write tight(er)—part 2—stc14 summit
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http://lanyrd.com/2014/society-for-technical-communication/sctyqk (STC14 Summit session page on Lanyrd) After learning the "Write Tight(er)" technique (Part 1), put it into practice in this workshop. Bring examples of the kind of writing you do, and we’ll transform them!TRANSCRIPT
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Write Tight (er)
Marcia Riefer Johnston@MarciaRJohnston
#STC14
Part 2: Using the Technique
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
YOUR WORDS
HERE
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are) -ly words (& other vapid adverbs) very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers) not, no (& other negative words) the fact that just begin to, try to, tend to, in order to period of time in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general) proverbial different (as in many different, 36 different) particular verbiage any other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!**unless you need them
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Word count
Cost to translate into 1 language 25 languages
x 10,000 sentences
(Harry Potter novel)
BEFORE Your original text here with more words than you need. 10 $2.50 $62.50 $625,000.00
AFTER Your tighter text here. 4 $1.00 $25.00 $250,000.00Savings 60% $1.50 $37.50 $375,000.00
Spreadsheet available on request.
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Story time
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Story time
Water dispenser
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Story time
Water dispenser
Buttons
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Story time
Water dispenser
Buttons
Quick reference
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Looks easy enough.
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Concise = good ... right?
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Ready for a video?
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Ready for a video?(You’ll have to pretend.)
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
Rick (Smart guy!)
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
GlassRick (Smart guy!)
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
GlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
GlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
GlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
Read again
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
Read again Exasperation
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
Read again Exasperation Try again
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
Read again Exasperation Try again Try again
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
Dump again
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
Read again Exasperation Try again Try again
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
Dump again
DumpGlassRick (Smart guy!)
Instructions Button Water
Read again Exasperation Try again Try again Try again
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
If conciseness doesn’t fix it, change what you’re saying. @MarciaRJohnston #STC14
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
For more on concise writing and much, much more
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
For more on concise writing and much, much more
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#STC14 @MarciaRJohnston Write Tight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com
For more on concise writing and much, much more
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For more on concise writing and much, much more
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For more on concise writing and much, much more
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