evaluation of other magazines

8/13/2019 Evaluation of Other Magazines

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AFL

Evaluating Peer Work

NameAlex Rhodes


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Activity 1

Use the mark scheme below and work in pairs to grade the 4 exemplar pieces of work.You must try and place the work into the correct level. Wherever possible you should

use a best fit model, this means that you take an overall view rather than harshlypenalising for one fault. Use the space provided to give specific examples and write a

summary comment at the bottom of the page. You are examining the FRONT PAGEONLY

MGN

Minimal Level 1

1023 marksBasic Level 2

2435 marksProficiency

Level 3

3647 marks

Excellence

Level 4

4860 marksFraming a shot,

including and excluding

elements as

appropriate

X

She has used a variety of

images and the front

image stands out with not

too much overlapping it.

The image has been usedin the three quadrants as

the eye line of her is on the

first thirdUsing a variety of shot

distances as

appropriate

X

She has used a variety of

images to such as close up

and mid shot which shows

evidence of her

experimenting with a

range of images to fit her

magazine the best.

Shooting material

appropriate to the taskset

X

As from looking at themagazine I can tell that she

has tried to make a similar

magazine to Q which

supports her decision for

the style of image which

she has taken because it

looks like something which

represents indie / pop, and

as Q is about a variety of

genres, mainly in the indie

/ rock, this works well with

the image.

Selecting mise-en-scne including colour,

figure, lighting, objects

and setting

XFor the images, the creator

has used the appropriate

clothes on each of the

person on the magazine,

which suits their genre. As

well as this she has shown

a good understanding as to

how you use the lighting

because there arent any


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shadows around and the

lighting is bright which

focuses on the model.

Manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to thecontext for

presentation, including

cropping and resizing

X

The designer of this

magazine shows a range ofways to apply the

photographs to the

context, and they have

used the correct

background that doesnt

have any additional extras

in there that would ruin the

design as the have cropped

it. They also havent

overused the images and

placed them in the wrong

areas, which is used to

great effect.Accurately using

language and registerX

For the language register

of the magazine, the

designer of it has used the

correct terminology that

you would expect to see in

a magazine such as this

one with its similar style.

Appropriately

integrating illustration

and text

This magazine shows good

use of using the three-

colour palette and only

three different fonts. AS

well as this they show

awareness of the correct

style of font because for

the majority of her writing,

she uses sans serif font

that looks professional and

easy for the audience to

read.Showing

understanding of

conventions of layout

and page design

X

The creator of this

magazine shows a great

understanding of how to

layout the magazine, not

lonely with the front cover,

but with all pages. She

does this very well with the

way that she minimises the

bleed in the magazine.

Showing awareness of

the need for variety in

fonts and text size

X

The double page spread

has the perfect font,

because it allows you to

read the article, but when


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she uses either a pull quote

of asks a question in the

interview it is very evident

what is going on.

Summary Comment:

This magazine is a high level 4 due to the fact that the creator has shown a great understanding and detail of trying to base

theirs upon a similar genre style of magazine, and they have used the correct layout which makes the magazine look

professional.


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GHR

Minimal Level 1



Level 3

3647 marks

Excellence

Level 4


including and excludingelements as

appropriate

X

AS the image has twodifferent backgrounds and a

white lining around the

three models, its very

complicated and it makes it

lose the professionalism

which is needed very much

in magazine designing it

needs to be more simplistic.Using a variety of shot

distances as

appropriate

X

This person who has

created this magazine has

based all of their images on

a mid-shot, which shows alack of experimenting in

different ranges of camera

angles that is what you

wouldnt see in a typical

magazine.Shooting material

appropriate to the task

set

X

Albeit the photos

taken arent great,

the models which

they have used all

suit the R n b / hip-

hop genre which is

applied to themagazine.

Selecting mise-en-

scne including colour,


and setting

X

For the majority of the

images the clothes that the

models are wearing suit the

design and genre, however

there isnt any consistency

in this due to the fact that

for example there is a

model in there wearing a

cardigan and polo, which

doesnt suit the genre. As

well as this the lighting onthe images are not great

and it isnt clear on all of

them.Manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to the

context for



X

The images which have

been used suit what has

been is being said on the

page, such as on the double

page spread they have used


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an image which looks like

something which youd see

on the front cover.

Accurately using


The language that is used

doesnt suit or appeal to theRnB genre of music at all.

Instead of using language

that you would see on a rap

magazine they have used

words such as tune and

celeb instead.Appropriately


and text

X

On this magazine the text

isnt up to a high standard

at all due to the fact that

there are too many

different colours which are

used on the front page onthe font looks very

unprofessional, and similar

to the colours, they use too

many different fonts.Showing

understanding of


and page design

X

Although you can see they

have tried to make it look

somewhat like an RnN

magazine, they havent

been able to get anywhere

near to that standard

because of the way that

everything is laid out on the

every page, it all looks

unprofessional.Showing awareness of


fonts and text size

X

They have used a variety of

fonts, but almost too many

which makes the magazine

lose its touch of realism.

The serif fonts that are used

also look like they could do

with a lot of changing and

improvement.

Summary Comment

This magazine design could do with a lot of improvements being made because it hasnt replicated any other similar

magazine. The reason being for this is that the creator of the magazine has tried to use too many different fonts, different

colours and the layout needs vastly improving because it is all unclear and confusing for the reader to get an

understanding of whats going on in the magazine, and what its genre is.


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BUZZ

Minimal Level

1

1023 marks

Basic Level 2


Level 3

3647 marks

Excellence

Level 4


including and excluding

elements as

appropriate

X

The mid shot used is a good

photo, however they havent

made it the central visual

interest that doesnt match the

three-quadrant rule becausethe masthead tends to overlap

the head and become the focus

instead of the person on the

cover.Using a variety of shot

distances as

appropriate

X

The creator of this magazine

has used a variety of shots and

it shows a greater

understanding of camera shots

as they have used a different

number of people in some of

the shots.Shooting material


set

X

The material which has been

used in this magazine is mainly

suited to the magazine,

however some of the photos

dont lookparticular

professional and have an

element of realism to it.Selecting mise-en-



and setting

Manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to the

context for



X

The photos dont

always match what

the context is saying

for example on the

double page spread

the image is of her

happy, even though

the pull quote is

about how fallAccurately using X


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language and register The music is allpop and charts

music, whereas

the magazine

looks more

indie design

which makes

the language

register

unprofessionalAppropriately


and text

X

Its not necessarily

text that links in with

what the context is

about and therefore

it needs to be more

suited to a similar

pop music magazine

instead of edging

towards the indie

example.Showing

understanding of


and page design

X

The page layout

would be at a higher

level if there wasnt

as much on the page

which ruins the

layout because there

is all too much on

there.Showing awareness of


fonts and text size

X

The layout of the font is all set

out professional but on the

cover ruins the it because of

the certain fonts theyve used

and the fact t that they have

used too many, however this is

used to good effect on the

double page and contents.

Summary Comment

I think that this magazine is a low level 3 because the idea and design in some parts can be excellent, but its the little

things that let this students magazine down. The student needs to be ore specific to the genre she is aiming it at instead

of edging it towards the indie genre that is evidently shown in this design.


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DUBZONE

Minimal Level 1



Level 3

3647

marks

Excellence

Level 4

4860 marks

Framing a shot,including and excluding

elements as

appropriate

XThis students needs to

pay more attention to

mise en scene, as from

looking at this design

which was aimed for the

dubstep genre the

student has used a girl

in a jumper and a boy

playing guitar which

isnt dubstep.Using a variety of shot

distances as

appropriate

X

The student hasnt used

a variety of shots, andthe ones which they

have used are not

related to the magazine

what so ever so there is

improvement needed to

ensure different shots

are used and related

images.

Shooting material


set

X

This needs a lot of

improvements due to

the fact the photos

which have been taken

are not in the slightest

related to the genre

which the student is

aiming for,Selecting mise-en-



and setting

This student needs to

use costumes that are

related to the dubstep

genre instead of indie,

and they need to work

out the way to use the

camera to good effect

so she has better quality

images.Manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to the

context for



X

There are some

photographs in there

that demonstrate a high

quality such as on the

contents page; however

there are low quality

images that evidently

havent been


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redesigned.Accurately using


This needs some

improvement but the

majority of the context

is about dubstep that

suits their genre theyare trying to recreate.Appropriately


and text

X

With the use of the serif

font which makes the

magazine look too fake

and unprofessional, this

needs a lot of

improvement to create

the simplistic design.

Showing

understanding of


and page design

X

This student hasnt

shown a great

understanding of what

other magazine designs

are like and she has

tried to create her own

version, which dont

match to the

professional look.Showing awareness of


fonts and text size

X

This is a low level 2

because the student has

shown a good

understanding with

some of the text in bold,

but its the actual font

that lets the student

down and the way

theyve laid the text out

on the double page

spread.

Summary Comment

This student has shown a good idea, however it was the way she presented the whole magazine with the unprofessional

lay-out and font choices that have let the student lose marks due to it not looking like another magazine.


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Task 2

Now using the skills youve acquired in task 1, evaluate your own work and then two

pieces of work from classmates. Use the space provided to give specific examples and

write a summary comment at the bottom of the page.

Magazine title: PARKLIFE (Ollie Dennis)

Minimal Level 1



Level 3

3647 marks

Excellence

Level 4


including and

excluding elements

as appropriate

X

This student has shown a

good understanding of

what images need to be

on each page, however to

improve they could do

with using more than one

different angle of them totry and show that they

have a greater

understanding the

different angles.Using a variety of

shot distances as

appropriate

X

All of the photos

used tend to be the

same angle, try

using a variety to

show good

awareness.Shooting material

appropriate to thetask set

X

All the image are relatedto the genre of his

magazine, when looking

you get the feeling that it

is an indie genre

magazine.Selecting mise-en-

scne including

colour, figure,

lighting, objects

and setting

X

Very good choice

of costume for the

model, the lighting

could be used to

create a shadow

effect to show

creator awareness

of the photos.Manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to the

context for

presentation,

including cropping

and resizing

X

The images suit

exactly what is

going and you get

the feeling it is

about him

Accurately using X


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language and

registerCorrect taboo

language to suit

the informal

language.

However he needs

to focus more on

the contents

language and add

more.Appropriately

integrating

illustration and text

X

The contents page

especially looks

unprofessional, need

to fill up more of the

white space a not

have as much on the

left side.Showing

understanding of

conventions of

layout and page

design

X

Can see the idea

behind the

magazine,

improvements

needed on the layout

of the page and the

content on it.Showing

awareness of the

need for variety in

fonts and text size

X

There are a variety

of fonts, but not all

of them are

professional at all

due to the fact that

some look very

informal / child-like.

Summary Comment

A promising start to the magazine, as we can clearly see your idea and that you have aimed it for a indie magazine, but

there needs an improvement on the lay out because it has lost its professional feel and it is evident that a student has

designed it.


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Magazine title: H (Sanjay PAtel

Minimal Level 1



Level 3

3647 marks

Excellence

Level 4

4860 marks

Framing a shot,including and excluding

elements as

appropriate

XGood use of images,

needs improvement on

contents page with the

images used to make it

look more professionalusing a variety of shot

distances as

appropriate

X

Images used a very good

however you could use

different shots other than

mid shot to show you

know the different types

of angles and to make

your magazine that bit

more interesting.shooting material


set

X

Material is very

relevant to that

pop type of

genre that you

have gone, the

variety of

images shows

the variety of

genre the

magazine is

about.Selecting mise-en-



and setting

X

Good use of clothing for

the magazine, good do

with more pop clothing as

well as the sort of indie

style, because in a way

you get the idea that this

edges towards the

alternative side rather

than pop.Manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to the

context for



X

Sanjay has shown a great

understanding of the how

to edit the images and

create and realistic

design.

Accurately using


High level two due his

correct terminology

however needs to be

consistent with what he

uses.


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Appropriately


and textShowing

understanding ofconventions of layout

and page design

X

Would be level 3, but thecontents page needs to be

clearer and look more like

a common magazine

instead of its own brand.

Showing awareness of


fonts and text size

X

Especially on the front

cover this has been as

good as perfected and

suits exactly the design it

was after, however the

contents mainly needs to

be improved.

Summary Comment

If improvements are made on the contents page, this will become a much higher grade and will be one of

the most professional and realistic magazines that have been created. Especially the front cover stands

out clearly and you can tell its genre.


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Magazine title: UNDERGROUND

Minimal Level 1



Level 3

3647 marks

Excellence

Level 4


including and excludingelements as

appropriate

X

Work needed oncropping of images

and making them

match

using a variety of shot

distances as

appropriate

X

Need to use a wider

range of images to

show that I have an

understanding of

the different shotsShooting material


set

X

The images that I

have used are

appropriate to the

task, but I need to

use different facial

expressions in the

same as they are all

serious.

selecting mise-en-



and setting

X

Clothes I have used

have worked well

and the images of

the band, however I

need to ensure that

the images are

perfectly fitted with

the positioning of

the band and

where they stand.

manipulating

photographs as

appropriate to the

context for



X

Correct positioning

of the band, need

more work on

making sure they

are cropped

correctly and the

white background

goes all the way

across.

accurately using


Correct language

used, however the

title needs to be

shorter on the

double page spread

and make sure I

highlight the

correct words in red


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appropriately


and text

X

Need improvements

on the image

quality and need

captions around the

images.

Improvement on

the quality of text is

needed.

showing understanding

of conventions of

layout and page design

X

Correct idea and I

do show

understanding of

what I need it to

look like; however I

need to be more

fine with what I am

doing and making

sure everything fits

and is laid out

perfectly instead of

rushing.

showing awareness of


fonts and text size

X

I have shown the

right idea with the

different size fonts,

but again need to

improve the double

page spread titles,

improvements will

make it look a lot

better.

Summary Comment

I need to redo certain images, and be more defining in what I do, so make sure all fonts for the text are

the same size unless they are purposefully not, and I need to make sure I change my contents page to

something that suits the genre that I am doing. Overall it is a good idea what I have done, but I need to

make some changes to what I have done.


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