hi everyone! for writing this week, your teachers would ... · hi everyone! for writing this week,...
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Hi everyone!
For writing this week, your teachers would like you to write a
character description. Here’s the plan for the week ahead.
Mon - Reading character descriptions, answering qs and making a glossary of vocab.
Tues - Expanded noun phrases
Wed - Planning your character description using a character from the books we have read at
school
Thurs- Writing your description and editing it/proof reading
Fri- Writing another description on a character of your choice or of yourself or a family member!
Can your teacher guess the character?
Monday
QFL: Can I explain what’s included in a good character description?
To know what good character descriptions include we
need to remind ourselves by looking at a few examples.
1. Read the descriptions and answer the questions.
2. Make a glossary of vocabulary you could magpie from them.
Remember to include a definition of the words as well as putting
them into a sentence to show you understand how and when to
use them. You could also include a synonyms and antonyms
section to really help you increase your vocabulary.
But first, you will need to remind yourselves what these words/phrases mean before you
can answer the questions…
• Personification
• Show not tell
• Synonyms
• Antonyms
• Adjectives
• Adverbs
• Alliteration
• Metaphor
Try to explain what
they mean and give
an example?
Were you correct?
Personification – using human qualities to describe something nonhuman. The angry clouds marched across the sky.
Show not tell – to say a character is “tall” is TELLING the reader. You could SHOW the reader your character is tall by
mentioning others looking up when they talk with him, or that he has to duck to get through a door.
Synonyms – words or phrases that means exactly or nearly the same as another word. A synonym for confused could be
baffled.
Antonyms – words or phrases that meant the opposite to another. Fast is an antonym of slow.
Adjectives – words used to describe a noun. The old man.
Adverbs – words used to describe a verb. The old man walked recklessly.
Alliteration – when the same sound is repeated at the beginning of words. The trees swayed shyly in the summer breeze.
Metaphor - A comparison in which one thing is said to be another. He was a tornado, blasting his way through the
opposing team.
1. Why was she smiling?
2. Where does the author use ‘show not tell’ to convey to the reader
how the character is feeling?
3. What does coarse mean? Can you think of a synonym to replace it?
4. How do we know she has been successful before this incident?
Character Description 1
1. How do you think Tara was feeling as she watched
the other children?
2. What powerful adjectives/adverbs has the author used?
3. Where does the author use ‘show not tell’ to convey to the reader how the
character is feeling?
4. Can you find where the author has used personification?
Character Description 2
1. Can you find any metaphors?
2. Can you find any personification?
3. What powerful adjectives has the author used?
4. Can you find any alliteration?
Character Description 3
1. What does menacing mean? Can you think of an antonym for it?
2. What powerful adjectives and adverbs has the author used?
3. Draw and label a picture of what you imagine this figure to look like.
Character Description 4
So now that you’ve read some
examples, what do you think needs to
be included in a good character
description?
Think about the content as well as the
techniques and grammar that should
be included…
Success criteria
Character descriptions can tell the reader about a characters …AppearanceActions and behavioursPersonality traitsSpeech and thoughtsOther people’s perceptions of them/relationships with othersAchievements
The grammar and techniques that could be included are…Expanded noun phrasesPowerful verbs and adverbsShow not tell Metaphors and similesEmbedded clauses to give more information to the reader
If you still have time…
Don’t forget to make a ‘magpie’ book so you
can start collecting some ambitious vocabulary!
GREAT WORK TODAY, SEE YOU TOMORROW!
Tuesday
QFL: Can I write effective expanded noun phrases?
Did you notice how the character descriptions
you looked at yesterday included lots of
expanded noun phrases?
Well that’s what we’re going to work on today!
Expanded noun phrases provide the
reader with extra information about
the noun.
We can use powerful adjectives to do
this and prepositional phrases to make
our ideas even better.
Let’s have a go…
Follow these four instructions to create an expanded noun phrase…
1. 2. 3.
4.
Now I’ve read the instructions, I’m going to have a go at writing an expanded noun phrase for this picture
1. Noun = house
2. Adjectives = spooky, mysterious, creepy, ancient, unstable (I won’t need them all)
3. Prepositional phrase = underneath the moon
4. Up level my word choices = The mysterious, eerie and rickety house underneath the moon lit sky
Now I can experiment putting my expanded noun phrase and my prepositional phrase into a sentence…
Standing proud underneath the moonlit sky, the mysterious, eerie and rickety
house sent shivers up spine.
Expanded noun phrase Prepositional phrase
Now it’s your turn…
Write some expanded noun phrases about the following nouns. Remember to try and add prepositional phrases too!
A castle
A member of your family
A bunch of flowers
A bird
A meal
A present
Your best friend
Your hero
A cave
The next 7 slides have lots of useful adjectives and some prepositional phrases you could use. You might also have some vocab you could use in the ‘magpie’ book you made yesterday.
Can you think of
some of your
own nouns?
Wednesday
QFL: Can I plan a character description?
Now that you have read some examples of
character descriptions and had a go at writing
some expanded noun phrases, you are now
ready to start planning ideas for your own
character description!
Let’s think about some of the characters we have come across in
the books we have read this year (or last year if you’re in year 6)
that we could base our descriptions on….
Joe
Simon
Auggie
Julian
Mom and Dad
Via
Summer
Jack Will
Mr Browne
Mr Tushman
Mr Tumnus
Aslan
Peter
Susan
Lucy
Edmond
Felix
Barney
Zelda
Bradley
Jeff
Mrs Ebbel
Melinda
Carla
Spike
Bubba
Mamma D’Angelo
Once you have chosen a character from the previous page, think about the following questions...
What do you know about them?
How could you describe their appearance?
How do they behave?
What personality traits do they have?
What might they say or think?
What are other people’s perceptions of them?
What have they achieved in their life?
The answers to these questions are going to form the basis of your plan
Here’s my plan! I’ve chosen Spike from the book ‘The Watertower’ and I’ve chosen to focus on these 4 areas
Appearance
Freckles
Short, red spikey hair
Tall
Athletic
Chiseled cheekbones
Strong jawline
Looks old for his age
His relationship with Bubba
Friends with Bubba since reception
Blood brothers
Inseparable
Bubba will do anything Spike tells him to do
Personality
Cool
Witty
Confident
Authoritative
Popular with boys and girls
Boys wanted to be him
Friends call him Spikey
Risk-taker
Dare-devil
Leader
Dominant
Achievements
Captain of soccer team
Long distance runner
Athletics club
Spike Trotter
I can’t forget my noun phrases!
What noun phrases could I include in my writing to give the reader even more
detail about Spike? I must remember to use powerful adjectives and use
prepositional phrases if it’s appropriate to make my writing more interesting.
A shock of red,
closely cropped hair.
He had a broad
confident grin.
A flurry of freckles sat
randomly on the bridge
of his nose.
An accomplished
long-distance runner.
The confident and
charming popular kid
at school.
Now it’s your turn to plan…
Plan your ideas in any way you choose.
Don’t forget to plan some expanded noun
phrases too.
Remember to look at the 7 slides filled with
adjectives and prepositional phrases you used on
Tuesday to help you with ideas and vocabulary
choices.
Thursday
QFL: Can I write a character description?
Now you’re ready to write your own character
description!
I’ve had a go at writing mine, but it’s not the
finished article yet!
Cool and popular, witty and good-looking, Spike Trotter had never been
short of friends. Boys wanted to be him; girls wanted to hang around with
him. His shock of red, closely cropped hair, tall athletic frame and his
broad confident grin gave him an air of difference; an air of authority that
made him stand out from the crowd. A flurry of freckles sat randomly on
the bridge of his nose. His chiseled cheekbones and strong jawline made
him appear older than his 14 years.
Spike (or Spikey for those that were close to him) was the captain of the
soccer team and an accomplished long-distance runner which made his
good friendship with the less athletic Bubba D’Angelo even more of a
mystery. However, the boys had been friends since their first day in
reception class. Since then, they had become inseparable. Blood
brothers they called themselves. You rarely saw one without the other.
If you had to compare the two friends you’d have to say that Spike was
the more confident of the two. He was a risk-taker, a dare-devil – never
one to play by the rules. Spike intended to live life to the full.
Purpose: To describe a character in detailAudience: Children in year 5 and 6
Character descriptions tell the reader about a characters …
AppearanceActions and behavioursPersonality traitsSpeech and thoughts
Other people’s perceptions of them/ relationships with others
Achievements
They grammar and techniques that could be included are…
Expanded noun phrases
Powerful verbs and adverbsShow not tell Metaphors and similesEmbedded clauses to give more information to the reader
I need to check I have included everything I wanted to from my plan and
included the things from our success criteria we made on Monday
Once you’ve written your character description remember to proof read and edit it before you
email it to your teacher.
Friday
QFL: Can I write a character description?Today, I want you to have a go at writing another character
description, but this time using a character of your choice.
It could be from a book you’ve read, a programme or film
you’ve seen. You could even do a character description on
yourself or a member of your family!
I wonder if your teachers could work out who your
description is about this time?
Once you’ve written your character description don’t forget to proof read and edit it before you
email it to your teacher.