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NAPLAN*-style
Test Pack FREE** Sample Writing
Tests for persuasive texts
Alan Horsfi eld &Allyn Jones
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YEAR 3 WRITING TEST: Tips for writing persuasive texts
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Persuasive texts (expositions or opinions) are used to ‘argue’ the case for or against a particular action, plan or point of view—to persuade others to see it your way. Persuasive texts need to be well organised and clear so that readers will understand and be convinced of your arguments.
When writing persuasive texts it is best to keep the following points in mind. They will help you get the best possible mark.
Before you start writing► Read the question carefully. You will probably be
asked to write your reaction to a particular question or statement, such as Dogs should be kept out of parks. Most of the topics that you will be asked to comment on are very general. This means you will probably be writing about something you know and can draw upon your experience. When writing your personal opinion you may include such phrases as I think, I believe and It is important. Remember to sound confident. Some common ways for the question to be worded are: Give your opinion on …; Do you agree or disagree?; What do you think is/are …?; What changes would you like to see …?; Is … a good idea or a bad idea?
► You will be expected to give your reasons. Sometimes the question may actually state Give your reasons. Remember: the stance taken in a persuasive text is not wrong, as long as the writer has evidence to support his or her opinion. How the opinion is supported is as important as the opinion itself.
► Give yourself a few minutes before you start writing to get your thoughts in order and jot down points.
The introduction► Right from the beginning it is important to let the
reader know what position you have taken or what you believe. You can do this via the title or in the first line or paragraph, which may include a brief preview of the main arguments and some background information.
The body► Follow the structure of persuasive texts. As
persuasive texts aim to convince readers, your reasons must be logical and easily understood. You must provide both arguments (points) and evidence to support the arguments.
► Correctly paragraph your writing. Use paragraphs with topic sentences to organise your information. Without paragraphs your arguments become confused and difficult to follow. Use one paragraph for each idea or argument. Arguments can be ordered according to your choice. They can be ‘numbered’, e.g. firstly, secondly, finally.
► Make sure your arguments (or points) are relevant. They must add to your case. ‘Waffle’ and unnecessary detail don’t improve a persuasive text. It is better to stick to the facts without getting sidetracked. Once you have made a point there is no need to repeat it.
► Use interesting, precise words. Include strong persuasive words such as must, believe, important or certainly. Avoid common words that carry little or no meaning, such as good. You can state your arguments using sentences beginning with words such as firstly, furthermore or finally.
► Vary the types and lengths of sentences and the words that begin each sentence. If your writing includes a personal opinion, try to avoid too many sentences starting with I.
► Use impersonal writing, although personal opinions can be part of the text.
The conclusion► The final paragraph must restate your position more
forcefully and wrap up your case. It can include a recommendation.
When you have finished writing give yourself a few moments to read through your persuasive text. Quickly check spelling and punctuation, and insert any words that have been accidentally left out. Direct speech is not a feature of persuasive texts. Indirect speech (reported speech) does not have quotation marks (“ ”).
Check the official NAPLAN website for important updates. You are told what type of writing will be tested. From 2008 to 2010 it was a narrative text and in 2011 it will be a persuasive text. Click on the ‘Domains’ tab on the official NAPLAN website (www.naplan.edu.au) for the latest updates on the Writing Test and to see what writing marking criteria NAPLAN markers use when assessing your writing. A sample Writing Task is also provided.
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YEAR 3 WRITING TEST 1: Persuasive text
Today you are going to write a persuasive text, often called an exposition.
The purpose of writing a persuasive text is to infl uence or change a reader’s thoughts or opinions on a particular topic or subject. Your aim is to convince a reader that your opinion is sensible and logical. Successful persuasive writing is always well planned. Persuasive texts may include advertisements, letters to newspapers, speeches and newspaper editorials, as well as arguments in debates.
Hats should not be compulsory at schools.What do you think about this idea? Do you support or reject this proposal?
Write to convince a reader of your opinions.
Before you start writingGive some thought to:• whether you strongly agree or strongly disagree with this plan• reasons or evidence for your arguments• a brief but defi nite conclusion—list some of your main points and
add a personal opinion• the structure of a persuasive text, which begins with a well-organised
introduction, followed by a body of arguments or points, and fi nally a conclusion that restates the writer’s position.
Don’t forget to:• plan your writing before you start—make a list of important points
you wish to make• write in correctly formed sentences and take care with paragraphing• choose your words carefully, and pay attention to your spelling
and punctuation• write neatly but don’t waste time• quickly check your persuasive text once you have fi nished—your
position must be clear to the reader.
Remember: the stance taken in a persuasive text is not wrong, as long as the writer has evidence to support his or her opinion. How the opinion is supported is as important as the opinion itself.
Voca
bula
ry• A
goo
d va
riety
of p
reci
se
verb
type
s ar
e us
ed
to e
stab
lish
stro
ng,
info
rmed
arg
umen
ts.
• Nou
ns a
re u
sed
to m
ake
gene
ralis
ed s
tate
men
ts.
• Adv
erbs
and
adj
ectiv
es
are
wel
l sel
ecte
d to
qu
alify
sta
tem
ents
.• T
he p
rono
un I
is
used
spa
ringl
y.
Sent
ence
str
uctu
re• A
goo
d va
riety
of s
ente
nce
begi
nnin
gs (e
.g. P
layi
ng,
Hat
s) a
re in
clud
ed.
• A v
arie
ty o
f sen
tenc
e ty
pes
and
sent
ence
leng
ths
are
used
.• T
opic
sen
tenc
es a
re
used
to in
trodu
ce e
ach
para
grap
h’s
mai
n id
ea.
• Que
stio
ns a
nd
excl
amat
ions
are
use
d to
go
od e
ffect
.
Punc
tuat
ion
• Pun
ctua
tion,
incl
udin
g ap
ostro
phes
and
full
stop
s,
is c
orre
ctly
app
lied.
Idea
s• I
deas
are
wel
l bal
ance
d an
d cr
eate
a s
ense
of
ratio
nal,
logi
cal a
rgum
ent.
• A s
trong
vie
wpo
int i
s ex
pres
sed
thro
ugh
care
ful
choi
ce o
f wor
ds.
• Ide
as a
re p
rese
nted
po
sitiv
ely
and
forc
eful
ly.
Spel
ling
• The
re a
re n
o sp
ellin
g m
ista
kes
of c
omm
on o
r un
usua
l wor
ds.
Aud
ienc
e• T
he a
udie
nce
is re
adily
id
enti
ed
(stu
dent
s).
Rea
ders
are
qui
ckly
en
gage
d in
a re
leva
nt
issu
e. A
brie
f sta
tem
ent
outli
nes
the
issu
e to
be
disc
usse
d.• B
ackg
roun
d in
form
atio
n is
pr
ovid
ed to
giv
e co
ntex
t to
the
poin
ts ra
ised
.
Pers
uasi
ve te
chni
ques
• Arg
umen
ts fo
r the
writ
er’s
re
actio
n ar
e or
gani
sed
into
se
para
te p
arag
raph
s.• P
oint
s ra
ised
are
obv
ious
ly
impo
rtant
to th
e w
riter
in
a pe
rson
al w
ay. E
vide
nce
and
exam
ples
are
use
d to
su
ppor
t the
arg
umen
t.• O
bjec
tivity
is m
aint
aine
d th
roug
hout
the
writ
ing.
Text
str
uctu
re• T
he te
xt c
onta
ins
a w
ell-o
rgan
ised
intro
duct
ion,
bo
dy a
nd c
oncl
usio
n.• T
he w
riter
refe
rs re
gula
rly
to w
ords
use
d in
the
topi
c.
Para
grap
hing
• New
par
agra
phs
are
used
fo
r the
intro
duct
ion
and
conc
lusi
on, a
nd e
ach
new
arg
umen
t.
Coh
esio
n• T
he
nal p
arag
raph
es
tabl
ishe
s th
e w
riter
’s
opin
ion
on th
e is
sue.
A
de n
ite c
oncl
usio
n re
itera
tes
a po
int m
ade
in
the
open
ing
para
grap
h.
Lang
uage
and
idea
s
Hat
s sh
oul
d n
ot
be
com
pul
sory
at
scho
ols
.S
choo
ls h
ave
a ru
le: n
o ha
t, no
pla
y. T
his
is n
ot fa
ir fo
r stu
dent
s w
ho d
on’t
like
wea
ring
hats
. We
are
told
we
live
in a
free
cou
ntry
. We
have
free
dom
of
choi
ce. T
here
is n
o ch
oice
at s
choo
l if y
ou w
ant t
o pl
ay w
ith y
our f
riend
s.
Sch
ool h
ats
have
not
hing
to d
o w
ith lo
oks.
The
y sp
oil a
ttrac
tive
hairs
tyle
s in
bo
th b
oys
and
girls
. Stu
dent
s ar
e ra
rely
ask
ed w
hat t
hey
wan
t. Th
ey d
on’t
have
a c
hoic
e!
Sec
ondl
y ha
ts d
o no
t im
prov
e ho
w w
ell y
ou le
arn.
The
y do
n’t c
hang
e be
havi
our a
t sch
ool.
Sch
ool b
ullie
s ar
e st
ill b
ullie
s if
they
are
wea
ring
a ha
t or
not
.
Hat
s ca
n be
a h
ealth
haz
ard.
Hat
s en
cour
age
the
spre
ad o
f lic
e. C
hild
ren
with
lic
e w
ho s
wap
hat
s ca
n pa
ss th
e pr
oble
m o
nto
othe
r stu
dent
s. L
ice
are
hard
to
con
trol a
nd c
an b
e an
em
barr
assm
ent.
In s
umm
er h
ats
can
beco
me
swea
ty
and
crea
te it
chy
scal
ps.
Teac
hers
say
hat
s st
op s
kin
canc
er. T
hey
forg
et th
at m
ost s
choo
ls h
ave
shad
y tre
es a
nd s
hady
are
as w
here
stu
dent
s ca
n si
t or p
lay.
Tenn
is p
laye
rs a
nd fo
otba
llers
don
’t w
ear h
ats.
Oly
mpi
c at
hlet
es d
on’t
wea
r ha
ts, W
hy is
it im
porta
nt fo
r stu
dent
s to
wea
r hat
s? S
tude
nts
have
to w
ear h
ats
if th
ey w
ant t
o pl
ay in
the
sun.
Pla
ying
out
door
s ke
eps
stud
ents
t a
nd h
ealth
y.
Sch
ools
sho
uldn
’t fo
rce
stud
ents
to w
ear h
ats.
The
re a
re fe
w h
ealth
ben
e ts
. P
aren
ts s
houl
d m
ake
this
dec
isio
n. T
hey
know
thei
r chi
ldre
n be
tter t
han
the
teac
hers
do.
Hat
s ca
n ca
use
unhe
alth
y he
ad c
ondi
tions
and
they
take
aw
ay
freed
om o
f cho
ice.
Stu
dent
s sh
ould
be
train
ed to
use
this
free
dom
wis
ely.
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YEAR 3 WRITING TEST 1: Sample of a High to Very high level piece of writing
Today you are going to write a persuasive text, often called an exposition.
The purpose of writing a persuasive text is to infl uence or change a reader’s thoughts or opinions on a particular topic or subject. Your aim is to convince a reader that your opinion is sensible and logical. Successful persuasive writing is always well planned. Persuasive texts may include advertisements, letters to newspapers, speeches and newspaper editorials, as well as arguments in debates.
Handwriting should no longer be taught in schools.What do you think about this idea? Do you support or reject this proposal?
Write to convince a reader of your opinions.
Before you start writingGive some thought to:• whether you strongly agree or strongly disagree
with this plan• reasons or evidence for your arguments• a brief but defi nite conclusion—list some of your
main points and add a personal opinion• the structure of a persuasive text, which begins
with a well-organised introduction, followed by a body of arguments or points, and fi nally a conclusion that restates the writer’s position.
Don’t forget to:• plan your writing before you start—make a list of
important points you wish to make• write in correctly formed sentences and take care
with paragraphing• choose your words carefully, and pay attention to
your spelling and punctuation• write neatly but don’t waste time• quickly check your persuasive text once you have
fi nished—your position must be clear to the reader.
Remember: the stance taken in a persuasive text is not wrong, as long as the writer has evidence to support his or her opinion. How the opinion is supported is as important as the opinion itself.
•
•
••
Rissusu
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YEAR 3 WRITING TEST 2: Persuasive text
Aud
ienc
e• T
he a
udie
nce
is
read
ily id
enti
ed
(stu
dent
s, te
ache
rs).
• A b
rief s
tate
men
t out
lines
th
e is
sue
to b
e di
scus
sed.
• Bac
kgro
und
info
rmat
ion
is
prov
ided
to g
ive
cont
ext t
o th
e po
ints
rais
ed.
Pers
uasi
ve te
chni
ques
• Arg
umen
ts fo
r the
writ
er’s
re
actio
n ar
e in
sep
arat
e pa
ragr
aphs
.• P
oint
s ra
ised
are
obv
ious
ly
impo
rtant
to th
e w
riter
in a
pe
rson
al w
ay.
• Evi
denc
e an
d ex
ampl
es
are
used
to s
uppo
rt th
e ar
gum
ent.
• Obj
ectiv
ity is
mai
ntai
ned
thro
ugho
ut th
e w
ritin
g.
Text
str
uctu
re• T
he te
xt c
onta
ins
a w
ell-o
rgan
ised
intro
duct
ion,
bo
dy a
nd c
oncl
usio
n.• T
he w
riter
refe
rs re
gula
rly
to w
ords
use
d in
the
topi
c.
Para
grap
hing
• New
par
agra
phs
are
used
for n
ew a
rgum
ents
an
d su
mm
ary.
Coh
esio
n• T
he
nal p
arag
raph
es
tabl
ishe
s w
here
the
writ
er s
tand
s on
the
issu
e.• T
he c
oncl
udin
g se
nten
ce
is fo
rcef
ul a
nd p
erso
nal.
Voca
bula
ry• A
goo
d va
riety
of p
reci
se
verb
type
s ar
e us
ed
to e
stab
lish
stro
ng,
info
rmed
arg
umen
ts.
• Nou
ns a
re u
sed
to m
ake
gene
ralis
ed s
tate
men
ts.
• Adv
erbs
and
adj
ectiv
es
are
wel
l sel
ecte
d to
qu
alify
sta
tem
ents
.• T
he p
rono
un I
is
used
spa
ringl
y.
Sent
ence
str
uctu
re• A
goo
d va
riety
of s
ente
nce
begi
nnin
gs a
re u
sed
(e.g
. U
sing
, Man
y).
• The
re is
var
iety
in
sen
tenc
e ty
pes
and
leng
ths.
• Top
ic s
ente
nces
are
us
ed to
intro
duce
eac
h pa
ragr
aph’
s m
ain
idea
.• E
xcla
mat
ions
are
use
d to
go
od e
ffect
.
Punc
tuat
ion
• Pun
ctua
tion,
incl
udin
g ap
ostro
phes
and
full
stop
s,
is c
orre
ctly
app
lied.
Idea
s• I
deas
are
wel
l bal
ance
d to
cr
eate
a s
ense
of r
atio
nal,
logi
cal a
rgum
ent.
• A s
trong
vie
wpo
int i
s ex
pres
sed
with
car
eful
ch
oice
of w
ords
.• I
deas
are
pr
esen
ted
posi
tivel
y.
Spel
ling
• No
spel
ling
mis
take
s of
co
mm
on o
r unu
sual
wor
ds.
Han
dwri
ting
shou
ld n
olo
nger
be t
augh
t in
scho
ols.
I was
ple
ased
to h
ear t
hat h
andw
ritin
g m
ay n
o lo
nger
be
taug
ht. I
bel
ieve
peo
ple
shou
ld b
e ab
le to
writ
e, b
ut th
at te
achi
ng h
andw
ritin
g is
a w
aste
of t
ime.
Com
pute
rs w
ere
arou
nd b
efor
e I w
as b
orn.
The
y ha
ve k
eybo
ards
whi
ch a
llow
peo
ple
to ty
pe w
hat t
hey
wan
t to
say.
If y
ou o
wn
a co
mpu
ter,
you
hard
ly n
eed
a pe
n or
pap
er.
Text
can
be
sent
from
one
per
son
to a
noth
er a
nd it
’s a
ll on
a s
cree
n—co
mpu
ter
or p
hone
.
Em
ails
, writ
ten
usin
g co
mpu
ters
and
incr
easi
ngly
usi
ng p
hone
s, a
re re
plac
ing
lette
rs.
Thes
e de
vice
s ca
n ev
en p
redi
ct w
hat y
ou w
ant t
o w
rite
and
corr
ect s
pelli
ng m
ista
kes
as y
ou w
rite.
No-
one
need
s to
writ
e by
han
d an
y m
ore.
Em
ails
and
text
mes
sage
s ar
e ch
eape
r tha
n po
stin
g le
tters
.
Teac
hers
spe
nd a
lot o
f tim
e te
achi
ng h
andw
ritin
g. A
s ha
ndw
ritin
g is
a d
ying
ski
ll, th
e tim
e sa
ved
coul
d be
spe
nt o
n m
ore
usef
ul s
ubje
cts.
Man
y sc
hool
s us
e co
pybo
oks
to
teac
h ha
ndw
ritin
g. If
han
dwrit
ing
is n
ot ta
ught
then
par
ents
and
sch
ools
won
’t ne
ed to
bu
y th
ese
book
s.
Som
e ha
ndw
ritin
g is
not
eas
y to
read
, as
man
y pe
ople
form
thei
r wor
ds in
corr
ectly
. P
rinte
d te
xt is
alw
ays
read
able
bec
ause
the
lette
rs a
re a
lway
s th
e sa
me.
Usi
ng a
com
pute
r has
oth
er a
dvan
tage
s: it
sav
es p
aper
; the
re is
no
long
er
the
prob
lem
of l
eaky
biro
s sp
oilin
g cl
othe
s or
boo
ks; a
nd p
rint o
n a
scre
en
does
n’t s
mud
ge!
I ful
ly a
gree
that
teac
hing
han
dwrit
ing
is n
o lo
nger
nec
essa
ry. L
ittle
tim
e sh
ould
be
spen
t tea
chin
g it.
Prin
ted
text
is e
asie
r to
read
and
em
ail i
s ch
eape
r and
fast
er th
an
the
post
. Eve
ryon
e ha
s ei
ther
a c
ompu
ter o
r mob
ile p
hone
thes
e da
ys s
o sc
hool
s th
at
teac
h ha
ndw
ritin
g ar
e liv
ing
in th
e pa
st.
Lang
uage
and
idea
sSt
ruct
ure
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Today you are going to write a persuasive text, often called an exposition.
The purpose of writing a persuasive text is to infl uence or change a reader’s thoughts or opinions on a particular topic or subject. Your aim is to convince a reader that your opinion is sensible and logical. Successful persuasive writing is always well planned. Persuasive texts may include advertisements, letters to newspapers, speeches and newspaper editorials, as well as arguments in debates.
Fairy tales are not suitable stories for young children.What do you think about this opinion? Write to convince a reader of your opinions.
Before you start writingGive some thought to:• whether you strongly agree or strongly disagree
with this plan• reasons or evidence for your arguments• a brief but defi nite conclusion—list some of
your main points and add a personal opinion• the structure of a persuasive text, which begins
with a well-organised introduction, followed by a body of arguments or points, and fi nally a conclusion that restates the writer’s position.
Don’t forget to:• plan your writing before you start—make a
list of important points you wish to make• write in correctly formed sentences and
take care with paragraphing• choose your words carefully, and pay
attention to your spelling and punctuation• write neatly but don’t waste time• quickly check your persuasive text once
you have fi nished—your position must be clear to the reader.
Remember: the stance taken in a persuasive text is not wrong, as long as the writer has evidence to support his or her opinion. How the opinion is supported is as important as the opinion itself.
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YEAR 3 WRITING TEST 3: Persuasive text
Aud
ienc
e• T
he a
udie
nce
is re
adily
id
enti
ed
(fam
ilies
).• A
brie
f sta
tem
ent o
utlin
es
the
issu
e to
be
disc
usse
d.• B
ackg
roun
d in
form
atio
n is
pr
ovid
ed to
giv
e co
ntex
t to
the
poin
ts ra
ised
.
Pers
uasi
ve te
chni
ques
• Arg
umen
ts fo
r the
writ
er’s
po
int o
f vie
w a
re in
nu
mbe
red
para
grap
hs.
• Poi
nts
rais
ed a
re o
bvio
usly
im
porta
nt to
the
writ
er in
a
pers
onal
way
.• E
vide
nce
and
exam
ples
ar
e us
ed to
sup
port
the
argu
men
t.• O
bjec
tivity
is m
aint
aine
d th
roug
hout
the
writ
ing.
Text
str
uctu
re• T
he te
xt c
onta
ins
a w
ell-o
rgan
ised
intro
duct
ion,
bo
dy a
nd c
oncl
usio
n.• T
he w
riter
refe
rs re
gula
rly
to w
ords
use
d in
the
topi
c.
Para
grap
hing
• A n
ew p
arag
raph
is u
sed
for e
ach
new
arg
umen
t an
d su
mm
ary.
Coh
esio
n• T
he
nal p
arag
raph
es
tabl
ishe
s w
here
the
writ
er s
tand
s on
the
issu
e.• T
he c
oncl
udin
g se
nten
ce
is fo
rcef
ul a
nd p
erso
nal.
Voca
bula
ry• A
goo
d va
riety
of p
reci
se
verb
type
s ar
e us
ed
to e
stab
lish
stro
ng,
info
rmed
arg
umen
ts.
Nou
ns a
re u
sed
to m
ake
gene
ralis
ed s
tate
men
ts.
Adv
erbs
and
adj
ectiv
es
are
wel
l sel
ecte
d to
qu
alify
sta
tem
ents
.• T
he p
rono
un I
is
used
spa
ringl
y.
Sent
ence
str
uctu
re• A
goo
d va
riety
of s
ente
nce
begi
nnin
gs a
re in
clud
ed
(e.g
. Hea
lth, F
inal
ly).
• The
re is
var
iety
in
sen
tenc
e ty
pes
and
leng
ths.
• A to
pic
sent
ence
is u
sed
to
intro
duce
the
para
grap
h’s
mai
n id
ea.
• Rhe
toric
al q
uest
ions
and
ex
clam
atio
ns a
re u
sed
to
good
effe
ct.
Punc
tuat
ion
• Pun
ctua
tion,
incl
udin
g ap
ostro
phes
and
full
stop
s,
is c
orre
ctly
app
lied.
Idea
s• I
deas
are
wel
l bal
ance
d to
cr
eate
a s
ense
of r
atio
nal,
logi
cal a
rgum
ent.
• A s
trong
vie
wpo
int i
s ex
pres
sed
with
car
eful
ch
oice
of w
ords
.• I
deas
are
pre
sent
ed
forc
eful
ly a
nd c
on d
ently
.
Spel
ling
• The
re a
re n
o sp
ellin
g m
ista
kes
of c
omm
on o
r un
usua
l wor
ds.
Lang
uage
and
idea
s
Fa
iry
tale
s ar
e
not
sui
tabl
e st
orie
s
for
youn
g ch
ildre
n.N
o-on
e re
ally
thin
ks o
f fai
ry ta
les
as b
ad. J
ust b
ecau
se th
ey’v
e be
en a
roun
d fo
r cen
turie
s do
esn’
t mak
e th
em a
goo
d in
uen
ce o
n sm
all c
hild
ren.
I w
ill
expl
ain
why
they
are
uns
uita
ble
bedt
ime
stor
ies.
Firs
tly m
any
are
lled
with
dre
adfu
l, ev
il pe
ople
or b
eing
s. T
here
are
gia
nts,
re
-bre
athi
ng d
rago
ns, w
icke
d w
itche
s an
d na
sty
gobl
ins.
The
Que
en
of H
earts
wan
ts to
cho
p of
f hea
ds. F
airy
tale
s ca
n gi
ve y
oung
chi
ldre
n ni
ghtm
ares
. On
TV th
ey s
houl
d ha
ve M
ratin
gs!
Sec
ondl
y th
ings
that
hap
pen
in fa
iry ta
les
are
ofte
n ho
rri
c. G
iant
s ar
e ki
lled
falli
ng fr
om c
loud
s. W
itche
s try
to p
ut c
hild
ren
into
ove
ns o
r fee
d lit
tle g
irls
pois
oned
app
les.
Mea
n m
en lo
ck m
aide
ns in
cas
tle tu
rret
s. B
abie
s ge
t sto
len.
W
olve
s ea
t litt
le o
ld la
dies
. The
re is
so
muc
h vi
olen
ce th
at in
fant
s be
com
e fe
arfu
l of t
he re
al w
orld
.
Hea
lth a
nd s
afet
y ar
e co
mpl
etel
y ig
nore
d. D
war
fs w
ork
long
hou
rs in
min
es.
Boy
s cl
imb
gian
t vin
es. F
ancy
kis
sing
a fr
og?
Not
me!
Fina
lly fa
iry ta
les
prov
ide
sim
ple
solu
tions
to p
robl
ems.
A fe
w m
agic
wor
ds a
nd
a pr
oble
m d
isap
pear
s. A
kis
s fro
m a
prin
ce a
nd e
very
thin
g tu
rns
out j
ust
ne!
G
eese
lay
gold
en e
ggs.
You
ng c
hild
ren
can
be c
onfu
sed
by th
e si
mpl
icity
of i
t al
l. Th
e go
od p
eopl
e liv
e ha
ppily
eve
r afte
r—th
is ra
rely
hap
pens
in re
al li
fe.
Sto
ryte
llers
say
fairy
tale
s ar
e no
t tru
e bu
t you
ng c
hild
ren
have
dif
cul
ty
in s
ortin
g ou
t wha
t is
real
and
wha
t is
not.
Fairy
tale
s ca
n ca
use
fear
and
un
certa
inty
. The
y sh
ould
not
be
avai
labl
e to
you
ng c
hild
ren.
Stru
ctur
eA
VERY
GO
OD
A
VERY
GO
OD
PI
ECE
OF
WR
ITIN
GPI
ECE
OF
WR
ITIN
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l Pre
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3 S
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ritin
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suas
ive
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ing
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ple
has
been
ana
lyse
d ba
sed
on th
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arki
ng c
riter
ia u
sed
by m
arke
rs to
ass
ess
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ritin
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