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Writing Successful College and Scholarship Essays
presented for LMSAby Carol S. Klein, The Writing Center, Inc.
adapted from http://students.berkeley.edu/apa/personalstatement ©All rights reserved.
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The selection committee is looking for two different things:
1. Evidence of achievement not reflected in other parts of the application.
2. HOW and WHY the events the student describes have shaped his/her attitude, focus, and most of all, intellectual vitality.
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SELL—the essay must bethoughtful and honest:
• Written to express, not to impress—reveal not just the what, but also the why and how of your achievements, obstacles, goals, values. – Don’t brag.
– Don’t suggest your goal for attending the college is money or status.
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SELL—the essay must bethoughtful and honest:
Which of the following is the better opening for a College Essay:1.There are three reasons ABC College should accept me: My classmates voted me “Most Likely to Succeed,” I was the valedictorian of my class, and I lettered in three sports.
2. Coaching at ABC Baseball Camp this summer, I helped hone 20 ten-year-old boys’ batting and pitching skills. The boys taught me a lot about sportsmanship, courage, and the importance of having a good sense of humor.
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SELL—the essay must deliver not breadth but depth:
• Don’t write an essay that devotes each paragraph to a different topic.
• Deliver steak, not just sizzle—(Your statements must be supported by facts.)
– If essay describes you as a “top student,” your grades should prove this.
– If “interested in the environment,” your list of activities, hobbies, classes should prove this.
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SELL—the essay must follow the college’s instructions:
• An essay is an essay—not a poem, short story, or drawing.
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SELL—the essay must“answer the mail”:
• Answer the question(s) as posed—for example, were you asked to Describe? Summarize? Or to Evaluate? Discuss?
• Start with a strong, catchy title and introduction that stand out and interest the reader—your hook.
• Follow the conventions of good writing.
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SELL—Which of the following are recommended for successful essays?
1. Complaining /whining to reveal that you are a real person
2. Conforming to the essay guidelines/requirements
3. Revealing your character and values through your examples
4. Talking matter-of-factly about your time in jail or your drug use to show that you have overcome adversity and are ready to move on
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SELL—the essay mustreveal you as:
• Resilient—not complaining but explaining how you overcame an obstacle.– Positive—a problem-solver.
• Confident—interested and committed; able to persevere in the face of adversity.
• Professional—no errors; evident that essay has been edited and proofread.
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How FRAME the essay?Follow this process:
• Plan—Brainstorm and Gather Information
• Organize—Use Time-tested Template: Introduction, Body, Conclusion
• Write—Draft and Revise
• Edit—Edit and Proofread for Common Essay Errors; Elicit Feedback
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FRAME—Organize the essay: For two pages, use the following three main sections:
• An introductory paragraph that provides the essay’s controlling theme.
• Two to four body paragraphs that develop that theme through examples and detailed experiences that build upon each other.
• A conclusion that widens the lens and wraps up the essay without summarizing or repeating what has already been written.
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FRAME—Plan the essay: Gather Information. Follow three steps.
STEP ONE. Address ONE of the following topics:• An achievement that made me feel terrific• Something I have struggled to overcome or change about myself or my life• A “real drag” of an experience that I had to get past • Someone’s act of strength or courage that affected me • A lesson, class project, activity, or job that impacted my academic or career
goals • A time I blew it, failed, made bad choices, and how I got past it • An event that helps to define me, in terms of my background
STEP TWO. Address the following three questions in your essay:– What were the key moments and details of the event?
– What did I learn from this event?
– What aspects of this event have stayed with me most?
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