twelve layer editing ms. vette. you will need: 12 different colors your rough draft a legend on your...
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Twelve Layer Editing
Ms. Vette
You will need:
•12 different colors
•Your rough draft
•A legend on your paper
Step 1: HEADING AND TITLE
• Color:
• Does your heading follow MLA format (left side of your
paper)?
*Your name
*My name (Ms. Vette)
*Course (Honors 9 English, Block 4)
*Date (20 March 2014)
• Highlight the title. Is this interesting and relevant to
your topic?
• This should NOT be titled “Definition Essay”
Step 2: HOOK AND THESIS
STATEMENT•Color:
•Circle the hook or attention-getter in the
introductory paragraph.oWill this grab the reader’s attention? Is this general?
Does this make sense?
oMake sure this is not the dictionary definition of your
word.
•Underline the thesis statement. Is this specific?
Is this arguable? Does this answer ‘so what’?
Step 3: EXTENDED DEFINITION
•Color:
•Label the definition that is the focus of the essay.oIs it clear? Is this unique? Is this personal? Is this an
extended definition?
Step 4: NO EXCUSES WORDS•Color:
•Highlight all NO EXCUSES WORDS even if
they are correct. This is for you to be mindful
of using them correctly.
•their, there, they’re, too, two, to ,its, it’s,
cause vs. because, a lot, things and stuff,
have vs. of, loose, lose, than, then, your,
you’re, affect, effect and the every lazy and
annoying, general use of the pronoun YOU!!
Step 5: APOSTROPHES
•Color:
•Circle ALL APOSTROPHES (possessive
and contraction).
-possessive example: That is John’s ball
-contraction example: He isn’t going with us.
Step 6: COMMAS•Color:
•Circle where you have utilized commas. Reflect on the
effectiveness of these sentences. Be sure that you have
avoided comma splices.
•Underline any coordinating conjunctions that you have used
with commas.
FANBOYS : For-And-Nor-But-Or-Yet-So.
Example time-
• We picked them up early, but they still missed their plane.
• I hadn't seen my nieces and nephews for ages, so I went overboard on
buying them Christmas gifts.
• Do you want to stay behind, or will you come with us?
Step 7: COLON/SEMICOLON
USAGE
•Color:
•Underline at least ONE place where you have correctly used a semicolon or colon. If you have not used either of these, indicate one place where you will place one correctly.
Step 8: SENTENCE STARTERS
•Color:
•Look over the beginning words of all your
sentences, circle similar beginnings and
connect.
•Do the same for paragraphs
•Make sure that you aren’t repetitive in your
writing.
•Did you include transitions?
STEP 9:TRANSITIONS
Transitions are the words and phrases used to move from one idea to the next. They help words to flow more smoothly and to show readers how ideas relate to one another.
Transitional words and phrases connect ideas within sentences and between sentences, within paragraphs and between paragraphs. They are essential to good writing. They serve as a bridge between ideas.
What are Transitions?
Transition Words: Purposes
Transitions are used for a multitude of reasons: They show relationship between the main
ideas of your sentences within paragraphs, or your paragraphs within a body of writing.
They give the reader a “map” to help him/her move from idea to idea.
They smoothly shift the reader from idea to idea.
Think of a manual car. If you miss the clutch when you shift, what
happens to your car? How does the passenger feel?
Step 9: TRANSITIONS
•Color:• Identify three places in your investigative report where
you have effectively used transitions for the following
purposes: To smoothly shift ideas The use of signifier words to show relationships
between ideas To map where you want to take your audience
•If you did not use transitions, indicate three
places where you will include these effectively
Step 10: EVIDENCE• Color:
• Label evidence that is included to support the thesis. The definition essay
should include quotes/details from the following four sources:
• Two outside sources
• Personal examples
• Label each type of evidence.
• Does each piece of evidence have an appropriate lead-in? Is it introduced
effectively?
• Did you correctly cite each piece of evidence within your paper (either
through parenthetical citations or introducing each source in sentence
form)?
Step 11: ANALYSIS
•Color:
•What can one make of your evidence? Do you
effectively and thoroughly explain how/why your
evidence supports the definition.
•How/why is this evidence significant?
•What was uncovered or revealed based on your
evidence?
Step 12: CONCLUSION
•Color:
•Identify this. What should your reader walk away knowing? Lingering thought?
Peer Edit
•Now that you have edited your own paper with
the TWELVE layers, switch papers with a
partner.
•Look over your partner’s paper with the rubric
provided. Write down three things that he/she
did well and three suggestions for him/her to
improve the paper.