welcome! on green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · what is the difference between...
TRANSCRIPT
![Page 1: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/1.jpg)
Welcome!On green post it, please answer the following question:
What is the difference between editing and
revising?
With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed.
4th Grade ALPS Amerman
![Page 2: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/2.jpg)
Learning Target: I can use, praise, guiding
questions, and encouraging advice to help revise. Conversation: 0 - 2 (If you need to use your phone, please excuse yourself)
Help: Ask three before me
Activity: Taking Notes, developing advice/questions, anticipating possible
feedback.
Movement: Move as you need
Participation: Take notes and write during activities.
Successful: Feel comfortable providing revision feedback in all three types of
writing.
![Page 3: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/3.jpg)
“Give one get one!”
On your notecard, answer the following question:
“What is the difference between revision and
editing?”
![Page 4: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/4.jpg)
Compare and Contrast
Head to one of the four corners with the card you have. You
and your group will have 5 minutes to create a poster that
identifies the differences and similarities between the revision
and editing.
![Page 5: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/5.jpg)
Pro Tip #1:
Have your student read it outloud
to you.
Before you start giving feedback.
Make sure they have a pen/ paper/ computer...
![Page 6: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/6.jpg)
Pro Tip #2:
Read it from start to finish
before you offer feedback
Ignore editing mistakes!!!!!!!!
![Page 7: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/7.jpg)
Pro Tip #3:
You should never do the work for them. Hands Off!
It is okay to have some mistakes!
![Page 8: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/8.jpg)
Dialogue vs. Discussion and the feedback sandwich
Dialogue is for generating ideas
Discussion is for making decisions
1. Praise
2. Interesting Questions
3. Encouraging Advice
![Page 9: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/9.jpg)
See attached Sentence Stems!
![Page 10: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/10.jpg)
D.E.E.R. is a paragraph structure for
nonfiction and argumentative.
D__________________
E__________________
E__________________
R__________________
![Page 11: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/11.jpg)
Example 1:
The city of Chicago needs to create more bike lanes on major streets because it
will help improve the health of Chicago's residents. According to Chicago.gov,
“More than half of Chicago's adult population is overweight. However, riding a
bicycle burns 300 calories an hour!” The addition of more bike lanes would encourage people to ride their bikes instead of driving or taking the bus, which, in turn, would help people burn more calories. This would result in lower obesity rates and a healthier Chicago.
![Page 12: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/12.jpg)
Example 2 with revisions
The city of Chicago needs to create more bike lanes on major streets
because it will help improve the health of Chicago's residents. According to
Chicago.gov “More than half of Chicago's adult population is overweight.
However, riding a bicycle burns 300 calories an hour.” The addition of more bike
lanes would encourage people to ride their bikes instead of driving or taking the
bus, which, in turn, would help people burn more calories. This fact also shows
that too many people in Chicago are overweight which is worrisome. When people
are overweight, they can have lots of different health problems and that is not
good. However, being overweight is a treatable problem that can be solved
through diet and exercise. Bike lanes would be a great way for people to sneak in
a little extra exercise in their day. This would result in lower obesity rates and a
healthier Chicago.
![Page 13: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/13.jpg)
Example 3: Bathroom BusinessThe first reason Northville Public Schools should have automatic
flush toilets and touchless sinks is because they are better for the environment. According to sustainability-certification.com, “If a sink drips three drops a minute it wastes about a liter a day or, 104 gallons year.” This proves that when sinks are not turned off they waste tons of water! Automatic sinks turn off immediately when you move your hand so, you do not have to worry about turning it off yourself and leaking. Getting these appliances will help the future world with water conservation.
![Page 14: Welcome! On green post it, please answer the following ...€¦ · What is the difference between editing and revising? With Markus L. Hartnett M.Ed. 4th Grade ALPS Amerman. Learning](https://reader034.vdocument.in/reader034/viewer/2022042322/5f0c02177e708231d4334d6b/html5/thumbnails/14.jpg)
Q & A ?