpose of my

essay !ecause this would fundamentally explain to the listener that I am not a cruel or messed up



person who laughs at mishaps of people. ith my description of my relationship with Erik I try

to explain to the listener that he is !asically my !rother and that I am laughing at him for three

main reasons+ as a social corrective, !ecause the event is completely out of the norm, and

!ecause it is ironic how he laughs at people who experience mishaps !ut doesn#t find them funny

when those mishaps happen to him.

The third and last draft of my essay, I have to admit, was the draft that gave me the most

work. I was having pro!lems ending the narration, and with the overall purpose of the essay. At

first, I wrote a concluding paragraph in which I descri!ed how sad I was that my childhood days

were over and that I was more than two thousand miles away from my !est friend. I showed the

professor of the class my last paragraph and she, in a very discrete and respectful way, told me it

was really !ad. I have to say that I appreciated her honesty !ecause I didn#t liked it either, and as

she told me this, I was )ust looking for a way to end the essay and give an overall purpose. The

next day I went on to a classmate and told him to read my essay and give me his opinions on

how I should end the story. I gave him the story without the concluding paragraph, and as he

finished he told that it was perfect, and there was no need to add any other thing. The truth was

that yes, it did seem to end well, !ut I felt as if the essay was still missing purpose. I went on to

consider how I could leave the essay as it was, !ut still include a good purpose. As I read it once

more, I discovered that my essay#s purpose should not !e a sad one, a!out how nostalgic it is to

not !e with one#s !est friend, !ut instead should !e a!out how sometimes we use humor as a

social correction. I decided to keep a positive outlook in the essay and ela!orate and )ustify why

it was that I suddenly laughed at a very life threatening situation of my !est friend. The last

process of writing the essay was much harder than I could have expected, !ut with the help of

my classmate and perseverance I was a!le to finish it. I was finally in the last and easiest part of



the pro)ect, the recording of the narration. r so I thought it was the easiest until I found myself

rereading every paragraph one, two, three, four, and five times- I seemed to stutter in almost

every other sentence. The recording of the audio was definitely the most perseverant part of the

pro)ect. The whole pro)ect was indeed a learning experience that taught me to never address a

story from one single angle, and also showed me how important the angle from which one

narrates a story can !e. inally, I learned how audio can enhance a written essay !y adding

personality and emotion to help relive the moment and help the writer /show and not tell0 the

story.

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