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Max Rogers

Ms. Caruso

ENGL 1102

22 February 2012

Proposal: Behind Closed Doors

The novel that is currently being developed has a strong purpose embedded inside of its

pages. The novel is appropriately named,Behind Closed Doors.Behind Closed Doors is a story

of a man in his late thirties. He has a loving wife and a beautiful daughter. Their story takes place

during the Italian Renaissance. The main characters name is Giovanni. Giovanni makes an

honest living working as a painter. He makes enough money to support his family but not much

past that. He is considered to be in the middle class of society and he is not very well known in

the community. Giovanni is a dynamic character who will grow many times throughout the

story. It is through the events in Giovannis life that the purpose of the novel will be revealed.

Giovanni starts as a simple middle class man. As he pushes through his conflicts, both

internal and external, he grows to become a powerful person in the community. To do this, he

must push himself past his fears. Giovannis story is one of success for the common man and he

shows that anyone, no matter how small they may think they are, can make a great impact on the

world around them. This novel should bring hope to those who feel that their life is a struggle.

Giovanni is a character that most people can still relate strongly to today. This is what makes

Behind Closed Doors so powerful. It will allow for the audience to slip away from their pain and

hardships and into a new world from the past; while at the same time, they can connect to the

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story and be inspired by the actions of the protagonist. It is truly a story of universality and the

conflicts in the book are shared amongst people across the board.

There is a very specific reason thatBehind Closed Doors is presented in a novel and not a

movie or any other form of media.Behind Closed Doors is meant to be an intimate experience

for the reader. This helps to create a personal connection between the reader and the characters

of the novel. The audience needs to have time alone with the characters. The novel format will

also allow for the reader to see the inner thoughts of the characters which is something that is

harder to do in a movie format. Acting tends to be an external form of storytelling while with a

novel, the reader will be able to segue back and forth between external and internal actions. This

strong bond between the reader and the characters will help to support the main purpose of this

story by giving the reader a chance to become strongly encompassed by the characters world.

Delving into the plot, there is a very straight forward yet complicated schema of conflicts

that take place through the storys events. The novel starts at the kitchen table of Giovannis

home. His wife and daughter are both with him and they are sharing breakfast. As they discuss

what they will be doing for the continuation of their day, the reader can see that while they are

for the most part happy, they seem to be somewhat disconnected from each other. This tends to

be an issue in modern households and this disconnect will help to support the purpose of the

novel by connecting the reader to the characters lifestyle. Giovanni begins to gatherhis things

and heads outside his home.

The next few chapters of the book consist of Giovanni being introduced to the different

crimes that the church is committing. Being a painter that is working in the church, Giovanni

sees artists in the community along with scientists and scholars being pulled into the church

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through back doors and taken into rooms that are heavily guarded. Giovanni struggles internally

about whether or not he should tell someone about what he sees during the day. Because this is a

novel and not a movie, video game, or other form of media, the audience will be able to see into

the inner workings of the characters.

Giovanni eventually cant handle keeping what he has seen to himself. He confesses what

is going on to his wife and daughter. His wife asks him to keep it to himself. She is worried

about his safety and knows that they are in a point in history where the church and science/art is

at a crossroads. Giovannis life is spent living in a time period just after The Black Death spread

across Europe killing millions. Corruption found itself merging into the Roman Catholic Church.

Many priests used money as a way to make it to the top. Priests were buying their positions (Van

Hove 1). These corrupt officials knew that art and science were posing a threat to the church and

they had to stop it in whatever way possible.

Giovannis daughter goes against her mother and urges Giovanni to do something about

what he has seen. Giovanni knows that his daughters advice is what is morally right and he

begins to assemble a group of fellow artists and scientists that live in his area. Just like him, they

are common men who lead common lives. This relates directly to the purpose in that common

men can change the course of history. With this new faction of people brought together under

Giovannis leadership, they began to form a plan to take down the church.

There is a festival that happens every year where Giovanni lives. The faction plans to

take out the head officials in the church during the festival. Everyone is gathered in the towns

square where most of the bartering takes place during the day. About two hours past sunset, the

festival shows off a grand firework spectacle. The fireworks direct everyones attention in the

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direction away from the church officials. When the fireworks start, the faction storms the

officials from behind and assassinates them. They then use what time they have left during the

fireworks display to disappear into different shops.

The falling action of the novel comes when the faction gathers a few days after the

assassination. They know that they must stay together to fight against opposing forces who

attempt to stop the advancement of science and art. Giovanni by this time has risen to a respected

position of his peers. His wife struggles with his new position in the community and his daughter

admires his courage. In the end of the novel, Giovanni reflects on the choices he has made and

hopes that his future will lead him across a path of purpose. Comment [BC16]: Max,

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-Ms. C


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Van Hove, Alphonse. "Hierarchy." The Catholic Encyclopedia. Vol. 7. New York: Robert

Appleton Company, 1910. 14 Feb. 2012

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